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中考作文试题分析及毕业班写作教学建议中考作文试题分析及毕业班写作1毕业班写作教学建议一.教会学生写作的步骤，训练学生有序写作毕业班写作教学建议一.教会学生写作的步骤，训练学生有序写作2审列写润查誊ExaminingandconsideringOutliningWritingPolishingCheckingCopyingoutTheWritingSteps审列写润查誊Examiningandconsiderin32016年中考作文原题再现

假如你是张鹏，转学去了杭州。你的好友王新来信询问你的近况，并告诉你他暑假要来看你。请根据以下提示，给王新写一封回信。

写作要点：1.表达你收到他来信后的激动心情。2.介绍新学校。（1）设施：一个大操场，一个图书馆。（2）师生：友善，易于相处。

3.针对他独自乘火车来杭州提出具体建议。次要信息主要信息限制性开放性2014审列写润查誊ExaminingandconsideringOutliningWritingPolishingCheckingCopyingoutTheWritingSteps审列写润查誊Examiningandconsiderin5什么是列提纲？1.把通过审题所获得的信息按照内容有机地分组结合。2.把分组之后的信息按照正常的思维逻辑顺序排序，不强求分段，但建议分段。4.初步确定添加细节的位置。3.确定开放性信息的内容。什么是列提纲？1.把通过审题所获得的信息按照内容有机地分组结62016年中考作文原题再现

假如你是张鹏，转学去了杭州。你的好友王新来信询问你的近况，并告诉你他暑假要来看你。请根据以下提示，给王新写一封回信。

写作要点：1.表达你收到他来信后的激动心情。2.介绍新学校。（1）设施：一个大操场，一个图书馆。（2）师生：友善，易于相处。

3.针对他独自乘火车来杭州提出具体建议。次要信息主要信息限制性开放性2017什么是列提纲？1.把通过审题所获得的信息按照内容有机地分组结合。2.把分组之后的信息按照正常的思维逻辑顺序排序，不强求分段，但建议分段。4.初步确定添加细节的位置。3.确定开放性信息的内容。什么是列提纲？1.把通过审题所获得的信息按照内容有机地分组结8激动，近况操场设施图书馆介绍学校情况友善师生易于相处

暑假来杭州，具体建议激动，近况9什么是列提纲？1.把通过审题所获得的信息按照内容有机地分组结合。2.把分组之后的信息按照正常的思维逻辑顺序排序，不强求分段，但建议分段。4.初步确定添加细节的位置。3.确定开放性信息的内容。什么是列提纲？1.把通过审题所获得的信息按照内容有机地分组结10WordsAPhrasesBSentencesCWriting(写)WordsAPhrasesBSentencesCWritin11Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性）1.Transitionalphrases(使用过渡性词语)2.Universalsentencepatterns(万能句型的使用)3.Synonyms(同义词语的使用）4.Clausesandnon-finiteverbs(从句和非谓语动词的使用)5.Differentsentencepatterns(不同句式的使用）Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性）1.Transit12Information信息Spelling拼写Punctuation标点Grammar语法Checking(查)Information信息Spelling拼写Punctua13Copyingout(誊)NeatwritingCapitalandsmalllettersSpellingPunctuationAfterthat,checkagain!!Copyingout(誊)NeatwritingCapi14毕业班写作教学建议一.教会学生写作的步骤，训练学生有序写作二.在日常的教学中注重积累毕业班写作教学建议一.教会学生写作的步骤，训练学生有序写作二151）词汇的积累2）短语及同义词组的积累3）美文，美句的积累4）话题万能句的积累1）词汇的积累2）短语及同义词组的积累3）美文，美句的积累416Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性）1.Transitionalphrases(使用过渡性词语)表时间：atfirst;atlast;intheend;then;next;afterthatwhen;while;assoonas;not...untilatthesametime;attimes;allthetime表情感：toone'ssurprise/joy;Luckily;Fortunately;Unluckily;UnfortunatelyPolishing(如何增加文章的可读性）1.Transit17Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)表并列：either...or;neither...nor;both...and;notonly...butalso表递进：besides;what'smore;what'sworse;also;inaddition;moreover表原因：because;duetothefactthat...;becauseof;thanksto;duetoPolishing(如何增加文章的可读性)表并列：eithe18Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)

表转折：however;but表举例：forexample;forinstance;suchas;like;thatistosay...表总结：inshort;inaword;lastbutnotleast;ingeneral;generallyspeaking表想法：

