英语写作训练(公开课)课件

英语写作专题绵竹中学韩勇英语写作专题绵竹中学韩勇写作训练的思路写一完整的句子:

句子的完整句子的连贯句子的简洁句子的多样化主题句,扩展句,结论句设计一个段落:基础写作读写任务写作训练的思路写一完整的句子:句子的完整主题句,扩展句,写一个完整的句子这几句是正确的句子吗?如果你认为有误,该怎么改?1.Workhard,youwillsucceed.2.Thereareonly4studentstakepartintheclass.and^^whotaking/totake写一个完整的句子这几句是正确的句子吗?如果你认为有误,该句子的分类简单句:

只包含一个主谓结构的句子.并列句:

主谓结构+连词(and,but,so,or……)+主谓结构

(或更多的主谓结构)复合句:引导词+主谓结构,主谓结构

(从句)(主句)

句子的分类简单句:只包含一个主谓结构的句子.五种基本的简单句主语+不及物动词2.主语+及物动词+宾语Birdsfly.Busesrunfromdawntillmidnight.Wearestudyinghard.Wehavereadmanybooks.Theydoshoppingattheweekend.WearelearningEnglish.

五种基本的简单句主语+不及物动词Birdsfly.Weh3.主语+系动词+表语4.主语+及物动词+间接宾语+直接宾语5.主语+及物动词+宾语+宾语补足语

Wearestudents.Hebecameascientist.Thatsoundsgood.HegaveTom

apresent.Heofferedmeajob.

Wemadehim

ourmonitor.Themanagerthinkstheplan

practical.

Hewillhavehisbike

repaired.Iwon’thaveyou

speakingtoyourmotherlikethat.3.主语+系动词+表语Wearestudents.He并列句1.用连词/副词

(and,but,so,for,or,notonly…butalso,either…or,neither…nor,while,both…and,however,therefore…)1)LiMingis18yearsoldandheisastudentinNo.1MiddleSchool.2)Hurryuporyou’llbelateforschool.3)Imustgonow,formysisteriswaitingforme.并列句1.用连词/副词(and,but,so,f2.用“;”3.用“;+adv”1)Wefishedallday;wedidn’tcatchanything.Wefishedallday;however,wedidn’tcatchanything.2)Thecarwasalmostnew;besides,itwasinexcellentcondition.

,butwe,soall…2)Lilydoeswellinstudy;alltheteachersthinkhighlyofher.

2.用“;”1)Wefishedallday复合句复合句里包含两个或更多的主谓结构,其中有一个主谓结构为句子的主体称为主句，另一个／些主谓结构为从句，他（们）只能充当句子的某一（些）成分，,如:主语,宾语,表语,同位语,定语,状语等.根据他们在句子中的功能分别称为主语从句,宾语从句,表语从句,同位语从句,定语从句,状语从句等.

复合句复合句里包含两个或更多的主谓结构,其中有一个主谓结构句子的连贯Faulty:Amanisjudgednotonlybywhathesaysbutalsobyhisdeeds.Faulty:Theideahementionedatfirstsoundedgood.

1.Amanisjudgednotonlybywhathesaysbutalsobywhathedoes.2.Amanisjudgednotonlybyhiswordsbutalsobyhisdeeds.

1.Theideahefirstmentionedsoundedgood.2.Theideahementionedsoundedgoodatfirst.

前后的一致、对等、平衡句子的连贯Faulty:Amanisjudged连贯性的要求是：句子前后之间要有照应，有衔接，思想的表达应该有序，清楚．句子与句子之间的过渡要符合逻辑，不能造成歧义或矛盾．连贯性的要求是：句子前后之间要有照应，有衔接，思想的表达应该句子的简洁１．文字简洁.

如下面这些短语均可用括号中的词代替:fromtimetotime(often),drawaconclusion(conclude),withanger(angrily),Itisclearthat…(clearly)句子的简洁１．文字简洁.如下面这些短语均可用括号中的词代替试比较下列改写的句子.

