高中英语高考写作研讨会《MakingYourWritingExcellent-书面表达是提高分数最大的潜力股》课件

MakingYourWritingExcellentYongkangNo.2MiddleSchool张秀军——书面表达是提高分数最大的潜力股MakingYourWritingExcellentY1高中英语高考写作研讨会《MakingYourWritingExcellent——书面表达是提高分数最大的潜力股》课件2高中英语高考写作研讨会《MakingYourWritingExcellent——书面表达是提高分数最大的潜力股》课件3高中英语高考写作研讨会《MakingYourWritingExcellent——书面表达是提高分数最大的潜力股》课件4Whatmakesagoodcomposition?Whatmakesagoodcomposition?5一篇好文章包含：1.含盖所有要点2.用词地道、老练3.句型丰富、多变4.表达通顺、流畅5.行文连贯、逻辑性强一篇好文章包含：6例：书面表达最近，学校收发室（mailroom）负责人反映：每天送到学校的邮件中，很多包裹里装的都是学生从网上购买的东西，有食物、书籍和衣服等。假设你是李越，请就这一现象写一封信给校长。信中应包括以下要点：1、说明写信的目的；2、对这一行为进行评价；3、提出建议。DearMr.Headmaster,IamLiYue,astudentfromClass1,SeniorIII.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

例：书面表达7三原则语言第一位（语言高级）内容第二位（要点齐全）结构第三位（过渡连贯）一、用词准确恰当二、高级词汇和句式三、有效的连词语言第一位（语言高级）地道、漂亮三原则语言第一位（语言高级）内容第二位（要点齐全）结构第三位8Ithinkyoushouldmakelawstobanthesethings.Onlyinthiswaycantheyattachimportancetothisevent.I’dlovetomakeasuggestionthatyoumakesomerulestobanstudentsfromshoppingonlineatschool.Ithinkyoushouldmakelaws91.I’mgladtowritetoyouaboutthetruthbecausetheworkerintheschoolmailroomcomplainsthattherearetoomanypackageseveryday.准确使用高级词汇和同位语从句好problemI’mwritingtoyouI’mwritingtodrawyourattentiontotheproblem/phenomenon/issue

thatmanystudentsshoponlineandgettheirparcelssenttotheschool.says1.I’mgladtowritetoyouab10___________________yougetuptooearlyandstayuptoolate.Thereisnoneedthat用同位语从句翻译：你没必要晚睡早起。___________________yougetup112.Therearehundredsofparcelswhichincludefood,booksandclothesanditincreaseshispressureofworking.Hundredsofparcelscontainingfood,booksandclothesaredeliveredtoourschoolanditmustbeamuchheavierburdentothepersonincharge.正确使用分词，句型灵活妙containpressureontheworkerinthemailroom2.Therearehundredsofparce12Themoontravelsroundtheearthonceeverymonth.Themoonisanaturalsatelliteoftheearth.Themoon，travelingroundtheearthonceeverymonth，isanaturalsatelliteoftheearth.用分词合并Themoontravelsroundtheear133.AsweallknowthattheInternetispopularinourdailylife.What’smore,shoppingonlineispopular,too.Shoppingonlineisbecomingmoreandmorepopularwithaneasieraccesstotheinternetthesedays.避免无用的套话，以求表达新奇,__________3.AsweallknowthattheInt14

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我们学校周围种了很多花和树，吸引了大量的学生来参观。______________________________________________,itattractsalargenumberofpeople.with复合结构Withsomanytreesandflower15Thereisnodoubtthatstudentswillspendmoretimeinmakingcommentsonwhatthey’veboughtonlineinsteadofwhatthey’velearntabouttheirsubjects.4.Ofcourse,studentswillspendmoretimeinhavingcommentsonshoppingonlineinsteadofstudy运用名词性从句，使句子增靓makingThereisnodoubtthatstudent16Hiswonderfulperformanceonthestageimpressedme.

