读后续写高分突破之技巧解析

高分突破技巧解析1)understandtheplotthroughanalyzinganddiscussingstructureofthepassage2)summarizethemainstepsandmethodstowriteacontinuingstory3)developareasonableendingtoastorybyreferringtothecontentofthetextLearningaimsAfterlearningthislesson,studentswillbeableto:

Step1Inroduction读后续写的高考评分标准评分档次描

述第七档（22-25分）

优秀档①创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境融洽度高。②使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解。③自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰，前后呼应，意义连贯。Step2SkillsexplanationLookatthecompositionsandcomparethem.2315

高分突破技巧一卷面整洁无涂改，字迹誉写工整，清晰美观。231.倒装句.2.明喻：3.非谓语；with复合结构；独立主格4.多种从句5.动作描写，心理描写，语言描写本文中使用了哪些高级表达及丰富句型？1.一个很好的承接上下文并且表达高级的开头2.语言表达流畅准确，避免低级语法错误（特别是时态），注意连接词的正确使用，使上下文连贯；运用多种句式，词汇生动表达而非平铺直叙；运用修辞手法；根据文章需要，适当运用心理、动作、语言、环境等描写。

高分突破技巧二2318theme?_____________续写应尽可能传递正能量.要提炼有思想性、体现价值观和传递正能量的主题(句)（例如珍爱生命，学会合作，学会感恩等）

高分突破技巧三practical?13logical?13Anna?Structure?coversations?16worries(clues)?17relevant?14*所创设的情境违背真实生活/离奇，缺乏合理性。*对话过多，段落间分布不均衡。*情节没有得以展开，体现不出丰富新颖。*未照应线索词/人物，融洽度不高，衔接不合理。*文章理解不到位，续写情节与原文脱离。情节构建中的主要问题：1:Analyzethegiven

material：6Rs

(readforsetting/time，characters,conflicts,plot(clues)，emotionalchanges,andtheme)2:Determinetheendingandthreelinkingsentencesaccordingtothetwogivensentences.(倒叙构思法)3:

Inferthedevelopmentofplotaccordingtothreerulesandcompletetherestpart.Howshouldweconstructtheplot?6R解读、4句定框架和3大原则（六四三法）1.Action—Response原则：主人公的所言、所行、所感、所想会引起其它角色的一系列反应的。每段对话1-2句，不一定两个人都要说话，无声的动作也是一种response。2.Conflict—Solution原则：一般而言第二段会有问题的solution，但高考的读后续写文章可能出题不一样，因为有可能solution在所给文章中就已经有了。同时思考：能否在第一段出现一个问题，然后把它解决了或者没有解决。一方面是增加看点，另一方面也是给第二段铺垫。3.Negative—Positive原则：写作中一定要体现情感的变化，无论前面是怎样的变化，最终都是积极的。Step3Sampleanalysis

Alittleboysellingmagazinesforschoolwalkeduptoahousethatpeoplerarelyvisited.Thehousewasveryoldandshabbyandtheownerhardlyevercameout.Whenhedidcomeout,hewouldnotsayhellotohisneighborsorpassers-bybutsimplyjustglareatthem.Theboyknockedonthedoorandwaited,sweatingfromfearoftheoldman.Theboy’sparentstoldhimtostayawayfromthehouse,andalotoftheotherneighborhoodchildrenweretoldthesamethingfromtheirparents.Ashewasreadytowalkaway,thedoorslowlyopened.Whatdoyouwant?"theoldmansaidimpatiently.Thelittleboywasveryafraidbuthehadaquota(份额)tomeetforschoolwithsellingthemagazines.Sohegotupthecourageandsaid,"Uhsir,Iamsellingthesemagazinesanduh,Iwaswonderingifyouwouldliketobuyonefromme.”