Doyouknowthemanwhoisspeakingatthemeeting?Lookoutforcarswhileyouarecrossingthestreet?Doyouknowthemanspeakingatthemeeting?Lookoutforcarswhilecrossingthestreet?

试比较下列改写的句子.Doyouknowthema2.避免使用同义词重复.(如下面的这些句子,划线部分重复,应删掉).

1).Heisblindinbotheyes.Heisblindinthelefteye.2).Inmyopinion,Ithinkyourplanisfeasible.3).Thedeskisroundinshapeandredincolor.4).Ishallaccompanymymotherbygoingwithhertothemarket.

2.避免使用同义词重复.(如下面的这些句子,划线部分重复,句子表达的多样性及档次翻译下面句子：我知道你喜欢她YourlikingherisknowntousWeareawareofyourlikingherThatyoulikeherisknowntousWeknowitafactthatyoulikeherWhatweknowisthatyoulikeherWeknowthatyoulikeherItisknowntousthatyoulikeherWeknowthefactthatyoulikeherAsfarasweknow,youlikeherAsweallknow,youlikeherYoulikeher,whichisknowntous句子表达的多样性及档次翻译下面句子：Yourliking段落(设计好一个段落)一般说来,一个段落由三部分组成:主题句,扩展句和结论句.主题句提出的论述的主题,扩展句利用必要的细节对主题加以论证说明,结论句总结全文,在论证的基础上得出结论.这三者是段落的必要成分,他们相辅相成,构成一个完整的段落.有些段落还有过渡句,它起到段与段之间的顺利过渡.段落(设计好一个段落)1.主题句1)主题句的位置:请找出段落的主题句Smokingisharmfultoyourhealth.Experimentshowthatsmokingcancausecancer.Besidesthemostseriousdiseasecancer,smokingcanalsocauseotherhealthproblems.Forexample,itgivesonea“smoker’scough”.Finally,studieshaveshownitiseasyforsmokerstocatchcolds.Whetheryougetanunimportantcoldortheterriblekiller,cancer,smokingisharmful.Isitworthit?1.主题句AlbertEinstein,oneoftheworld’sgreatestscientists,failedinhisuniversityentranceexamonhisfirstattempt.WilliamFaulkner,oneofAmerica’sfamouswriters,neverfinishedcollegebecausehecouldnotpasshisEnglishcourses.SirWinstonChurchill,whoisconsideredoneofthemastersoftheEnglishlanguage,wasverypoorinEnglishduringmiddleschool.Thesefewexamplesshowthatschooldoesnotalwayspredictfailureinlife.AlbertEinstein,oneofthewoKaraok,whichwasinventedbyaJapanese,oneofthegreatestwondersofmoderntechnology.Needlesstosay,Karaokisagoodwayofrest.Youcanlearnanewsongeasily.It’salsoagoodwaytomakeyourfriendshappy.Nearlyeverybodyhasachancetobeasingingstar.However,everythinghastwosides,sodoesKaraok.It’snoisytoyourneighbors.Besides,ifyousingbadly,theywillfeeluncomfortable.Infact,youaresuretomakeasoundpollutionKaraok,whichwasinventedby2)写好主题句,有两条原则1.主题句要明确,句中须有一个词,词组,或从句让读者一目了然本段的确切主题,明确本段的重点或观点.例如:Thisparagraphwilltalkaboutbirds.这句作为主题句就太笼统,不确切.试比较以下几句,下列几个主题句就确切地阐明了段落的主题:a.Birdshaveagreatsenseofdirection.b.Petownersprefercertainspeciesofbirds.c.Inmyopinion,abirdmakesabetterpetthanacatdoes.d.Birdsaresufferingfromair-pollution.2)写好主题句,有两条原则2.主题句要概括,它陈述你要说明的重点和观点,句中必须包含有可扩展主题的词,词组或从句.他应该是你将进一步表明你的态度和看法的概括.同时,主题句有利于控制作者本人的主题的扩展.例如:TheyounggirlstudiedChineseHistory.该主题句未能概括主题的要点,则不利于下面的扩展.最好增添一个词或一个短语来修改这个句子,以便顺利地展开你的主题.例如:a.TheyounggirleagerlystudiedChineseHistory.b.TheyounggirlstudiedChineseHistoryunderafamoushistorian.c.TheyounggirlfoundthreereasonsforstudyingChineseHistory.2.主题句要概括,它陈述你要说明的重点和观点,句中必须包含扩展句

