测评卷作文一+广东一模+-约稿信课件

缺点：1.审题不清楚（直接写成了建议信模板）2.过渡不自然（中间段落）3.自我介绍那句话仍然不熟，导致出错Iamastudent，whostudyinginguangmingnationalschool.4.有一个同学分段，一点一段5.背的句子还是出现单词错误如Herearemysuggestionsasfollow.I’mwrittingthisletter....writting写错suggestions没加s6.缺开头称呼结尾7.内容不够建议：背好模板灵活运用仔细审题写对单词句子写满写漂亮缺点：(周测一）范文：Deareditor，（自我介绍）IamLiHua,astudentstudyinginGuangmingInternationalSchool.（写信背景/原因）Inordertorespondtoprotectingteenagers‘eyesight，ourschoolEnglishnewspaperplanstocallforpapersonthistopic，whichIamextremelyinterestedin.（写信目的）soI’mwrtingtoparticipateinthiswritingcontest.

（与第三点保护视力的建议的过渡）Withthedevelopmentofscienceandtechnology，nearsightednessisbecomingmoreandmorecommonandhavingabadeffectonpeople‘slife，especiallystudentsatyoungage.

Therefore，thewholesocietyaresupposedtotakeactiontoprotectteenagers’eyesight.（引出建议123）

Tobeginwith，bothlocalgovernmentandschoolsshouldpaymoreattentiontoourstudyburden.(周测一）范文：Besides，asstudents，it‘sagoodideathatweshouldtakepartinmoreoutdooractivities，suchasplayingbasketball，runningandsoon.Lastbutnotleast，themostimportantthingisthatwemustcutdownonscreentimeandgetridofaddictiontocomputersorsmartphones.Inaword，onlyinthiswaycanweprotectoureyesightandhaveabrighterfuture.（总结）IsincerelyhopemyessaycanmeetyourqualificationsexactlyandIwouldappreciateitverymuchifyoucanadoptmyarticle.（结合实际的结尾）Besides，asstudents，it‘sagoo广东一模拟作文Deareditor，（自我介绍）IamLiHua,ahighschoolstudentwhoisenthusiasticaboutreadingthenewspaper/journalcalledEnglishMonthlysetupbyourSchool.（写信背景/原因）KnowingourschoolEnglishnewspaperplanstocallforopinions,Iamextremelyinterestedinit.（写信目的）SoI’mwritingtogivemypersonalopinionsonmyfavoritenewspaper.广东一模拟作文Deareditor，

