英语文件-写作笔记

“表达”评判提升表达的途径变换用词Differentpeoplehavedifferentviewsonthismatter.Notionsaboutthismatterdifferwidely.CommentsonthismatterareForexample,Casestothispointareabundant,butthisonewillThefollowingillustrations(Illustrationtocome)arefamiliarandarewithineasyWeshouldrememberthevalueofWeshouldbearinmindthesignificanceof….remember,stand,putupwith,endure,适度省略Haveyoueverthoughtofthefeelingofbeingexposedtovariedoptions?Ifso,youmayunderstandtheawkwardnessofthegroupofgraduatesinthepicture.Inthecartoon,thegroupofgraduatesisfacinguptofourchoices–strivingforfurthereducation,studyingabroad,huntingforajob,orstartingabusiness–ceasingtheirstepsandwonderingwheretoHaveyoueverthoughtofthefeelingofcooperatingwithothers?Ifso,youmayunderstandtheexcitementofthemeninthepicture.Twohandicappedmen,supportingeachother,aremarchingtowardtheircommondestination,leavingtheircrutchesbehind,onwhichtheyusedtorely.变换语序a.Iamwriting,humbly,toextendmygratitudeheartandb.语法倒装部分：Seldom/Scarcelydowepayattentionto…,butthecartoonforcesustohaveadeepinsightinto….完全：地点状语、谓语（移动、处所、主语名词[Undertheridiculousappearanceofthecartoon],liesasimpletruth:c.修辞倒装Emergingfromthecartoonisanironicscenethat…….Exhibitedbythecartoonisasarcasticscenariothat…..Displayedbythecartoonisaninspiringscenariothat…..Portrayedbythecartoonisaninstructivescenariothat…..Depictedbythecartoonis armingscenariothat…..变换成分Agroupofgraduatesarefacinguptofourchoices–strivingforfurthereducation,studyingabroad,huntingforajob,orstartingabusiness–ceasingtheirstepsandwonderingwheretoTwohandicappedmen,supportingeachother,aremarchingtowardtheircommondestination,leavingtheircrutchesbehind,onwhichtheyusedtorely.变换逻辑e.g.Thetimeforsharpeningpencils,arrangingdesks,ratherthanwriting,hasWehavetoWehavenoalternativesbuttoAcanaffectBmostNootherfactorscanaffectBsogreatlyasForexample,ThereshouldbenobetterillustrationsthanthefollowingIcanfigureoutnobetterdemonstrationthanthefollowing使用问句forAren’tthefollowingcasesconvincing?Willnotthefollowingcasessuffice?ArethereanyothercasesmoreconvincingthanthisThereareseveralstepstobetaken.Firstly,….Secondly,….Onlyinthisway,canweachieveabrighterfuture.Howcanwestepoutoftheshadow?….Howcanwecrackthishardnut?Weshouldputanendtothisproblem,but简单修辞拟Whenthegreenhousewasremoved,theflowerwasswallowedbytheTheycrazystormtearsuptheflowerwhenitismovedawayfromthe比明喻、暗喻、借喻、提喻Lazinessisamillstone,killingoffouryouth排回Youdon’thavetobegreattostart,butyouhavetostarttobeWearelivinginasocietyinwhiutualassistanceisAvolunteerhelagrandpa[inaAseat-lendersupportingapregnantlady[inaAkid-defenderrescuingahomelesschild[inaDoyourememberallthoseyearswhenscientistsarguedthatsmokingwouldkillusbutthedoubtersinsistedthatwedidn’tknowforsure?Thattheevidencewasinconclusive,thescience?LotsofAmericansboughtthatnonsense,andoverthreedecades,some10millionsmokerswenttoearlygraves.避免明显的错误方案一基调

第一段简要描述，略微引Portrayedinthecartoonis scenethatEmergingfromthecartoonis scenariothatUndertheamusing/ridiculousappearanceliesasocialphenomenonthat相关细节（变换成分引ThecartoonistisremindingallofusthatBythismetaphor,theauthorofthecartoonwarningthecharactersinthepicture,aswellasallofus,that….Sample(1)Emergingfromthecartoonisanironicscenethatcollegestudentsaretopassexaminationsbyanymeans.(2)Thefirstlinereads“therewouldbenoupgradewithoutcheatinginexams”,whilethesecondlinebears“theypreferdecentscorestotheirdignity”.