扩展句的作用是丰富,支持,扩展主题句的内涵.他们是段落的血和肉.扩展句的表达形式是多种多样的,可以按时间或空间顺序,从整体到局部从局部到整体的方法叙述,描写,说明或议论,也可用比较,对比,比喻,推导,归纳,演绎的手段来展现.扩展句扩展句的作用是丰富,支持,扩展主题句单一性:

一个段落只说明一个问题,讲述一件事,扩展句必须紧紧地围绕着主题句,不偏离中心思想.

通常对扩展句的要求有两个

:单一性和连贯性③找出一个违背单一性的句子.

①Chinahasmadegreatprogressinreducingitspopulationgrowth.②Chinahasalreadycutitsrateofpopulationgrowthbyaboutonehalfsince1970.③Itiswrongofthewesterngovernmentstofindfaultwithitspoliciesofeliminationofpoverty.④Chinanowurgeseachfamilytohavenomorethanonechild.⑤Andithopestoreachzeropopulationgrowth,thenumberofbirthequalingthenumberofdeath,bytheyear2000.

单一性:一个段落只说明一个问题,讲述一件事,扩展句必须连贯性:

段落中各扩展句前后衔接,条理清楚,合乎逻辑,使读者很容易抓住段落的中心思想.在议论文中,我们常会谈到首先,其次,然后,该如何表达?1)first,second,third,last2)firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally3)thefirst,thesecond,thethird,thelast4)tobeginwith,then,furthermore,finally5)tostartwith,next,inaddition,/besides,lastbutnotleast6)ontheonehand,ontheotherhand7)foronething,foranotherthing连贯性:段落中各扩展句前后衔接,条理清楚,合乎逻辑,使读结论句结论句并非必不可少,但它能起到以下的作用:(1)

表示段落的结束(2)

总结要点,与主题句相呼应(3)供读者就本段落的主要内容和见解有个深刻的印象或进行思考

结论句结论句并非必不可少,但它能起到以下的作用:基础写作的评分标准:

准确性:

句子的表达要符合语法规范.完整性:

题目所列举的信息要表达完整连贯性:

整段话是一个篇章,句子之间要衔接自然,能恰当地使用连词,不是单纯的翻译句子复杂性:

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基础写作的评分标准:准确性:句子的表达要符合语法规范.基础写作四重奏:

1.信息划分

:确定哪些相关的信息可用一句话表达,确保5个句子表达完所有的信息.建议可在题目上用铅笔做①,②,③,④,⑤的标志(完整性)2.列出关键词组和句型

(准确性)3.串联句子:用正确的语法结构写出准确的句子,并形成篇章

(连贯性)4.检查(准确性)基础写作四重奏:1.信息划分:确定哪些相关的信息可用[写作内容]人物介绍：老师范例(1)1李莎，女，英语老师,22岁，1.65米，身材苗条,装扮入时。2性格活泼，爱唱爱跳，爱开玩笑。3教学方法生动活泼，常做游戏，精讲多练。4与学生关系融洽，深受同学欢迎；5.常与学生通过电子邮件和网上聊天交流。[写作要求]1题目：AUniqueTeacher2必须使用5个句子介绍全部所给的内容3将5个句子组织成连贯的短文[写作内容]步骤一：句子内容完整性

将所给信息整合成5个句子1李莎，女，22岁，1。65米，身材苗条，装扮入时。2性格活泼，爱唱爱跳，爱开玩笑。3教学方法生动活泼，常做游戏，精讲多练。4与学生关系融洽，深受同学欢迎；5常与学生通过电子邮件和网上聊天交流。本题不需要进行信息整合,每一点一句话步骤一：句子内容完整性