该报的优点：

Inmyopinion,EnglishMonthlyhasmanyadvantages.Foronething,

it’srichincontent,rangingfromeconomytocivilization.Foranother,it’saguidetoEnglishlearning.Throughit,Icanhaveagoodknowledgeofwhat’sgoingonathomeandabroadandI’veimprovedmyEnglishreadingskills.建议：IfonlyyoucouldintroducesomemoreaboutChinesetraditionalcultureandinspirationalstoriesintheculturecolumn/section.Forexample,youcouldintroducemoreChinesefestivals’originsandstoriesaboutthefestivals.Ihopemyopinionscanbeofhelptoyou.HereIreallyhopeEnglishMonthlywillattractmorereaders.该报的优点：Inmyopinion,Engli约稿信是指报纸，杂志，文化栏目等媒体邀请别人写稿的信件。在信中需要介绍该媒体的栏目特点和媒体的受众范围。在约稿时要指定稿件的内容（约稿发起人既可以规定要写作的内容，也可以让被约稿人根据媒体和栏目的性质自己拟定写作题目和内容），并且要约定稿件大致的篇幅和交稿日期。8.约稿信8.约稿信step1写作思路第一段：邀请对方写稿件(或目的)；第二段：介绍栏目或媒体的特点和受众范围。稿件内容，标题。长度和交稿日期。第三段：表达希望得到对方的回复。约稿函约稿函1.我想请你为…写一篇文章______________________2.你可以写一些关于…______________________3.…是很受欢迎的______________________4.它刊登由…写的文章______________________5.你能写点关于…吗？______________________Iwouldliketoaskyoutowriteanarticlefor.Youcanwritesomethingabout…isverypopularamongusstudentsItcarriesarticleswrittenby…常用语块6.我们会特别欢迎有关…的文章。_______________________7.你可以写与…相关的任何东西。_______________________8.约120个词就好。_______________________9.我们在…之前能收到你的文章吗？_______________________10.体育专栏/娱乐专栏_______________________Wouldyoupleasewritesomethingabout…Wewouldespeciallywelcomearticlesabout…Youcanwritesomethingrelevantto…About120wordswouldbefine.11.使某人了解_______________________13.请将文章发送至..._______________________Anarticlewithin400wordswouldbefine.Couldwehaveyourarticlebefore…?sportscolumn/entertainmentcolumnmake/helpsb.knowsth.aboutpleasesendyourcompositionto1.我想请你为…写一篇文章______________Practice注意写作的思路框架Practice假定你是李华，你校英文报“外国文化”栏目拟刊登美国节日风俗和中学生生活的短文。请给美国朋友Peter写信约稿，要点如下：1.栏目介绍。2.稿件内容；3.稿件长度：约400词汇4.交稿日期：4月2日前天注意：1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯的；3.开头语已为你写好。约稿信：写作练习1假定你是李华，你校英文报“外国文化”栏目拟写作练习1要点整合：第一步：邀请对方写稿件(目的)；*我想请你为我校英文报写一篇文章。第二步：介绍栏目或媒体的特点和受众范围。*“外国文化”栏目很受师生欢迎。*它刊登很多外国友人写的关于国外文化的文章。第三步：稿件内容,长度和交稿日期。你能写点美国节日风俗方面的东西吗？我们特别欢迎有关中学生生活的文章。顺便，约400个词就好。我们能在4月2日前收到你的文章吗？第四步：期待回复。spendtheirholidaysandfestivals，thelifeofAmericanhighschoolstudents写作练习1要点整合：第一步：邀请对方写稿件(目的)；DearPeter,

Iwouldliketoaskyoutowriteanarticleforourschool’sEnglishnewspaper.The“ForeignCultures”sectioninournewspaperisverypopularamongusstudents.Itcarriesarticleswrittenbyforeignfriendsabouttheculturesoftheirhomecountries.WouldyoupleasewritesomethingaboutthecultureinyourpartofUnitedStates?AndwewouldespeciallywelcomearticlesabouthowAmericansspendtheirholidaysandfestivalsandtheeverydaylifeofAmericanseniorhighstudents?Youcanwriteanythingrelevantsolongasitisinterestingandinformative.400wordswouldbefine.CouldIhaveyourarticlebeforeApril2nd?

Iamlookingforwardtohearingfromyou.Yours,LiHua参考范文1DearPeter,参考范文1广东一模的词汇1.staff2.crew3.emergencypowersupply4.instead5.makeabigdifference6.immigrant7.landmark8.mainstream9.search10.research11.explore/exploration12.explode/explosion13.beequippedwith14.remotelyoperatedvehicle15.weighsbdown16.liftup17.lightup广东一模的词汇1.staff2.crew3.作者的态度赞成：supportive,approveof/support/infavorof/favorable/agreewith反对：disapprove,disagree,objectto中立：neutral,indifferent怀疑:doubtful,

criticize乐观：positive,optimistic,active消极：negative,pessimistic,passive幽默：humorous羡慕：environs关切：caring不关心的、冷漠的：uncaring,indefferent厌恶：disgusting/hate担忧：concerned/worried失望：disappointed沮丧：upset容忍：tolerant作者的态度赞成：supportive,approveof作文1.一位在、、学习的学生2.为了响应、、

3.征集、、的文章/意见4.减少屏幕时间5.内容丰富，覆盖经济到文化6.掌握国内外发生的事情7.要是你可以在文化专栏中多介绍有关中国传统文化和励志的故事该多好啊！8.我真心地希望我的文章可以很好地达到你的要求！9.它刊登很多外国友人写的关于国外文化的文章10.我们特别欢迎….的文章作文1.一位在、、学习的学生作文1.一位在、、学习的学生astudentstudyingin

