【省级公开课课件】高考英语读后续写训练

题目：读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两端，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Mikelickedthelastofthemintchocolatechip

icecream.Itwasalmosttimetoleave.Hejumpedintothecarwithhis

parents

andheadedofftotheOlympic-sized

pool

forthebigswimmeet.Whenhis

race

cameup,Mikewasconfident.Hewasstrongandswift.Mikeclimbedoutthepool,smiling.Hehadjust

won

firstplace,makinghimthefastestboyinhisagegroup."Congratulations,son,"hisfathersaid.Hismomgavehimahug,eventhoughhewassoakingwet.Ikepttrying911,redialingevenasIpickedupspeed.

Tomydisappointment,thecellphonestillhadnosignal.Iwasworriedsick.

(建议收藏，因为有很多场合可以用到)Icontinuedclimbingup,despitebeingoutofbreath.Whenapproachingthetop,Ieventuallydialed911andtoldthemwhathadhappenedtomyhusbandandwherewewere.ThenIretracedmystepsandreturnedthephonetotheowner..ItbrokemyhearttoseeMike’spainedexpression.Stayingonthefreezingmountainside,wehadnothingtodobutwaitforrescue.Tomakemattersworse,acoldwindwasblowingfromthenorth.Atlast,arangerappeared,shoulderingagreenbackpack.HeexaminedMike’slegcarefullyandmade

aquickandsimpletreatmentofhisinjury.Shortlyafterwardsseveralmorerescuerscame.TheycarriedMikeonastretcher

tothefootofthemountainandtookhimintotheambulancewhichhadwaitedthereforquitesometime.Fortunately,afterthreemonths’stayinhospital,Mikewaswellenoughtobeallowedtoleave.OurheartsswelledwithgratitudetothepeoplewhohelpedMikeintheaccident.It

was

the

last

meet

of

the

season,

and

Mike

wasn’t

sure

what

to

expect.He

felt

healthyagain,but

he

didn’t

know

if

he

still

had

any

speed

in

the

pool.注意:1.

所续写短文的字数应为150左右；2.

续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。Paragraph

1:Ashe

drove

into

the

water,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.Paragraph

2:His

jaw

dropped

as

he

realized

he

had

beaten

his

own

best

time

,and

everyone

else

too..第一步：Analyzethestory：5Rs解读故事1.Readforcharacters:

Mike,hisparents,Icecream,teammates2.Readforplot:(故事明线)3.Readforemotionalchanges:（情感暗线）Whenhisracecameup,MikewasconfidentMikewasfeelingprettygood.Afterseveralmonthsofplacinginthetoppositionsofeveryraceheswam,Mikewasfeelingunbeatable.Mikeunwillinglyagreed.4.Readforconflict/problems：

IcecreamandMike’sperformance:Whether

isitaluckycharm

5.Readfortheme

WhatcontributestoMike’ssuccessin

swimming?第二步：4句定框架

Ashedoveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbodyy.....................................................................................Hedashedtothefinishline.

Mike’sjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelse’stoo.Theflowersinhisheartwerealreadyinbloomm........................................................................................ItwasnotuntilthenthatMikerealizedthatone’sluckycharmwasnothingbuthisdiligence.第二步：4句定框架

Ashedoveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody.Hedashedtothefinishline.

Mike’sjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelse’stoo.Theflowersinhisheartwerealreadyinbloom.ItwasnotuntilthenthatMikerealizedthatone’sluckycharmwasnothingbuthisdiligence./ItwasnotAbutBthatcontributedtohissuccess.Step1:先把最后一句写好，即：主题句Step2:再把衔接句写好，即第一段的最后一句：Hedashedtothefinishline.Step3:紧接着每段的提示语句写角色的情感：接下来就是把每段的中间补充完整，记住三大原则：1.Action—Response原则：角色A的所言、所行、所感、所想会引起其它角色的一系列反应的。每段对话1-2句，不一定两个人都要说话，无声的动作也是一种response.2.Conflict—Solution原则：一般而言第二段会有问题的solution，但本文solution在所给文章中就已经有了。同时思考：能否在第一段出现一个问题，然后把它解决了或者没有解决。一方面是增加看点，另一方面也是给第二段铺垫。3.Negative—Positive原则：写作中一定要体现情感的变化，无论前面是怎样的变化，最终都是积极的。最终：Ashedoveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.Wheneverhecameupforabreath,hecouldseethataboywasaheadofhim.Determinedtoovertakehim,Mikefoundthepowerinhismuscles.Heswamfasterandfaster,speedinguptowardsthefinishinglinewithallhisstrength.Justafewsecondslater,ashishandtouchedtheedgeofthepool,theracewasover.Hequicklyliftedhisswimglassesoffhisheadandlookingaroundfortheelectronicboardeagerly.Mike’sjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelse’stoo.Mikehadwontherace.Hejumpedupanddowninthepool,beatingthewaterwildly.Amazedattheresult,theaudienceandhisteammatescouldn’tstopclappingandcheering.Hisparentsalsogrinnedfromeartoear.“Hey,son,let’sgoandhavesomeofyourfavoriteicecreamandcelebrate!”saidhisfather.“Thanks,Dad,butI’llpassontheicecream;it’snotsuchaluckycharmafterall!”最终：Ashedoveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.1.Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody.（心情）2.“ThisiswhereIbelong.Icanwintherace,”thoughthe,histeethclenched(closetightly)andhiseyesfixedonthefinishlineforward.（内心独白）3.Suddenly,twofigureswhizzedpast(zoom/speed嗖嗖声),whichstartled(surprise)him.（心情变化）4.Fearingtofallbehind,hefelthisheartpounded(beat)madlyandhismindwentblank.（解释心情变化和问题）5.Justthen,hethoughtofhissweatandhisfather’sencouragingsmile.（问题的解决方法）6.Gradually,hisworrygavewaytohisconfidenceandthelast5minutessawhimdashtothefinishline,followedbytheendoftherace.（衔接句）Mike’sjawdro