将所给信息整合成5个句子1李莎，2.active…likes…playjokes

3.belivelyandinterestingplaygames,notspeakmuch,leavesmoretime4.getonwellwith…,bepopularwith…5.communicatewith..bye-mailorInternet步骤二：句子所需的词汇，短语和句型

李莎，女，英语老师,22岁，1.65米，身材苗条,装扮入时。性格活泼，爱唱爱跳，爱开玩笑。教学方法生动活泼，常做游戏，精讲多练。与学生关系融洽，深受同学欢迎；5.常与学生通过电子邮件和网上聊天交流。beslimandfashionable2.active…likes…playjokes3.：AUniqueTeacher

①LiSha，ourEnglishteacher,isafashionableandslimyounglady,whois22yearsold,and1.65meterstall.②Theactiveteacherlikesdancing,singing，andsheplaysjokeswithus.③Herlessonsareinterestingandlively;sheleavesusmuchtimetopractiseandweoftenplaygamesinclass.④MissLigetsonwellwithusandsheisverypopular.⑤Afterclass,shealsocommunicatewithusbye-mailorInternet.。范文1:步骤三：连词成句，连句成篇：范文1:步骤三：连词成句，连句成篇AUniqueTeacher

①LiSha，ourEnglishteacher,isafashionableandslimyounglady,whois22yearsold,and1.65meterstall.②Theactiveteacherlikesdancing,singingandjoking.③Besides,herlessonsareinteresting,lively;herteachingmethodsarealsoveryunique,duringwhichweoftenplaygames.④Shenevertalksmuchinclass,instead,sheleavesusmuchtimetopractisebyourselves,soallofusareinterestedinherlessons.⑤MissLigetsonwellwiththestudents;shealwayscommunicateswithusbye-mailorInternet.范文2:AUniqueTeacher范文2:步骤四:检查1.时态2.主谓一致3.名词单复数4.单词拼写5.动词的过去式,过去分词6.句子是否完整步骤四:检查1.时态英语写作训练(公开课)课件1.和睦的家庭有利于孩子的个性发展和家人的身心健康。

Aharmoniousfamilyisbeneficialtoourpersonaldevelopmentandourphysicalandmentalhealth.2.和睦的家庭是充满着温暖、爱心和欢笑的；成员间相互关爱、尊重和理解。

Aharmoniousfamilyisalwaysfullofwarmth,loveandlaughterinwhichparentsandchildrennotonlyshowconcernforeachotherbutalsorespectandunderstandeachother.1.和睦的家庭有利于孩子的个性发展和家人的身心健康。3.生长在和睦家庭的孩子性格乐观向上；同时生活在和睦家庭的父母会更加健康快乐。

Ifachildgrowsupinaharmoniousfamily,heismorelikelytobecheerfulandoptimistic.Meanwhile,parentsinaharmoniousfamilyaresuretolivehappilyandmorehealthily.3.生长在和睦家庭的孩子性格乐观向上；同时生活在和睦家庭的父4.为了创建和睦家庭：一方面父母应该在言行举止上给孩子们做表率；同时还需要经常与孩子沟通交流。另一方面作为这个家庭中的孩子，我们应该学会体谅父母的艰辛，比如主动做家务等来减轻他们的负担。

Tocreatesuchaharmoniousfamilyparentsshouldberulemodelsfortheirchildrenin

wordsandbehaviorandoftencommunicatewiththem.Aschildrenofthefamily,weshouldshowunderstandingforourparents’hardship,andtrytosharetheirburdensbydoinghouseworkvoluntarilyandsoon.4.为了创建和睦家庭：一方面父母应该在言行举止上给孩子们做表5.如果我们能够做到这些，那么我们的家庭会变得更加和谐。

Ifwedoso,ourhomewillalwaysbeharmonious.5.如果我们能够做到这些，那么我们的家庭会变得更加和谐。Howwecanbuildupaharmoniousfamily

Aharmoniousfamilyisessentialtoourpersonaldevelopmentandourphysicalandmentalhealth.