2.为了响应、、Inordertorespondtodoing/n

3.征集、、的文章/意见callforpaperson/callforopinions4.减少屏幕时间cutdownonscreentime

5.内容丰富，覆盖经济到文化it’srichincontent,rangingfromeconomytocivilization6.掌握国内外发生的事情haveagoodknowledgeofwhat’sgoingonathomeandabroad

7.要是你可以在文化专栏中多介绍有关中国传统文化和励志的故事该多好啊！IfonlyyoucouldintroducesomemoreaboutChinesetraditionalcultureandinspirational

storiesintheculturecolumn/section

8.我真心地希望我的文章可以很好地达到你的要求！Isincerelyhopemyessaycanmeetyourqualificationsexactly.9.它刊登很多外国友人写的关于国外文化的文章Itcarries/publishedarticleswrittenbyforeignfriendsabouttheculturesoftheirhomecountries.

10.我们特别欢迎….的文章wewouldespeciallywelcomearticlesabout….作文1.一位在、、学习的学生astudentstudyi缺点：1.审题不清楚（直接写成了建议信模板）2.过渡不自然（中间段落）3.自我介绍那句话仍然不熟，导致出错Iamastudent，whostudyinginguangmingnationalschool.4.有一个同学分段，一点一段5.背的句子还是出现单词错误如Herearemysuggestionsasfollow.I’mwrittingthisletter....writting写错suggestions没加s6.缺开头称呼结尾7.内容不够建议：背好模板灵活运用仔细审题写对单词句子写满写漂亮缺点：(周测一）范文：Deareditor，（自我介绍）IamLiHua,astudentstudyinginGuangmingInternationalSchool.（写信背景/原因）Inordertorespondtoprotectingteenagers‘eyesight，ourschoolEnglishnewspaperplanstocallforpapersonthistopic，whichIamextremelyinterestedin.（写信目的）soI’mwrtingtoparticipateinthiswritingcontest.

（与第三点保护视力的建议的过渡）Withthedevelopmentofscienceandtechnology，nearsightednessisbecomingmoreandmorecommonandhavingabadeffectonpeople‘slife，especiallystudentsatyoungage.

Therefore，thewholesocietyaresupposedtotakeactiontoprotectteenagers’eyesight.（引出建议123）

Tobeginwith，bothlocalgovernmentandschoolsshouldpaymoreattentiontoourstudyburden.(周测一）范文：Besides，asstudents，it‘sagoodideathatweshouldtakepartinmoreoutdooractivities，suchasplayingbasketball，runningandsoon.Lastbutnotleast，themostimportantthingisthatwemustcutdownonscreentimeandgetridofaddictiontocomputersorsmartphones.Inaword，onlyinthiswaycanweprotectoureyesightandhaveabrighterfuture.（总结）IsincerelyhopemyessaycanmeetyourqualificationsexactlyandIwouldappreciateitverymuchifyoucanadoptmyarticle.（结合实际的结尾）Besides，asstudents，it‘sagoo广东一模拟作文Deareditor，（自我介绍）IamLiHua,ahighschoolstudentwhoisenthusiasticaboutreadingthenewspaper/journalcalledEnglishMonthlysetupbyourSchool.（写信背景/原因）KnowingourschoolEnglishnewspaperplanstocallforopinions,Iamextremelyinterestedinit.（写信目的）SoI’mwritingtogivemypersonalopinionsonmyfavoritenewspaper.广东一模拟作文Deareditor，

