读后续写亲情类-我和爸爸一起制作玩具屋讲义 高三英语作文复习写作专项

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Myfatheris

apracticalman.

Hecan'texplain

calculus(微积分）buthecantellyouhowmuch

pressureaboilerneeds.Heputhimselfthrough

nightschooltobecomeanengineer,butthatwas

onlyafterheworkedasanelectriciananda

mechanic.

Onedaywewalkedbyatoystorewindow.Sittinginthecornerwasthemostunusualdollhouse(玩具屋)I'deverseen.Itwasshapedlikeanupturnedlog."Oh,Daddy,"I

said."isn'titbeautiful?DoyouthinkSantaClauswillbringittome?"Dadlookedatthe$100pricetag一anexorbitant(过高的)figureinthosedays."IthinkevenSantacouldn'taffordthishouse."hejoked，hikinguphisbeltasheoftendoeswhenhe'snervous."Maybeoneday,sweetheart."

OnChristmasmorning.Iawokeearlyandraceddownstairs,Inthedim(昏暗的)light.Imadeoutsomewrappedboxesunderthetree一butnonelargeenoughtocontainmydollhouse.Dadcouldseemydisappointment.Hepulledmeontohislapandgentlytoldmehow,asaboy,hehadwantedaredwagon,buthisfathercouldn'taffordone.Hesaidhemadehisownfromwoodandoldwheelshefound."I'llmakeoneforyou."Dadpromisedme.

AndrightafterChristmas,despitealltheunfinishedprojectsathome,hestartedit.1hadthoughtitwasaneasytoytomake,buteverystepofthelongprocesswasmorecomplex(复杂的）thanIhadexpected.Nightafternight，Dadwouldcomehomefromhisjobdeadtired.yethe'dalways

findtimetoworkonthelog

houseinthedimlight.Inthedimlight,Dadwasalwaysbusycreatingmydollhouse.注意:续写词数应为150左右。Ihesitated(犹豫),wonderingif1shouldhelpmyfather.

Inall,

ittookonemonthofhardworkbyus.写作指导Step1故事梗概1.看到一个玩具屋,作者很喜欢,但是价格很贵。2.父亲承诺给作者制作一个玩具屋。尽管父亲下班回家后很累,但仍会挤出时间来制作玩具屋。3.

续写线发展：纠结于是否应该帮忙——想法被看出——商量决定一起制作玩具屋——一个月后终于做成——心情非常喜悦——父亲的谆谆教诲——主旨升华Step2情节推断1.由第一段首句内容“我犹豫了,不知道我是否应该帮助我的父亲。”可知，第一段可描写父亲看出作者的想法后主动和作者说让其帮忙的场景和之后他们一起制作玩具屋的过程。2.由第二段首句内容“总之，我们花了一个月的时间辛勤工作。”可知，第二段可描写玩具屋做成之后作者的喜悦之情和父亲对作者的教诲以及作者自己的感悟。五要素分析：要素

线索词时间thefollowingmonthafterChristmas地点

athome人物

Iandmyfather关键词

patiently,effort,payoff,joy,gift,bring...tolifeStep3

【佳句句式】[好句型1].ButheseemedtoknowwhatIthoughtandonenightsaidtomewithasmile.(运用了what引导的宾语从句)[好句型2].Iwouldoccasionallybringitdownfromtheatticjusttoadmireitandrememberthosedayswhenweworkedtogethertobringmydreamtolife.(运用了when引导的定语从句)[好句型3]Sittinginthecornerwasthemostunusualdollhouse(玩具屋)I'deverseen.（完全倒装句，将要强调的表语放在了最前面。）正常句序：Themostunusualdollhouse(玩具屋)I'deverseenwasSittinginthecorner.[好句型4]"IthinkevenSantacouldn'taffordthishouse."hejoked，hikinguphisbeltasheoftendoeswhenhe'snervous.(现在分词做joke的伴随状语）[好句型4]Ihadthoughtitwasaneasytoytomake,buteverystepofthelongprocesswasmorecomplex(复杂的）thanIhadexpected.（hadthought本以为但实际未……；hadexpected……本料想但实际上未）Step4将已确定的四要素串联,并增加细节描写，完成读后续写。下水文1Ihesitated(犹豫)，wonderingifIshouldhelpmyfather.

ButheseemedtoknowwhatIthoughtandonenightsaidtomewithasmile,“Ineedyourhelp.L.et'screatethedollhousetogether."“But,Daddy,1don'tknowhow,"saidI."Thatdoesn'tmatter.Iwillteachyou,"saidmyfather.SoeverynightwhenheworkedonthedollhouseI

wouldsitbyhissideandhewouldpatientlyandlovinglyteachmehowtomakesuchatoy.Itwasreallynoteasy,butoureffortspaidoffandwefinallymadeit.In

all.ittookonemonthofhardworkbyus.

Myjoywasbeyonddescriptionatthatmoment.ThenI

heardmyfathersaying,“Icanbuildalot

ofthings,but1can'tbuildyourlife.AllIcan

doist0helpyoubuildyourown.Iwouldalwaysrememberhiswords,sothedollhousebecamethemostspecialgift

tome.Longafter1gaveupplayingdolls,Iwouldoccasionallybringitdownfromtheatticjusttoadmireitandrememberthosedayswhenweworkedtogethertobringmydreamtolife.下水文2：Ihesitated(犹豫)，wonderingifIshouldhelpmyfather.

Butheseemedtohaveknownmythoughts.Onenight,hesmiledandsaidtome,"Ineedyourhelp.Let'smakeatoyhousetogether.""But,Dad,Idon'tknowhowtodoit,"Isaid.It'sokay.I'llteachyou,"myfathersaid.Soeverynightwhenheworksinthetoyhouse,Isitnexttohimandhepatientlyandlovinglyteachesmehowtomakesuchtoys.Thisisreallynoteasy,butoureffortshavepaidoffandwehavefinallysucceeded.In

all.ittookonemonthofhardworkbyus.Myjoyatthatmomentwasindescribable.ThenIheardmyfathersay,"Icanbuildmanythings,butIcan'tbuildyourlife.AllIcandoishelpyoubuildyourownlife."Iwillalwaysrememberhiswords,sothetoyhousebecamemymostspecialgift.Aftergivingupplayingwithdollsforalongtime,Ioccasionallytakethemofftheatticjusttoappreciatethemandrecallthedayswhenweworkedtogethertoachieveourdreams.下水文3：Ihesitated(犹豫)，wonderingifIshouldhelpmyfather.

Butheseemedtounderstandmythoughtsfrommyexpression.Onenight,hesmiledhappilyandsaidtome,"Thisisacomplextask,andIneedyourhelpandsupport.Let'sbuildatoyhousetogether.""But,Dad,Idon'tknowhowtodoit.Canyouteachmehowtodoit?"Iasked.It'sokay.I'lltellyou,youjustdowhatIsay,"myfatherreplied.Soeverynightwhenheworksinthetoyhouse,Iwillbebyhisside,andhewillpatientlyandlovinglyteachmehowtomakesuchtoysstepbystep.Thisreallyrequirespatienceandperseverance,butoureffortshavepaidoffandwehavefinallys