Aharmoniousfamilyisalwaysfullofwarmth,loveandlaughterinwhichparentsandchildrennotonlyshowconcernforeachotherbutalsorespectandunderstandeachother.Ifachildgrowsupinaharmoniousfamily,heismorelikelytobecheerfulandoptimistic.Meanwhile,parentsinaharmoniousfamilyaresuretolivehappilyandmorehealthily.Tocreatesuchaharmoniousfamilyparentsshouldberulemodelsfortheirchildreninwordsandbehaviorandoftencommunicatewiththem.Aschildrenofthefamily,weshouldshowunderstandingforourparents’hardship,andtrytosharetheirburdensbydoinghouseworkvoluntarilyandsoon.

Ifwedoso,ourhomewillalwaysbeharmonious.Howwecanbu读写任务参考范文

Whentheauthor,anoverseastudent,wasbadlyill,ashopkeepermadehimasandwichandofferedhotsoup.Feelingwarmwithherkindness,theauthordecidedtobeaskindasher.ThepassageremindsmeofMissChen,myteacherofChemistry,whoseactofkondnessinfluencesmealot.ThoughIwaspoorinchemistry,shejustencouragedmenottogiveup.Sheevendideverythingtoeasemyanxiety.

读写任务参考范文Itsoundslikenothingbig,butheractdidmakemefeelwarm.Withsuchateacher,thereisnodoubtthatIwillactasherinfuture.AslongasIdoso,otherscanalsofeelthekindnessofMissChen.WhenIenteracollege,Iwillkeepkindnessinmind.Ifpossible,Iwilltrytobecomeayouthvolunteer,whooffershelptoothers.Nomatterhowharditis,Iwilldomybesttohelpthosepeopleinneed.Itsoundslikenothingbi英语写作专题绵竹中学韩勇英语写作专题绵竹中学韩勇写作训练的思路写一完整的句子:

句子的完整句子的连贯句子的简洁句子的多样化主题句,扩展句,结论句设计一个段落:基础写作读写任务写作训练的思路写一完整的句子:句子的完整主题句,扩展句,写一个完整的句子这几句是正确的句子吗?如果你认为有误,该怎么改?1.Workhard,youwillsucceed.2.Thereareonly4studentstakepartintheclass.and^^whotaking/totake写一个完整的句子这几句是正确的句子吗?如果你认为有误,该句子的分类简单句:

只包含一个主谓结构的句子.并列句:

主谓结构+连词(and,but,so,or……)+主谓结构

(或更多的主谓结构)复合句:引导词+主谓结构,主谓结构

(从句)(主句)

句子的分类简单句:只包含一个主谓结构的句子.五种基本的简单句主语+不及物动词2.主语+及物动词+宾语Birdsfly.Busesrunfromdawntillmidnight.Wearestudyinghard.Wehavereadmanybooks.Theydoshoppingattheweekend.WearelearningEnglish.

五种基本的简单句主语+不及物动词Birdsfly.Weh3.主语+系动词+表语4.主语+及物动词+间接宾语+直接宾语5.主语+及物动词+宾语+宾语补足语

Wearestudents.Hebecameascientist.Thatsoundsgood.HegaveTom

apresent.Heofferedmeajob.

Wemadehim

ourmonitor.Themanagerthinkstheplan

practical.

Hewillhavehisbike

repaired.Iwon’thaveyou

speakingtoyourmotherlikethat.3.主语+系动词+表语Wearestudents.He并列句1.用连词/副词

(and,but,so,for,or,notonly…butalso,either…or,neither…nor,while,both…and,however,therefore…)1)LiMingis18yearsoldandheisastudentinNo.1MiddleSchool.2)Hurryuporyou’llbelateforschool.3)Imustgonow,formysisteriswaitingforme.并列句1.用连词/副词(and,but,so,f2.用“;”3.用“;+adv”1)Wefishedallday;wedidn’tcatchanything.Wefishedallday;however,wedidn’tcatchanything.2)Thecarwasalmostnew;besides,itwasinexcellentcondition.

,butwe,soall…2)Lilydoeswellinstudy;alltheteachersthinkhighlyofher.