该报的优点：

Inmyopinion,EnglishMonthlyhasmanyadvantages.Foronething,

it’srichincontent,rangingfromeconomytocivilization.Foranother,it’saguidetoEnglishlearning.Throughit,Icanhaveagoodknowledgeofwhat’sgoingonathomeandabroadandI’veimprovedmyEnglishreadingskills.建议：IfonlyyoucouldintroducesomemoreaboutChinesetraditionalcultureandinspirationalstoriesintheculturecolumn/section.Forexample,youcouldintroducemoreChinesefestivals’originsandstoriesaboutthefestivals.Ihopemyopinionscanbeofhelptoyou.HereIreallyhopeEnglishMonthlywillattractmorereaders.该报的优点：Inmyopinion,Engli约稿信是指报纸，杂志，文化栏目等媒体邀请别人写稿的信件。在信中需要介绍该媒体的栏目特点和媒体的受众范围。在约稿时要指定稿件的内容（约稿发起人既可以规定要写作的内容，也可以让被约稿人根据媒体和栏目的性质自己拟定写作题目和内容），并且要约定稿件大致的篇幅和交稿日期。8.约稿信8.约稿信step1写作思路第一段：邀请对方写稿件(或目的)；第二段：介绍栏目或媒体的特点和受众范围。稿件内容，标题。长度和交稿日期。第三段：表达希望得到对方的回复。约稿函约稿函1.我想请你为…写一篇文章______________________2.你可以写一些关于…______________________3.…是很受欢迎的______________________4.它刊登由…写的文章______________________5.你能写点关于…吗？______________________Iwouldliketoaskyoutowriteanarticlefor.Youcanwritesomethingabout…isverypopularamongusstudentsItcarriesarticleswrittenby…常用语块6.我们会特别欢迎有关…的文章。_______________________7.你可以写与…相关的任何东西。_______________________8.约120个词就好。_______________________9.我们在…之前能收到你的文章吗？_______________________10.体育专栏/娱乐专栏_______________________Wouldyoupleasewritesomethingabout…Wewouldespeciallywelcomearticlesabout…Youcanwritesomethingrelevantto…About120wordswouldbefine.11.使某人了解_______________________13.请将文章发送至..._______________________Anarticlewithin400wordswouldbefine.Couldwehaveyourarticlebefore…?sportscolumn/entertainmentcolumnmake/helpsb.knowsth.aboutpleasesendyourcompositionto1.我想请你为…写一篇文章______________Practice注意写作的思路框架Practice假定你是李华，你校英文报“外国文化”栏目拟刊登美国节日风俗和中学生生活的短文。请给美国朋友Peter写信约稿，要点如下：1.栏目介绍。2.稿件内容；3.稿件长度：约400词汇4.交稿日期：4月2日前天注意：1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯的；3.开头语已为你写好。约稿信：写作练习1假定你是李华，你校英文报“外国文化”栏目拟写作练习1要点整合：第一步：邀请对方写稿件(目的)；*我想请你为我校英文报写一篇文章。第二步：介绍栏目或媒体的特点和受众范围。*“外国文化”栏目很受师生欢迎。*它刊登很多外国友人写的关于国外文化的文章。第三步：稿件内容,长度和交稿日期。你能写点美国节日风俗方面的东西吗？我们特别欢迎有关中学生生活的文章。顺便，约400个词就好。我们能在4月2日前收到你的文章吗？第四步：期待回复。spendtheirholidaysandfestivals，thelifeofAmericanhighschoolstudents写作练习1要点整合：第一步：邀请对方写稿件(目的)；DearPeter,

Iwouldliketoaskyoutowriteanarticleforourschool’sEnglishnewspaper.The“ForeignCultures”sectioninournewspaperisverypopularamongusstudents.Itcarriesarticleswrittenbyforeignfriendsabouttheculturesoftheirhomecountries.WouldyoupleasewritesomethingaboutthecultureinyourpartofUnitedStates?AndwewouldespeciallywelcomearticlesabouthowAmericansspendtheirholidaysandfestivalsandtheeverydaylifeofAmericanseniorhighstudents?Youcanwriteanythingrelevantsolongasitisinterestingandinformative.400wordswouldbefine.CouldIhaveyourarticlebeforeApril2nd?

Iamlookingforwardtohearingfromyou.Yours,LiHua参考范文1DearPeter,参考范文1广东一模的词汇1.staff2.crew3.emergencypowersupply4.instead5.makeabigdifference6.immigrant7.landmark8.mainstream9.search10.research11.explore/exploration12.explode/explosion13.beequippedwith14.remotelyoperatedvehicle15.weighsbdown16.liftup17.lightup广东一模的词汇1.staff2.crew3.作者的态度赞成：supportive,app