(3)ThecartoonistiswarningusthatstudentsinmountingnumbersnolongercherishthevirtueofThehorizontalHefangPreferAtoBDecentscorerow/Thefirstplanto…betodo….Sample(1)Emergingfromthecartoonisarmingscenethat(2)holdingagunandhidinginthebush,heisstaringattheskywherehumanbeingsaresoaring,toshootpeopleforrevenge.(3)Thecartoonistiswarningusthatwemaypayapriceforwhatwedidwiththenature.whatwedowith方案二反问共鸣细节SampleHaveyoueverthoughtofthefeelingofbeingattacked?（2）Ifso,youmayunderstandtheangerofthebirdinthepicture.(3)Inthecartoon,holdingagun,hidinginthebush,andstaringatthesky,he,whosepeersoncewerehuntedbyhuman,istoshootpeopleforrevenge.SampleHaveyoueverthoughtofthefeelingofacceptingorofferingassistancefromortoIfso,youmayunderstandthewarmthfeltbytwomeninthepicture.(3)Inthecartoon,aMr.“Help-Provider”isofferingwhathecould,inhismindwhatheshould,whileaMr.“Help-Accepter”isextendinghisgratitudeheartandsoul,whichisreallyasceneofgreatSample（1）Haveyoueverthoughtofthefeelingoffacingtheexaggerationofthepowerofmoneyabig-fish?（2）Ifso,youmayunderstandthesorrowoftheshopclerkinthepicture.(3)Inthecartoon,awealthyguyintendtobuy“health,happiness,orfame”withmoney.Beingtoldthattheseitemsarenotforsale,heinsiststooffermoremoney,whiakestheclerkembarrassed.(1)Emergingfromthecartoonisathough-provokingscenariothat(2)awealthyguyintendtobuy“health,happiness,orfame”withmoney.Beingtoldthattheseitemsarenotforsale,heinsiststooffermoremoney,whichmakestheclerkembarrassed.(3)Bythismetaphor,theauthorofthecartooniswarningtherichman,aswellasallofus,thatweshouldneverexaggeratethepowerofmoney.方案一：化立论为驳论陈旧观点

第二段点明寓意，原因影响范ItusedtobeacceptedthatItoncewasimaginedbymanythatItoncewasa“conventionalwisdom”thatA“conventionalwisdom”oncehaditthat提出质疑Now,however,isthisviewstilltheCurrently,though,isthisviewstillAtthetimebeing,yet,isthispointofviewstillPresently,nevertheless,isthiscommentstill充实论据Casesagainstthepointareabundant,butthisonewillCasesagainstthepointareabundantandarewithineasyIs(Are)notthefollowcase(s)sufficienttoagainstthetraditional得出结论(-)Evidently,…has eastoryofthepast.Thelossof…ispoisonousto…,letaloneto….(+)Evidently,…has eastoryofthepast.Therevivalof…iselevatingto…,nottomentionto….Sample(1)Itusedtobeacceptedbymanythatnoothergroupsinthewideworldcanbesohonestascollegestudnets.(2)Now,however,isthisviewstillvalid?(3)Casesagainstthispointareabundant,butthisonewillsuffice.Itisnotsurprisingtoseesomecandidatesgesturing,whispering,andevendeliveringkeysbymobilephonesduringexaminations.(4)Evidently,students’honestyhas eastoryofthepast.Thelossoffaithfulnessispoisonoustothequalityofcurrenteducation,letalonetofutureofthem.Seesb.ng（scripts,peek,gesture,whisper,baidu,,mobilephone,无线耳机Sample(1)Itusedtobeacceptedbymanythatwearelivinginasocietywherethesenseofenvironment-protectionispervasive.(2)Now,however,isthisviewstillvalid?(3)Casesagainstthispointareabundant,butthisonewillsuffice.Itisnotsurprisingtoseesomefolksshootingwildanimalsforfun,cookingthemforfood,andevensellingthemforprofit.(4)Evidently,theattentiontoourenvironmenthas eastoryofthepast.Thelossoftheattentionispoisonoustothebalanceoftheecologicalsystem,letalonetooursurvivalinthefuture.Some方案二：化苍白为哲理哲理引入Whatthecartoonconveyscanbesummarizedasamotto/principle/doctrine:Whatawisemanonceputcanbetheimplicationofthecartoon:Theimplicationofthecartooncan edasasimpletruth:阐释哲理Thatis,Inotherwords,Or,putanotherway,Simplystateit,充实论据:范例、原因、影响、数据、对比得出结论：借图中角色道明结论Nowonderthe…inthepictureSample(1)Whatawisemanonceputhappenstobetheimplicationofthecartoon:“thenaturemaytreatusthewaywedo”.