mostwashiswonderfulperformanceonthestage.Whatimpressedme用名词性从句合并Hiswonderfulperformanceont175.Becausethiswayofshoppingisconvenient.Peoplecouldnotgooutbutalsocanbuytheirfavouritethings.灵活运用强调句和复合句好Itisconvenienttoshoponline,sothattheycanalsobuywhattheyneedwithoutgoingout.Itistheconvenienceofshoppingonlinethatmakesitpossibleforpeopletobuywhattheyneedwithoutgoingout5.Becausethiswayofshoppin186.Whenshoppingonline,wemightwastelotsoftimechoosingthegoods.Lotsoftimeislikelytobewastedonchoosingthemostdesirableonefromhundredsofitems.一句多译，丰富、多变Itmaytakealotoftimetoshoponlineforwhatappealstous.6.Whenshoppingonline,wemi197.Weshouldn’tignoretheshortcomingofshoppingonlinealthoughit’sconvenienttobuygoods.Nomatterhowconvenientitistodoshoppingonline,itsshortcomingsshouldneverbeignored.灵活运用被动语态、让步状语从句妙7.Weshouldn’tignorethesho208.Ihopeourschoolwillbecomebetterandbetter.Ihopeallstudentswillbefreefromshoppingonlineandtheschoolwillbeamorepeacefulandharmoniousplace.避免中文式英语，使用下位词准确细腻8.Ihopeourschoolwillbeco219.Ihopeyoucancomeupthisproblemtoeveryonesothattheycanrealizethedamageofshoppingonlineandthisproblemcanbesolved.Ihopeeverybodywillbeawareoftheseriousnessoftheproblemandapracticalsolutiontoitwillbefound

eventually.准确使用词汇、短语好makethisproblemknown9.Ihopeyoucancomeupthis22Personally,Ithinkitwouldbefavorabletoforbidstudentsfromsigningforparcelsatschooloronlytoallowthemtogetacertainnumberofparcelseachterm.10.Ithinktolimitthestudentstobuythings.Howmanymailsastudentcanreceiveonaterm.细节难点，考虑周全Personally,Ithinkitwouldb23Wecan’taffordtotakenonoticeofthebadeffectsofshoppingonlineonstudentssinceitwastestimeanddoesdamagetooureyeswhilebrowsingtheinformationaboutthegoods.11.Thereisbadeffectforstudentsshoppingonline.Firstly,whentheysurfontheInternet,itwastestimetosearchforwhatintereststhem.合理使用连词，使结构紧凑Shoppingonlinehasbadeffectsonstudents.Firstly,whentheysurfontheInternet,itwastestimetosearchforwhatintereststhem.Wecan’taffordtotakenonot2412.Ibelievethatwestudentsshoponlinewillwasteourlimitedtimewhichshouldbefullusedinstudy.Iholdtheviewthatwhileshoppingonline,wewilldefinitelywasteourlimitedtimewhichshouldbemadefulluseoftostudy.灵活运用短语和分词，句子变美shoppingfullyto12.Ibelievethatwestudents25I’mwritingtodrawyourattentiontothephenomenonthatmanystudentsshoponlineandgettheirparcelssenttotheschool.______,Shoppingonlineisbecomingmoreandmorepopularwithaneasieraccesstotheinternet.Ithasuniqueadvantagesasitisconvenientandtime-saving.Inmanystudents’eyes,shoppingonlineisafashionablelifestyleanditseemsonlyinthiswaycantheykeepupwiththetimes._______,nomatterhowconvenientitistobuygoodsonline,theshortcomingsofshoppingonlineshouldneverbeignored._____,it’snotsafe,especiallyforusyoungstudents.