Ithink/believe...;inmyopinion;fromthebottomofmyheart;tobehonest;totellthetruth;asweknowPolishing(如何增加文章的可读性)表转折：how19Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)表结果：so;asaresult;therefore;so...that表目的：sothat;inorderto;inorderthat;soasto;for表对比：while;ontheonehand;ontheotherhand;Eachcoinhastwosides;prefer...to...;wouldratherdo...thando...;prefertodo...ratherthando...;prefertodo...insteadofdoing...Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)表结果：so;as20Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)2.Universalsentencepatterns(万能句型的使用)梦想：Iwillworkhardtomakemydreamcometrue.Ihopeyourdreamwillcometrueoneday.时间：Ittakessbsometimetodo.Sbspendsometime(in)doing.It'stimeforsbtodosth.It'sawasteoftimeto...It's...years/dayssincesb+V.edPolishing(如何增加文章的可读性)2.Univers21Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)表做某事如何：It'simportant/necessary/useful/useless/common/interesting...(forsb)todosth.It'sapitythat...It'sgreatfunto/sbhave(has)greatfundoing表某人性格如何去做某事：It'skind/friendly/nice/polite/rude/smart/foolish/generous...ofsbtodosth.It'smyhonor/pleasuretodosth.Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)表做某事如何：It22Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)表喜爱：love;like;enjoy;be____of;care____;be_______in;showgreatinterestin;lose________in;putone'sheartinto...表利弊：begoodfor;be_______to;bebadfor;beharmfulto;do_____to;...have/hasgreat/muchinfluenceonsb;sthbenefit(s)sb;sb________fromsth;affectsb;havean______onsb3.Synonyms(同义词语的使用）fondforinterestedoneselfbeneficialharmbenefit(s)effectPolishing(如何增加文章的可读性)表喜爱：love;23Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)

表决心：makeupone'smind;decidetodo;makea_______todo表困难：havedifficulty/_______/trouble(in)doing/withsth表想要：wanttodo;wouldliketodo;______doing表准备：be/getreadyfor/todo;________fordecisionproblemsfeellikepreparePolishing(如何增加文章的可读性)表决心：mak24Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)Friendscanhelpyouintrouble.4.Clausesandnon-finiteverbs(从句和非谓语动词的使用)Friendsarethepeoplewhocanhelpyouwhenyouareintrouble.Youwillgetsatisfyingmarksinthenextexamwithmysuggestions,anditcanmakeyoubesuretobelessandlessworriedbeforeanexam.Gettingsatisfyingmarks...,youaresuretobe...Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)Friendsc25Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)5.Differentsentencepatterns(不同句式的使用）Youcantrytocommuicatewithyourclosefriends...Whynottrytocommunicatewithyourclosefriends.../Howabouttryingto...Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)5.Differe26Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)You'velearnedsohard,anditisachanceforyoutoshowyourself.You'velearnedsohard,andisn'titachanceforyoutoshowyourself?I'msureyouareconfidentofovercomingyourworriesnow.I'msureyouareconfidentofovercomingyourworriesnow,aren'tyou?Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)You'vele27Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)Youshouldbelieveinyourself.Dobelieveinyourself.Icanunderstandyouareveryworried.Icanunderstandhowworriedyouare.Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)Youshoul28毕业班写作教学建议一.教会学生写作的步骤，训练学生有序写作二.在日常的教学中注重积累三.在日常的教学中加强句型的训练毕业班写作教学建议一.教会学生写作的步骤，训练学生有序写作二29简单句的基本句型

（1）主语+系动词+表语

（2）主语+不及物动词

（3）主语+及物动词+宾语

（4）主语+及物动词+间接宾语+直接宾语

（5）主语+及物动词+宾语+宾语补足语

（6）Therebe句型简单句的基本句型

（1）主语+系动词+表语

（2）主语+不及30造句一句多译Readingisfun.Readingisenjoyable.Readingisapleasure.Readingmakesushappy.Readingoffersusalotoffun.Readingprovidesnotonlyknowledgebutalsofunforus.Wecangetgreatfunbyreadingfrombooks.造句一句多译31主从复合句

（1）宾语从句

（2）状语从句

（3）定语从句主从复合句

32毕业班写作教学建议一.教会学生写作的步骤，训练学生有序写作二.在日常的教学中注重积累三.在日常的教学中加强句型的训练四.进行科学有效的批改和讲评毕业班写作教学建议一.教会学生写作的步骤，训练学生有序写作二331教师批改、学生互批，教师面批

