【公开课课件】读后续写课件高一英语写作专题

EnglishWritingCourseContinuationWriting考情分析浙江省5年10次高考（2016-2021）8次读后续写（2016.10，2017.6，2017.11，2018.6，2020.1，2020.7，2021.1，2021.6）2次概要写作（2018.11，2019.6）考续写可能性较大；考概要写作可能性较小考概要平均分相对较低，140以上高分较少同一届两次作文形式保持一致可能性较大读后续写与概要写作，两种形式在不同考次不定期交替使用《普通高等学校招生全国统一考试英语科考试说明》（高考综合改革试验省份试用）8次读后续写考试2016.102017.62017.112018.62020.12020.72021.12021.6语篇模式问题解决问题解决拉波夫叙事模式问题解决问题解决问题解决问题解决问题解决主题丛林冒险狼口脱险家庭旅行骑马迷路家庭亲情熊爪余生南瓜卡头家庭责任环境丛林迷路公路骑自行车驾车旅行帐篷农场小狗家庭研究基地拍照万圣节南瓜打工赚钱拉泼夫叙事模式拉波夫是美国语言学家，是社会语言学的代表人物之一，他提出了源于社会语言学的叙事语篇模式。拉波夫把完整的叙事结构分为点题、指向、进展、评议、结局、回应六个部分。“点题”即概括故事大意，强调用一句话概括故事发生了什么，并引发读者的阅读兴趣，“点题”除了出现在文章首段，也通常是文章的标题;“指向”是故事的时间、地点、人物及背景，是对事件发生的铺垫，而不是事件本身;“进展”是按事件的先后顺序呈现的内容，也占据了文章最大的篇幅;“评议”渗透在全文中，是作者或故事中人物对事件的看法和态度，可以用来制造悬念，提高读者的阅读兴趣，增强故事的感染力;“结局”是故事的完结，但并不是所有的记叙文都有结局;“回应”是故事与现实生活连接的纽带，是故事对读者的启迪或意义，其作用是点明主旨，升华主题。值得注意的是，并不是所有记叙文都包含了以上六个要素，缺少一个或两个是十分常见的。拉波夫认为：“一个完整的叙事模式以点题和指向开始，以进展为主体，用评议烘托气氛，以结局结束情节，最后用回应将读者拉回现实。读后续写评分原则1.本试题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。2.评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整，最后给分。3.词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。4.评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：

（1）与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；

（2）内容的丰富性和对所标出的关键词语的应用情况；

（3）应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；

（4）上下文的连贯性。5.拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。6.如书写较差一致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。读后续写评分标准档次描述第五档（21-25分）与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理；内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语；所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达；有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。第四档（16-20分）与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理；内容比较丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语；所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达；比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。第三档（11-15分）与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接；写出了若干有关内容，应用了4个以上短文中标出的关键词语；应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义表达；应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。第二档（6-10分）与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供各段落开头有一定程度的衔接；写出了一些有关内容，应用了3个以上短文中标出的关键词语；语法结构单调，词汇有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义表达；较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性。第一档（1-5分）与所给短文和开头语的衔接较差；产出内容太少，很少使用短文中标出的关键词语；语法结构单调，词汇有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错，严重影响了意义表达；缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容不连贯。0分白卷、内容太少无法评判或所写内容与所提供内容无关。第五档（21-25分）与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理；内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语；所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达；有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。感受真题(浙江2017.6)

Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadtostoptomakeabicycle

repair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled

(骑行)

alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday．ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that'sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim．Mac'sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac’srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac'sbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase(追赶)．Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he'dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh．Atthismoment,Paul

andBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn'tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow．注意：1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2．应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语．paragraph1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

paragraph2:

Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.

