专题09读后续写2023届新高考英语写作精讲解题(课件)

专题09读后续写-2023届新高考英语写作精讲+解题演示【典题1解读】AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISE(2021·新高考I卷)ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.

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Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Father’sappearingwaslikeasaviortothetwochildren.Undertheguidanceoftheirfather,theytookpositiveactionsandstartedalloveragain.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncookingporridge.Fatherhelpedthemadjustthefire,whichwasthekeytosuccess.Itwasallrightthistime.Deliciousbreakfastwasready.Howhappytheywere!Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Whentheirmothersawthedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn’texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,“HappyMother’sDay!”Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.【解读】【原文解读】本文以第三人称，以母亲节为线索展开，讲述了双胞胎Jenna和Jeff为了献给母亲一份美味的早餐，自己动手，做起饭餐来，但是不幸的是，他们连连失败，后来在父亲的帮助下，获得成功，他们把早餐献给亲爱的母亲，妈妈非常感动的故事。【续写线索】帮助——指导——积极——献礼——感动。【段落续写】由第一段首句内容“当双胞胎失望地环顾四周时，他们的父亲出现了。”可知父亲的出现给他们带来了希望，故第一段可描写他们的父亲指导帮助他们准备早餐。可以从以下的几个方面入手去考虑问题：呈上：

Howdidfatherfeelonseeingthemess?细节：

Whatdidfatherdotohelp?启下：

Whocookedthebreakfastatlast?在这一段的描写当中，可以充分的利用原文中的信息，描写做饭的场景。以达到与原文呼应的目的。父亲帮忙后，怎样还让母亲感觉到惊喜呢？这是父亲和孩子们之间的一个小秘密。【解读】由第二段首句内容“这对双胞胎把早餐端到楼上，叫醒了他们的母亲。”可知，第二段可描写母亲收到孩子们的礼物早餐，非常感动。本段则是向妈妈献上惊喜的时刻了。可以从以下的几个方面入手去考虑问题：呈上：Whatdidtheysay?细节：Howdidmotherreactandfeel?点题：Whatasurprise!

Ihadneverseensomanypeoplewantingfood.Theywereofallagesandnationalities.Mostofthemworeclothesthatweretornanddirty.Somelookedliketheyhadtallygivenuponlife,whileothersseemedtobemakingthebestofthesituation,smilingandjoking.Somewerebetteroffthanothers,buttheyallneededagoodmealandawarmplacetoeat.Itsaddenedmetothinkofhowmanypeopletherewerewhodidn’thaveaplacetocallhomeandtheonlyfoodtheygotcamefromasoupkitchen.

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Paragraph1:Astheycameinmydirection,Iputonmybrightestandhappiestsmile._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:IwassohappythatIhadearnedmyservicehoursinthisway.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】【写作点拨】

读后续写是一种将阅读与写作紧密结合的考查形式，旨在考查考生的综合语言运用能力，是英语写作的“集大成者”：包含了“阅读”、“写作”、“分析”和“创造”等四种能力。鉴于高考读后续写的阅读材料一般都是以故事类记叙文或者夹叙夹议文为主的情况，故本专题从以下几个方面就此种读后续写做些点拨。一、借助两段续写首句分析原文通读原文，借助两段续写首句分析原文。分析的主要内容如下：1.理清情节，寻找伏笔：利用记叙文的六个要素理清故事情节的发展；根据两段续写

首句为续写寻找伏笔。2.弄清大意，生成主题：根据情节发展弄清原文大意，生成续写需要弘扬的主题。3.分析人物，把握性格：分析主要人物把握其性格特点，拿捏原文与续写之间的契合