What’smoreInbriefTomakemattersworseAsaresultAtthesametimeAsweallknowHoweverTostartwithI’mwritingtodrawyour26_____,wecan’tfocusenoughattentiononstudywhilespendinglotsoftimeshoppingonline.______,staringatthescreenforalongtimemaydodamagetooureyes._____,students’shoppingonlineatschooldoesmoreharmthangood.______,itisstronglysuggestedthatyoubanstudentsfromshoppingonlinewithmobilephonesandtheparcelsbesenttotheirhome._______,therelevantparentsmustbeinformedoftheirchildren’sbadbehaviour.Onlywhenwemakejointefforts,canwesolvetheproblem.What’smoreInbriefTomakemattersworseAsaresultAtthesametimeAsweallknowHoweverTostartwith_____,wecan’tfocusenougha27但是值得提醒的是，同学们在使用复杂的句型和结构时，要有把握能正确地表达；也要注意分寸，应根据书面表达的内容和篇章结构而定，做到地道得体，千万不能生搬硬套，画蛇添足。多看多背多模仿多翻译但是值得提醒的是，同学们在使用复杂的句型和结构时，要有把握能28饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国符合国家和国际撒的方大哥给飞得更高是个搜狗是归属感是搞后呵呵敢死队敢死队敢死队好地方个地方豆腐花哈哈动画的发挥和家具风格就国防军广泛几个房间房管局房管局法国加工费交付给交付给交付给警方根据高房价法国警方交付给饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国29饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国符合国家和国际撒的方大哥给飞得更高是个搜狗是归属感是搞后呵呵敢死队敢死队敢死队好地方个地方豆腐花哈哈动画的发挥和家具风格就国防军广泛几个房间房管局房管局法国加工费交付给交付给交付给警方根据高房价法国警方交付给饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国30饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国符合国家和国际撒的方大哥给飞得更高是个搜狗是归属感是搞后呵呵敢死队敢死队敢死队好地方个地方豆腐花哈哈动画的发挥和家具风格就国防军广泛几个房间房管局房管局法国加工费交付给交付给交付给警方根据高房价法国警方交付给饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国31饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国符合国家和国际撒的方大哥给飞得更高是个搜狗是归属感是搞后呵呵敢死队敢死队敢死队好地方个地方豆腐花哈哈动画的发挥和家具风格就国防军广泛几个房间房管局房管局法国加工费交付给交付给交付给警方根据高房价法国警方交付给饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国32饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国符合国家和国际撒的方大哥给飞得更高是个搜狗是归属感是搞后呵呵敢死队敢死队敢死队好地方个地方豆腐花哈哈动画的发挥和家具风格就国防军广泛几个房间房管局房管局法国加工费交付给交付给交付给警方根据高房价法国警方交付给饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国33饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国符合国家和国际撒的方大哥给飞得更高是个搜狗是归属感是搞后呵呵敢死队敢死队敢死队好地方个地方豆腐花哈哈动画的发挥和家具风格就国防军广泛几个房间房管局房管局法国加工费交付给交付给交付给警方根据高房价法国警方交付给饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国34饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国符合国家和国际撒的方大哥给飞得更高是个搜狗是归属感是搞后呵呵敢死队敢死队敢死队好地方个地方豆腐花哈哈动画的发挥和家具风格就国防军广泛几个房间房管局房管局法国加工费交付给交付给交付给警方根据高房价法国警方交付给饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国35饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国符合国家和国际撒的方大哥给飞得更高是个搜狗是归属感是搞后呵呵敢死队敢死队敢死队好地方个地方豆腐花哈哈动画的发挥和家具风格就国防军广泛几个房间房管局房管局法国加工费交付给交付给交付给警方根据高房价法国警方交付给饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国36饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国符合国家和国际撒的方大哥给飞得更高是个搜狗是归属感是搞后呵呵敢死队敢死队敢死队好地方个地方豆腐花哈哈动画的发挥和家具风格就国防军广泛几个房间房管局房管局法国加工费交付给交付给交付给警方根据高房价法国警方交付给饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国37饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国符合国家和国际撒的方大哥给飞得更高是个搜狗是归属感是搞后呵呵敢死队敢死队敢死队好地方个地方豆腐花哈哈动画的发挥和家具风格就国防军广泛几个房间房管局房管局法国加工费交付给交付给交付给警方根据高房价法国警方交付给饭卡打开巴士风格反对广泛的的非官是大苏打发的发非官方共和国38MakingYourWritingExcellentYongkangNo.2MiddleSchool张秀军——书面表达是提高分数最大的潜力股MakingYourWritingExcellentY39高中英语高考写作研讨会《MakingYourWritingExcellent——书面表达是提高分数最大的潜力股》课件40高中英语高考写作研讨会《MakingYourWritingExcellent——书面表达是提高分数最大的潜力股》课件41高中英语高考写作研讨会《MakingYourWritingExcellent——书面表达是提高分数最大的潜力股》课件42Whatmakesagoodcomposition?Whatmakesagoodcomposition?43一篇好文章包含：1.含盖所有要点2.用词地道、老练3.句型丰富、多变4.表达通顺、流畅5.行文连贯、逻辑性强一篇好文章包含：44例：书面表达最近，学校收发室（mailroom）负责人反映：每天送到学校的邮件中，很多包裹里装的都是学生从网上购买的东西，有食物、书籍和衣服等。假设你是李越，请就这一现象写一封信给校长。信中应包括以下要点：1、说明写信的目的；2、对这一行为进行评价；3、提出建议。DearMr.Headmaster,IamLiYue,astudentfromClass1,SeniorIII.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

