专题08高考英语读后续写

读后续写2020年07月浙江英语试卷读后续写（改编）ContinuationWritingOnefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”—thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.TakingpicturesofPolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears—likeallwildanimals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI’mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws.Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter,Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear’spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes,butdoesn’thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar,thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.Paragraph1:

Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.__________________________Paragraph2:

Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.______________________________一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件1.浅层信息理解体裁：记叙文；人称：第一人称；主体时态：一般过去时；5Ws：who（mywifeElliandI，ayoungmalepolarbear，thecampmanager，ahelicopter）、when（Onefall）、where（researchcampoutsidethetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada）、what（attackedtheircamps）、why（sniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread）。2.深层信息理解①理清故事的发展线索（How）段落及时间线索Behaviors（行为）Topic（段意）Para1&2（Onefall）photograph，werestaying，

Takingpicturesof，shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance，easiersaidthandoneElliandIwantedtophotographpolarbears.段落及时间线索Behaviors（行为）Topic（段意）Para3&4（AsElliandIcookeddinner）sniffed,andsmelled，followedhisnoseto，pulledandbit，stoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatAhungrypolarbearwasattractedbythetastyfoodinthecamp.Para5，6&7（30minutesbeforehelparrived）triedallthebeardefenseactions，yelled，hit，fired，

tryingtoteardown，radioed，

wasonitsway，tooksomepicturesof，sprayed，ranElliandItriedtofightoutofdanger.②判断细节描写类型：心理活动□；动作□√；环境□；外貌性格□。体现准确词：photograph，Takingpicturesof，followed，teardown，tooksomepicturesof，sprayed，ran；过程：sniffed,andsmelled；stood，pushed；yelled，hit，fired；radioed，wasonitsway；修辞：approachedouruninvitedguestslowly；夸张：triedallthebeardefenseactions。

3.整合本篇的情节和情感线索：

一对夫妻在加拿大拍摄北极熊（amazed，calm）→一只北极熊被食物味道吸引，意欲闯入（hungry，uneasy，anxious，terrified）→作者和妻子使出浑身解数，想吓退这头熊（worried，irritated）→向营地求助，被告知救援要30分钟后才能赶到（calm）→向北极熊喷胡椒粉，北极熊愤怒跑开（aggressive，unstable）……。二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向根据段首句1：几分钟后，这只熊回到了我们的营地及时间线索词Afewminuteslater，可通过以下问题获取写作要点：Whichwordsorphrasescatchyoureyes?(thebearheadedback)Whatdidthebeardothen?Howdidthecoupledealwiththebear?Whathappenedtothecouple?根据段首句2：就在这时，直升机来了及时间线索词Atthatverymoment，可问以下几个问题：Whichwordsorphrasescatchyoureyes?(thehelicopterarrived)Whatdidthebearreact?Howdidthecouplereact?Howdidthecoupleescape?Howdidthewriterfeel?HowcouldParagraph2beendedreasonablyandcreatively?

三、借助文本资源，创设续写情节

根据故事六要素和自己的想象，借助文本资源，创设续写两段故事的情节。Paragraph1：[故事开端]几分钟后，北极熊又回到营地。[发展]北极熊再次进攻→采取措施智斗北极熊(喷雾、扔面包等)。[高潮]夫妻二人几乎陷入绝境。Paragraph2：[结局]就在那时，直升机到了→北极熊被吓走→夫妻二人获救，熊口逃生→[感悟]拍照片目的达成。

四、增加细节描写，完成读后续写

串联拟定好的情节，添加必要的细节描写，完成续写初稿。Paragraph1:

Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Heexposedhissharpteeth,glaringatusasheranforward.Thebearagainstoodonhisbacklegsandroaredrepeatedly.Itseemedthathismouthwasfullofblood,hiseyesredwithangerandthemouthwidelyopen.Fearingthatthebearwouldteardownthefenceatanyminute,wehadnochoicebuttogivehimwhathewanted—thegarlicbread.Mywifethrewthebreadatthecreaturealittlebitatatimeandhowever,Isnatchedmycamera,takingonelastshotofthebear,aphotoIhadalwayslongedtophotograph.Paragraph2:

Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.MyheartjumpedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.Theplanelandednearourcampanditsloudnoisesscaredthebear.Helookedannoyedandcameatusagain.Whiletherescuersmanagedtocalmthebeardown,weinstantlysteppedawayandranasfastaswecouldtothehelicopter.Thankgoodness!Wesucceededinclimbingontothehelicopter,breathingdeeplywithrelief.Severalhourslater,wearrivedathomesafeandsound,butwerealizedthatI’vegotthe

bestpictureeverandit’sallworthit.【名师点评】范文句子如Heexposedhissharpteeth,glaringatusasheranforward.他露出尖利的牙齿，一边跑一边瞪着我们。（愤怒的动作生动描写）Hismouthwasfullofblood,hiseyesredwithangerandthemouthwidelyopen.他的嘴里满是血，眼睛因愤怒而发红，嘴巴张得大大的。（动作的夸张描写）…threwthebreadatthebearalittlebitatatimeand