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阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(银匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.________________________________________________________Iwenttomyteacher’01文本分析1.

研读已知故事情节：Actually,Ididnotlovewriting.

Althoughmyteacherknewmywritingwascursory.AndIknewthatIlackeddiscipline

andthatIwasalsodyslexic,myteacherencouragedmetoparticipateinawritingcontest.Thankstomyteacher’sconstantencouragement,Imadeit.WhenIhandedinthefinishedessay,myteacherreadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.Andnoname.

Entriesareanonymous.”Iwroteitagain.Andagainandagain.IfIdidn’twin,Ididn’tcare.Ihadpouredawobblywriter’sbloodandsweatintosomethingthatmademyteacherproud.2.

猜测故事发展的方向：Didthewriterwintheaward?从积极的角度考虑，作者应获奖，从而体现老师的鼓励，作者的坚持及努力得到了回报。也可反转故事情节，由于是匿名，作者获奖的信息弄错了，但前文如果我没有赢，我也不在乎。我用我的血汗使我的老师感到自豪。3.

根据已知开头句梳理续写思路，构思故事情节：P1:WhenIalmostforgotthecompetition,thenewscame.从第一个句子带出的问题：Q1:WhatwasthenewsandhowdidIfeelwhenIgotthenews?

Q2:WhatwouldIdo?从第二个句子反推第一段可能带出的问题：

Q4:Theremustbeanawardpresentation.Thenwasthereanythingspecialhappening?

Q5:WhydidIgototheteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation?

Q6:HowdidIfeel?P2:

Iwenttotheteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation从第二个句子带出的问题：

Q1:WhatdidIseewhenIgotintotheteacher’soffice?

Q2:WhatwasItold?Goodnewsorbadnews?

Q3:HowdidIfeelwhenIwastoldthenews?4.

升华主题：关键要捉到前文的这个富含哲理的句子来升华主题从而做到与前文融合。(原文)IfIdidn’twin,Ididn’tcare.Ihadpouredawobblywriter’sbloodandsweatintosomethingthatmademyteacherproud.AlthoughIdidn’twin,Ididn’tcare.Ihadpouredawobblywriter’sbloodandsweatintosomethingthatmademyteacherproudandIwoulddefinitelykeeponwriting,becausewritinghasbecomepartofmylife.优质下水文1WhenIalmostforgotthecompetition,thenewscame.

Theresultsofthecontesthavebeenrevealed.Tomygreatdisappointment,mynamewasnotonthewinnerlist.ThemomentIgotthenews,Iwasrootedontheground,failingtoutteraword.Thinkingofallthetoilandeffortsaswellastherepeatedrewriting,especiallymyteacher’sencouragementandexpectation,Iwasoverwhelmedbythesadness,arippleofsadnesswellingupinsideme.Containingmygrief,Iforcedasmileandcongratulatedthewinners.Afewdayslater,agrandawardpresentationwasheldbyourschool.Immersedinenvy,IlookedatthewinnersproudlystandingonthestageacceptingthepresentsandmedalsfromthePrincipal.HowIwishedIwereoneofthem.Suddenly,thePrincipalsaid:“Congratulationsonthewinnersagain.Now,allofyou,mayIhaveyourattention,please.Ihavesomethingimportanttosay.Actually,hereisanotheressay.Butitisanonymous.

Willthewriterpleasecometotheteacher’soffice.Anonymous?

That’sme!What’swrongwithit?Withbutterfliesinmystomach,Iwasanxiouslywaitingfortheawardpresentationtocometoanend.Iwenttotheteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.

WhenIgotintotheteacher’soffice,thePrincipalwasexpectingme.Atthatmoment,mymindgoingblank,Ididn’tknowwhatwaswrongwithmyessay.Justthen,heapproachedmewithagentlesmile,andhandedanessaytome,asking:“

Isityouressay?”