(2)Inotherword,itmayrewardusifweareonharmonywithit,whilemaypunishusifwemistreatit.(3)Thepastdecadehaswitnessedexcessiveexploitationofnaturalresources,whichtriggerstheexhaustionoftheseresources,inturntherocketingofourlivingcost.(4)Nowonderthebirdinthepictureiswarningusthatdon’tcommitsuchmisconductsanymore.Not…anymore.CommitmisdeedsRunoutofTheincreaseofourlivingcostThesoaringofourlivingcostSample(1)Whatawisemanonceputhappenstobetheimplicationofthecartoon:“labormakeshuman,andmutualassistancemakeshumansociety”.(2)Inotherwords,anyone,withoutsupportfromothers,canhardlyleadanormallife.(3)Thepastdecadehaswitnessedtherevivaloftheatmosphereofmutualhel,whichevokesimprovedinter alrelationship,inturnasocietyofgreatharmony.(4)NowonderthesetwomeninthepictureareremindingusthatneverhesitatetolendahellendahelhandTakegoodcareofitGetonwellwithitBeongoodtermwithitBeonharmonywithitleadtoresultingiveriseto

第三段结合上文论调，态度决心对策A社会弊病、生态环境（对策）控制点：内控、外控从外控内外控：Correspondinglawsandregulations/disciplinesandschoolregulationsshouldbecarriedout.Officialintervention/InterventionfromschoolauthoritiesshouldbecastonPenaltiesorfinesshouldemployed/enacted/activatedNewsocialnormsshouldbesetup/Supervisionfrommassmediashouldbeputon内控：self-discipline/self-restriction/self-theawarenessof…shouldbeadvocatedbythemassTherightattitudetoward…shouldbecultivated/nurturedbyfamilies,schools,orsocialadministrations.决外内展(1)Wearesupposedtodrawtheproblemofeco-destructiontoanend,buthow?(2)Itissuggestedbymanythatweareinneedofapackagedeal,involvinglawsandregulationsconcerningourenvironment,interventionfromenvironmentgroups,andpenaltiesorfines.(3)Itisaway,butanineffectiveway.Actually,wealsoneedtheawareness–advocatedbymassmedia–thatwewouldbehomelessifwemistreattheearth,ouronlyhome.(4)Withthesemeasuresreinforcingeachother,wewillputanendtotheproblem.B社会风尚、箴言哲理（态度疑启决计(1)IusedtowonderandponderwhetherIshouldhelpothersatthecostofmyowntimeandenergy?(2)Withtheenlightenmentfromthepicture-itisavirtuetoassistotherswithoutanyhesitation,(3)Iamdeterminedtosparenoefforttoofferhelptothosewhoareinneed.(4)Specifically,Iamtoenriyknowledge,enhancemysocialabilities,andbereadytoprovidewhatIcouldtoanyoneeagerforhelp.图表作文段落框架第一段：图表趋势，具体变化第二段：原因分析，具体阐释第三段：个人态度，前景展望(1)Emergingfromthecolumnchartarethesignificantchangesin…(2)Tobespecific,thepast…yearshaswitnessedtherapidincreasein…,(3)whichwas panied(followed)bythedropof….(1)Itwaswidelysharedthatthesechangesweremainlycausedby….(2)However,arethesefactorscomprehensiveenoughtoexplainthechanges?Actually,…isthemajorcontributingfactor.(3)Inthepast…years,…,whichnotonlybroughtthem…,butalsohelpedto….(1)Iusedtowonderandponderwhether….(2)Withtheenlightenmentfromthechart-…,Icanforeseethatweareto….Emergingfromthecolumnchartarethesignificantchangesinthemarketshareofcarindustry.Tobespecific,thepasttwoyearshaswitnessedtherapidincreaseinthesharetakenbydomesticcarbrands,whichwas paniedbythedropofshareownedbyJapanesecarbrands.ItwaswidelysharedthatthesechangesweremainlycausedbyJapaneseprice-disadvantagesandrecall-crisis.However,arethesefactorscomprehensiveenoughnowtoexplainthechanges?Actually,thedevelopmentofChinesecarindustryisthemajorcontributingfactor.Inthepasttwentyyears,Ch