例：书面表达45三原则语言第一位（语言高级）内容第二位（要点齐全）结构第三位（过渡连贯）一、用词准确恰当二、高级词汇和句式三、有效的连词语言第一位（语言高级）地道、漂亮三原则语言第一位（语言高级）内容第二位（要点齐全）结构第三位46Ithinkyoushouldmakelawstobanthesethings.Onlyinthiswaycantheyattachimportancetothisevent.I’dlovetomakeasuggestionthatyoumakesomerulestobanstudentsfromshoppingonlineatschool.Ithinkyoushouldmakelaws471.I’mgladtowritetoyouaboutthetruthbecausetheworkerintheschoolmailroomcomplainsthattherearetoomanypackageseveryday.准确使用高级词汇和同位语从句好problemI’mwritingtoyouI’mwritingtodrawyourattentiontotheproblem/phenomenon/issue

thatmanystudentsshoponlineandgettheirparcelssenttotheschool.says1.I’mgladtowritetoyouab48___________________yougetuptooearlyandstayuptoolate.Thereisnoneedthat用同位语从句翻译：你没必要晚睡早起。___________________yougetup492.Therearehundredsofparcelswhichincludefood,booksandclothesanditincreaseshispressureofworking.Hundredsofparcelscontainingfood,booksandclothesaredeliveredtoourschoolanditmustbeamuchheavierburdentothepersonincharge.正确使用分词，句型灵活妙containpressureontheworkerinthemailroom2.Therearehundredsofparce50Themoontravelsroundtheearthonceeverymonth.Themoonisanaturalsatelliteoftheearth.Themoon，travelingroundtheearthonceeverymonth，isanaturalsatelliteoftheearth.用分词合并Themoontravelsroundtheear513.AsweallknowthattheInternetispopularinourdailylife.What’smore,shoppingonlineispopular,too.Shoppingonlineisbecomingmoreandmorepopularwithaneasieraccesstotheinternetthesedays.避免无用的套话，以求表达新奇,__________3.AsweallknowthattheInt52

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我们学校周围种了很多花和树，吸引了大量的学生来参观。______________________________________________,itattractsalargenumberofpeople.with复合结构Withsomanytreesandflower53Thereisnodoubtthatstudentswillspendmoretimeinmakingcommentsonwhatthey’veboughtonlineinsteadofwhatthey’velearntabouttheirsubjects.4.Ofcourse,studentswillspendmoretimeinhavingcommentsonshoppingonlineinsteadofstudy运用名词性从句，使句子增靓makingThereisnodoubtthatstudent54Hiswonderfulperformanceonthestageimpressedme.