点。除以上三点外，还需要分析文章的语言特点，续写要尽力与原文在语言风格上保持一致。【写作点拨】二、根据原文分析构思续写框架根据对原文的分析，衔接两段续写首句，划出其中的关键词句，弄懂关键句蕴含的意思，构思第一段和第二段续写框架。三、结合续写框架构思主要情节确定好续写的框架后，一要设计好三个“衔接”和第二段的尾句：衔接第一段首句的内容；第一段尾衔接第二段首句的内容；衔接第二段首句的内容以及第二段尾句的设计；二要设计好主要情节。四、细化情节拟稿润色誊写上卡【常用素材】(主要是叙事写人和结尾升华句)Tamarastaredathimindisbelief,shakingherhead.塔玛拉摇着头，不相信地盯着他看。Singinghappily,shegazedathersurroundingswithlarge,innocenteyes.她快乐地唱着歌，一双天真的大眼睛凝视着周围的环境。Shelookedatherfatherstraightintheeyeandansweredhisquestiontruthfully.她直视着他父亲的眼睛，诚实地回答了他的问题。Hereyesfellonthephotoofherandhersonathisfourthbirthdayparty.她的目光落在了儿子四岁生日派对上她和儿子的照片上。Histeammateswereallscreamingashedashedtowardthefinishline.当他冲向终点线时，他的搭档们都在尖叫。Shenoddedherheadnervously.她紧张地不断点头。Hedecidedtogoforawalktoclearhishead.他决定去散散步，清醒一下头脑。Shelayonthegrass,herheadpillowedonherarms.她头枕着胳膊躺在草地上。Hestoodthere.headback,framedagainstthebluesky.他站在那里，头向后仰，衬托在蓝天下。Hetookafirmgriponherarmandrantowardsthedoor.他紧紧抓着她的手臂，往门口跑去。Shedidn’tsayaword,butheldhermother’shandtightlywithawaterysmile.她一句话也没说，只是紧紧地握着母亲的手，淡然一笑。Shedraggedherheavylegsandmovedtiredlyforward.她拖着沉重的双腿，疲惫前行。Aterriblesorrowwashedoverme.一阵悲伤向我袭来。Wordsfailtoexpressmysorrow.语言不能表达我的悲伤。Therewasmorethanahintofsadnessinhisvoice.他的声音中流露出了深切的悲伤。Astheeveningprogressed,sadnessturnedtorage.随着夜幕逐渐降临，悲伤变成了愤怒。Uponhearingthebadnews,shefeltseizedbyaburstofsadnessandcouldn'thelpcryingbitterly.听了这个坏消息，她感到一阵悲伤，忍不住痛哭。Shebecamesonervousthatshetrembledviolently.她紧张得猛烈颤抖。Sheshookallover,feelinglikesittingonpinsandneedles.她浑身颤抖，觉得如坐针毡。Hefrozewithterror,tooscaredtomoveaninch.他吓呆了，害怕得不敢移动一步。Hearingthebadnews,Maryfrozewithshock,asifsherootedontheground听到这个坏消息，玛丽吓得呆住了，好像在地上扎了根。Hefelthisfaceburningwithshame.他的脸因羞愧而发烫。Soashameddidshefeelthatshewasclosetotears.她羞愧得几乎要哭了。Hebowedhisheadinshamewhenhethoughtofhowhetreatedher.他想到是如何对待她的，羞愧地低下了头。SeeingIwasOK,myfatherwasquiterelieved.看到我没事，我父亲松了一口气。Hedesperatelycriedforhelpanditwasluckythatthedriverstoppedhiscar.他绝望地大声呼救，幸运的是司机把车停了下来。FrightenedasIwas,Itriedtokeepmybalancetopreventmyselffromfallingoff.尽管我很害怕，我还是努力保持平衡以免摔下去。Intheend,thelittlechildrenreturnedtothevillage,safeandsound.最后，这些孩子安然无恙地回到了村子里。Hisfacelightingup,Arthursprangupintohismom’swarmhug.亚瑟喜笑颜开，投进了妈妈温暖的怀抱。Seeingthegift,George’smotherwasveryglad,tearsrunningdownherface.看到礼物，乔治的妈妈非常高兴，眼泪顺着她的脸流下来。Deeplymovedbyallhissondid,thefathercouldsaynothingbuttohughimtightly,tearswellingup

