公共英语三级-PETS3级写作B节-综合写作

三、综合写作PETS-3

级B节写作主要考查的是“

看文写作”。给出一篇200—250字的文章，先阅读文章，总结中心思想，然后根据文章中心思想发表自己的看法，写一篇120词左右的作文，类似于“读后感”。话题一般涉及到与我们生活息息相关的社会现象和问题，比如教育、职业道德、身体健康、家庭关系、环境保护、人口增长、文化交流等。题型介绍话题范围写作评分标准（17~20分）完整性包含所有要点，评论合理；准确性原文理解完全准确；语法结构和词汇准确，错误极少；连贯性有效使用多种衔接手法，

内容连贯流畅，层次清晰；多样性使用了丰富的语法结构和词汇，没有完全抄写。第四档第三档第二档第一档第五档2015年9月真题：Read

the

text

below.

Write

anessay

inabout

120

words,

in

which

youshould

summarized

key

points

ofthetext

and

make

comments

on

them.Trytouse

your

own

words.LoriSchneiderknowsafewthingsaboutfear.“Wewerecrossingaridgethatdroppedoff8,000feetonboth

sides,”saysthe53-year-oldclimberofascendingMountEverestlastspring.“Thewindwasblowingat60milesan

hour.

If

there

was

ever

amoment

topanic,

thiswasit.”Butshedidn`t.Anhourlater,shereachedthepeak—thelaststepinherpersonalchallengetoscalethehighest

mountains

onall

seven

continents.Ten

years

earlier,

she`d

come

face-to-face

with

a

different

type

of

fear,

when

she

was

unable

to

feel

anything

in

the

right

side

of

her

body.

After

learning

she

had

multiple

sclerosis

(MS)—a

serious

illness

that

gradually

makes

a

person

weak

and

unable

to

move

or

see,

she

left

her

marriage,

job,

and

home:

“I

ran

from

mywhole

life.”ItwasjustbeforeclimbingSouthAmerica`sMountAconcaguain2000thatshesethersightsontheSevenSummits.Aftertrainingbypulling50-poundbagsofdogfooduptheskislopesnearherhome,shetoppedEurope`s

MountElbrusin2002,NorthAmerica`sMcKinleyin2006,andAustralia`sKosciuszkoandAntarctica`sVinson

Massifin2008.

She`d

scaled

Africa`s

Kilimanjaro

in

1993.

That

left

Asia`s

Everest,

the

highest

of

all.Andthereshestood,onaridgeat28,000feet.“WhenItrained,Itoldmyselftotakeonestepatatimeby

spelling

outword”

shesays.

“

So

Ispelled

out‘Don't

let

fear

in.’”

It

got

her

tothe

top.She`s

the

first

person

with

MS

to

conquer

the

Seven

Summits.

With

her

condition

stable,

she

plans

a

return

toKilimanjaro—this

time

with

15

others

with

MSby

her

side.仔细分析题干给出的信息和任务要求，重点阅读文章的首末段或段落的首末句。切忌“提笔就写”！1 审题列出文章基本框架：

分几段？每段写什么？总共写几句话？2 列提纲根据列好的提纲，套用经典句型，句子之间用连接词衔接，同义词之间注意变化。写作3检查句子的时态、语态、主谓一致、单词拼写和标点符号等。4 检查答题流程Step

1 审题审题干要求：先总结文章主要观点，再发表自己的观点。审文章内容：启发性故事、

社会热点现象等；文章的中心思想是什么？（首末段、段落首末句）什么人干了什么事，带来什么启发？Step

2

列提纲120词控制在12—14句话之间。总结文章观点简明扼要总结文章的主要观点总结模板：什么人做了什么事带来了什么启发。（3—4句话，40个词）表达自己观点层次清晰，分点论述，连贯流畅，富于变化。（使用连接词、固定句式、同义替换）列提纲Step

2第一段①Lori

Schneider虽身患MS疾病，但是征服了7座高峰。②最令我印象深刻的是她面对困难的方式。③你会问怎么才能战胜恐惧呢？④

首先，勇气。⑤

有勇气会……..⑥

没有勇气会……..⑦其次，精神力量。⑧相信自己，就会…….⑨举例说明。⑩最后，乐观。⑪乐观有力量。⑫乐观有益处。⑬

总而言之，勇气、精神力量、乐观。⑭

只有这样才…….第①

②

句总结文章，点明文章的中心；第③句提出自己的观点或话题。第二段第④句写论点1；第⑤⑥句，分别从正反两方面阐述分论点1。第三段第⑦句写分论点2；第⑧句，改写第⑦句；第⑨句，例证第四段第⑩句写分论点3；第⑪⑫句重复改写第⑩句。第五段第⑬句总结自己的观点；第⑭句呼应自己的观点。ThestorythatLoriSchneider,a53-year-oldwomanwhohadmultiplesclerosis,

conqueredtheSevenSummitsinspiresmealot.Whatimpressesmemostisthewaysheovercomesthe

fear

whenshe

isconfronted

withdifficulties.You

may

wonderhow

toovercome

the

fear?Weshouldfacetothetroubleswithcourage.Ifwehavecourage,wecanrealizeallourdreams.Ifweareinpanic,thechanceofsuccesswillslipaway.Donoteverunderestimate

spiritualstrength.Ifyoubelieveinyourselfstronglyenough,youreallycanmakemiracles.Just

like

Lori

Schneider

did,

tell

“Don`t

let

fear

in”

to

yourself

repeatedly,

and

you

will

not

afraid

ofanything.Keepoptimisticregardlessofadversities.Thepowerofmaintainingoptimisticis

undeniable.

