【公开课课件】读后续写五四三原则

读后续写指导：5R解读、4句框架和3大原则（五四三法）题目：读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两端，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Mikelickedthelastofthemintchocolatechip

icecream.Itwasalmosttimetoleave.Hejumpedintothecarwithhis

parents

andheadedofftotheOlympic-sized

pool

forthebigswimmeet.

Whenhis

race

cameup,Mikewasconfident.Hewasstrongandswift.Mikeclimbedoutthepool,smiling.Hehadjust

won

firstplace,makinghimthefastestboyinhisagegroup.

"Congratulations,son,"hisfathersaid.Hismomgavehimahug,eventhoughhewassoakingwet.

Aweeklater,itwastimeforanotherswimmeet.Likebefore,Mikedecidedtoenjoyhisfavoriteicecreamflavor.Mikerememberedthatthelasttimehehadwonarace,healsoatemintchocolatechipicecreamfirst.Maybehe'dwinagain.

He’staken

firstplace

againinhisrace.Mikewasfeelingprettygood.Asitturnedout,MikedecidedtohavesomemintchocolatechipIcecreambeforeeveryoneofthenextfewswimmeets.Hebegantothinkofitashis

luckycharm.Afterseveralmonthsofplacinginthetoppositionsofeveryraceheswam,Mikewasfeelingunbeatable.Andhewouldn’tadmitit,butallthaticecreamwasaddingafewpoundstohisathleticswimmer'sbuild.

Itdidn’ttakelongafterthatforMiketostartcominginsecondplace-andthenthird-andthenlastplaceinhisraces.Theluckymintchocolatechipicecreamhadlostits

magic.Onthedayofhisnextswimmeet,hismothersatdownatthetablewithhim.“Mike,weallloveicecream,butit'snot

healthy

foryourbodytoeatsomuchofit.Maybeit'stimetoquitthesweettreatsforawhile,especiallybeforeyougoswimming.

Mikeunwillinglyagreed.Hewenttotheswimmeet,anddidn’t

perform

well.Hisfatherofferedtogorunningwithhimafewdaysaweektohelphimfeelbetterandstrengthenhismuscles.Theextraweightsoondisappeared,andMikefoundhimselfbreathingeasieratswimpractices.

It

was

the

last

meet

of

the

season,

and

Mike

wasn’t

sure

what

to

expect.He

felt

healthyagain,but

he

didn’t

know

if

he

still

had

any

speed

in

the

pool.

As

he

drove

into

the

water,he

kicked

his

legs

and

stretched

his

arms

as

far

as

he

could.__________________________________________________________________________________________________

His

jaw

dropped

as

he

realized

he

had

beaten

his

own

best

time,and

everyone

else

too.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第一步：5R读文本

Analyzethestory：

5Rs

1.Readforcharacters:

Mike,hisparents,Icecream,teammates

2.Readforconflict/problems：

IcecreamandMike’sperformance:Whetherit

isaLuckycharm3.Readforplot:单击输入您的封面副标题4.Readforemotionalchanges:

Whenhisracecameup,Mikewas

confident

Mikewas

feelingprettygood.

Afterseveralmonthsofplacinginthetoppositionsofeveryraceheswam,Mikewas

feelingunbeatable.

Mike

unwillingly

agreed.

5.Readfortheme

WhatcontributestoMike’ssuccessinswimming?第二步：四句定框架：

写读后续写不同于写其它作文，有可能需要先倒着写的

Step1:

先把最后一句写好，即：主题句

Mikerealizedthatone‘sluckycharmwasnothingbuthisdiligence.

Step2:

再把衔接句写好，即第一段的最后一句：

Hedashedtothefinishline.

Step3:

紧接着每段的提示语句写角色的情感：

Ashedoveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.

Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody.

Mike’sjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelse‘stoo.

Theflowersinhisheartwerealreadyinbloom.第三部：内容三原则

接下来就是把每段的中间补充完整记住三大原则：

1.Action—Response原则：角色A的所言、所行、所感、所想会引起其它角色的一系列反应的。每段对话1-2句，不一定两个人都要说话，无声的动作也是一种response。

2.Conflict—Solution原则：一般而言第二段会有问题的solution，但本文和高考的读后续写文章出题不一样，因为solution在所给文章中就已经有了。

同时思考：能否在第一段出现一个问题，然后把它解决了或者没有解决。一方面是增加看点，另一方面也是给第二段铺垫。

3.Negative—Positive原则：写作中一定要体现情感的变化，无论前面是这样的变化，最终都是积极的。

Ashedoveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.

1.Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody.（心情）2.“ThisiswhereIbelong.Icanwintherace,”thoughthe,histeethclenchedandhiseyesfixedonthefinishlineforward.（内心独白）3.Suddenly,twofigureswhizzedpast,whichstartledhim.（心情变化））4.Fearingtofallbehind,hefelthisheartpoundedfranticallyandhismindwentblank.（解释心情变化和问题）5.Justthen,hethoughtofhissweatandhisfather’sencouragingsmile.（问题的解决方法）6.Gradually,hisworrygavewaytohisconfidenceandthelast5minutessawhimdashtothefinishline,followedbytheendoftherace.（衔接句）

Mike’sjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelse’stoo.7.Theflowersinhisheartwerealreadyinbloom.

（心情变化）8.However,heknewhedeservedthehonorofchampionship.

（拓展）9.

Hisparents

cameupandgavehimahighfive,grinningfromeartoear.

（次要角色的回应）10.“Hey,whynottryyourfavoriteicecreamandcelebrate!”saidhisfathe