2022年6月高考英语浙江卷读后续写试题解析及范文赏析（身残志坚的男孩）

读后续写真题2022年6月新高考卷:身残志坚的男孩1试题再现2试题分析3写作思路4范文赏析目录CONTENTS2022试题再现历年高考英语读后续写真题分析01真题再现第二节(满分25分)

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Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路线)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.

Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!

Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊恼).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.

Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.

Para.1Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.

Para.2IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.2022试题分析历年高考英语读后续写真题分析02SettingTime----thedayofthebigcross-countryrunPlace----theracespot(aplacewiththick...)Characters:I----aspecialeducationteacherofDavid’sschoolDavid----aten-year-oldboywithabraindisease;unabletowalkorrunlikeotherkids;rockfromsidetosidewhilewalking读故事Plot&EmotionsThoughunabletowalkorrunlikeotherkids,Davidwastreatedequallyasaregularkidandusuallylivedahappylifeintheschool.Hedecidedtotakepartinthecross-countryrunandpracticedveryhard,nevermissingasinglepractice,thoughhewasalwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheothers.Hewasaskedtodecidebyhimselfwhethertorunornotontherundaybecausethecoachwasafraidhewaslaughedatbythekidsfromotherschools.

Hewasstandingbyhimselfoffthesidebyafencebuthisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsent.HappyDeterminedHesitantDepressed/Lostanddown读故事Plot&EmotionsAsaspecialeducationteacher,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.IfoundDavidstandingalonebyafence,notwarmingupandwalkingtheroutelikeotherrunnersbeforetherace.Iaskedhiscoachandlearnedthereason.

AftermakingsureDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme.AdmiredSurprisedFrustratedDetemined读故事原文中哪些句子可用作原文线索？特定的人物在特定的时间和地点做出特定的事情，说特定的话语，有特定的情感，这些特定的因素是有内在联系的，即有它特定的逻辑关系。所以在续故事的细节时，细节必须合乎原文中的时间地点等背景信息所设定的逻辑；也要合乎主要人物的身份逻辑；这也是读后续写内容上的协同发展。此文中围绕David是否参加这次越野赛的关键是：他特殊的走路和跑步的姿势可能会引起不熟悉他的人的嘲笑，会伤害到他，所以教练让他自己决定。而他平时的惯常做法就是这里的伏笔，可作为原文线索在续写中复现。“我”作为学校的一个特殊教育老师，又对他的困境和平常的表现很熟悉，还对他的身残志坚倍感骄傲，所以在比赛中前夕，我才会很关注他，并能成功鼓励他勇敢面对挑战，超越自我。2022写作思路历年高考英语读后续写真题分析03两种构思方法“四到一行”“线索呼应”看听想说做找出线索，前后呼应“两法六句”第一步依据首句，构思框架两段首句定一框，二框二首正能量。(1)读懂两段首句第一段首句后的衔接句、第一段尾句、第二段首句后的衔接句。即第二段的尾句——能体现故事圆满结局的句子或故事给我们启示的句子。(2)写好三个衔接句(3)写好一个升华句动作描写增加细节所见所闻、所说所思所做环境描写人物描写语言描写心理活动描写第二步增加细节，展开续写续故事ThemeConflicts1.最终David参加比赛了吗？是什么让他改变了主意？2.比赛过程中，其他学校的孩子嘲笑David了吗？为什么有或没有嘲笑他？读后续写一般都用正能量结尾。所以其他学校的孩子们应该没有嘲笑David，反而会很敬佩他，会为他的身残志坚和不畏困难坚持到最后的精神而鼓掌。-----所以根据事情的发展顺序和所给的首句，Conflict1就是第一段要解决的内容，第二段就解决Conflict2.续故事Clues----首句线索Para1:Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Para2:IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Why?Whatwashedoingthen?Howwashefeelingthen?WhatdidIdecidetodo?WhatandhowdidIsaytohimthen,makinghimdeterminedtorun?----ImanagedtopersuadeDavidtojoinintherace.----ThoughDavidfinishedtherunlongaftertheotherchildren,hewasadmiredandrespectedbyotherkids.Howdidheperformintherace?WhatdidIfeelwhenseeinghimperformthatway?Whatwastheotherkids’responsetohisperformance?续故事Clues----原文线索1.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.2.Aftermakingsure...,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.3.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.4.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.5....,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDAvidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.比赛结束时，受到在场师生的鼓励和钦佩甚至尊敬，David很可能有这个表情。

可以用来描述David赛跑时的样子----动作描述

两个always的部分可以用来描述David在比赛时的结果：他不可能跑赢别人，但仍坚持跑完全程。这可能是有些同学容易忽视的地方。此处是我能够成功鼓励David参加越野赛跑的基础。所以续写第一段时可以参照此句。这是David最令人敬佩的品质，也应该是“我”说服他参赛的关键点。2022范文赏析历年高考英语读后续写真题分析04Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.Seeinghisfacefilledwithanxiety,Ifeltsad,decidingtotalksomethingwithhim.TurningtoDavid,Ismiled,“David,Look,whatawonderfulevent!”“Yeah!”Davidsmiledweakly,bowinghishead.Pattingonhisshoulder,Isaidinasoftvoice,“Iheardyouhadworkedsohardforthisevent.HowIadmireyourstrongdetermination.Whynotgiveitatry?”“Teacher,Iamafraidkidsfromotherschoolswilllaughatme.Ithinkwhatthecoachsaidisright.”murmuredDavid,withglumlooksonhisface.“ButDavid,whatcountsmostistoparticipatetothebestofyourabilityinwhateverwe’redoing.Doyouagree?”Afteratemporaryhesitation,Davidnoddedinagreement,finallydecidingtojoininthecross-countryteam.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Withablastofthegun,Davidtriedhisbesttoshootfromthestartline,buthefailed.Painfulandabitembarrassedashewas,hestilldraggedhisfeettokeepmovingforward.Thesunwasbeatingdown,thehotweathersuffocating.Afterwhatseemedyears,David,rockinghissmallbodylikeacatonahotbrick,eventuallyfinishedhisrunasthelastone.Whenapproachingthefinishline,heburstintoabigtoothysmileandwavedtomewithexcitement,crying“Imadeit!Imadeit!”Allthekidsincludingthosefromotherschoolserupted