读后续写++比赛收获类（内向的我参加英语演讲比赛）讲义 高考英语作文复习专项

PAGE读后续写比赛收获类（内向的我参加英语演讲比赛）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Ihadnevernoticedher.Shewasnotthekindofgirlwhocoulddrawattention.Shewasnottallandjustplain.Inclass,shelikedsittingattheback,readingortakingnotes.ItwasonceIaskedhertoreadaloudthetextthatIlookedatherwithneweyeswhenIheardherstandardAmericanpronunciation.Lateron,theNationalCollegeEnglishSpeechContestwouldbeheld.Ithoughtitoverandfilledinhernamewithasmile.Ired-penciledherdraftofspeech,correctedherpronunciation,andevenadjustedherbodylanguage.However,Iwasalwayskindofworriedbecauseshewastoointrovert(内向的)andtooquiet.Couldsheseizethisrareopportunity?Onthenightofthecontest,Itoldhertotakeiteasy.Blushed(脸红的),shelookedatmeandsaidnothing.Myheartsank.Itseemedthatshedidtenseup.Ipattedherandlethergotodrawlots(抽签).Asaresult,whatshedrewwasNo.9whileNo.8wasrecognizedEnglishmaster-hand(高手).Sureenough,theEnglishmaster-handwasfairlysuccessfulinthespeechwithhishumorandhighlypersonalstyle.Thewholeaudiencewouldmakeawarmapplausealmostevery30secondsuntilsheappearedonthestage,stilltalkingoverhisspeechwithexcitement.Mypalmsbegantosweat.Isatthere,withnocouragetolookather.Itwasthefirsttimethatshewentupthestage,soIcouldn'tblameherforanyslips.Butatthatmoment,IfoundIwassoscaredofherfailure.Thestrongspotlightmadehersosmallandsoinsignificantthatnobodyseemedtonoticeshehadbeenonthestage,Isaidtomyself,nohope.Butthemomentthatshockedmeoccurred.Iclearlyheardavoice,averyloudvoice,"Now,pleasefocusonme."Shesaidthissentencethreetimesinal1.louderandlouder.Para1:Thewholeaudiencefellsilent._________Para2:Afterherspeechendedforalongwhile,athunderousapplausesoundedinthewholeaudience._一文章大意：“我”的一个性格内向的学生，由于标准的美英发音，被“我”推荐参加英语演讲比赛，在她站上演讲台之前，一位选手凭着精彩的表现获得了观众认可，“我”觉得我的学生没戏了…二首句分析：从首句2：Afterherspeechendedforalongwhile,athunderousapplausesoundedinthewholeaudience.可以推断续写第一段应该写“我”的学生演讲成功三问题聚焦：续写首段只出现了“我”的学生一方，续写的情节比较简单，即演讲成功，如何通过描写细节，合理创设互动性元素，加入作者评议等推进情节的发展，值得大家思考。四范文欣赏：Thewholeaudiencefellsilent.Smallandthinasthegirlappeared,thedeterminedlookonherfaceinstantlycaughteveryone’seyes.（神色）Sheglancedattheaudience,tookadeepbreathandbeganherspeech.（动作）Everythingwentsmoothly－hervoicewasclearandinfluentialandherspeechwaslogicalandwell-organized.（演讲要素：声音；内容）Wordsofpowerandgraceflowedfreelyoutofthegirllikemagic.（作者的评述1）

Shewasusuallysoft-voicedandrarelydrewattentioninpublicbefore.（作者评述2）Itwaslikesomethinginadream!（作者评述3）（第二段续写，根据所给句“我”的学生演讲非常成功，如何衔接往下写？既然是比赛，自然会呈现比赛结果。再接下去出现互动的双方，即“我”和“我”的学生，也可以加入“我”的学生与观众的互动。）Afterherspeechendedforalongwhile,athunderousapplausesoundedinthewholeaudience.Whenthecompetitionwasdrawingtoaclose,stillimmersedinherstunningperformance,allofuswaitednervouslyforthewinner’snametobecalled.（细节：等待比赛结果）Tearsofjoyblurredmyvisionthemomentthehostannouncedthatshewonthefirstprize.（比赛结果+“我”的反应）Holdingthetrophytightly,shegavemeabrilliantsmile.（学生的动作）

“Yousurelymadeyourselfthemostshiningfocustonight!”Iexclaimed,cheerfullypullingherintomyarms.（“我”的反应：语言+动作）Yes,sometimesatremendousenergyoriginatesfromthesilentaccumulation.（主题）

五佳作片段欣赏：Thewholeaudiencefellsilent.Theywereamazedbythesuddenvoiceandnoticedasmallfigurestandingonthestage.Everyone’sinterestwasarousedandtheywonderedwhatwonderfulspeechthelittlegirlwouldmake.Icouldfeelmyheartbeatingwildlyatthatmoment.Aseveryonefocusedonher,shestartedherspeech.Outofmyexpectation,shepouredoutwordsinasteadyflowandbehavedbravelyandconfidently.Everyonepresentwasconqueredbyherstandardpronunciationandperfectperformance.六巩固补练：（积累相似话题语块，迁移应用）Inthefirstandsecondgrades,Iwasextremelyshy.Ihadfriends,butitjustwasn’tinmypersonalitytobeveryoutgoing,evenifIknewsomeonewell.Iwasevenquieterwithstrangers,andsoIwasn’tverygoodatmeetingnewpeople.IwasafraidthatIwoulddoorsaysomethingwrong.Soinourschool’sannualgrandplay,Iusuallysatinasecluded(僻静的)cornertowatchtheperformancealone.Ihopedtositinthebackgroundandwatchtheactorssweatinfrontofallthosepairsofeyes.Onedayinthethirdgrade,myteacherMrs.Sallycalledmeintoherofficeandsaid,“Oh,Mary,you’regreatatmemorizingthings,andyouhavesuchasweetpersonality.PerfectforJenny!”ButIbowedmyheadanddarednotspeak.Theteachersawthisandthensaid,“Ofcourse,plentyofgirlswouldlovetherole,and1couldfindsomebodyelse.ButIhopeyoucouldtryitforme.IhadyouinmindforJennywhilewritingtheplay!Ifyoureallydon’twantto,Iwon’tforceyou.It’syourchoice.”Mymindwasspinningfasterthanthewindmill(风车)ontheschoolplayground.Mrs.Sally,whomIlovedandadmired,wantedmetoplaythisrole.Shebelievedinme.MyeyesmovedacrosstheroomtoaposterIhadnevernoticedbefore.Itshowedashootingstarandread,“Ifyoureachforthestars,youmightatleastgrabapieceofthemoon.”IlookedintoMrs.Sally’sshiningblueeyesandsaid,“Okay,I’lltry.”IrealizeditwastimetothrowoffmyshymaskandshowtheworldwhoIreallywas.Inthefollowingfivemonths,theteachertaughtmehowtoset,putonmakeup,memorizelines,createcostumesandsoon.Gradually,Imasteredmylinesandsongs.Para1：Thebigdaycameatlast.Para2：Atthattime,Mrs.Sallycamebackstageforherfinalcheck-upandnoticedmynervousness.参考范文：Thebigdaycameatlast.Ijoggedallthewaytothebackstageoftheschoolhall.Cameraswerelightingupinalldirections.Lookingbackonthefivemonthsofpractice,Iseemedtohaveconfidenceinmyself.Ifoundanewpersoninsideme,amuchmoredaringandoutgoingpersonwhohadbeenhiddenalla