mostwashiswonderfulperformanceonthestage.Whatimpressedme用名词性从句合并Hiswonderfulperformanceont555.Becausethiswayofshoppingisconvenient.Peoplecouldnotgooutbutalsocanbuytheirfavouritethings.灵活运用强调句和复合句好Itisconvenienttoshoponline,sothattheycanalsobuywhattheyneedwithoutgoingout.Itistheconvenienceofshoppingonlinethatmakesitpossibleforpeopletobuywhattheyneedwithoutgoingout5.Becausethiswayofshoppin566.Whenshoppingonline,wemightwastelotsoftimechoosingthegoods.Lotsoftimeislikelytobewastedonchoosingthemostdesirableonefromhundredsofitems.一句多译，丰富、多变Itmaytakealotoftimetoshoponlineforwhatappealstous.6.Whenshoppingonline,wemi577.Weshouldn’tignoretheshortcomingofshoppingonlinealthoughit’sconvenienttobuygoods.Nomatterhowconvenientitistodoshoppingonline,itsshortcomingsshouldneverbeignored.灵活运用被动语态、让步状语从句妙7.Weshouldn’tignorethesho588.Ihopeourschoolwillbecomebetterandbetter.Ihopeallstudentswillbefreefromshoppingonlineandtheschoolwillbeamorepeacefulandharmoniousplace.避免中文式英语，使用下位词准确细腻8.Ihopeourschoolwillbeco599.Ihopeyoucancomeupthisproblemtoeveryonesothattheycanrealizethedamageofshoppingonlineandthisproblemcanbesolved.Ihopeeverybodywillbeawareoftheseriousnessoftheproblemandapracticalsolutiontoitwillbefound

eventually.准确使用词汇、短语好makethisproblemknown9.Ihopeyoucancomeupthis60Personally,Ithinkitwouldbefavorabletoforbidstudentsfromsigningforparcelsatschooloronlytoallowthemtogetacertainnumberofparcelseachterm.10.Ithinktolimitthestudentstobuythings.Howmanymailsastudentcanreceiveonaterm.细节难点，考虑周全Personally,Ithinkitwouldb61Wecan’taffordtotakenonoticeofthebadeffectsofshoppingonlineonstudentssinceitwastestimeanddoesdamagetooureyeswhilebrowsingtheinformationaboutthegoods.11.Thereisbadeffectforstudentsshoppingonline.Firstly,whentheysurfontheInternet,itwastestimetosearchforwhatintereststhem.合理使用连词，使结构紧凑Shoppingonlinehasbadeffectsonstudents.Firstly,whentheysurfontheInternet,itwastestimetosearchforwhatintereststhem.Wecan’taffordtotakenonot6212.Ibelievethatwestudentsshoponlinewillwasteourlimitedtimewhichshouldbefullusedinstudy.Iholdtheviewthatwhileshoppingonline,wewilldefinitelywasteourlimitedtimewhichshouldbemadefulluseoftostudy.灵活运用短语和分词，句子变美shoppingfullyto12.Ibelievethatwestudents63I’mwritingtodrawyourattentiontothephenomenonthatmanystudentsshoponlineandgettheirparcelssenttotheschool.______,Shoppingonlineisbecomingmoreandmorepopularwithaneasieraccesstotheinternet.Ithasuniqueadvantagesasitisconvenientandtime-saving.Inmanystudents’eyes,shoppingonlineisafashionablelifestyleanditseemsonlyinthiswaycantheykeepupwiththetimes._______,nomatterhowconvenientitistobuygoodsonline,theshortcomingsofshoppingonlineshouldneverbeignored._____,it’snotsafe,especiallyforusyoungstudents.

What’smoreInbriefTomakemattersworseAsaresultAtthesametimeAsweallknowHoweverTostartwithI’mwritingtodrawyour64_____,wecan’tfocusenoughattentiononstudywhilespendinglotsoftimeshoppingonline.______,staringatthescreenforalongtimemaydodamagetooureyes._____,students’shoppingonlineatschooldoesmoreharmthangood.______,itisstronglysuggestedthatyoubanstudentsfromshoppingonlinewithmobilephonesandtheparcelsbesenttotheirhome._______,therelevantparentsmustbeinformedoftheirchildren’sbadbehaviour.Onlywhenwemakejointefforts,canwesolvetheproblem.What’smoreInbriefTomakemattersworseAsaresultAtthesametimeAsweallknowHoweverTostartwith_____,wecan’tfocusenougha65但是值得提醒的是，同学们在使用复杂的句型和结构时，要有把握能正确地表达；也