Lookingatit,Inoddedmyheadwithcertainty.Seeingmyresponse,thePrincipalcouldhardlyconcealhisexcitementandgavemeabighug.“Congratulations,mydear.Youressaywonyouthefirstprize!”

Icouldn’tbelievemyears.Sheerastonishmentdeprivedmeofthepowerofspeech.IgatheredtomychestthegiftsandmedalthePrincipalpresentedmewithmyheartbeatinglikeafreedbird.IsincerelygavethePrincipalabowandleftformyteacher’sofficeimmediately.TheonlythingIwantedtodowastosharetheunexpectednewswithmydearteacher,withoutwhoseencouragement,Iwouldn’thavefoundmypotentialloveforwriting.Butformyteacher’spushing,Iwouldn’thavehadthemotivationtostrivetofinishtheessay.Thankstomyteacher’sexpectationsonme,Ihadthecourageandfaithinmyself,alwaysbearinginmyheartthat

IfIdidn’twin,Ididn’tcare.Ihadpouredawobblywriter’sbloodandsweatintosomethingthatmademyteacherproud.02文本分析文本体裁：记叙文（回忆类故事）主题语境：人与自我（自我成长类型）叙事角度：第一人称故事的主要人物：“我”和老师01写作思路分析1.文本分析：所选文章讲述“我”是一位来自巴西的学生，由于英语是其第二语言，一开始“我”不喜欢写作并觉得英语写作是一件困难又痛苦的事，但社会学老师认为“我”讲故事很有趣并鼓励去“我”参加作文比赛。“我”从拒绝到参与，从受挫到坚持，并在老师的帮助下，在反复修改的过程中享受写作之美，最终努力得到回报--“我”的作文获奖。文中的“我”不仅实现写作能力的提升，也在老师的引领下发现了自我潜能，实现自我成长，并对老师由衷的感谢。2.从语篇结构来分析，文章一共有7段，第一、二段是故事主要线索及背景介绍。第三、四、五段是问题的出现并采取行动，描述作者如何开始构思及不断反复修改最后提交作文的过程。续写的第六段是对问题的解决，给出提示句表示我都快忘了这个比赛时，收到了比赛结果的消息，该段是对这次比赛的的结果描述。第七段是主题升华部分，提示句信息是我在颁奖典礼后去老师的办公室，表达我的感激之情。从语篇布局上看，第六段应该写“我”的作文获奖，第七段写对老师的感激之情和“我”对这个经历的总结和自我成长。根据语篇的总体结构，在构思情节的时候不应该再添加其他细节，也不需要增加人物。在语篇衔接手段方面，两个续写首段都出现了时间状语来推进故事的发展，

Afewweekslater,when…,

aftertheawardpresentation，考生要学会关注这些语篇衔接词，帮助把握故事的推进。3.人物性格分析：“我”不喜欢英语写作，但努力完成老师的任务，遇到困难不退缩，有坚韧不拔的精神。社会学老师：善于发现学生的优点，积极鼓励学生，从两出laugh的描述可以看出老师是一位乐观积极，对学生循循善诱的教导。02续写情节构思

1.根据提示句“几个星期后，当我几乎忘记比赛的时候，传来了消息。”和第二段首句“我在颁奖后去了老师的办公室。”的内容可知，在构思续写第一段时，首先要围绕消息展开故事，且消息必定是获奖消息，这一段主要描写的人物是“我”，从高潮段是第五段，尤其最后一句：“我”收获了写作的快乐，是否获奖也不是最在乎的，是对续写第六段比赛结果是收获奖项做伏笔。可以写“我”收到消息时的感受应该是意外之喜，也可以描述是何种途径收到消息，这样的情节构思都是合理且与首句衔接连贯的。续写首段还应包含“我”参加颁奖典礼的情节，也可设计让作者分享写作的过程，发表获奖感言等的情节，并决定要找老师表达感激之情，这样能和最后一段的提示句到老师的办公室这个细节衔接起来。2.从第二段“颁奖后我去了老师的办公室。”可知，