2021年高考英语全国卷1的读后续写指导：给妈妈做早饭(附文题详解及范文展示)

2021年高考英语全国卷1的读后续写指导：给妈妈做早饭总评：全国I卷的读后续写和去年山东卷的卖爆米花续写基本一样，都是关于帮助和爱，涉及到大人和孩子之间。考生不可能离题了，况且标题都给了，情节线特别明显。考完后，学生也反映，有话可写，能用上平时的相关语料。有学生说，这篇和以前练习的某某篇很相似，写起来更有信心。可见，平时练习如果练到位了，确实好很多。但话又说回来，读后续写涉及到的话题其实相当有局限的，如同本篇，平时只要稍微练习，都有一半的概率碰到类似话题。无论怎么说，功夫还在平时。同时，我深切感受到：续写题目的选择特别重要，高考不大偏向于选择那种续写情节曲折的，而是情节非常简单但同时细节可以丰富的。所以，我觉得我一向提倡的极简原则是非常符合高考要求和趋势的。第二节（满分25分）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jemafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jefturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJeftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右：2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答分析：—篇读后续写必然经过以下的步骤：第一步：找线索(Readforclues)，定主题人物：twins:Jeff,Jenna;fatherandmother想法：thesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay,broughtherbreakfastinbed.(续写对于想法的线索的照应：实现了想法)情感：Thetwins:-->excitement,pleasedandproud-->Jennapanicked.-->Jeffstayedcalm-->ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.本文的主题就是标题了：AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISE。如果还要进一步升华，那就是体现了孩子们对妈妈的爱。实际上这个升华也可以不用，因为孩子做饭给妈妈吃，本身就体现了love，这是不言自明的。第二步：推理情节(readforplots)根据极简原则，我们直接根据提示句推测出一个场景即可，越直接越能接近作者的写作目的。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.场景一：根据fatherappeared推测下一个场景：father的反应(说什么？做什么)场景二：根据carriedthebreakfast推测上一个场景：breakfast已经做好这两个场景是不难推导出来的，那么father做了什么，必然是帮助他们做饭。所以接下来重点就是：father到底怎么做？用极简就是：父亲帮我们收拾残局并且教我们做早那么要不要写具体的做饭过程？不需要，说实话，你不会做这种饭啊，而且还涉及到很多做饭做菜的词汇，更麻烦了。这个具体教学过程完全可以简化为，他们听了父亲的指导后，成功了读后续写中如何把繁琐的动作简化是一个很重要的技能。Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.场景三：根据woke..up推测下一个场景：妈妈的反应场景四：thetwins的反应主题结束实际上去年山东卷卖爆米花和今年都一样的，第一段就把问题解决了，第二段只是写各自的感受和动作，最后主题结束。指导：Athetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.“Don'tpanic!”hehandedeachoneawettowel,helpingthemcleanthemessquickly.Father说一说，动一动：安慰孩子，帮他们Afterthat,Jeffstammeredouttheirplan,heraceflushing.Jeff的反应：说一说，感情描写However,Fatherlaughed,“Soundsgreat!Icanteachyoutocook.”Father的回答Atthis,JennaandJeffalmostjumpedtotheirfeet,joyineyes.Jenna和Jeff的反应Underhiscarefulguidance,itdidn'ttakelongbf>Feenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.串联孩子和父亲的场景：学会了Everythingsettled,Fatherleftthekitchen,promisingtokeeptheirsecret.衔接句Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Meetingtheirsmilingeyes,Motherfeltconfuseduntiltheypresentedthebreakfastandsaid“HappyMother'sDay”.衔接句：妈妈的反应Mothergavethematighthug,“Unbelievable!Youcancook!It'sthebiggestsurpriseIhavereceived.”Herfacelitupwithhappiness.妈妈说一说“Theyhaveknownhowtotakecareofothers.”Fathersaidinresponsetoherexcitement,winkingatJennaandJef.-VsAA、乂、X4爸爸说一说Theycouldn'thelpgiggling.Itwasasecretonlysharedbetweenthem.主题结尾：孩子笑一笑完整的：Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.“Don'tpanic!”hehandedeachoneawettowel,helpingthemcleanthemessquickly.Afterthat,Jeffstammeredouttheirplan,hisfaceflushing.However,Fatherlaughed,“Soundsgreat!Icanteachyoutocook.”Atthis,JennaandJefalmostjumpedtotheirfeet,joyineyes.Underhiscarefulguidanee,itdidn'ttakelongbeforetheFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.Everythingsettled,Fatherleftthekitchen,promisingtokeeptheirsecret.Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Meetingtheirsmilingeyes,Motherfeltconfuseduntiltheypresentedthebreakfastandsaid“HappyMother'sDay”.Mothergavethematighthug,“Unbelievable!Youcancook!It'sthebiggestsurpriseIhavereceived.”Herfacelitupwithhappiness.“Theyhaveknownhowtotakecareofothers.”Fathersaidinresponsetoherexcitement,winkingatJennaandJef.Theycouldn'thelpgiggling.Itwasasecretonlysharedbetweenthem.(150words)提示：本文基本和原文作者一样，，请注意时间过渡和人物互动的写法。参考2021高考英语读后续写出处及原文：/other/mothers-day-celebration-with-twin-child-an-open-speech.htmlMother'sDayCelebrationwithTwinChildThetwinsrubbedtheirhandswithgleeastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaydawnedatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepaircreptdownthestairstothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinminutes.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedthepotcoverstartingtomove.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegas.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftowipeupthestickystuffsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveayelpofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandunderthetap.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindismay,theirfatherappearedinthedoorway.Onelookandheknewwhattheywereupto.Seeingtheircrestfallenfaces,hetoldthemtocl