Itis

beneficial

for

us

to

think

inapositive

way.In

a

word,

we

should

be

a

man

of

courage,

belief

and

optimism.

Only

then

can

we

overcomeany

fearin

any

givensituation.这篇作文写得如何？怎么改？ThestorythatLoriSchneider,a53-year-oldwomanwhohadmultiplesclerosis,

conqueredtheSevenSummitsinspiresmealot.Whatimpressesmemostisthewaysheovercomesthe

fear

whenshe

isconfronted

withdifficulties.You

may

wonderhow

toovercome

the

fear?Firstof

all,weshouldfacetothetroubleswithcourage.Allof

dreamscanbetrueifwe

havethe

courage

to

pursue

them.

If

we

are

inpanic,

the

chance

of

successwill

slip

away.Secondly,donoteverunderestimatespiritualstrength.Ifyoubelieveinyourselfstronglyenough,youreallycanmakemiracles.JustlikeLoriSchneiderdid,tell“Don`tletfearin”toyourselfrepeatedly,

and

youwill

notafraidofanything.Finally,

keep

optimistic

regardless

of

adversities.

The

power

of

maintaining

optimistic

isundeniable.

It

is

beneficial

for

us

to

think

in

apositive

way.Inaword,weshouldbeamanofcourage,beliefandoptimism.Onlythencanweovercomeany

fear

inany

given

situation.Step

3 写作如何层次清晰、行文连贯？分段连接词、固定句式①

表文章结构顺序：First,

Second,

Finally/Firstly,

Secondly,Finally/First

of

all，Secondly,Finally等。②

表并列补充关系：What

is

more,Besides,

Moreover,

Furthermore,

In

addition

等。③

表转折对比关系：However,On

the

contrary,

But,

Although+从句,….In

spite

of+n/doing,

…等④

表因果关系：因为——Because,

As.

所以——Thus,

Therefore,As

a

result等。⑤

表补充说明：In

other

words,thatistosay等。⑥

表举例说明：For

example，For

instance，such

as+n/doing⑦

表陈述事实：In

fact,

Frankly

speaking等。⑧

表达自己观点：As

faras

Iknow/am

concerned,

Inmy

opinion,

Personally,

As

tome等。⑨

表总结：Inshort,Inaword,In

conclusion,

In

summary,All

in

all,

Briefly/

In

brief

等。⑩

表综上所述:

From

what

has

been

discussed

above,

Fromthe

foregoing等。如何富于变化？句式变化：主动句与被动句相互转化简单旬、并列句、复合句并用插入语例如：ThestorythatLoriSchneider,a53-year-oldwomanwhohad

multiple

sclerosis,

conquered

the

Seven

Summits

inspires

me

a

lot.词汇变化：同义改写例如：difficulty-trouble-adversity-problem…..词性变换例如：增加、降低等动词的表达,如increase

steadily,

decrease

sharply等,但转换一种方式用名词的形式表达,就更显得有变化性了,如experienceasteadyincrease,

undergo

a

sharp

decrease。Step

4

检查注意：不要进行大篇幅的修改，更不要因为修改破坏卷面的整洁。从以下方面进行修改：语法：时态是否一致，主谓语是否一致，名词的单复数形式，被动语态等。词汇：连接上下文的连接词使用是否正确，单词拼写是否出现低级错误等。写作训练——2016年3月真题Read

thetextbelow.

Write

an

essayin

about120words,

inwhich

youshould

summarized

keypoints

of

the

textand

makecomments

on

them.

Try

to

use

your

own

words.Dear

Sally,Itwasamazingtoseeyourdanceperformancelastweekend.Ifeltsoproudofyouwhenyourteachersandschoolmates

congratulated

you

uponyour

completion

of

performance.While

you

continue

to

enjoy

the

moment,

I`d

like

to

share

with

you

a

small

quote

from

Abraham

Lincoln,

“

This,

too,

shallpass

away.”

Iwant

these

wordstobe

your

guide

at

every

turningpoint

inyour

life.Whenyou`refeelingveryproudofyourselfatanachievement,knowingnoboundsatthatmoment,rememberthat“This,

too,shall

pass

away.”Whenyou`reata

difficultmomentinyourlifeanddon`tknowwhattodo,findcomfortinthesamewords—This,too,shall

passaway.I`mnotsayingthattheacheofsomelossesandsetbackswillcompletelygo

awayfrom

yourlife.In

fact,openthe

memories

ofpainful

events

will

hit

you

unexpectedly

like

tons

of

bricks

andtake

your

breath

away

years

after

they

happen.But,likeallhumans,youhaveanalmostinfinitecapacitytoadapttolife`schangesandagreatabilitybouncebackfrom

tryingtimes.

Thisunderstandingshouldgive

youasparkofhopewhen

you`reinaseasonofdespair;itshouldalsobuildup

your

confidence

fortaking

risks

inthe

future.Sally,

our

lives

are

made

up

of

several

peaks

and

several

valleys.

That`s

the

future

of

life.

Live

each

moment

as

it

comes.Andalways

remember

“This,

too,

shall

pass

away.”Love，PapaSally`sfartherwrotealettertoher.

Intheletter,

her