2.用“;”1)Wefishedallday复合句复合句里包含两个或更多的主谓结构,其中有一个主谓结构为句子的主体称为主句，另一个／些主谓结构为从句，他（们）只能充当句子的某一（些）成分，,如:主语,宾语,表语,同位语,定语,状语等.根据他们在句子中的功能分别称为主语从句,宾语从句,表语从句,同位语从句,定语从句,状语从句等.

复合句复合句里包含两个或更多的主谓结构,其中有一个主谓结构句子的连贯Faulty:Amanisjudgednotonlybywhathesaysbutalsobyhisdeeds.Faulty:Theideahementionedatfirstsoundedgood.

1.Amanisjudgednotonlybywhathesaysbutalsobywhathedoes.2.Amanisjudgednotonlybyhiswordsbutalsobyhisdeeds.

1.Theideahefirstmentionedsoundedgood.2.Theideahementionedsoundedgoodatfirst.

前后的一致、对等、平衡句子的连贯Faulty:Amanisjudged连贯性的要求是：句子前后之间要有照应，有衔接，思想的表达应该有序，清楚．句子与句子之间的过渡要符合逻辑，不能造成歧义或矛盾．连贯性的要求是：句子前后之间要有照应，有衔接，思想的表达应该句子的简洁１．文字简洁.

如下面这些短语均可用括号中的词代替:fromtimetotime(often),drawaconclusion(conclude),withanger(angrily),Itisclearthat…(clearly)句子的简洁１．文字简洁.如下面这些短语均可用括号中的词代替试比较下列改写的句子.

Doyouknowthemanwhoisspeakingatthemeeting?Lookoutforcarswhileyouarecrossingthestreet?Doyouknowthemanspeakingatthemeeting?Lookoutforcarswhilecrossingthestreet?

试比较下列改写的句子.Doyouknowthema2.避免使用同义词重复.(如下面的这些句子,划线部分重复,应删掉).

1).Heisblindinbotheyes.Heisblindinthelefteye.2).Inmyopinion,Ithinkyourplanisfeasible.3).Thedeskisroundinshapeandredincolor.4).Ishallaccompanymymotherbygoingwithhertothemarket.

2.避免使用同义词重复.(如下面的这些句子,划线部分重复,句子表达的多样性及档次翻译下面句子：我知道你喜欢她YourlikingherisknowntousWeareawareofyourlikingherThatyoulikeherisknowntousWeknowitafactthatyoulikeherWhatweknowisthatyoulikeherWeknowthatyoulikeherItisknowntousthatyoulikeherWeknowthefactthatyoulikeherAsfarasweknow,youlikeherAsweallknow,youlikeherYoulikeher,whichisknowntous句子表达的多样性及档次翻译下面句子：Yourliking段落(设计好一个段落)一般说来,一个段落由三部分组成:主题句,扩展句和结论句.主题句提出的论述的主题,扩展句利用必要的细节对主题加以论证说明,结论句总结全文,在论证的基础上得出结论.这三者是段落的必要成分,他们相辅相成,构成一个完整的段落.有些段落还有过渡句,它起到段与段之间的顺利过渡.段落(设计好一个段落)1.主题句1)主题句的位置:请找出段落的主题句Smokingisharmfultoyourhealth.Experimentshowthatsmokingcancausecancer.Besidesthemostseriousdiseasecancer,smokingcanalsocauseotherhealthproblems.Forexample,itgivesonea“smoker’scough”.Finally,studieshaveshownitiseasyforsmokerstocatchcolds.Whetheryougetanunimportantcoldortheterriblekiller,cancer,smokingisharmful.Isitworthit?1.主题句AlbertEinstein,oneoftheworld’sgreatestscientists,failedinhisuniversityentranceexamonhisfirstattempt.WilliamFaulkner,oneofAmerica’sfamouswriters,neverfinishedcollegebecausehecouldnotpasshisEnglishcourses.SirWinstonChurchill,whoisconsideredoneofthemastersoftheEnglishlanguage,wasverypoorinEnglishduringmiddleschool.Thesefewexamplesshowthatschooldoesnotalwayspredictfailureinlife.AlbertEinstein,oneofthewoKaraok,whichwasinventedbyaJapanese,oneofthegreatestwondersofmoderntechnology.Needlesstosay,Karaokisagoodwayofrest.Youcanlearnanewsongeasily.It’salsoagoodwaytomakeyourfriendshappy.Nearlyeverybodyhasachancetobeasingingstar.However,everythinghastwosides,sodoesKaraok.It’snoisytoyourneighbors.Besides,ifyousingbadly,theywillfeeluncomfortable.Infact,youaresuretomakeasoundpollutionKaraok,whichwasinventedby2)写好主题句,有两条原则1.主题句要明确,句中须有一个词,词组,或从句让读者一目了然本段的确切主题,明确本段的重点或观点.例如:Thisparagraphwilltalkaboutbirds.这句作为主题句就太笼统,不确切.试比较以下几句,下列几个主题句就确切地阐明了段落的主题:a.Birdshaveagreatsenseofdirection.b.Petownersprefercertainspeciesofbirds.c.Inmyopinion,abirdmakesabetterpetthanacatdoes.d.Birdsaresufferingfromair-pollution.2)写好主题句,有两条原则2.主题句要概括,它陈述你要说明的重点和观点,句中必须包含有可扩展主题的词,词组或从句.他应该是你将进一步表明你的态度和看法的概括.同时,主题句有利于控制作者本人的主题的扩展.例如:TheyounggirlstudiedChineseHistory.该主题句未能概括主题的要点,则不利于下面的扩展.最好增添一个词或一个短语来修改这个句子,以便顺利地展开你的主题.例如:a.TheyounggirleagerlystudiedChineseHistory.b.TheyounggirlstudiedChineseHistoryunderafamoushistorian.c.TheyounggirlfoundthreereasonsforstudyingChineseHistory.2.主题句要概括,它陈述你要说明的重点和观点,句中必须包含扩展句