inhiseyes.父亲被儿子所做的一切深深地感动了，说不出话来，紧紧地搂着他，热泪盈眶。Mybestfriendistheonewhobringsoutthebestinme.最好的朋友使我表现得特别出色。Evenasmallactofkindnesscanmakeabigdifference.哪怕是一个小小的善举也能带来巨大的改变。Walkingwithafriendinthedarkisbetterthanwalkingaloneinthelight.在黑暗中与朋友并肩同行好过在光亮中独自行走。Friendsshowtheirloveintimesoftrouble.notintimesofhappiness.朋友是在患难的时候表达爱意，而不是在幸福时。Nowpeopleingrowingnumbersarebeginningtorealizethat...现在越来越多的人开始意识到……Thereisnodoubtthatimmediateattentionmustbepaidtotheproblemof...毫无疑问，……问题必须立即引起注意。Theincrease/decreasein...isduetothefactthat...……增加／减少是由于……样的事实引起的。Suchchangesinthetableshouldowetothefollowingreasons.Firstly,...Secondly,...表中的这种变化应归功于以下原因。首先，其次，……Anothercontributoryfactorof...is...……的另一个因素是……Thereasonfor...isthat...……的原因是……Oneofthemostsurprisingfindingsisthat...最令人惊讶的发现之一是……Itisclearthattheincreaseofpercentagegetsgreaterandgreater.很明显，增加的比率变得越来越大。Theycouldn’tbesatisfiedwiththemmore.他们对这个结果非常满意。Shefeltwarmthinthecoldday，andbelievedtherewaskindnessineverycorner.她在寒冷的日子里感受到了温暖，并且相信每个角落都有善意。Heleftpeopleahiddentreasure-hiskindheart，whichshallneverdieawaywiththepassageoftime.他给人们留下了一个隐藏的宝藏——他那颗善良的心，它将永远不会随着时间的流逝而消失。Shesmiledbackintears.Notuntilthatmomentdidsherealizewhatabigdifferenceonesmallgesturehad

