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高三英语作文讲评课堂内容1）写作的基本步骤2）学生作文中常犯的毛病3）写作实例分析4）实例作文中的错误语句5）范文欣赏6）学生作文实例讲评（两名同学）英语作文写作的基本步骤：1、审试题2、圈要点3、注短语4、定基调(体材,时态,人称,段落,基本框架)5、写全文（加过渡语句，串句成篇）6、改病错学生作文中常犯毛病:1)理解错误2)文不对题3)格式错误4)谴词造句错误5)语言运用不当6)时间不够7)时态、语态、人称、主谓一致、表达、单词拼写、标点、大小写等易错之处假设你是李华，你将代表学校参加国际中学生论坛，就你所在城市的教育状况发表演讲。请根据下面两幅图表中的数据所反映的情况发表你自己的看法。注意：1，文章的开头已经给出，不计入总词数；

2，词数120左右

3，参考词汇；图表chart职业学校vocationalschool

外来务工人员non-localworkers演讲稿(格式）写作分析：1）作文类型-----2）时态人称-----3）文章结构/写作提纲

------本市的教育状况（已给出）陈述现象--------------4）关键词汇：图表职业学校外来务工人员本地居民子女毕业去向选择一般现在时，第一人称

说明主题本市的教育状况（阐述两个图表的内容发表个人观点本市教育chartvocationalschoolnon-localworkers

localstudents/childrenoflocalfamilychoosewhattodoaftergraduation主要语句：1）根据表一

accordingto/fromChart1/thefirstchart2）91﹪的学生是本地居民的子女

91﹪ofstudentsarethechildrenofthelocalcitizens3）8﹪的学生是外来务工人员的子女1﹪的学生是外籍人员的子女5）高中学生毕业去向大有不同6）60﹪的学生选择上大学7）30﹪的学生上职校8）10﹪的学生出国留学深造9）我认为10）结束语学生作文中的错误语句:1.Thechart12.91﹪students3.Thereare60﹪ofstudentsgototheuniversityand30﹪ofstudentsgotothevocationalschool.吴超4.Therearesomeforeignstudentscometoourcitytostudywhichtake1﹪ofthewholestudents.代骊锦5.Thereare8﹪ofthehighschoolstudentsarenotnon-localworkers’childrenwhocomefromanothercountry.宋佳林6.Theothersarewhosehomeisn’there.朱鹏7.Thelocalstudentsarethemainlypart,whohavea91percentage.聂作钢讲评学生习作范文欣赏：Ladiesandgentlemen,I’mLiHua.Today,I’mgreatlyhonoredtospeakhereonbehalfofmyschool.I’mgoingtotalkaboutthehighschooleducationofmycity.FromChart1,wecanseehighschoolstudentsarefromdifferentfamilybackgrounds.Besideslocalstudents,whomakeup91﹪,8﹪ofthestudentsarethechildrenofnon-localworkers,Thereare1﹪offoreignstudents.

AccordingtoChart2,thestudents’choicesaftergraduationhavepresentedawidervariety,60﹪ofwhomintendtogotouniversity.30﹪choosetoentervocationalschools,and10﹪plantogoabroadforfurtherstudies.

Ithinkwehavemorefreedomtochoosewhatwewouldliketodoaftergraduation.Goingtocollegeisnolongertheonlychoiceformostofusasitwasyearsago.Ibelievethefutureofeducationinourcityispromising.That’sall.Thankyou.Or:1.Ithinkourcitygovernmenthasmademoreeffortstohelpthenon–localworkers.Forexample,theirchildrencanenjoytheequalrightofagoodeducationwiththecitystudents.2.Ithinkwiththeeconomicdevelopmentofourcity,morefore