专题11高考英语读后续写

读后续写2021年2017年06月浙江英语试卷读后续写（改编）ContinuationWriting

[话题：体育冒险题材：和朋友骑行游玩，野外遇到狼]Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled（骑行）alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that’sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofhearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac’srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac’sbike,tearingopenhistenthag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase（追赶）.

Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoshowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he’dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeekyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.Paragraph1:

Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim._Paragraph2:

Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived._____________________________一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件

1.浅层信息理解首先要审题：⑴体裁：_______；⑵人称：_______；⑶主体时态：______________；⑷5Ws：who（______，_________________________）；when（_______________________________）；where（_____________________）；what（_____________________）；why（_______________）。记叙文第三人称一般过去时Machisfriendsonabright,warmJulyafternoonfromhishometoAlaskatookatripandadventuredenjoyedthelifeI，thefamily（father，mother，thegirl）2.深层信息理解①理清故事的发展线索（How）paragraph（段落）及时间线索Behaviors（行为）Topic（段意）Para1（Onabright,warmJulyafternoon）wascycling，stoppedtomakeabicyclerepair，carryon，thoughtfondlyof，showthemthisbeautifulplaceMaehadtotravelalonebecausehisfriendshadstoppedtofixthebicycle.paragraph（段落）及时间线索Behaviors（行为）Topic（段意）Para2，3&4（Then，whenhelookedtotheside，Then）heardquickandloudbreathing，wasn’tadog，catchingupwith，firedthesprayat，enveloped，attacked，tearingopen，

firedat，restartthechase，pedalinghard，wavedandyelled，sawasteepMacwasbeingfollowedbyawolf.Fightingthewolf,hecouldn’tgetawayPara5（Atthismoment，Abitlater）drivingtheircar，spotted，realized，PaulandBeckyshowedupandMacwantedtoberescued.

②判断细节描写类型：心理活动□；动作□√；环境□；外貌性格□。体现准确词：___________________________________________；过程：__________________________________________________；修辞：_____________________________；夸张：____________________________________________等，使故事紧张刺激。cycling，stopped，fired，attacked，hit，spottedfell，shaking；fellback，shaking；quicklyrestart；realizedthoughtfondlyofenveloped，tearinginto；waved，yelled③材料的语调：_________________；人物情感和性格：_________________________________________________。

3.整合本篇的情节和情感线索：__________________________________→_________________________________________→_____________________________→____________________________________________________________________________。peaceful，tensescared，helpful，desperate，hopeful，braveandcalm因为朋友路旁停下修车，Mae只能孤身前行两次与狼搏击，小胜，但狼依然紧追不放前有陡坡，后有追狼，Mac无计脱身Paul和Becky出现，Mac获救与否在此一举，他的心情应该紧张到了一个极点二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向

根据段首句1：汽车突然停在他前面及时间线索词abruptly，结合文章第五段Atthismoment,PaulandBeekyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska续写的伏笔，我们设问：①Whichwordsorphrasescatchyoureyes?(car，stopped)②__________________________________?③____________________________________?④_________________________?⑤________________________?⑥___________________________________________?HowwillPaulandBeckyinthecarreactDidtheygetouttohelporclosethedoorInwhatwaydidtheyofferhelpWasMacrescuedatlastHowdidMacfeel,panic,afraid,braveorexcited根据段首句2：Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived（几分钟后，另外两个骑自行车的人到了）及时间线索词Afewminuteslater，结合文章第五段Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad…Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.续写的伏笔，我们设问：①Whichwordsorphrasescatchyoureyes?(theothertwocyclistsarrived)②_____________________________________________________________________?③_________________________________?④_________________________________?⑤____________________________________________________________________?Whoarethey,Mac’sfriendsorsomeotherstrangersAftertheirarrival,howdidtheyreactWeretheygratefultothelifesaversHowcouldParagraph2beendedreasonablyandcreatively三、借助文本资源，创设续写情节根据六要素和自己的想象，借助文本资源，创设续写两段故事的情节。Paragraph1：[故事开端]汽车突然停在他前面。[发展]_______________________________→________________________→________________________→________________________。

Mac跳下自行车，冲向车的后门狼的牙齿马上撕咬他的肉狼不停地咆哮，拍打窗户Mac上车，关上门Paragraph2：[高潮]_________________________________→_________________________________→___________________________________。[结局]_______________________________________。[感悟]___________________________。另外两个骑自行车的人也来了得知Mac之事，给了他一个拥抱PaulandBecky开车送他们到阿拉斯加失望的狼最终消失在树林里经历让Mac明白了生命的珍贵四、增加细节描写，完成读后续写

