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如何捕捉和照应原文续写点一、捕捉和照应续写点1.品读原文首段2.提炼原文主题记叙文六要素：时间、地点、人物、起因、经过、结果何人何时何地做了何事，结果如何，为什么写人：本文叙述了…（人），赞扬了…人的…品质；写事：本文叙述了…（事），说明了…道理3.关注特定情节4.留意细节描写：语言、动作、神态、外貌、心理、环境、情感变化5.关注高频词反复出现、重点描写的特定物品6.留意原文结尾：1）起因经过--结果；2）矛盾点/困难点—合理策略解决；3）冲突点—高潮点+结局4）高潮点—结局；5）人物内心冲突的矛盾点/情感点—反转对比7.解读续写所给首句：第二段开头隐含第一段结尾信息二、真题案例【2016.10真题】阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,"I'mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp."andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,JanebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelakeAsshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.1.品读原文首段背景续写点：________________________________________________________________________________________

照应方式：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.提炼原文主题原文主题：__________________________________________________________________________________________照应方式：______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.关注特定情节特定情节续写点：____________________________________________________________________________________照应方式：______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.留意细节描写细节描写续写点：语言：______________________________________________________________________________________________照应：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________动作：______________________________________________________________________________________________照应：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________心理：______________________________________________________________________________________________照应：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.关注高频词高频词续写点：______________________________________________________________________________________照应方式：______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.品读原文结尾原文结尾续写点：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________照应方式：______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________7.解读所给首句所给首句续写点：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________照应方式：______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________习作1Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janestoppedwalkingandleanedagainstatreebythestream.AlthoughitwasalreadyJuly,Janestillfeltverycoldintheforest,andthegurgleofthestreamatnightaddedhercoldandloneliness.IfshehadneverquarreledwithTom,theywouldbeenjoyingtheperfectquietnighttogetherinthewarmtent.Restingherheadonthelapandhuggingherselftightly,Janefellasleep,withtearsstillonhercheeks.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Thenightmareexhaustedher.Kneelingbesidethestream,sherefreshedherselfwiththewater.Aftereatingsomeberries,shemadeherwaytofindthelake.Afteramileorso,fortunately,thesoundofthehelicopterwasheardagain.Janegatheredherstrengthtoclimbarock,wavingheryellowblouse.Tohergreatjoy,thehelicopterdidn'tflyawaythistime.Tomhuggedherasifshewouldgetlostagain.Janesighedinrelief,shewassafewithTom.Sheneedn'tstayintheforestforanothernight.习作2Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.ItwasevenharderforJanetofindthelake.Shestoppedandrestedagainstatreebythestream.“Ishouldn'thavequarreledwithTomaboutthetinythings,”sheregretted.“IfIhadn'twalkedawayangrily,Iwouldn'thavegotlost.”AgainJanelayawakeinthedark,missingTomandherfamily.HerangerwasovertakenbytheloveshefeltforTom.Sheknewhewasconcernedabouthersafetyandwassearchingforher.Gradually,shecalmeddownandfellasleep.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Shebecameenergeticafteranight'ssleep.Aftereatingsomeberries,shemovedontofindthelake.Walkingalongthestream,JanewaswavingheryellowblouseandprayingthatTomwouldfindhersoon.Herprayerwasreallyheard!Tomespottedheryellowblousefromthehelicopter.Tomdashedtohugherassoonasthehelicopterlanded.Theyapologizedtoeachother,forgaveeachotherwithtearsintheireyesandwenthomehappily,planningthenextcampintheforestagain.练习ThreeyearsagoIwasarrangedtoworkforafewweeksasadentistinanewdentalclinicatVictorHarbor,tothesouthofAdelaideandanhourfurtherawaythanmyusualworkplace.Myfirstdaytherewasarush-drivingtoanewandunfamiliarclinicadgettingaccustomedtothedifferentrulesandclinicalenvironment.Inmyworryadanxiety,andfeelingalittleunfamiliarinthenewsetting,Iremovemythreerings:myweddingwring,aringthatbelongedtomymotherandonethatwasananniversarygiftfrommyhusband.Iwrappedtheminatissueandplacedthembesidemycomputer.DuringmylunchbreakInoticedthewrinkledtissueandthoughtthatitdidnotlookveryneataddroppeditintotherubbishbin.Iwentaboutmydutiesandmydaywentonwell;ImetnewpatientsandfeltthatIhadbeenproductiveandefficient.Drivinghomeattheendoftheday,justmomentsbeforeIreachedmyhouse,InoticedthatIwasmissingmyrings.Ifelttheheatinmybodyrise,mychecksburningred.Iwentinsideandtriedtocalmdown.IfeltsicktomystomachandIhadthatsinkingfeelinginmyheart.Ispentanhourorsomakingcalls,tryingtofollowthetrackofmyrings.ThefistpeopleIcalledweremymanagerandclinicalleaderandtheygavemeafewcontactnumbersforcleaners.Igotintouchwithaladywhomanagedthecleaningservicesfortheclinic,andsheinformedmethatthebinshadalreadybeencollected.Heartbroken,Iknewnothingcouldbedonenow.Ihadlostmyweddingringandoneofmymosttreasuredrings--mymother’sweddingring.Haditnotbeenformycarelessness,allthiswouldnothavehappened.Withgreatsorrowandregret,Ijustsatthererootedinmychair,prayingtoGodformyunforgivableguilt.Aftertwoorsohours,Ireceivedamostamazingphonecall.______________________________________________Idecidedtothankthewonderfulpersonfacetoface.____________________________________________________1.原文首段续写点：__________________________________________________________________________________

照应方式：______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2原文主题：_________________________________________________________________________________________照应方式：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.特定情节续写点：______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________照应方式：______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.留意细节描写细节描写续写点：失去戒指后的悲伤：_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________照应：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________对工作环境的情感：_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________照应：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.高频词续写点：____________________________________________________________________________________照应方式：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________原文结尾续写点：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________照应方式：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________7.所给首句续写点所给首句1续写点：___________________________________________________________________________________照应方式：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________所给首句2续写点：___________________________________________________________________________________照应方式：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Aftertwoorsohours,Ireceivedamostamazingphonecall.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________