2024届高考读后续写思维模型构建 -人小侠心大-火场互助自救篇课件

读后续写

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standsoutinTom’smemory)happenedonemorningwhenTomwasonlytenyearsold.HewasathomewithhiseldersisterJane.Tomwasdoinghishomeworkwhenheheardraisedvoices.Atfirst,hethoughtnothingofit[sincecustomersinthemotorcycleshopdirectlybelowtheirflatoftenbecameloud],buthesoonrealizedthistimeitwasdifferent.“Quick!Quick!Removethemotorcyclesfromtheshop.”Someoneshouted.Thenathickburningsmellfilledtheair.WhenTomopenedthefrontdooroftheirflattoinvestigate,(athickcloudof)smokegreetedhim.Themotorcycleshophadcaughtfireandpeoplewererunningandcrying.Jane,(whohadbeenplayingtheviolininherroom),hurriedtothelivingroom.Theyrushedoutofthedoorandalongthecorridor(走廊)throughthesmoke.

TheywereheadingtowardsthestairwayatthefarendofthecorridorwhenJanesuddenlystoppedinhertrack.Sheturnedaroundandheadedbackthewaytheycame.Tomhadnoidea(whatshewasdoing,buthefollowedher.)

Janehadsuddenlyrememberedtheladyinher70s(wholivednextdoortothem),(whothey/called/Makcik.)JanebeganbangingonMakcik’sdoor,butgotnoanswer.Asthesmokethickenedaroundthem,Tomcouldseemanyoftheirneighbours---somestillintheirpajamas(睡衣)---runningforsafety.

Thethoughtoffearcrossedhismind.“Shewouldhaverunforsafetylikeeveryoneelse!”Tomcried.However,Janerefusedtogiveup.“IknowMakcik’sstillinside.”ShesaidshewasfamiliarwithMakcik’sdailyroutineandwascertainshewouldstillbesleeping.Shepoundedagainstthedoor.“Godownstairs.Gonow!Go!”What/HowWhen/WhereWhoWhy文本解读SettingCharacterPlotTheme

WhenwhowhereonemorningTom&Jane(Tom’seldersister)Narrator叙事者“thirdperson”perspective第三人称视角Tense:________________SimplepasttenseMom文本解读SettingCharacteraflatbuildinginflamesCharacteranalysisDetails.文本解读...Janesuddenlystoppedinhertrack.Sheturnedaroundandheadedbackthewaytheycame.Tomhadnoidea(whatshewasdoing,buthefollowedher.).....

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Janehadsuddenlyrememberedtheladyinher70s(wholivednextdoortothem),(whothey/called/Makcik.).....

...shewasfamiliarwithMakcik’sdailyroutineandwascertainshewouldstillbesleeping.Shepoundedagainstthedoor....

WorkouttheconflictortheclimaxBeginningDevelopmentConflictClimax/Ending.Themotorcycleshophadcaughtfireandpeoplewererunningandcrying.

Remembertosolvetheconflict..TomwasathomewithhiseldersisterJane.Hewasdoinghishomeworkwhenheheardraisedvoices.

文本解读+创设情境Asthesmokethickenedaroundthem,Tomcouldseemanyoftheirneighbours---somestillintheirpajamas(睡衣)---runningforsafety.Thethoughtoffearcrossedhismind.PlotA.

anemergency.B.afire.C.Thoughtfulnessandkindnessinafireemergency....Janesuddenlystoppedinhertrack.Sheturnedaroundandheadedbackthewaytheycame..

....Janehadsuddenlyrememberedtheladyinher70s(wholivednextdoortothem),(whothey/called/Makcik.).clue

线索文本解读+主题探究Theme

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Tomnoticedtheflame(火焰)wasreachingup

根据第1自然段给出的首句，可以判定：火情危急，已由一楼冲至他们所居住楼层。

创设情节突出主题Analyzethe2givensentencesandtheoriginalpassageAddsomedetailsbyraisingquestions

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Analyzethe2givensentencesandtheoriginalpassageAddsomedetailsbyraisingquestions

[Luckily],someneighbors(passingby)stoppedandofferedhelp..

根据第2自然段首句

可以判定：她们姐弟俩一直没下楼，所以，路过的邻居看到他们的举动后才会停下来并提供帮助。那么，他们在做什么呢？。可以朝着这个方向发散思维，构思情节，方能达到完美收尾效果。

所见所闻所感所思外貌描写环境描写语言描写动作描写心理描写情感描写所见所做所感Appearance/SurroundingsConversations/LanguagesBehavior/Actions/VerbsEmotions/Feelings通过细节描写呈现出情节的________跌宕起伏UP---DOWN--UPUsethedescriptivetechniquestoenrichthedetails创设情节突出主题

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Tomnoticedtheflame(火焰)wasreachingup.[Frozenwithfear],hestoodrootedtothespot.HecomprehendedthegravityofthesituationandheldJane’shandtightly.Bothofthemwerecoughingandtheireyeswerestinging.Timeseemedtostandstill,[thoughtheywereprobablythereforonlytwoorthreeminutes.]TombeggedJanetorunforsafetyasquicklyaspossible.Janetriedtoshieldhernosefromthechokingsmokeandshookherhead.Shekeptpoundingagainstthedoor.Tomburstoutcrying.环境烘托范文赏析心理描写心理描写

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[Luckily],someneighbors(passingby)stoppedandofferedhelp.AsenseofstrengthimmediatelyreplacedthemountingfearandanxietyinJane’smind.ShetoldthemMs.Makcikmustbestillintheroom.Theyforcedthedooropen[withalltheirmight].[