读后续写之社会温情 焦虑紧张篇课件【教学精研+高效课堂】 高三英语写作专项

读后续写社会温情＋焦虑紧张篇1RReadforthecharactersIacommutertravelingtoworkonthetrainpassengersaprettygirlandherboyfriendayoungwomanandababyotherpassengerssittingnexttomeeveryonewasdoingtheirusualtimeReadforplotsandemotionalchangeseveryonewasdoingtheirusualpeacefulconfusedtenminuteslateranxious,worriednineo'clockam20minuteslaterthetrainstoppedsuddenlythetrainwastrappedinthetunnelbecauseofpowerfailureThehopelesswaitinginthedarknessdroveuscrazycrzayReadfortheconflictsconflictsarearising

thetrainsloweddownandthencametoastand-stillthetraindidn'tmovethepowerfailurehadfailednohopeofgettingtoworkontimethetrainwastrappedinthetunnelandwasgettinghotandstuffy,nocellphonesignalThehopelesswaitinginthedarknessdroveuscrazycare,help,responsibility

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Whattheycareiswhentheycangetoutofthetrouble.Asacommuterwhotraveledtoworkonthetraineveryday,Ithoughtitmydutytodosomething.Readforlanguage

人物和事物活动场景的描写：开心聊天的漂亮女孩和她的男友，年轻的妈妈，突然减速停车的地铁心理活动的描写：利用一般疑问句和suppose的宾语从句，描写在地铁停在隧道中不启动时，乘客们对地铁的突然停运的猜测，表现了乘客们的焦虑和烦躁。描写车厢的氛围，和“我”的心理活动，烘托乘客的焦躁，为续写埋下伏笔Readthe2givensentences推测续写情节Thehopelesswaitinginthedarknessdroveuscrazy.Howwasthesituationinthetrain?Whatdidthepassengersdo?Howcrazilydidtheyreact?想象人在闷热黑暗的环境中的心情？会做什么？描写人物活动的场景才能与原文衔接融洽添加细节描写“我”的所做、所说、所感和其他乘客的所做所说Asacommuter(上班族)whotraveledtoworkonthetraineveryday,Ithoughtitmydutytodosomething.WhatdidIsayanddotohelplessenothers'anxietyandworry?Howdidotherpassengersreact?

Whatwastheresultoftheincident?-------agoodending捕捉和对应原文续写点特定细节和物品原文主题原文首段和结尾漂亮女孩和她的男友，年轻的妈妈和小宝宝在续写部分的人物活动场景中应“出镜”如何减轻乘客们的焦虑是在续写第二段“我”应解决的问题之一冲突继续升级，被困隧道、热、闷、黑暗、手机无信号、无能为力.......，续写一段可写这些因素导致的人们的反应-----crazycrzay的场景：人物的焦躁、愤怒、不耐烦、绝望,担忧等anxiety,annoyance,anger,umpatience,hopelssness,worry平静下来的场景：“我”作出努力后乘客们的场景、地铁重新启动后乘客们的高兴、如释重负等活动场景calmness,happiness，joy,relief添加人物活动场景描写人物活动的场景描写1.炎热，没有新鲜空气使我们焦躁不安，满腹牢骚。Heatandlackoffreshair________________andcomplaintsranthroughus.(无灵主语句）madeusrestless2.站在窗边的人试图把窗打开，让新鲜空气进来，但没有成功。①Those__________________________attemptedtoopenthemtoletinfreshairbutinvain.(定语从句)②Those____________________________attemptedtoopenthemtoletinfreshairbutinvain.（分词做定语）whostoodbythewindows

standingbythewindows3.漂亮女孩既恼火又焦虑，她对她的男朋友皱起了眉头，指责他选择了错误的路线。①______________________________________________________________.Shefrownedatherboyfriend,andblamedhimforselectingthewrongroute.(无灵主语句+神态描写+语言描写)②______________________________________________,theprettygirlfrownedatherboyfriend,blaminghimforselectingthewrongroute.（独立主格结构+非谓语动词做状语）Annoyanceandanxietyswallowed/seized/sewptover/floodedovertheprettygirlAnnoyanceandanxietyswallowing/seizing/sweepingover/floodingoverher4.一些人不耐烦地跺脚，而另一些人则愤怒地捶打着墙。Some__________________whilesomeangrilypoundedonthewall.(动作+副词)5.没想到，那个漂亮的女孩和她的男朋友一听到我唱就和我一起唱起来。____________,theprettygirlandherboyfriendjoinedmeimmediatelytheyheardme.（副词做状语）stampedimpatientlyUnexpectedly然后，越来越多的乘客跟着唱了起来。宝宝不哭了，听着，咯咯地笑起来。Then,moreandmorepassengerssangalong.Thebabystoppedcrying，listened,and_______.giggledagoodending①自然式结尾我们眉开眼笑，灿烂的笑容照亮了整个车厢。Ourfacesbeamedand_________________________.②首尾呼应式结尾每个人脸上都洋溢着欢乐。我知道我会永远记得这不同寻常的一天。Therewascheerineveryface.Iknewthiswouldbe___________________Iwouldalwaysremember.anunusualdayourbrightsmileslitupthetrain③场景+氛围描写式结尾灯光闪烁着，火车慢慢地向下一站驶去。火车上弥漫着一种释然而愉快的气氛。Thelightflashedandthetrainmovedslowlyofftowardsthenextstation.___________________settledover