读后续写：朋友间的误会 讲义-高三英语写作专项

高考读后续写之朋友间的误会第二节读后续写(满分25分“阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事Emilysighedformanytimes.Nomatterhowhardshetried,shecouldn'tshakeoffherdisappointment.Sheandherbestfriend,Zatanna,hadbeenplanningashoppingdayforweeks.Theyhadbeensobusyfortheirfinalexamsthattheybarelyhadtimetotexteachother.Emilylookedatheremptydeskandwasremindedofhowshehadexhaustedherselftothebreakingpointtogetaheadinherclass,SothatshecouldspendthewholedaywithZatanna.Itseemedasiftheirtimetogetherwasn’tasimportanttoZatannaconsideringthefactthatshehadcalledherafewminutesagototellherthatshewouldn'tbeabletokeepherpromise.Obviously,herotherfriendsdraggedherawayforaweekend.EmilytriedtotakeadeepbreatheventhoughtherewasaninvisibleheavyweightaroundherheartShehatedtoactlikesomeonewhowaseagerforattention,soshejustlaughedofftheirplansinfrontofZatannaandmadeahalf-heartedattempttoreschedulethen,Shesatdownheavilyinherchairandopenedherbooks.Mightaswellgetsomestudyingdone,shethought.Forthenextcoupleofdays,shedidn'tgetanytextsorcallsfromZatanna.Hercallswentstraighttovoicemailandhertextswereunread.Shestartedtogetworried.Zatannaneverignoredhercalls.Evenifshewasbusy,shestillrespondedthoughabithastily(草率地)Emilydidn'tthinkmuchofthisandreasonedthatshemusthavebeenbusywithhernewfriends.AfterafewmoredaysofnocontactwithZatanna,shefeltanxiousandthoughtoftheworst-casescenario7最环的情况)Sheshookherheadasifshecouldphysicallyletthosedarkthoughtsgo.“I'llvisitherprofessor,”shethoughtwithadeterminedshakeofherhead.注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语Paragraph1:SheknewfromaprofessorthatZatannaworkedparttimeinthecafeontheothersideofcampus.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Zatannalookedup,andhereyeswidened_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________一。原文词汇和句型解读：sigh2.shakeoffherdisappointment3.barely4.text5.exhaustherselftothebreakingpoint6.keepherpromise7.dragherselfaway8.takeadeepbreath9.lnvisible10.laughofftheirplans11.makeahalf-heartedattempttoreschedule12.mightaswell13.respond14.didn'tthinkmuchof15.reasonthat16.contact1.Emilysighedformanytimes.Nomatterhowhardshetried,shecouldn'tshakeoffherdisappointment.2.Emilytriedtotakeadeepbreatheventhoughtherewasaninvisibleheavyweightaroundherheart.3.Shesatdownheavilyinherchairandopenedherbooks4.Sheshookherheadasifshecouldphysicallyletthosedarkthoughtsgo.5.Shethoughtwithadeterminedshakeofherhead.二。关键词和所给的段落首句解读：1.Emily2.disappointment3.Zatanna4.shopping5.Busy6.laughoff7.text8.worried9.ignore10.contactPara1:SheknewfromaprofessorthatZatannaworkedparttimeinthecafeontheothersideofcampusPara2:Zatannalookedup,andhereyeswidened三。学生写作中存在的错误：1.para1和para2之间缺少接或者衔接不自然Finally,shewenttothecafe,withgreatreluctance.Zatannalookedup,andhereyeswidened2.para1和para2之间存在逻辑上的矛盾paral:ZatannawassurprisedwhenshesawtheEmily.para2:Zatannalookedup,andhereyeswidened.3.单纯的语言的重负堆积，不注重逻辑Surprisedandshocked,shedidn'tknowhowEmilyknewthisStunned,shestoodupandgaveEmilyanawkwardhug4.随意添加人物(乘坐多趟车、不在那里工作)5.语言表达罗嗦6.时态乱用四。学生写作中的美文。1.ThemomentZatannasawEmily,herheartseemedtomissabeatandhereyeswerefilledwithconcerns.2.Emilysaidthathowworriedshewasaboutherduringthesedaysandthatshewaswillingtoaccompanyhertoovercomedifficultytogether.3.It'sapitythatZatannashouldworkhardtotakeontheburdenofthefamily.4.Shehadnochoicebuttotakeapart-timejob.5.Shewassobusythatshecouldn'thavearest,letalonewentshoppingwithEmily6.AbigshamefilledwithEmily'smind,whichevenmadeherroottothespot.7.ShemadeherwaythroughthecrowdtowardZatanna.8.WhenshecaughtsightofZatanna,hermouthdroppedopeninginsurprise.9.ItwasZatannawholookedexhaustedandsweaty.10.Theybothstoodtherestaringateachother,motionless.11.EmilysmiledgentlyandgatheredZatannaintoherarms.12.ShelearnedfromtheprofessorthatZatanna'swasill,soshespenttimeworkingforthesakeofearningmoney.13.Shewasinadilemma,wonderingwhattodonext.14.Surprisedandshocked,shedidn'tknowhowEmilyknewit.15.EmilymadeadashforthecafewhereZatannaworked16.Zatannawasverydepressed,buryingherfaceinherhand.17.Aconfusingquestioncrowdedintohermind.neededalarge18Mymothersufferedfromanillnessandamount/sumofmoney.19.Onlyafterthisexperience,didtheyrealizetheimportanceofcommunicationbetweenfriends.20.Zatannawantedtoexplainwhathadhappenedtoherrecentlybutwordsfailedtoexpressherfeelings21.Emilyaskedherselfthoughtfully,withafrownstandingonher.五。范文赏析Onepossibleversion:SheknewfromaprofessorthatZatannaworkedparttimeinthecafeontheothersideofcampus.Emilyfeltrelieved.Atleast,sheknewthatZatannadidn'tmakenew!thankedtheprofessor,sherushedtothecafeassoonasshecould,whereshesawZatannainauniformservin