2023届高考英语二轮复习：读后续写之对话高分技巧(1)课件30张

读后续写微技能

———“说”

04/原版小说03/四大技巧02/标点符号01/注意要点目录英文原版借鉴

-----LittleWomen

Chapter101Chapter1Playingpilgrams“CHRISTMASwon'tbeChristmaswithoutanypresents,”grumbledJo,lyingontherug.“It'ssodreadfultobepoor!”sighedMeg,lookingdownatherolddress.“Idon'tthinkit'sfairforsomegirlstohaveplentyofprettythings,andothergirlsnothingatall,”addedlittleAmy,withaninjuredsniff.“We'vegotFatherandMotherandeachother,”saidBethcontentedlyfromhercorner.抱怨；嘟囔Thefouryoungfacesonwhichthefirelightshonebright-enedatthecheerfulwords,butdarkenedagainasJosaidsadly,“Wehaven'tgotFather,andshallnothavehimforalongtime.”Shedidn'tsay“perhapsnever,”buteachsilently

addedit,thinkingofFatherfaraway,wherethefightingwas.Nobodyspokeforaminute;thenMegsaidinanalteredtone,“YouknowthereasonMotherproposednothavinganypresentsthisChristmaswasbecauseitisgoingtobeahardwinterforeveryone;andshethinksweoughtnottospendmoneyforpleasure,whenourmenaresufferingsointhearmy.Wecan'tdomuch,butwecanmakeourlittlesacrifices,andoughttodoitgladly.ButIamafraidIdon't.”AndMegshookherhead,asshethoughtregretfullyofalltheprettythingsshewanted.“ButIdon'tthinkthelittleweshouldspendwoulddoanygood.We'veeachgotadollar,andthearmywouldn'tbemuchhelpedbyourgivingthat.IagreenottoexpectanythingfromMotheroryou,butIdowanttobuyUndineandSintramformyself.I'vewanteditsolong,”saidJo,whowasabookworm.“Iplannedtospendmineinnewmusic,”saidBeth,withalittlesigh,whichnooneheardbutthehearthbrushandkettleholder.02对话描写注意要点

美国作家兼写作导师GloriaKempton的一番话道出了对话的重要性:“对话不仅为页面留白，创造视觉上的吸引力，还令故事中的人物生动鲜活，创造情感上的吸引力。故事背景若通过对话场景展示，我们会兴趣大增。对话透露了人物的动机，展现了与其表面活动截然相反的目标。充满张力的人物对话能使读者了解人物的内心世界，并为故事发展制造悬念。对话场景经展开便可加快故事的节奏。对话使读者对故事背景产生身临其境之感。”1）对话描写必须为推动故事情节服务，是情节发展的一个环节，每段出现一两句即可；2）对话描写必须反映人物的心理与情感，刻画人物的性格；3）对话描写不宜过长，侧重口语化词汇，避开生僻词汇；4）对话描写要尽可能结合动作描写，明确对谁说，具有画面感；5）对话描写中要学会使用几个感叹词，表示说话人的喜、怒、哀、乐等情绪。02标点符号和大小写

准确标点，使人物对话“完整”1.

对话标签在前Shesaid,“Iwouldliketogowithyou,butIhaven’tfinishedmyhomework.”2.

对话标签在后“Iwouldliketogowithyou,butIhaven’tfinishedmyhomework，”shesaid.3.

对话标签在句子中间“Iwouldliketogowithyou,”shesaid,“butIhaven’tfinishedmyhomework.”（引用内容放在sb.said前面时，引号内不能用句号结尾，只能用逗号，除感叹号和问号外。）"Mr.Craven?"Maryaskedinastonishment."Well,Idolikebirds!"Marygrinned.注意：对话标签在后或者在句子中间时（第2,3种情况），如果主语是名词，则可以倒装。而代词不可以倒装，saidshe是错误的。“Iwouldliketogowithyou,butIhaven’tfinishedmyhomework,”saidEmily（或者Emilysaid.）“Iwouldliketogowithyou,”saidEmily/Emilysaid,“butIhaven’tfinishedmyhomework.”对话模式举例1.