Theoldmanjuststaredattheboywithoutaword.Theboycouldseeinsidetheoldman’shouseandsawthathehaddogfigurines(小雕像)onthefireplacemantle.“Doyoucollectdogs?”thelittleboyasked.“Yes,Ihavemanycollectionsinmyhouse.TheyaremyfamilyhereandtheyareallIhave."Theboythenfeltsorryfortheman,asitseemedthathewasaverylonelysoul.“Well,Idohaveamagazinehereforcollectors.Itisperfectforyou.Ialsohaveoneaboutdogssinceyoulikedogssomuch."Theoldmanwasreadytoclosethedoorandsaid,"No,boy.Idon’tneedanymagazinesofanykind,nowgoodbye.”Thelittleboywassadthathewasnotgoingtomakehisquotawiththesale.Hewasalsosadfortheoldmanbeingsoaloneinthehousethatheowned.Theboywenthomeandthenhadanidea.Hehadalittledogfigurinethathegotsomeyearsagofromanaunt.Thefigurinedidnotmeannearlyasmuchtohimsincehehadareallivedogandalargefamily.注意1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Thelittleboyheadedbackdowntotheoldman'shouse.Fromthatdayonsomethingchangedinsidetheoldman.Task1:Analyzethegivenmaterial(6Rs)Setting(underwhatcircumstancesthestorytakesplace)

Characters

Plot

（conflict/clue)EmotionalchangesTheme(s)Para1Alittleboysellingmagazineforschoolwalkeduptoalonelyoldman'shouse.alittleboy,anoldman,neighboursandtheirchildrenParas2-5Thelittleboytriedhisbestto_____________totheoldmanbutwas______mercilesslybytheoldman.Paras1-3nervous/afraid-Paras4-5_____Para6sad-____________sellthemagazinerefusedPara6Thelittleboy_____________.hadagoodideaLovebetweenneighbours/kindness/help...sorryhappy/hopeful(conflict)寻找线索，串联全文(Clues:thedogfigurine,magzineandchange)Task2:Askquestionstoconstructtheplotaccordingtothegivensentences.Para.1Thelittleboyheadedbackdowntotheoldman'shouse.Para.2Fromthatdayonsomethingchangedinsidetheoldman.5.

Whatdidhedowiththedogfigurine?4.Whatwasthechangeinsidetheoldman?3.Whatwasthelittleboy'sfeelings?2.Whatwastheoldman'sresponsetothefigurinethatday?6.Whatweretheboyandtheneighbour'sresponsestotheoldman'schange?7.Howdidtheoldmanfeel?1.Whatwastheending/theme?在不影响主要情节的前提下，可适当合理地增加部分次要情节*可依据需要增加适当细节描写（环境，心理，外貌等）23原文与后续的融洽度(conflict/clue)；后续两段间的融洽度；段落开头语与后续语的融洽度。逻辑权重高于内容、语言和情感；前后逻辑要一致，内容不偏离主旨；逻辑靠内容支撑，内容靠语言表达；技巧四:构建融洽度高，衔接合理的情节

五个一致：1.要与原文的主题或作者的本来意图保持一致。2.要与原文的体裁、结构、写作手法保持一致。3.要与原文在人称，主体时态上保持一致。4.要与人物的思想行为、性格特点保持一致。5.要与原文的语言特点和叙事风格保持一致。Keypoints:与原文的融合度Step4Consolidation

(Groupwork)2016年10月浙江高考读后续写真题To

understandisonething,toexpress

isanother.Toappreciateisonething,to

createisanother.OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp,”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.注意:1.所续写短文的字数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:

Butnohelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenIanewokeup.Time(G1)character(G2)plot(G3)conflict(G4)clue(G5)emotionalchanges(G6)theme(G7)Plotofpara1(G8)Plotofpara2(G9)Task1:Analyze(分析)thereadingmaterialTime(G1)character(G2)plot(G3)conflict(G4)clue(G5)JaneandTom1.oneweekendinJuly,ontheway→2.bythetimetheyreachedthelake→3.asnightwasbeginningtofall→4.atthebreakoftheday→5.asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream→6.afewminuteslaterParas2-4AfteraquarrelwithTom,JanewalkedalonetotheforestandgotlostParas5-6Walkingalongthestream,Janeheardthehelicopterandtriedusingheryellowblousetoberescued.quarrel,getlostthehelicopter,yellowbrouseemotionalchanges(G6)theme(G7)Lovebetweenhusbandandwife;forgiveness,etcangry→afraid→regretful→happy/hopeful→regretfulTask2:AskquestionstoconstructtheplotaccordingtothegivensentencesPara.1Butnohelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.(G8)

Para.2ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.(G9)5.WhatdidJanedo?3.HowdidJanefeelatt