扩展句的作用是丰富,支持,扩展主题句的内涵.他们是段落的血和肉.扩展句的表达形式是多种多样的,可以按时间或空间顺序,从整体到局部从局部到整体的方法叙述,描写,说明或议论,也可用比较,对比,比喻,推导,归纳,演绎的手段来展现.扩展句扩展句的作用是丰富,支持,扩展主题句单一性:

一个段落只说明一个问题,讲述一件事,扩展句必须紧紧地围绕着主题句,不偏离中心思想.

通常对扩展句的要求有两个

:单一性和连贯性③找出一个违背单一性的句子.

①Chinahasmadegreatprogressinreducingitspopulationgrowth.②Chinahasalreadycutitsrateofpopulationgrowthbyaboutonehalfsince1970.③Itiswrongofthewesterngovernmentstofindfaultwithitspoliciesofeliminationofpoverty.④Chinanowurgeseachfamilytohavenomorethanonechild.⑤Andithopestoreachzeropopulationgrowth,thenumberofbirthequalingthenumberofdeath,bytheyear2000.

单一性:一个段落只说明一个问题,讲述一件事,扩展句必须连贯性:

段落中各扩展句前后衔接,条理清楚,合乎逻辑,使读者很容易抓住段落的中心思想.在议论文中,我们常会谈到首先,其次,然后,该如何表达?1)first,second,third,last2)firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally3)thefirst,thesecond,thethird,thelast4)tobeginwith,then,furthermore,finally5)tostartwith,next,inaddition,/besides,lastbutnotleast6)ontheonehand,ontheotherhand7)foronething,foranotherthing连贯性:段落中各扩展句前后衔接,条理清楚,合乎逻辑,使读结论句结论句并非必不可少,但它能起到以下的作用:(1)

表示段落的结束(2)

总结要点,与主题句相呼应(3)供读者就本段落的主要内容和见解有个深刻的印象或进行思考

结论句结论句并非必不可少,但它能起到以下的作用:基础写作的评分标准:

准确性:

句子的表达要符合语法规范.完整性:

题目所列举的信息要表达完整连贯性:

整段话是一个篇章,句子之间要衔接自然,能恰当地使用连词,不是单纯的翻译句子复杂性:

