【课件】记叙文的读后续写

ContinuationWritingofNarration记叙文的读后续写

读后续写的要求读后续写任务要求考生在一段350词以内的语言材料基础上，根据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写(150词左右)，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。续写部分分为两段。原文给出10处左右的标有下划线的关键词语，所续写短文应使用5个以上。第五档（21-25分）1.与所给短文融合度高，与所提供的段落开头语衔接合理。2.内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。3.所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确。4.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，所续写短文结构紧凑。阅卷时考虑以下几个方面：1.

原文与后续的融洽度；2.

后续两段间的融洽度；3.

逻辑权重高于内容、语言和情感；4.多种可能性，择其优而续写5.所续部分：高立意、正能量、传递积极的情感态度standardsofgrading

Theparentswiththeirthree-year-oldsonwenttoseeafilm.Whentheywalkedintothecinema,theattendantsaidtothem:“You'llhavetogooutifyoursoncries.Butwe'llrefund(退款)youthetickets.”

Abouthalfanhourlater,thehusbandaskedhiswife,“Whatdoyouthinkofthefilm?”

“I'veneverseensuchaboringfilm.”Hiswifeanswered,“It'snotworthseeing.”

“Idon'tthinkmuchofit,either.”Thehusbandsaid,“Wakethechildupand_________________.”enjoycontinuationwritinglethimcry01原文一致原则内容要前后衔接，上下连贯,语言表达风格一致。02正能量原则故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好，和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法，等等。03曲折性原则凡是故事都应有跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。写作指导三大原则写作指导四个步骤3.增加细节，开始写作根据“所见/遇所想，所为所感”等构思具体细节。2.细读首句，构思框架仔细阅读所给两段的首句，结合正能量结尾，思考大致框架。1.读懂大意，理清脉络读所给的不完整故事，弄清大意和主题，理清故事的主要人物和事件。4.修改润色，整洁誊写思考再三，把修正润色后的续写整洁地写入答卷。读后续写

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。

OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehoursto

campovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasant

subjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,Jane

wassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehad

climbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenly

realizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Jane

keptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakein

thedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtohold

himandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinher

lifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthe

streamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellow

blouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycameback

again.(334words)Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.________________Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.__________________________Part01读懂大意，理清脉络主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，特别要弄清故事的人物，时态(通常是一般过去时)，事件(故事的起因和经过)，语言特色(以便在续写时语言特色前后一致，保持不变)，等等。

人物时态和事件语言特色不要变1.Characters2.Tense3.eventsJane,TomsimplepasttenseJanequarreledwithTomandwalkedaway.BeginningClimaxEndingrisingactionfallingactionJanegotlostintheforestandspentanightintheforest.Twohelicopterscameandwent.??语言特色1.Withnopathtofollow…2.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.3.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforest4.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.5.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotired…语言特色6.Lyingawakeinthedark,Janewanted…7.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.8.Neverinherlifehadshetasted…9.Feelingstrongernow,Janebeganto…Part02由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架。两段首句定一框第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。二框二首正能量细读首句，构思框架Paragrah1Whowasthereinthesecondnight?WhatdidJanedowhenthenightfell?Howdidshefeelinthenight?Whatshouldbethelastsentenceabout?Paragraph1：Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.（天又黑了）Paragraph2：ItwasdaybreakandJanewokeup.（天亮了）两段首句定一框

即由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架。由第一段首句可知，没有直升机再来了，天又黑了。而从第二句首句天亮了，Jane醒了来推测，Jane在第一段中应该是在森林又度过了一个晚上。本段还可添加合理的细节来丰富内容，如Jane在黑暗中又走了一段路，最终体力不支找了一个地方睡着了，注意结尾要与下段语义衔接。Paragrah2WhatdidJanedoafterwakingup?Whatdidshedonext?Wassherescuedfinally?Ifyes,didsherescuedherselforwassherescuedbysomeoneelse?Paragraph2：ItwasdaybreakandJanewokeup.（天亮了，Jane醒过来了）二框二首正能量

第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。由第一段框架+第二段首句可知，这一定是一个正能量的结尾。可在首句后描写Jane获救之前所做的事情。还可以结合前面正文的内容来写，如找到一个开阔的地方，挥动黄衬衣。Part03增加细节，开始写作

在已定框架范围内，依据情节发展和生活常识，推断故事中人物所见、所闻、所思、所说、所做等给每段增加5至8个具体细节。Mindmap2023/2/2JaneTomlakewalkedclimbedatadistancestreamtohergreatjoyhelicopteryellowblouselake,streamJane,Tomwalked,climbedhelicopter,yellowblouseatadistance,tohergreatjoytoolsactionslocationscharactersclues划线关键词Writing

Janepossiblefeelingspossibleactions

注意：写作时注意细节描写，如描述人物的动作、神态和心情。贯彻一致性原则。除内容上要语义衔接，上下连贯外，语言风格也要一致，如使用分词短语和从句。注意使用关联词语。CommentonWritingPresentationoftheWritingswalkedalongthestreamclimbedtoahigherplaceforthenightheardanimalsata

distancemadeafiremissedTomtiredParagraph1Janescaredlonelyfellasleepwoke

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HowtocompleteanarrativearticleStepone:Analysethegivenpassage.(who;when;where;what;why;how)Steptwo:

logicalplotting(theplot,thegiventwosentences,reasonableending)Stepthree:vividwriting

(linkingwords,details,sentencestructures)SummaryPart04修改润色，整洁誊写要点有无遗漏，时态是否一致，主谓是否一致，文理是否连贯，句型有无变化，词数是否符合要求，（少于130扣2分）

拼写、标点符号是否有误等。要敢于创新，用更精彩的词、句替换平淡的词、句，特别注意开头、结尾的精彩度，创造亮点。续写中的常用语法项目：1.非谓语动词，尤其是现在分词短语；2.介词短语，尤其是with短语；3.状语从句，尤其是时间状语从句；4.宾语从句；5.形容词修饰名词；6.副词修饰动词。语法应用原则：内容、词汇和形式三者的统一增加内容运用词汇丰富形式Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Thetemperaturegotloweratnightthaninthedaytime.Janeputonheryellowblouse.Atthatmoment,tirednesssurroundedher.Shefeltexhaustedbothphysicallyandemotionally.Butshe

continuedwalkingforwardbecauseshereallywantedtomeetTomassoonas

possible.Shewalkedslowlyandcarefullyindarkness.Followingthestreamforabouttwohours,Janecouldn’tsupportherphysicalstrength,soshefoundafla