高中英语读后续写交流课件

故事续写教学研讨故事续写教学研讨?题型分析?写作技能?基础夯实?冲刺提高?题型分析?写作技能?基础夯实?冲刺提高题型分析题型分析高考故事续写发展历程始于2016年10月时间：日?夜?日?夜?日地点：森林人物：夫妻事件：迷路高考故事续写发展历程始于2016年10月时间：日?夜?日?夜2017年6月时间：日地点：野外人物：朋友事件：遇狼2017年11月时间：日?夜?日地点：户外人物：家人事件：旅行2018年6月时间：日?夜地点：草原?森林人物：父子事件：迷路Future?2017年6月时间：日地点：野外人物：朋友事件：遇狼2017时间日夜兼有地点户外室内？故事续写人物夫妻朋友家人师生?总结故事续写常考察有矛盾、有危机的事件。情节矛盾（人&人）(人&动物)(人&自然)时间日夜兼有地点户外室内？故事续写人物夫妻朋友家人师生?总结题型分析：输入文本输入文本文本提示与结构?续写原文?Para.1首句?Para.2首句70%?十个关键词题型分析：输入文本输入文本文本提示与结构?续写原文?Para?确定主题?根据Para.1与Para.2开头语的提示内容以及原文最后一段的情节，确定Para.1开头与结束可能出现的情节?根据Para.2开头语的提示内容以及文章的主题，确定第二段开头可能出现的情节以及结尾部分内容?10个关键词在一定程度上确定了情节发展的一些主要因素，包括了主要人物(maincharacter)、主要地点(place)、主要事件(event)以及主要场景(scene)等。所以，我们可以通过分析10个划线关键词预测续写部分可能出现的情节，根据需要选择关键词?确定主题?根据Para.1与Para.2开头语的提示内容以AVacationwithMyMother（2017.06）?Ihadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurpriseandamusement,allbecauseofmymother---loving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaselventellsalotabouther.?MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgoodbyetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwewouldeverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe'dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler‘schecksMomhadforgotten.?DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept:“Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout(放哨)whileIgo,andI'llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:“Honey,wherearethekids?”“What?!Oh,Gosh…Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquite.”Wewereneveractuallyleftinastrangecity,butwewerenotabouttotakeanychance.?Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn'twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections(反对).Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorstep,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldisasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.AVacationwithMyMother（201注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Paragraph2:Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5?主题：Avacationwithmyloving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetfulmum.?第一段情节：thebrand-newtent，forget,solvetheproblem?第二段情节：greatsightsindifferentstates?关键词分类：whoMomDadDavidhowabsent-minded;forgetful;nicewhatcampingtroubletenttrip?关键词分布：第一段：mom,dad,David，forget,tent第二段：trip,nice?主题：Avacationwithmyloving写作技能Plots&Language写作技能Plots&Language01Plots|情节推进1.问题链推进2.时间推进3.情感推进01Plots|情节推进1.问题链推进2.时间推进3.情感推问题链推进通过故事“六要素”设计问题链问题链推进通过故事“六要素”设计问题链教学案例以人教版高中英语必修教材第三模块Unit1UsingLanguage：ASADLOVESTORY为例，该文本是一篇典型的叙事类文本。上课教师根据“六要素”（5W1H）梳理已知文本情节，即：1.Whendidthestoryhappen?2.Wheredidthestoryhappen?3.Whowerethemaincharacters?4.Whathappenedonthatday?5.Whydidhedoso?6.HowcouldLiFangsolvetheproblem?