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基础写作的评分标准:准确性:句子的表达要符合语法规范.基础写作四重奏:

1.信息划分

:确定哪些相关的信息可用一句话表达,确保5个句子表达完所有的信息.建议可在题目上用铅笔做①,②,③,④,⑤的标志(完整性)2.列出关键词组和句型

(准确性)3.串联句子:用正确的语法结构写出准确的句子,并形成篇章

(连贯性)4.检查(准确性)基础写作四重奏:1.信息划分:确定哪些相关的信息可用[写作内容]人物介绍：老师范例(1)1李莎，女，英语老师,22岁，1.65米，身材苗条,装扮入时。2性格活泼，爱唱爱跳，爱开玩笑。3教学方法生动活泼，常做游戏，精讲多练。4与学生关系融洽，深受同学欢迎；5.常与学生通过电子邮件和网上聊天交流。[写作要求]1题目：AUniqueTeacher2必须使用5个句子介绍全部所给的内容3将5个句子组织成连贯的短文[写作内容]步骤一：句子内容完整性

将所给信息整合成5个句子1李莎，女，22岁，1。65米，身材苗条，装扮入时。2性格活泼，爱唱爱跳，爱开玩笑。3教学方法生动活泼，常做游戏，精讲多练。4与学生关系融洽，深受同学欢迎；5常与学生通过电子邮件和网上聊天交流。本题不需要进行信息整合,每一点一句话步骤一：句子内容完整性

将所给信息整合成5个句子1李莎，2.active…likes…playjokes

3.belivelyandinterestingplaygames,notspeakmuch,leavesmoretime4.getonwellwith…,bepopularwith…5.communicatewith..bye-mailorInternet步骤二：句子所需的词汇，短语和句型

李莎，女，英语老师,22岁，1.65米，身材苗条,装扮入时。性格活泼，爱唱爱跳，爱开玩笑。教学方法生动活泼，常做游戏，精讲多练。与学生关系融洽，深受同学欢迎；5.常与学生通过电子邮件和网上聊天交流。beslimandfashionable2.active…likes…playjokes3.：AUniqueTeacher

①LiSha，ourEnglishteacher,isafashionableandslimyounglady,whois22yearsold,and1.65meterstall.②Theactiveteacherlikesdancing,singing，andsheplaysjokeswithus.③Herlessonsareinterestingandlively;sheleavesusmuchtimetopractiseandweoftenplaygamesinclass.④MissLigetsonwellwithusandsheisverypopular.⑤Afterclass,shealsocommunicatewithusbye-mailorInternet.。范文1:步骤三：连词成句，连句成篇：范文1:步骤三：连词成句，连句成篇AUniqueTeacher

①LiSha，ourEnglishteacher,isafashionableandslimyounglady,whois22yearsold,and1.65meterstall.②Theactiveteacherlikesdancing,singingandjoking.③Besides,herlessonsareinteresting,lively;herteachingmethodsarealsoveryunique,duringwhichweoftenplaygames.④Shenevertalksmuchinclass,instead,sheleavesusmuchtimetopractisebyourselves,soallofusareinterestedinherlessons.⑤MissLigetsonwellwiththestudents;shealwayscommunicateswithusbye-mailorInternet.范文2:AUniqueTeacher范文2:步骤四:检查1.时态2.主谓一致3.名词单复数4.单词拼写5.动词的过去式,过去分词6.句子是否完整步骤四:检查1.时态英语写作训练(公开课)课件1.和睦的家庭有利于孩子的个性发展和家人的身心健康。

Aharmoniousfamilyisbeneficialtoourpersonaldevelopmentandourphysicalandmentalhealth.2.和睦的家庭是充满着温暖、爱心和欢笑的；成员间相互关爱、尊重和理解。

Aharmoniousfamilyisalwaysfullofwarmth,loveandlaughterinwhichparentsandchildrennotonlyshowconcernforeachotherbutalsorespectandunderstandeachother.1.和睦的家庭有利于孩子的个性发展和家人的身心健康。3.生长在和睦家庭的孩子性格乐观向上；同时生活在和睦家庭的父母