2作文讲评（信息点的完整性，结构顺序的逻辑性，开放性信息点描写的合理性，细节添加的适当性，信息点之间的连贯性，开头结尾衔接的自然性，词法语法的准确性，句子类型的多样性，文字标点书写的标准性。）

3范文呈现1教师批改、学生互批，教师面批34

假如你是王明，转学来到哈尔滨。你的好友张亮来信询问你的近况，告诉他寒假要来看你。请根据以下提示给张亮写封回信。写作要点：

1.表达你收到他来信之后的激动心情。

2.介绍新学校。（1）设施：一个大体育馆，一个拥有10万册藏书的图书馆。（2）师生：友善，易于相处。

3.针对他独自乘火车来哈尔滨提出具体建议。假如你是王明，转学来到哈尔滨。你的好友张亮来信35

Wordscan'texpresshowexcitedIwaswhenhearingfromyou.Imissyouverymuchandeverythinghereisgoingonwell.IhavebeenhereforseveralmonthsandIcan'twaittotellyouwhatmynewschoolislike.Whatpleasesmemostisthatthereisalargegyminmyschool,wherewestudentscanplaysportseveryday.Also,inmyfreetime,Icangotothelibrarywith100,000books.IoftenlosemyselfinthebooksandIenjoythepleasurefromthat.Besides,theteachersandtheclassmatesherearekindandwarm-hearted.It'snothardtogetalongwellwiththem.Tomyjoy,I'vemadeafewgoodfriendslikeyou.I'mhappytohearthatyou'llcomeheretovisitmeinthewinterholiday.I'llshowyouaroundthebeautifulcityandenjoytheiceandsnow.Butremember--Safetycomesfirstwhenyoutravelbytrainalone.You'dbettertakesomethingimportantwithyou,suchasyourIDcardandthetrainticket.You'llbeintroubleiftheyarelost.What'smore,besureofthearrivaltime.Thatcanmakeyougetreadyintimebeforegettingoffthetrainsothatnoluggagecanbeleftonthetrain.Inaword,becarefulofsafetyandyou'llenjoyapleasanttrip.

Wordscan'texpresshowex36Nowordscandescribemyexcitementwhenhearingfromyou.Howtimeflies!Wehaven'tseeneachotherforaboutonemonth.Maybeyou'lleagertoknowmynewlifehereinHarbin.Well,I'mgladtotellyoueverythinggoeswellsoyouneedn'tworryaboutme.Ilikemynewschool,whichhasalargegym.Studentscandomanysportstheresuchasbadminton,basketballandvolleyballwhenwearefree.Asasayinggoes,“Healthisbetterthanwealth.”Youknow,Ilovereading.Thereisalibrarythathasonehundredthousandbooks.Ialwayslosemyselfinthebooks.Theteachersandtheclassmatesherearesofriendlythatwecangetalongwellwitheachother.HowhappyIamwhenhearingthatyou'llcomeinwinterholiday.Sinceit'syourfirsttimeridingatrainalone,you'dbetterlookafteryourself.First,don'ttalkwithstrangerstoomuch.Youshouldn'ttellanyoneyourpersonalinformation.What'smore,preparesomebookswhenyou'reonthetrain.Travelingbyyourselfwillbeboring.Bookswillmakethejourneybetter.Ihopethesetipscanbehelpfultoyou.I'mlookingforwardtoyourcoming.BestwishesNowordscandescribemye37

I'mreallyexcitedafterreceivingyourletter.I'mfinehere.Theteachersandtheclassmatesinmynewschoolareveryfriendlyandtheyareeasytogetalongwellwith.Also,ourschoolthathasabiggymisgreat.Ireallyloveit.Asa“bookworm”,IamhappybecauseIcanlosemyselfinthe100thousandbooksfromthelibraryinmyschool.I'mreallydelightedtoknowthatyou'lltraveltoHarbinbytrainaloneinthewinterholiday.Tohelpyouhaveacomfortableandsafetrip,thefollowingshouldbepaidattentionto.First,makesureofthetime.Gettingtothetrainstationhalfanhourearlierisagoodchoiceincaseyoumissthetrain.Besides,don'tleaveanythingbehindbeforegettingoff.Mostimportantly,don'tforgetyourticket,yourIDcardandremembertowearmorewarmclothes.Lookingforwardtoseeingyouinwintervacation!I'mreallyexcitedafterrec38中考作文试题分析及毕业班写作教学建议中考作文试题分析及毕业班写作39毕业班写作教学建议一.教会学生写作的步骤，训练学生有序写作毕业班写作教学建议一.教会学生写作的步骤，训练学生有序写作40审列写润查誊ExaminingandconsideringOutliningWritingPolishingCheckingCopyingoutTheWritingSteps审列写润查誊Examiningandconsiderin412016年中考作文原题再现