教学案例以人教版高中英语必修教材第三模块Unit1Usi最后一个问题，HowcouldLiFangsolvetheproblem?其实是对下文未知情节的推断。但是，问题6的切口比较大，学生常常不知道该如何回答。因此，可以按照上文中对第二轮问题链设计的思路，将疏导未知情节的问题6再细化成：1.WhatwouldhesaytoHuJin?(HowwouldheexplainthesituationtoHuJin?)2.WhatwouldHuJinsayafterhearingthenews?3.WhatwouldLiFangandHuJindonext?4.Howdidtheyfeel?这些问题更细化且切口更小，更容易回答。最后一个问题，HowcouldLiFangsolve根据这样的问题链和讨论的结果，学生撰写了故事的结局。以下为学生习作：“Em…”LiFangfalteredwithembarrassment.“Tobehonest,Imadeamistake.Ithoughtweweresupposedtomeetatthecoffeeshop.”“Areyouserious?”SaidHuJin,“Howcarelessyouare!Didyoupayanyattentiontothisdate?Itwasawasteoftimewaitingforyou!“It'sallmyfault.”SaidLiFang,“I'msosorry,Iwasalwayscomplainingthatyoudidn'tturnup,butIhadnevermanagedtothinkthatitwasIthatmixedupwiththecoffeeandtea.However,Iboughtagiftforyou.Thoughitwasthrownbyme.CanIbuysomethingelseasanapologyforyou?Afterall,Iloveyou!”Afterhearinghiswords,HuJindidnotannoyanymore.Infact,sheknewthattheylovedeachother,soshesaid:”Yourapologyisaccepted.Ishouldhavecalledyoujustnow.Andway,Iloveyou,too.”Afteraconversation,theybrokedownthebarriersbetweenthem,andtheyleadahappylifeforever.根据这样的问题链和讨论的结果，学生撰写了故事的结局。以下为学时间推进Inthemorning,theyawokeoutsideanotherHowardJohnson's,andthistimeVingowentin.Thegirlinsistedthathejointhem.Heseemedveryshy,andorderedblackcoffeeandsmokednervouslyastheyoungpeoplechatteredaboutsleepingonbeaches.Whentheyreturnedtothebus,thegirlsatwithVingoagain,andafterawhile,slowlyandpainfully,hetoldhisstory.HehadbeeninjailinNewYorkforthepastfouryears,andnowhewasgoinghome.----GoingHome时间推进Inthemorning,theyawokeouts情感推进分析各个角色的“情感线”情感推进分析各个角色的“情感线”2016年11月高考续写典型案例(段二)ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Sunshineembracedtheforestplain.Inhersleepyeyes,ahelicopterwasrightinthesky.Wildwithjoy,shejumpedup,grabbingtheblouseandflourishingitwhilecrying.Thehelicopterspottedherandbegantolandonthegrass.“It'sTom!Iknowhewill…hewillcome!”ApairofquiveringhandreachedJane'scheek.“ThankGod!Ifanythinghappenedtoyou,I'llneverforgivemyself.Theyhuggedmoretightly.I'msorry.Janesaid.情感可以是：adjectives,verbs,repetitions,conversations2016年11月高考续写典型案例(段二)Itwasdaybr02Language02Language动作描写范例（头部描写范例）头发：1.sthmakeone'shairrise使头发竖起来（怒惧惊激）2.runone'sfingerthroughone'shair撩头发3.comb梳头发眉毛：1.sbfrown皱眉2.raise/cockone'seyebrows（表惊讶）/eyebrow（表怀疑）翘起眉毛/挑眉耳朵：1.one'searsperk/prickup/sbperk/prickupone'searsatthesoundof竖起耳朵听…眼睛：1.aflashof…crossone'seyes眼中闪过一阵…2.blink眨眼3.rollone'seyes翻白眼4.meetone'sgaze迎着/迎视某人目光5.eyesdarttowards眼睛扫向6.stareat凝视7.glareat怒视脸颊：sbwinceatasuddenpain畏缩，脸部肌肉的抽搐（疼痛/不安）动作描写范例（头部描写范例）头发：1.sthmakeon2017年6月高考故事续写习作范例“Hopin!”PaulroaredatMac.Sensingarayofhope,Macjumpedofthebikeandflungitatthewolfwithallhismight!Instantlyhestormedtowardsthecarathisdesperateeffort.Butthebikedidn'tmakeabigdifference.Thebeastchasedhimandplungedathim,bitinghisanklethemomentheflungopenthedoor.Asurgeofpainpiercinghisbody,Mactightenedhisgriponthedoorhandle.