阅读文本分析时间when地点where人物who起因reason经过process结果resultJulyafternoonfromhishometoAlaska

Mac&2friends,Paul&BeckyAwolfwasfollowing????人物分析MacAprimaryschoolteachercyclingalongtheroadaloneawolffollowinghimhappyandexcitedFrightenedandworried故事发展与结局PaulandBeckydrivingParagraph1?Paragraph2?1.合乎人物性格及故事发展逻辑2.结局圆满，弘扬正能量3.注意字数，两段尽量平均分配Version1Paragraph1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.“Comeon,getinthecar.”Paulshoutedandopenedthedoor.Macjumpedoffthebikeandslidintothecarwithouthesitationasthewolfwasabouttotearhimintopieces.Whatanarrowescape!Thewolfwasgone.ThoughMacwassafe,hestillfeltthedreadstoppingthepassageofairintohislung,andhislegstrembling.Afterafewminutes,hesuddenlyshouted,“OhmyGod,myfriendsarestillrepairingthebicycle”Beingenormouslyworried,theydecidedtowaitforthematthespot.Version1Paragraph2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.“ThankGod,it'snicetoseeyouagain.Didyouseeit?”Macheldhistwofriendstightlyinarms.“IspottedabigdogrunningontheroadwhenIwasriding,andthenIfiguredoutitwasawolf.”ThenMacsaidinarelaxingtone,“Withouttheirhelp,Iwouldbethedinnerofthewolf,sodon'tletmepedalaloneagain!”Theyalllaughedabouttheaccident,then

gotbackonroad.HowMacmissedhiswifeandchildren!Hecouldn'twaittosharethisexcitingexperiencewiththem.Version2Paragraph1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.“Getintothecar!”yelledPaul,openingthedoorforhim.Mac

jumpedoffthebicycle,threwhimselfintothecarandshutthedoorimmediately.“Thankyousomuch!”Macwasalmostoutofbreath.Justatthatmoment,thewolfappeared,showingitsshiningsharpteethatthem.Thethreeinthecarwerewonderingwhattodonextwhenthewolfbegantearingthebicycleandthethingstiedtoit.Version2Paragraph2:

Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.ObviouslyMac’sfriendsalsorealizedwhatwashappeningandarmedthemselveswithsticksandstones,readytofight.Thefuriouscreatureduckeditshead,glaringatthemwithburningeyes.

Suddenly,asharphonkblewandallthecarlightsflashedviolently.Theanimalwasfinallyfrightenedandfledaway.ItwasPaulwhopressedthebuttonsinthecar!Havingexpressedtheirappreciation,Macandhisfriendswavedgood-byetothetwokindyoungpeople.NowMaccouldhardlywaittoreturnhomeandtellhisfamilythethrillingstory.与所给短文的衔接和融洽必须根据所给段落的段首句，构思故事情节的发展，两个段首句要兼顾。不可生搬硬套，避免衔接不当，过渡不自然。Paragraph1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.“Comeon,getinthecar.”Paulshoutedandopenedthedoor.Paragraph1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.“Getintothecar!”yelledPaul,openingthedoorforhim.Version1Version2与所给短文的衔接和融洽必须根据所给段落的段首句，构思故事情节的发展，两个段首句要兼顾。不可生搬硬套，避免衔接不当，过渡不自然。Paragraph2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.“ThankGod,it'snicetoseeyouagain.Didyouseeit?”Macheldhistwofriendstightlyinarms.Paragraph2:

Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.ObviouslyMac’sfriendsalsorealizedwhatwashappeningandarmedthemselveswithsticksandstones,readytofight.Version1Version2语句间的连接功能举例时间firstofall,next,then,later,atthattime/moment,suddenly,allofasudden,beforelong,afterwards,intheend,atlast,eventually…转折but,however,onthecontrary,nevertheless,instead,unfortunately因果because,since,thanksto,owingto,asaresultof,forthereasonthat让步though,although,evenif/though,despite,inspiteofthefactthat条件if,unless,aslongas,onconditionthat,onlyif…五个以上关键词首先推荐使用名词，根据往年的阅卷反馈，名词单复数变化和动词时态变化可计入下划线词；但是词性变化不计入下划线词Mac;Paul;bicycle;wolf;friends;home;car;climbjump;pedal一定不要忘记在续写文中用下划线标出所使用的关键词。语法结构和词汇丰富、准确语法被动强调倒装省略虚拟It用法非谓句子主句祈使句简单句并列句功能结构复合句疑问句感叹句从句状从定从名从陈述句句子结构/功能三大从句定语从句状语从句名词性从句限制性定语从句非限制性定语从句时间，地点，原因，条件，让步，结果，目的…主语从句，宾语从句，表语从句，同位语从句状语从句Macjumpedoffthebikeandslidintothecarwithouthesitationasthewolfwasabouttotearhimintopieces.ThoughMacwassafe,hestillfeltthedreadstoppingthepassageofairintohislung,andhislegstrembling.Thethreeinthecarwerewonderingwhattodonextwhenthewolfbegantearingthebicycleandthethingstiedtoit.定语从句“IspottedabigdogrunningontheroadwhenIwasriding,andthenIfiguredoutitwasawolf.”“Ispottedabigdogthat/whichwasrunningontheroadwhenIwasriding,andthenIfiguredoutitwasawolf.”Thethreeinthecarwerewonderingwhattodonextwhenthewolfbegantearingthebicycleandthethingstiedtoit.Thethreewhowereinthecarwerewonderingwhattodonextwhenthewolfbegantearingthebicycleandthethingsthatweretiedtoit.名词性从句Mac’sfriendsalsorealizedwhatwashappeningandarmedthemselveswithsticksandstones,readytofight.“IspottedabigdogrunningontheroadwhenIwasriding,andthenIfiguredoutitwasawolf.”其他句型HowMacmissedhiswifeandchildren!ItwasPaulwhopressedthebuttonsinthecar!Withouttheirhelp,Iwouldbethedinnerofthewolf.感叹句强调句虚拟句非谓语（短语）Thefuriouscreatureduckeditshead,glaringatthemwithburningeyes.Thewolfappeared,showingitsshiningsharpteethatthem.Macjumpedoffthebicycle,threwhimselfintothecarandshutthedoorimmediately.“Getintothecar!”yelledPaul,openingthedoorforhim.连续动作有先后顺序不宜使用非谓语动词“语”众不同之形容词做状语又累又困，他很快就入睡了。Becausehewastiredandsleepy,hefellasleepquickly.Hewastiredandsleepyandfellasleepquickly.Tiredandsleepy,hefellasleepquickly.形容词做原因状语“语”众不同之形容词做状语Eric终于到了山顶，饥饿而又兴奋Ericfinallyreachedthetopofthemountain,andhewashungrybutexcited.形容词做结果状语Ericfinallyreachedthetopofthemountain,hungrybutexcited.“语”众不同之形容词做状语Mary迷失在森林里，她坐在一棵树下，充满恐惧与绝望。Marywaslostintheforest,soshesatunderatreeandwasfulloffearanddespair.形容词短语做原因状语Marywaslostintheforest,soshesatunderatree,fulloffearanddespair.Lostintheforest,Marysatunderatree,fulloffearanddespair.形容词短语做伴随状语“语”众不同之非谓语做状语他赢得了比赛，他的父母很开心。Hewonthematchandmadehisparentsdelighted.Hewonthematch,makinghisparentsdelighted.现在分词短语做结果状语“语”众不同之非谓语做状语Tom被老师责骂，一下子哭了出来。Tomwasscoldedbytheteacherandheburstoutcrying.Scoldedbytheteacher,Tomburstoutcrying.过去分词短语做原因状语走了很长一段时间后，她发现自己迷路了。Afterwalkingforquitealongtime,shefoundherselflost.Aftershewalkedforquitealongtime,shefoundherselflost.Havingwalkedforquitealongtime,shefoundherselflost.Shehadwalkedforquitealongtimeandfoundherselflost.“语”众不同之非谓语做状语现在分词完成式做时间状语“语”众不同之with复合结构做状语Smith先生出去散步，灯还亮着Mr.Smithwentoutforawalkandthelightwasstillon.Mr.Smithwentoutforawalkwiththelightstillon.With复合结构做结果状语“语”众不同之with复合结构做状语她从屋里冲了出来，泪水模糊了眼睛。Sherushedoutoftheroomandtearsblurredhereyes.Sherushedoutoftheroomwithtearsblurringhereyes.With复合结构做伴随状语“语”众不同之倒装句女孩从屋里冲了出来，泪水模糊了眼睛。Thegirlrushedoutoftheroomandtearsblurredhereyes.Outoftheroomrushedth