假如你是张鹏，转学去了杭州。你的好友王新来信询问你的近况，并告诉你他暑假要来看你。请根据以下提示，给王新写一封回信。

写作要点：1.表达你收到他来信后的激动心情。2.介绍新学校。（1）设施：一个大操场，一个图书馆。（2）师生：友善，易于相处。

3.针对他独自乘火车来杭州提出具体建议。次要信息主要信息限制性开放性20142审列写润查誊ExaminingandconsideringOutliningWritingPolishingCheckingCopyingoutTheWritingSteps审列写润查誊Examiningandconsiderin43什么是列提纲？1.把通过审题所获得的信息按照内容有机地分组结合。2.把分组之后的信息按照正常的思维逻辑顺序排序，不强求分段，但建议分段。4.初步确定添加细节的位置。3.确定开放性信息的内容。什么是列提纲？1.把通过审题所获得的信息按照内容有机地分组结442016年中考作文原题再现

假如你是张鹏，转学去了杭州。你的好友王新来信询问你的近况，并告诉你他暑假要来看你。请根据以下提示，给王新写一封回信。

写作要点：1.表达你收到他来信后的激动心情。2.介绍新学校。（1）设施：一个大操场，一个图书馆。（2）师生：友善，易于相处。

3.针对他独自乘火车来杭州提出具体建议。次要信息主要信息限制性开放性20145什么是列提纲？1.把通过审题所获得的信息按照内容有机地分组结合。2.把分组之后的信息按照正常的思维逻辑顺序排序，不强求分段，但建议分段。4.初步确定添加细节的位置。3.确定开放性信息的内容。什么是列提纲？1.把通过审题所获得的信息按照内容有机地分组结46激动，近况操场设施图书馆介绍学校情况友善师生易于相处

暑假来杭州，具体建议激动，近况47什么是列提纲？1.把通过审题所获得的信息按照内容有机地分组结合。2.把分组之后的信息按照正常的思维逻辑顺序排序，不强求分段，但建议分段。4.初步确定添加细节的位置。3.确定开放性信息的内容。什么是列提纲？1.把通过审题所获得的信息按照内容有机地分组结48WordsAPhrasesBSentencesCWriting(写)WordsAPhrasesBSentencesCWritin49Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性）1.Transitionalphrases(使用过渡性词语)2.Universalsentencepatterns(万能句型的使用)3.Synonyms(同义词语的使用）4.Clausesandnon-finiteverbs(从句和非谓语动词的使用)5.Differentsentencepatterns(不同句式的使用）Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性）1.Transit50Information信息Spelling拼写Punctuation标点Grammar语法Checking(查)Information信息Spelling拼写Punctua51Copyingout(誊)NeatwritingCapitalandsmalllettersSpellingPunctuationAfterthat,checkagain!!Copyingout(誊)NeatwritingCapi52毕业班写作教学建议一.教会学生写作的步骤，训练学生有序写作二.在日常的教学中注重积累毕业班写作教学建议一.教会学生写作的步骤，训练学生有序写作二531）词汇的积累2）短语及同义词组的积累3）美文，美句的积累4）话题万能句的积累1）词汇的积累2）短语及同义词组的积累3）美文，美句的积累454Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性）1.Transitionalphrases(使用过渡性词语)表时间：atfirst;atlast;intheend;then;next;afterthatwhen;while;assoonas;not...untilatthesametime;attimes;allthetime表情感：toone'ssurprise/joy;Luckily;Fortunately;Unluckily;UnfortunatelyPolishing(如何增加文章的可读性）1.Transit55Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)表并列：either...or;neither...nor;both...and;notonly...butalso表递进：besides;what'smore;what'sworse;also;inaddition;moreover表原因：because;duetothefactthat...;becauseof;thanksto;duetoPolishing(如何增加文章的可读性)表并列：eithe56Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)

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