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武汉新航道学校课程安排一、托福写作简介和评分标准二、写作结构和构思三、首段写作四、主体段写作五、结尾+语言提升1六、语言提升2七、综合写作（1）八、综合写作（2）九、作文修改+复习备考1.构思原则2.构思方法构思讲解思路问题一：观点重叠Eg.Distance-learning&traditionalschoolposition:distance-learningisbetterFirst,technologycanmakemystudymoreefficient.Second,studyingathomeesmoreefficientthanthatintraditionalschool.

Eg.Somepeoplebelievethataschoolshouldspendmoneyonimprovingcafeteriafoods.Otherpeoplebelievethataschoolshouldspendmoneyonsocialactivitiesforstudentsafterschool.Whatisyouropinionandwhy.NegativeExample:Thesis:Schoolshouldspendmoremoneyonthepromotionofthequalityandtasteofcafeteriafoods.Branchthesis1:Improvedfoodsarebeneficialforstudents’healthandsafety.Branchthesis2:Foodsarebasicneedsforstudents’livelihood.Branchthesis3:Allayparents’worriesaboutchildren’sphysicalgrowth.问题一：观点重叠

Somepeoplebelievethataschoolshouldspendmoneyonimprovingcafeteriafoods.Otherpeoplebelievethataschoolshouldspendmoneyonsocialactivitiesforstudentsafterschool.Whatisyouropinionandwhy.PositiveExample:Thesis:Schoolshouldspendmoremoneyonthepromotionofthequalityandtasteofcafeteriafoods.Branchthesis1:Highqualityanddiversifiedcafeteriafoodscontributetophysicalwellbeing.（健康安全）Branchthesis2:Tastyfoodsdevelopstudents’pleasantmoodforstudying.（学习）Branchthesis3:Cafeteriawithimprovedfoodqualityprovidesidealplacesforstudentstogathertogetherorhavediscussions.（交流）问题一：观点重叠问题二：包含两层意思070203/081026Doyouagreeordisagreethatpeoplecanlearnmorefromwatchingtelevisionthantheycanbyreadingbooks.Position:Iagree.Firstly,televisionpresentsavividworldinfrontofusanditalsoplaysaneducationalroleinourdailylife.Imaginethatafriendofyoursneedshelpinclass,andyouareoneofthebeststudentsinthatclass.Doyouthinkitisbetterthatyouhelpyourfriendorthathefindsatutor?(2011.8.5NA)Negativeexample:Thesis:Afriendisalwaysbetterthanatutor.Branchthesis1:Workingwithfriendscantakesomepressureoffofthelearningprocessandismorepractical.Branchthesis2:Friendsaremorefamiliarwithoneanotherandcanmeetmoreflexibly.问题二：包含两层意思Imaginethatafriendofyoursneedshelpinclass,andyouareoneofthebeststudentsinthatclass.Doyouthinkitisbetterthatyouhelpyourfriendorthathefindsatutor?(2011.8.5NA)Positiveexample:Thesis:Afriendisalwaysbetterthanatutor.Branchthesis1:Workingwithfriendscantakesomepressureoffofthelearningprocess.Branchthesis2:Friendsaremorefamiliarwithoneanotherandcanthereforereadeachother’sstrengthsandweaknesses.Branchthesis3:Thefinalreasontofindassistancefromafriendinvolvespracticality.问题二：包含两层意思Eg:Yourfriendisaskingyouforadviceonwhethertobuyacarornot.Thesis:Thefriendshouldbuyhimselfaprivatecar.A:Havingacarisgoodforyourfamilies.B:Havingacarcanenhancetherelationshipinafamily.C:Havingacarcanenhancetherelationshipbetweenyouandyourparents,childrenandwife.问题三：不够简洁和直接157.Distance-learning&traditionalschoolFirstofall,ifIstudyathomeusingmoderntechnologiessuchtheInternet,thenIcangainawealthofinformationcoveringawiderangeofareassuchaspolitics,economics,science,andentertainment.Firstofall,studyingathomeallowsmetogetaccesstoahugeamountofinformation.好分论点的特点Eg:Somefamousathletesandentertainersearnmillionsofdollarseveryyear.Doyouthinkthesepeopledeservesuchhighsalaries?

First,famousathletesandentertainersmakepainstakingeffortstoachievefame.Second,sportsandentertainingstarsprovideuswithgoodentertainment.Third,athletesandentertainerswinhonorsfortheircountries.

