读后续写：人猫和谐相处 讲义-高三英语写作专项

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。“Idon'twanttoseethatcatinouryardagain,"myhusbandsaidashedrovethebeautifulcatbackintotheneighbor'syard."Catsaren'tlikedogs,honey.Theyareveryindependentandtendtomovearoundwherevertheyplease,especiallyiftheyaremousing,Isaid.Well,textourneighborandletherknowIdon'tappreciatehercatinouryard,"heinsisted.Sighing,Isentoffaquicktexttooursweetneighbor,Cheryl,informingherofmyhusband'sdislikeofcats.I'lldomybest,"sherepliedsometimelater,“butit'skindofhardcontrollingwhereshegoeswhenIletheroutside."Thefollowingmorning,Johnstoodatthepicturewindowinourbedroom.He’dinstalleditsothatIcouldwatchthebirdsvisitingourfeeders.“Youaren'tgoingtobelievethis,"hesaid."Comelook!"Slowly,Iapproachedthewindow,prayingCheryl'scatwasn'tinouryard.

u0h,myGod!”Icried.Seatedsidebyside,rightinthecenterofouryard,weretwoenormousgroundhogs（土拨鼠）.We'dobservedgroundhogsbefore,especiallysinceourbackyardbacks,uptoawoodedarea,butneverhadtheybeenasbraveasthesetwo.Johnraisedthewindow,andthetworacedintothewoods.Thatevening,Ihappenedtoglanceoutthepicturewindow.Thensomethingcaughtmyeyeintheflowerbedbeyond."John,comequick!”Hurriedly,heenteredthebedroomjustintimetoseeoneofthegroundhogschewingontheflowerswe'dplantedaroundthewaterfountain."Why,it'seatingeverysingleblossom!"Again,Johnliftedthewindow,andthegroundhogfledintothewoods."Hmmm,Ibetterlookupgroundhogsonthecomputerandseejusthowdestructivetheycanbe."Beforehelefttheroom,however,hesawsomethingagain.Agroundhogwaschewingourvegetablesinthecenterofthegarden.Acrosstheyard,we'dplantedavegetablegarden.We'dtakengreatpainstoenclosetherowsandrowsofplantsinchickenwire.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右：2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1:

"Something'sgottobedone!”Johnshouted.Para2:

Icouldn'thelpsmilingtomyselfasIwenttosearchformycellphone.

2021年临沂市一模读后续写试题分析

一、话题分析本文以邻居家的猫为线索展开，讲述了作者的丈夫约翰不喜欢邻居家的猫到自己家院子里，作者只好发短信给邻居，要求邻居控制家里的猫，结果没过多久，作者家院子里经常出现胆大的土拨鼠，啃食蔬菜，破坏花木。作者一家又想起邻居家那只猫，把猫请来了，土拨鼠吓跑了。二、立意导向准确本文主题语境是“人与自然---与动物和谐相处”，主要讲述了主人公与邻居的猫之间的“爱恨情仇”———一开始讨厌猫，而后土拨鼠的出现引出猫咪的重要性，从而喜欢上猫咪的变化过程。(一)感情线：1.已知文本第一段讨厌猫咪时的“drovethebeautifulcatback”,“don’tappreciate”,“insist”等用词，读者可以明显感觉到John对猫咪的不喜欢。2.

已知文第二、三段中发现土拨鼠时“Icried”，“caughtmyeyes”，“hurriedly”，“everysingleblossom”，“shouted”等词汇，充分表达出见到花园里有很多的土拨鼠在搞破坏时候的崩溃心情。所给第二段首句中“smiling”一词可以看出喜悦的心情。(二)剧情线：情感升华：可侧重于动物在人类生产生活中扮演着重要角色为主。三、逻辑合理，构思恰当，表达有序Paragraph1:面对土拨鼠的泛滥，找到解决办法。逻辑参考：（1）“somethinghadtobedone.”Johnshouted.可推断出，John

在本段中要找出解决土拨鼠问题的办法。（2）Icouldn’thelpsmilingasIwenttosearchmycellphone.可推断出，第一段已经找到了解决办法，并且这个办法让我很开心（smiling），因此，联系上文可以合理猜想出，这个方法与邻居的猫咪有关。再结合鼠和猫的天敌关系，大胆猜测这个方法可以是利用猫咪把老鼠赶走。

（3）I’dbetterlookupgroundhogsonthecomputer.

可推断出，是从网络上找到解决土拨鼠之患的方法。

具体细节可通过以下几方面进行展开：（1）赶走土拨鼠的具体办法是什么(例如鼠害怕猫咪)（2）土拨鼠泛滥的原因可能是什么（3）我和John针对此事的态度是什么(可通过简单对话表达）（4）结果是同意让邻居的猫“回归”(以上细节不一定面面俱到，抓住几点凸出刻画即可。)Paragraph2：猫咪回归，花园重归平静。逻辑参考：（1）Icouldn’thelpsmilingasIwenttosearchmycellphone.

我要给邻居打电话，把猫咪放出来。(2）猫咪放出来以后，花园里的情况。（具体细节描写）(3）约翰对猫咪的态度转变。(4）情感升华。具体细节可通过以下几方面进行展开：（1）我打电话给邻居，邻居的反应。（2）猫咪回归花园后，土拨鼠被赶走。（可以描写猫咪的神态，土拨鼠的状态，动作，与前文中土拨鼠的“猖狂”形成对比）（3）土拨鼠之灾解决后，主人公心情的变化以及花园环境恢复原状（可通过环境的具体细节描写侧面烘托心情的愉悦）（4）对动物的看法发生改变，认识到动物的重要性。以上细节不需要全部体现，围绕主线展开即可。四、用词生动恰当，语句衔接自然清晰，句法丰富人物形象神情描述；心理活动描写；语言描写，环境描写等。例如：Itsaysherethatthegroundhogsdonotlikecats.Maybethecatcouldscarethemaway.Iwonderifthatisthereasonwhythegroundhogshavegottensobrave.Wespottedthesweetyellowcatwonderingaroundtheborderofour

woodsinsearchofmice.Thegroundhogswerenowheretofind.Icouldn'thelpsighingcontentedly.

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“Something’sgottobedone!”Johnshouted.Hewenttostartthecomputerintheotherroom.“Itsaysherethatgroundhogsdonotlikecats...infact,theyhatethesmellofsoiledkittylitter.”Ithoughtabouttheabsenceofourneighbor’scatlately.“Youknow,Ihaven’tseenCheryl’scatmousinginouryardforsometime.Iwonderifthat’sthereasonthesegroundhogshavegottensobrave.”Johnglancedinmydirection.“Youmighthavesomethingthere.Whydon’tyoutextCherylandletherknowthecatbanhasbeenremoved.”Paragraph2:

Icouldn’thelpsmilingtomyselfasIwenttosearchformycellphone.Thatevening,wespottedthesweetyellowcatmovingaroundtheborderofourwoodsinsearchofmice.Thegroundhogswerenowhereins