made.她含泪回以微笑。直到那一刻她才意识到一个小小的手势有多大的影响。Itisbettertolightonecandlethantocursethedarkness.与其诅咒黑暗，不如燃起蜡烛。Perseverancecansometimesequalgeniusinitsresults.毅力在效果上有时能同天才相比。Difficultcircumstancesserveasatextbookoflifeforpeople.困难坎坷是人们生活的教科书。Thereisnodignitywithouthonesty.没有诚实何来尊严。Thereisnodignitywithouthonesty.没有诚实何来尊严。Honestyisthemosttouchingthing.诚实最能打动人心的。Completesinceritycanaffectevenmetalandstone.精诚所至，金石为开。Itismoreimportantforamantokeephispromisethantoguardhisproperty.一个人严守诺言比守卫他的财产更重要。Helpothersmoreandcreatemorehappiness.多帮助他人，多创造快乐。Tolivebyoneselfistomakeotherslivebetter.独立就是为了让他人活得更好。Lightalampforothers,andyouwillnotonlylightupforothersbutalsoyourself.为别人点一盏灯，照亮别人，也照亮了自己。Itisakindofhappinesstobelovedbyothers,anditisalsoakindofhappinesstocareforothers.得到他人的关爱是一种幸福，关爱他人也是一种幸福。Paragraph1:Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________一、借助两段续写首句分析原文通读原文，借助两段续写首句分析原文，主要分析以下内容：1.理清情节，寻找伏笔：利用记叙文的六个要素理清故事情节的发展；根据两段续写首句为续写寻找伏笔。理清情节：when:越野赛前where:越野赛的赛场who:David(withabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren)I(aspecialeducationteacherattheschool),theschool’scoach,studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolswhyandwhat:脑部疾病引发腿部残疾的男孩David担心自己参加越野赛会被嘲笑，决定放弃比赛，作为他的老师我见证了David的毅力和为这次比赛所做出的努力，并为他的坚强意志而骄傲。how:文章的结局正是续写的内容。2.弄清大意，生成主题：根据情节发展弄清原文大意，生成续写需要弘扬的主题。文章大意：本文作者是一名特殊教育教师，在大型越野赛跑那天，发现患有大脑疾病的大卫独自站在一旁。作者问其原因，他说准备放弃比赛。从教练口中得知，因为担心同学们会嘲笑大卫，所以教练想让大卫自己去决定是否参加赛跑。作者让大卫追寻自己的内心，不理会别人的看法，大卫最终参赛，尽管遇到困难，他战胜了自己，这已经无关名次，而是他的勇敢和坚定让这一切成为可能。根据原文大意生成需要弘扬的主题：大卫身残志坚，积极向上。3.分析人物，把握性格：分析主要人物把握其性格特点，拿捏原文与续写之间的契合点。主要人物及其性格特点：①David:身残志坚，积极向上，为实现目标努力奋斗，困难面前从不放弃，但因自身残疾又有些怯懦自卑；②I:作为David的老师热爱并欣赏自己的学生；③原文与续写之间的契合点：David身残志坚，渴望参加比赛，但稍有自卑，“我”作为他的老师热爱学生并欣赏David的坚强意志，在David要退出比赛的时候会用自己的爱心去支持和鼓励他克服困难，积极面对，并且David会接受老师的建议，勇敢地完成比赛。除以上三点外，还需要分析文章的语言特点，续写要尽力与原文在语言风格上保持一致。二、根据原文分析构思续写框架根据对原文的分析，衔接两段续写首句，划出其中的关键词句，弄懂关键句蕴含的意思，构思第一段和第二段续写框架。①由第一段首句“Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.我们挨着坐着，但大卫不愿看我一眼。”划线处蕴含的意思是：大卫的心理是内疚、不甘、亦或是其他什么心理？②由第二段首句内容“IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.我看着大卫和其他选手一起走到起跑线上。”划线处蕴含的意思是：劝说成功，大卫参赛。由以上分析可知：第一段可描写作者鼓励大卫继续完成比赛，大卫经过激烈的心理斗争，最终决定参加比赛；第二段可描写大卫开始参赛，虽然中途遇到困难，仍然在大家的鼓劲下坚持到最后，完成了比赛。三、结合续写框架构思主要情节确定好续写的框架后，一要设计好三个衔接和第二段的尾句：衔接第一段首句的内容；第一段段尾衔接第二段首句的内容；衔接第二段首句的内容以及第二段的尾句的设计；二要设计好主要情节。衔接第一段首句：如何打破僵局？Iturnedtohimandpattedhim,sayinggently...情节1：鼓励David参加比赛；情节2：大卫的心理活动或动作描写。第一段尾句要衔接第二段首句：大卫决定参加比赛。衔接第二段首句：直接写比赛开始或写一写我和他的互动，或者是大卫的心理活动等。Theracestarted...情节1：对大卫跑的过程中的一些描写；情节2：我或其他人在大卫跑的过程中为大卫加油鼓劲场面的描写；情节3：大卫克服困难坚持跑完全程的描写。第二段尾句：情感升华：我的感悟或大卫感获得挑战自我的成就感。四、细化情节拟稿润色誊写上卡【答案1】Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Iturnedtohimandpattedhim,sayinggently,“Noonecanchangeyourmind,exceptyourself.Ifyoudesiretochallengeyourself,thereisnothingtodowithothers’thoughts.”Hesatstillwithadeepbreath.“Youhaveafullpreparationbeforethisevent,whichisthemostimportantreasonwhyyoushowuphere”,Iaddedwithasinceretone.Hearingmywords,Davidlookingupatme,hisusualbigtoothysmilecameback.“Ihavedecidedtorun.”hesaiddeterminedly.IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Theracestarted.Itseemedthattherunwaywasextremelylongforyoungchildren,nottomentionachildwithaheartdisease.Davidinsistedonrunningasifhehadforgottenallhisweaknesses,thoughhewastrippedoverwithintherace.Itdidn’ttakelongbeforehepickedhimselfupagainandcontinuedhismission.Classmatesallappearedontheracingtrack,cheeringforhimenthusiastically.“Comeon!Youcanmakeit!Weareproudofyou!”.Toeveryone’sjoy,hereachedthefinallineeventually.Itwasnomoreimportantwhetherhewonthefirstplaceornot.Itwashisbraveheartandstrongfaiththatcouldmakesomethingunusualhappenfinally.【答案2】Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Isaidgently,“You’reeagertorun,right?”“Yes,butI’mafraid…”saidDavidinalowvoice,withhisheaddropping.“Iknowyou’reafraidofbeinglaughedat,butIthinkit’sagoodchanceforyoutoproveyourself.Youhavebeenworkingsohardfortherun,andI’msoproudofyou,David.Ifyoureallywanttorun,don’tletanythingoranybodystopyou.”Davidlookingupatme,hisusualbigtoothysmilecameback.“Ihavedecidedtorun.”hesaiddeterminedly.IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Therunbegan.Alltherunnersrushedforward.Davidwastheonlyonewhorockedfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward,whichmadehimveryspecialamongtheotherparticipants.Thecrowdsbeganwhispering.Suddenly,Davidtrippedoverasmallstone.Ihurriedlyshouted“Comeon,David.”Unexpectedly,thewhisperofcrowdstransferredintoencouragement,“Comeon!Comeon!”Davidpickedhimselfupandwentallouttomoveforward.Althoughhestillwasthelasttofinishtherun,hedidmakeit.Allthecrowdscheeredforhim!Theprojectrequiredeachteamtodevelopahypothesis(假说),setupanexperimenttotestthehypothesis,dothestatisticalanalysisandpresentthefindings.Whatevergradetheteamreceivedwouldbesharedbybothstudents.WhenmyteammateandImettodiscussourproject,Iwasuneasy.Herewasthischallengingstudentwhohadare