读后续写写作素材积累之外貌描写讲义-高三英语写作专项

读后续写写作素材积累：外貌描写1Shewas

fair-skinned,had

reddishhair

and

longfingers.外表描写Niloufar’smother：抓住主要特征，巧用形容词描写人物的主要特征：fair-skinned,

reddishhair

，

longfingers。2Inthemorning,Mariamwasgivena

long-sleeved,darkgreendress

towearover

whitecottontrousers.具有特点的服装描写：

a

long-sleeved,darkgreendress长袖暗绿的裙子

towearover

whitecottontrousers白色棉裤。3Hewas

wearingalightbrownsuit

and

aredtie.

Hishairwaswashed.

外表描写：整体alightbrownsuit

；局部aredtie.

Hishairwaswashed.穿着浅棕色衣服，带着红色领带。头发也洗过了。有画面感。4Mariam

smelled

himbeforeshesawhim.

Cigarettesmokeandthick,sweetcologne,notfaintlikeJalil’s.ThescentofitfloodedMariam’snostrils.Throughtheveil,fromthecornerofhereye,Mariamsaw

atallman,thick-belliedandbroad-shouldered,stooping

inthedoorway.Thesizeofhimalmostmadehergasp,andshehadtodrophergaze,

herhearthammeringaway.She

sensed

himlingeringinthedoorway.Then

hisslow,heavy-footedmovement

acrosstheroom.Thecandybowlonthetableclinkedintunewithhissteps.Withathickgrunt,he

droppedon

achairbesideher.He

breathednoisily.描述Mariam对未婚夫的第一感觉与第一印象：

先是她闻到的气味：

Cigarettesmokeandthick,sweetcologne烟味与浓浓的香水（嗅觉）个子：

atallman,thick-belliedandbroad-shouldered（视觉）脚步声：slow,heavy-footed（听觉）呼吸声：movement；breathednoisily。（听觉）记得有位作家说过：在我写小说的时候，我总是记得要用看、听、感、尝、嗅。每当我写作的时候，我会有意识地写些带有气味的东西。实际上，一些令人作呕的东西在创造真实感的时候，反而有奇迹般的效果。通过观察、思考，才能准确地描绘出一幅幅场景，使人物具有可信性。他们以固有的视觉、听觉、嗅觉、触觉和味觉进行着他们的日常工作。这这个句子中，作者运用了三种感觉来描述玛丽亚姆丈夫的外貌特点。这个人物就像走进了书页中，很具体、因此真实可信。我们在进行人物的外表描写时，不妨试试这个方法哦。5His

harsh,raspyvoice

remindedMariamof

thesoundofdryautumnleavescrushedunderfoot.描述Mariam对他声音的感觉：harsh,raspyvoice让她想起thesoundofdryautumnleavescrushedunderfoot。这是一种比喻手法。（利用听觉）6Shethought

herbrowtoowide,thechintoonarrow,thelipstoothin.Mariam对自己外貌的评价：（从上往下写）herbrow：toowide,

thechin：toonarrow,

thelips：toothin作者用了三个too,too后又是三个形容词，结构工整，语言浅显易懂，将玛丽亚姆对于自己的外貌的不自信表达出来了。而我们也在头脑中勾勒出她的面貌特点。7Inthemirror,MariamhadherfirstglimpseofRasheed:thebig,square,ruddy

face;thehooked

nose;theflushed

cheeks

thatgavetheimpressionofslycheerfulness;thewatery,bloodshot

eyes;thecrowded

teeth,thefronttwopushedtogether

likeagabledroof;theimpossiblylow

hairline,barelytwofingerwidthsabovethebushy

eyebrows;thewallofthick,coarse,salt-and-pepper

hair.Mariam在镜子里看到的丈夫的长相：（描写顺序：从上往下，又从下往上）face：big,square,ruddynose：

hookedcheeks：

flushed发红的eyes：

watery,bloodshotteeth：

crowded；thefronttwopushedtogetherlikeagabledroof

hairline：

theimpossiblylow；barelytwofingerwidths

abovethebushyeyebrowshair：

thick,coarse,salt-and-pepper浓密粗糙的花白头发本段作者抓住“五官”特点，写出人物面部特征。从这些细节描写中，我们可以分析出人物性格特征，所谓相由心生。比如玛丽亚姆初见丈夫，他的粗俗让她一见面就不喜欢。其中在描写他前排拥挤的牙齿的时候，用了比喻的手法：

thefronttwopushedtogetherlikeagabledroof。在人物外貌描写的时候，还可以用夸张，联想等修辞手法。

8Their

nails

werelong,polishedpinkororange,their

lips

redastulips.They

walkedinhighheels,andquickly,asifonperpetuallyurgentbusiness.They

woredarksunglasses,and,whentheybreezedby,Mariamcaughtawhiffoftheirperfume.

对喀布尔妇女外表的描述：视觉、听觉、嗅觉结合起来写nails，lips，highheels，darksunglasses，perfume。9Hewasagaunt枯瘦的,stooping弯曲的

oldmanwithatoothlesssmile

andawhitebeardthatdroppedtohisnavel肚脐.描写玛丽亚姆老师的外貌：整体到局部的顺序写个子：agaunt枯瘦的,stooping弯曲的

oldman微笑：atoothlesssmile

胡子：awhitebeardthatdroppedtohisnavel肚脐.抓住几个重点写，不必蜻蜓点水，面面俱到。但要真实。真实的东西最有感染力。10Hewastalland

square-shouldered,with

sleepy-lookingeyes

and

acalmface.简洁的外表描写:整体到局部的顺序，抓住主要特点

square-shouldered;

sleepy-lookingeyes

;acalmface。11AsNanatoldthestory,Mariamsatonherlapand

pictured

hermotherbeingfittedforaweddingdress.She

imagined

heronhorseback,

smilingshyly

behind

aveiledgreengown,

herpalms

paintedredwithhenna,

herhair

partedwithsilverdust(银粉),

thebraids(辫子)

heldtogetherbytreesap(汁液).Shesawmusiciansblowingtheshahnai

fluteandbangingondohol

drums,streetchildrenhooting(叫喊)

andgivingchase.

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