【课件】2022届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件

段落结构语料积累(情节+情感)读后续写·挑战1.交白卷2.结构混乱3.对话来凑4.不知所云......

读后续写·想法NarrativeArc

NarrativeArc

是什么用处教学实例NarrativeArc?情节OrientationComplicationActionActionResultNarrativeArcEvaluationRedlivesinavillageneartheforestandwillbevisitinghergrandmother.However,shedawdlesonthewayandtalkstoastranger---thewolf.Thewolftakesashortcut,swallowsthegrandmotherandawaitsRed.Reddiscoversthewolfandcallsoutforhelpfromthewoodsman.Intheend,thewolfisdefeated.Redrealizeswhatshedidwaswrongandhaslearnedherlesson.LittleRedRidingHoodRedlivesinavillageneartheforestandgoestovisithergrandmother.However,shedawdlesonthewayandtalkstoastranger---thewolf.Hetakesashortcut,swallowsthegrandmotherandawaitsRed.Reddiscoversthewolfandcallsoutforhelpfromthewoodsman.Intheend,thewolfisdefeated.Redrealizeswhatshedidwaswrongandhaslearnedherlesson.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationLittleRedRidingHoodNarrativeArc

用处FinallyJohnstartedhislongwalk.Tiredfilledwithhisbody,andhefelthungry.Buthedidn'tstop.Thereisnobodyintheroad.Itissoquietaroundhim.Hecarriedonwalkingalongwiththeroad.Althoughhewasafraid,gettingcompanywasmoreimportantthanthat.Aftertwohours,hewasverytiredsothathedid'ntcarryonwalking.Hesatdownontheroad.FinallyJohnstartedhislongwalk.

①Tiredfilledwithhisbody,andhefelthungry.②Buthedidn'tstop.③Thereisnobodyintheroad.④Itissoquietaroundhim.⑤Hecarriedonwalkingalongwiththeroad.⑥Althoughhewasafraid,gettingcompanywasmoreimportantthanthat.⑦Aftertwohours,hewasverytiredsothathedidn'tcarryonwalking.⑧Hesatdownontheroad.FinallyJohnstartedhislongwalk.

③Thereisnobodyintheroad.④Itissoquietaroundhim.②Buthedidn'tstop.⑥Althoughhewasafraid,gettingtocompanywasmoreimportantthanthat.⑤Hecarriedonwalkingalongwiththeroad.⑦Aftertwohours,hewasverytiredsothathedidn'tcarryonwalking.⑧Hesatdownontheroad.①Tiredfilledwithhisbody,andhefelthungry.NarrativeArc

教学OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.

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Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationWithnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.

Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationJaneroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluation

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.

Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationBut

no

more

helicopters

came

and

it

was

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It

was

daybreak

when

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____________________________________________________________________orientationorientation解读续写段落首句Interpretationofthefirstsentence

首句解读1.But

no

more

helicopters

came

and

it

was

dark.

2.It

was

daybreak

when

Jane

woke

up.

根据推测，必须描写Jane独自在森林里呆了一晚的情形！orientationresultPara.1

Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

Whateslecanyouaddtotheenvironment?orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluation①HowdidJanefeelatthebeginning?②Whathappened?③

WhatdidJanedoandhowdidshedo?④WasJanepreparedforthenight?⑤HowdidJanefinallyfallasleep?⑥HowdidJanefeelinherdream?scaredregretfulcalmbrave谋篇布局

续写第一段以情感线的角度：恐惧→后悔→逐渐镇定/勇敢→思念①HowdidJanefeelatthebeginning?②WhathappenedtoJane?③

WhatdidJanedoandhowdidshedo?④WasJanepreparedforthenight?⑤HowdidJanefeel?⑥HowdidJanefinallyfallasleep?首句解读：Para.1

Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationPara.1

Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.5senses:temperature/light/soundorientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationConflicts:difficulties/dangers/injuries/troubles/changesActions:brave/determine/fightback/dealwithGoals/Aims:shelter/fire/warmth/food/water/sleepFeelings:mentally/physically,bodyandsoul情感线：失落→恐惧→后悔→逐渐镇定/勇敢→思念Para.1

Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Asthelightdimmed,thewarmthofthedaywasebbingintoafaintchill.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationDarknesssoonfellupontheforest,whilethesoundsofnightstartedtogrowandeyesfromamongtreesbegantoglow.Frightenedbutdetermined,Janetookadeepbreathandquickenedherpace,hopingtofindanopenareasoon.(stagger,stumble,fumble…)Andafterwalkingalongdistance,tohergreatjoy,sheeventuallyreachedanopenarea.Exhaustedinsideout,Janesatontheground,builtafireandslowlyfellasleep.(Though…,managedtobuild…before…dropped…andfell…)Filledwithregretsandmissingherhusband,shecried(sobbed)inherdreams.

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ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Thesunshonelightly,bringingwarmthandhopetotheworld.Janestayedattheopenareapatientlytowaitforothers’help.Twohourslater,

thehelicopter

whichshehadseenyesterdaycaughthereyes.Janetookoffher

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andyelledouttomakethehelicopternoticeher.Fortunately,thehelicopternoticedherandcamecloser,finallylandingattheopenarea.

Herhusband,Tom

,gotoutofthehelicopter.Surprisedandoverjoyed,Janeheldhimtightlyandtoldhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Atthemoment,themountainwasfilledwithlove.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationhopeful---excited---happy---loveNarrativeArc

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FinallyJohnstartedhislongwalk.Walkingalongthequietstreetandholdingthebattightly,hecouldhearnothingbuthisownbreath,heartbeatsandthesoundofwind.

Suddenly,whenhewasgoingtopassacrossing,agroupofhomelessdogsrushedoutfromtheroadsidebush,barkingloudlyathim.Johnwassofrightenedthatbothofhishandsandlegsweretrembling.Heholdthebatandknifetightlyandsteppedback.

Soonthedogshadhimcornered.

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Atthattime,acarwasdrawingcloser.Meanwhile,theenormousbearwasdrawingclosertoo.Johnwantedtoaskforhelpbuthewassotiredthathislipspartedinasoundlessscream.Hewaved...

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Atthattime,acarwasdrawingcloser.Hegothishopesupagainandwavedwithallthestrengthleftinhimatthecar.

Thecarstoppedinfrontofhimandthewindowwasrolleddown.Johnwassurprisedtofindthatthedriverwasawomanandalittlegirlwassittinginthebackseat.

Afterknowingthesituation,thewomanopenedthedoorandgavehimalift.Johnwasdeeplymovedbythekindnessofthewomananddecidednottogooutatmidnightagain.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationNarrativeArc语料的积累适应性考试学生仿写Student’s

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WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI'dhadlunch.

Iwasabouttosayyesbutmystomachgaveoutasignalbeforemymouthopened.

Thegirlreceivedthesignalandsmiled.Isawherwalkedtothetruckandtoldsomethingtoherparents.Thenshetookapaperbagandbroughtittome.Shesaidtheytooksomefeaturefoodoftheirhometownandwantedtoshareitwithme.AfterIthankedher,Iwatchedthemleftattheendoftheroad.

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