"....,"hesaid,

doing

...

--say后接分词作状语1)"Ididn'tknowwhatIwasdoing,"shesaid,laughingatthememory.2)"I'llgetussomecoffee,"shesaid,headingforthekitchen.3)"That'snice,"Alexsaidquietly,focusingonhisplate.4)"Veryclever,"saidtheteacher,noddinghisheadasifpleased.5)"Uncle,forgiveme,Ididthat...unintentionally,"hesaid,pointingtothebrokenglass.6)"Wedon'tdoanyharm,"saidtheboy,evidentlyfrightenedbymywords.2.

"...,"hesaid,

as/when/before/asif...

--say后接时间状语从句1)"Watchout!"sheshouted,asthecarstartedtomove.2)"Whatabeauty!"saidthenurseasshecametothedoor.3.

"....,"hesaid,

and

(thenhe)did....--say后接and,先后动作或构成并列句1)"Goodmorning,children!"saidtheminister,andhekindlyshookhandswithboth.2)"Yes,Ithinkso,"hesaidreluctantly,andleftthestudy.3)"Comehere,"saidthelittleman,andtookhertooneofthecornersofthebuilding.4.

"....,"hesaid,

“...”--say后接要说的另一句话1)"Sheisaveryadmirableandexcellentyoungwoman,"saidLily,"andyoumustgoandhelpher."2)"Sinceyoulovehimsowell,"saidtheking,"Iwilltellyousomething.

5.

"....,"saidtheman,

who...

--用定语从句补充说明说话的人1)"Idon'tknow,"saidZeb,whowasstillconfused.2)"Toyourhealth!"saidMr.White,whoalsoemptiedhisglass,andwipedhismouthwithhishandkerchief.

6.

"....,"hesaid+方式副词(-ly)或短语,

--作状语修饰say1）"Ofcourse,"Nacyrepliedwithasmile.2）"I'msorry,"shesaidwithasigh.3）"Buttheydon'tunderstandourtalkatall,"saidthedancerwithapuzzledsmile.4）"Natasha,youloveme?"shesaid

inasofttrustfulwhisper.5）"CometoyourPapaatonce,please!"saidshewithastrangelook.对话描写四个技巧03细节描写，令人物对话显“丰满”标题

以《典范英语10秘密花园》为例，通过对话描写的技巧分析和佳句赏析，来探讨和学习

人物对话描写的写作技能，更深层次地把握人物对话描写的准确传神。

(1)Marshachewedherlip."Don'ttellnobodyItoldyouthat,willyou?I'llbeinsuchtroubleifyoudo."(P11)

(2)Colinglaredather."Youdidn’tcometoseeme!"(P50)

(3)"Ishan't!"Marysaid,stungasifshehadbeenaccusedofsomething.(4)"I’vemetDickon!Hebroughtmethingsforthegardon,”shegasped,hurlingherselfintotheirchairatherdiningtable.(P30)(5))"Idon'tlikethemoors,"Marysaidrememberingthebleak,blackwildernesstheyhadcrossedthedaybefore.(P11)“chewedherlip”，用具体动作代替nervous具体动作代替angryasif虚拟语气，描绘出了说话人当时恼羞成怒的样子。(4)(5)中都运用了现在分词(-ing)作状语表示伴随或原因，描写说话人说话时的伴随动作。Waystoexpress“say”morevividlyTip1UsedifferentverbsTip2Useverbs+adv

Tip3Useverbs+prepphraseTip4Useverbs+伴随状语（adj,doing,done）

说道________回答道________问道_________补充说_______解释道________叹气地说_______

承认道_______同意地说_______大笑地说_______尖叫道_________大声地吼道________________通知________

承诺________宣布__________

安慰________

道歉________陈述_______低/耳语________

低语/嘟囔_______辩论______抱怨道________

争论_______说服________

shout/yell/roarlaughsayreplyaskaddexplainsighadmitagreescream/exclaiminformcomplaincomfortmurmurpromisewhisperstateannounceapologizeTip1Usedifferentverbsarguepersuadedebate