将已确定好的六要素加以串联，增加细节描写，完成续写初稿。

第一段：

⑴“快点，上车!”保罗喊道。“Comeon，___________quickly!”Paul______.⑵麦克毫不犹豫地跳下自行车,麦克冲到汽车的后门。____________________,Mac__________hisbicycle__________tothebackdoorofthecar.getinthecaryelledWithoutanyhesitationjumpedoffanddashed⑶门是锁着的!Thedoor__________!⑷想到狼血淋淋的嘴巴，麦克吓得几乎要死了。WhenMac_________thewolf’sbloodymouth,he______________withhorror.⑸他甚至可以想象狼的牙齿在咬他的肉。Hecouldevenimaginethewolf’steeth__________________.⑹贝基打开了门。Thedoor_____________byBecky.waslockedthoughtofwasnearlydeadtearingintohisfleshwasunlocked⑺那个受了惊吓的人冲了进去，在狼来袭击他之前他把门关上。Thefrightenedman______________thedoorjust______thewolfstruckhim.⑻狼非常生气，不停地咆哮，猛烈地拍打着窗户。Thewolf_______________itkeptroaringandsmackingthewindowviolently.divedinandshutbeforewassoangrythat⑼失望的狼意识到他所做的一切都是徒劳的，它消失在森林里。Whenthedisappointedwolf________________________wasinvain,it______________thewoods.⑽麦克坐在车里，他的心仍因恐惧而狂跳不止。Macsatinthecar,andhisheart______________________withfear.realizedwhateverhediddisappearedintowasstillbeatingwildly

第二段：

⑾他们震惊地发现麦克的自行车躺在路上。They__________________Mac’sbicyclelyingontheroad.⑿他的帐篷袋破了，麦克就像一只淹死的老鼠。Histentbag_________andMacwasjust___________________.weretornlikeadrownedmousewereshockedtofind⒀“麦克，到底发生了什么事?”麦克的朋友们问道。

“Mac,what__________________?”Mac’sfriendsasked.⒁“我差点被狼咬死!”“I_______________byawolf!”⒂他们被告知麦克的惊心动魄的经历。

TheyweretoldaboutMac’s___________________.⒃他们忍不住喊叫起来，给了他一个拥抱。They_________________outand______________.onearthhashappenedwasalmostkilledthrillingexperiencecouldn’thelpcryinggavehimahug⒄在麦克觉得好些了后，他们感谢保罗和贝基。AfterMacfeltbetterafewminuteslater,they_____________PaulandBecky.⒅保罗和贝基担心前面可能会有更多的潜在危险，于是提出开车送他们去阿拉斯加。Becausetheyareafraidthat________________________________ahead,PaulandBeckyofferedtodrivethemtoAlaska.weregratefultotheremightbemorepotentialdangers⒆这次可怕而又激动人心的经历让麦克认识到生命的珍贵。ThishorribleandexcitingexperiencemadeMac________________________.五、润色文字，升级句式

初稿完成后，用过渡词句、高级词汇和句式升级，烘托场景，可增加得分点。

①用分词作伴随状语改写句⑵，用转折连词but与句⑶合并。Withoutanyhesitation,Macjumpedoffhisbicycle,_____________________ofthecar,but___________!learnhowpreciouslifeisdashingtothebackdooritwaslocked②用分词改写句⑷。

___________thewolf’sbloodymouth,Macwasnearlydeadwithfright.③用分词作伴随状语改写句⑺，再用and合并句⑹和句⑺。ThedoorwasunlockedbyBecky______thefrightenedmandivedin,_______________________________thewolfstruckonhim.④用倒装句改写句⑻。

______________________itkeptroaringandsmackingthewindowviolently.ThinkingofandshuttingthedoorjustbeforeSoangrywasthewolfthat⑤用分词作时间状语改写句⑼

___________wasinvain,___________________disappearedintothewoods.⑥用独立主格结构改写句⑿和句⑾合并。

TheywereshockedtofindMac’sbicyclelyingontheroad,_____________andMacjustlikeadrownedmouse.⑦用过去分词改写句⒂，再和句⒃合并。

_________aboutMac’sthrillingexperience,_________________________________himahug.ThinkingofthedisappointedwolfhistentbagtornWhentoldtheycouldn’thelpcryingoutandgave⑧用形容词短语作状语改写句⒅。

__________theremightbemorepotentialdangersahead,PaulandBeckyofferedtodrivethemtoAlaska.六、检查定稿，规范誊写

请根据上述组句和改写句，添加恰当的过渡词语（justatthatmoment，afterquiteawhile，eventually等），修订表达成文。AfraidthatParagraph1:

Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.“Comeon，getinthecarquickly!”Paulyelled.①Withoutanyhesitation,Macjumped

offhisbicycle,dashingtothebackdoorofthecar,butitwaslocked!Thinkingofthewolf’sbloodymouth,Macwasnearlydeadwithhorror.Hecouldevenimaginethewolf’steethtearingintohisflesh.②Justatthatmoment,thedoorwasunlockedbyBeckyandthefrightenedmandivedin,shuttingthedoorjustbeforethewolfstruckhim.③Soangrywasthewolfthatitkeptroaringandsmackingthewindowviolently.Afterquiteawhile,④realizingwhateverhedidwasinvain,thedisappointedwolfdisappearedintothewoodseventually.Macsatinthecar,⑤hisheartstillbeatingwildlywithfear