“Gotohell!”Hegaveaheavykickatitsheadandflunghimselfintothecar.Rightbeforehecouldslamthedoor,Paulsteppedhardonthepedalandthecarwhizzedoff,leavingthebeasthowlingbehind.“Damnit!”Mac,withallthebreathknockedoutofhim,laywherehefell,“JesusChrist!Thankyou!”2017年6月高考故事续写习作范例“Hopin!”Paulr对话描写：简短+地道+量少MomandI,asurgeoffragrancesweepingover,trodlightlythroughdaisies,liliesandacoupleofunknownflowers.“Wow!”Imurmuredtomyself,“IwishIhadbeenhereearlier!”Pickingaflower,Idashedtomom.“Here!”Ireachedoutmyhand,“Thisisforyou.”Mom,withherfacecracking/broadeningintoabright/bigsmile,tookitover,“Thankyou,sweetheart!”Mombentdown,sweepingmeintoahug.Lookingupatthesky,wesawsunlightfilteringthroughoverlappedclouds.对话描写：简短+地道+量少MomandI,asurgeoff环境描写：烘托气氛、画龙点睛从视觉角度描写环境可以分类为社会环境和自然环境的描写。其中，社会环境是指能反映社会、时代特征的建筑、场所、陈设等景物以及民俗民风等。自然环境是指自然界的景物，如季节变化、风霜雨雪、山川湖海、森林原野等，对表现人物身份、地位、行动，表达人物心情，渲染气氛都具有重要作用。在故事续写中，自然环境的描写更加易用，并且，一般来说，故事续写中的场景主要发生在户外的大自然中，这也为自然环境的描写提供了充分机会。环境描写：烘托气氛、画龙点睛从视觉角度描写环境可以分类为社会2016年10月高考一篇高分作文的开头首句：Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Clustersofstarsdecoratedthevastsky,weaklyshininginthemoon-eclipseddarkness.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Sunshineembracedtheforestplain.2016年10月高考一篇高分作文的开头首句：Paragrap声音描写飞禽走兽花鸟鱼虫，金木水火土风雷电声音描写飞禽走兽花鸟鱼虫，金木水火土风雷电声音描写例句一、单独成句，加感叹号或者省略号Crack!Thestickbrokeintwo.二、拟声词可以做动词/名词1.Thecockintheyardcroweditsfirstround.2.Hefeltasifhemustshoutandsing,heseemedtohearabouthimtherustleofunceasingandinnumerablewings.三、拟声词做副词Thelogswereburningbrisklyinthefire.声音描写例句一、单独成句，加感叹号或者省略号Crack!T夯实基础Input&Output夯实基础Input&Output01Input1.教材2.课外素材01Input1.教材2.课外素材教材的使用ASadStoryHealthyEatingPowerofNature......教材的使用ASadStoryHealthyEating必修三课文拓展范例：“Em…”LiFangfalteredwithembarrassment.“Tobehonest,Imadeamistake.Ithoughtweweresupposedtomeetatthecoffeeshop.”“Areyouserious?”SaidHuJin,“Howcarelessyouare!Didyoupayanyattentiontothisdate?Itwasawasteoftimewaitingforyou!“It'sallmyfault.”SaidLiFang,“I'msosorry,Iwasalwayscomplainingthatyoudidn'tturnup,butIhadnevermanagedtothinkthatitwasIthatmixedupwiththecoffeeandtea.However,Iboughtagiftforyou.Thoughitwasthrownbyme.CanIbuysomethingelseasanapologyforyou?Afterall,Iloveyou!”Afterhearinghiswords,HuJindidnotannoyanymore.Infact,sheknewthattheylovedeachother,soshesaid:”Yourapologyisaccepted.Ishouldhavecalledyoujustnow.Andw