构思四项基本原则简明性单一性概括性独立性构思12341.构思原则2.构思方法构思讲解思路构思过程中的问题Noidea!构思方法（分论点思维方法）

3.参与对象分析法3

4.不同情况分类法4

2.绝对观点反对法21.冰淇淋法1一.冰淇淋法万能理由之isckremindependenceandaltruismsafetyandtechnologycooperationandcompetitioncommunicationandtrustcultureandvaluesconvenienceandtimeknowledgeandemotionrightsandperseveranceeconomyandhealthmoneyandinterestcooperation(需要与被领导者合作)communicationandtrust(交流消除误会，产生信任)time(沟通耗时间)emotion(参与流于形式，被领导者其实完全无权)interest(增强被领导者执行任务的动机)一.冰淇淋法——应用Eg:Doyouagreeordisagree?Aneffectiveleadershouldtrytomakeothersfeelthatthayarepartofthedecisionmakingprocess.（2013.01.12）Thesisstatement:Althoughinvolvingothersinthedecisionmakingprocessmayhavedisadvantagesleadersarewelladvisedtodoso,forpositiveesfaroutweighthedisadvantage.Para2:Objectively,therearesomedisadvantagestoaskingotherstoparticipateinthedecisionmakingprocess.Theprocessistime-consumingandmakesparticipantsfeelfrustratediftheirinputisnotincorporatedinthefinaldecision.Para3:Ontheotherhand,therearemorebenefitstoinvolvingothersinthedecisionmakingprocess.Theimplementationofmanydecisionsrequirescooperationofparticipants.Para4:Inaddition,involvingothersinthedecisionmakingprocessenhancesunderstandingofissues,buildstrustandpromotesmotivations.一.冰淇淋法——应用冰淇淋法-PracticeShouldaworkteamorteamleaderlistentotheadviceoftheteammember?.具体化万能理由适用于双方时，注意自圆其说一.冰淇淋法——总结构思方法（分论点思维方法）

3.参与对象分析法3

4.不同情况分类法4

2.绝对观点反对法21.冰淇淋法1二.绝对观点反对法Eg:Doyouagreeordisagree?Thebestwayforparentstoteachchildrenaboutreponsibilityistohavethemcareforananimal.立场绝对的题目，列举反驳理由,如包含never，only，best,alwaysetc.TS:Althoughcaringforananimalhelpschildrennutureasenseofresponsibility,otherwaysarejustaseffective.Para2:Itistruethatassigningchildrenchoreslikecaringforananimalhelpstheminstillasenseofresponsibility.Para3:However,otherwaysofcultivatingresponsibilityarejustaseffective.Forexample,readingstoriesthatteachresponsibilityhelpschildrendevelopthisquality.Para4:Settingagoodexampleforchildrenisanotherefficaciouswaytoimpartasenseofresponsibility.二.绝对观点反对法——应用绝对观点反对法-PracticeThebestwaytoincreasestudents'interestinasubjectistoteachthemthesignificanceofthesubjectoutsideofschool.Doyouagreeordisagree?

.提干包含绝对词“1+2”结构二.绝对观点反对法——总结构思方法（分论点思维方法）

3.参与对象分析法3

4.不同情况分类法4

2.绝对观点反对法21.冰淇淋法1参与者分析我打你来NC上课名人做慈善Who/whatareinvolvedinthediscussion?Howaretheyinfluenced？参与对象分析：Example2(2011.1119NA)

Somejobscanpayhighsalariesemployeestoleavetheirfamilyandfriends.Somejobspayalowersalarybutallowemployeestostaywiththeirfamilyandfriends.作者观点：但个人喜欢留在家人身边从家人角度：我不在身边，家人痛苦从自己角度：远离家人，我也痛苦从工作角度：高薪意味着高压力绝对观点反对法-PracticeSomepeoplethinkuniversityprofessorsshouldspendmoretimedoingresearchwhileothersthinktheyshouldspendmoretimeeducatingstudents.Whatisyourview?.Childrenshouldonly

studyorplayanddon'thavetodohouseholdchores.

参与者受益/受害三.参与对象分析法——总结构思方法（分论点思维方法）

3.参与对象分析法3

4.不同情况分类法

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2.绝对观点反对法21.冰淇淋法1分情况：不同人群和领域→结论不同&相同

Eg1:Whenpeoplesucceed,itisbecauseofhardwork.Luckhasnothingtodowithsuccess."Doyouagreeordisagreewiththequotationabove?First,luckhashelpedagreatnumberofpeopleinventanddiscoverthings.（scientists）Also,luckhelpspeopleefamous.(writer)Finally,luckhashelpedmanypeoplesecurejobs.(job-h