1)_______________激动地说

2)said________轻柔地说

3)_____________冷静地说

4)replied________________________

不冷不热地说5)answered________胆怯地说

6)________________冷冷地回答

timidly

saidexcitedlyrepliedcoldlysaidcalmlyhalfcoldly,halfkindlysoftlyTip2Useverbs+adv

1)saidMr.Wilson_____________________________

一脸严肃地2)hesaid______________________

用一种坚定地语调3)Hesaid__________他慌慌张张地说4)shesaid______________________

用一种坚定地表情5)Jennylaughed________________兴奋地笑了起来

6)saidthestranger_________________冷笑着说7)Sheasked____________________

用一种梦幻般地语调说

inadream-likevoiceinaflurrywithaseriouslookonhisfaceinadetermined/firmvoicewithadeterminedlookwithexcitementwithacoldsmileTip3Useverbs+prepphrases

1)saidNewland,__________________

心里暗自高兴

2)shebeggedhim,______________________眼睛充满恐惧3)shesaid,_________________________

眼睛在跳跃着/闪闪4)shemurmured,______________________

又沮丧又担忧

upsetandconcernedhereyesdancing/shininghereyesfilledwithfearsecretlydelightedTip4Useverbs+伴随状语（adj,doing,done）2023/1/18⑴Ashepassedthemilkontoher,mumsaidthatshehadsomethingforhimtoo.⑵Ashepassedthemilkontoher,mumsaid“Wait,Ihavesomethingforyoutoo.”

④---“Hereyouare.”

(Hepassedthemilkontoher.)⑤---“Wait,Ihavesomethingforyoutoo.”

“Surpriseforyou,dear!”2.

对话描写过多，不够精简。3.追求花哨，过度使用对话标签“Thatisfantasticnews,”hesaidhappily.此句中完全没有必要加上一个happily来表达说的方式，因为句中的fantastic一词足以说明说话人了表情，过度强调

会让读者的注意力集中在“说话的方式”而不是“说话的内容”。建议改为：“Thatisfantasticnews！”hesaid/screamed/exclaimed.一个感叹号和一个fantastic已经足以让读者想象当时的情景。适当的“艺术留白”也是需要的，这样会留给读者想象的空间。还有一种避免过度的dialoguetags的方法是运用“动作描写”，尤其是表情上动作来取而代之。如：Hereyesreflectedthecandlelightasshesmiledatherson.

“Everyoneisunique.Justfollowyourheartandbeyourself!”当她对儿子微笑时，她的眼睛反射着烛光。“每个人都是独一无二的。只要跟随你的心，做你自己！”4.

对话对象十分明确，仍使用对话标签“Itoldyoualready,”Isaid,glaring.评析：此句貌似豪华，其实对话中的主语“I”已经清晰地说明了说话者，完全没有必要用对话标签“Isaid”

来说说话对象。纠正方法：加上一点动作描写就可以避免这种错误，并且提升语言的生动性。Iglaredathim.

“Itoldyoualready.”以读促写情景赏析:Jane和Rochester的经典对白"ItellyouImustgo!"Janeretorted,rousedtosomethinglikepassion(被热情之类的东西唤醒/激起berousedtosth.),"Doyouthink,becauseIampoor,obscure(默默无闻),plain(长相平庸),andlittle,Iamsoulessandheartless?”Rochesterwasspeechless,eyebrowsfrowned.“Youthinkwrong!Ihaveasmuchsoulasyou,andfullasmuchheart!"respondedJane,withhereyesfocusedonRochester,expectingthereply.

仿写：阿甘正传的经典片段“Hello.Myname’sForrest.ForrestGump,”Gumpventured,rousedtosomethinglikeinterest.Thewomannoddedwithnoreply,eyesfocusedonherbook.“Doyouwantachocolate?”askedGump,withaboxofchocolatesinhishandandcontinued,”Mymamaalwayssaidlifewaslikeaboxofchocolates.Youneverknowwhatyou’regoingtoeat,”mumbledGump,expectingthereply.引导学生主动积累1."Ishouldn'ttellyouthat!"heblurtedout.

脱口说道2."Why,whatonearthdoesthismean,John?"hestammered.结结巴巴地3.Isaywithanedgeofbitte