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浙江省5年10次高考英语作文启示（2016---2021）8次续写2016.10丛林冒险（迷路）；2017.6狼口脱险（公路、骑车）；2017.11家庭旅行（驾车、帐篷）；2018.6骑马迷路（农场）；2020.1家庭亲情（小狗）；2020.7熊爪余生（研究基地、拍照）;2021.1南瓜卡头（万圣节）；2021.6家庭责任（打工赚钱）2次概要2018.11在申请大学前参观大学；2019.6父母如何适当表扬孩子；总结：考续写的可能性大，概要的可能性小；概要的得分较低；同一届两次作文形式会保持一致。小说三要素：人物character,情节plot,背景setting细节描写：动作描写，情感描写，心理描写，对话描写，环境描写细节描写语言服务于主题（动作、情感、心理、对话、环境等）语言风格尽可能与原文协同（词汇、句式等）细节语言描写微技能（原那么）:一.具体而非笼统WalkWander,stroll（漫步，闲逛）limp（一痛一拐地走）Stagger/stumble（蹒跚地走）tiptoe（踮起脚走）Stride（大踏步走）e.g.Hewassodrunkthathestaggeredallthewayhome.他喝醉了，一路摇摇晃晃地走回家。Shestumbledupstairsandintobed.她跌跌撞撞地上楼上床睡觉。Shetiptoedtothebedsoasnottowakethebaby.她踮起脚走到床前，以免吵醒婴儿。Theyenjoystrollingthroughthecountryside.他们喜欢在乡间漫步。Descriptionofaction马儿奔跑gallop马疾驰trot马小跑拉紧缰绳hold/grab/pull/jerkthereinssharply鞭打马whipthehorse;crackthewhip策马加速spur（马刺；鞭策）thehorse下马getoff/dismountthehorse马后退直立rear马嘶neigh,whinnyDescriptionofemotion迷路前好奇、愉悦(curious,delighted)Socutewastherabbitthatitkeptmespeelbound.NeverbeforehadIseensuchacutecreature,whichgrabbedmyattentioninnotime.Iimmediatelygrewfondofthefurryrabbitandcalledoutexcitedly,〃Dad!Look!”Alarmed,therabbitranawayinaflash.Ifollowediteagerly,hopingtocatchitasmytrophy(战利品，奖品)forthetrip.迷路后害怕、焦虑、后悔(frightened,worried,regretful)MyheartbegantosinkasIglancedaround,“wherearewe,Dad?〃Iaskedworriedly,withmyvoicetrembling.Iwassopetrifiedthateventheslightestsoundwouldsendshiversupanddownmyspine.HadIlistenedtoUnclePaul'swords,wecouldhaveavoidedtheincident.获救时激动、如释重负(excited,relieved)HavingfeltourwaythroughthedarkforestforhourswhensuddenlyIheardthegurglingofthestream.Dad,theriver;whichwilltakeustotheuncle'sfarm!”Icouldn/thelpexclaiming.Seeingthefaintgleamoflightinthedistance,IfeltasenseofreliefwelledupinmyheartasIknewwehadfinallyfoundourwayout.Descriptionofsetting愉悦高兴Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetree,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwovenblanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.紧张害怕宽慰激动二.展示而非讲述toshownottotellHewashappySoexcitedwashethathehummed/whistledhisfavoritetunewithhiseyessparklingwithgreatexcitement.Shewassad.Onhearingthebadnews,herheartached,tearsstreamingdownhercheeks.Hewassurprised.Totallycaughtunpreparedbytheheadmaster'sgentleness,Rigostoodfrozenforsecondsandfinallymanagedtorespond,zzHello,sir/He/shewasangry.Hewassoangrythathestormedoutoftheroom,slammingthedoorfuriouslybehindhim.Muchannoyedbythenews,Shegnashedherteeth.〃WhydoIhavetoattendclassesonSunday?"shemoanedinanger,glaringatherparentswithburningeyes.（情绪+神态+动作+语言）三.小词大用而非大词小用Hestoodup,huggedhisparents,andsmiled,tryingnottolethisemotionsgetthebetterofhim.

Thefamilyhuggedandsmiledthroughmistyeyesandthenlaughed.Theboyliftedthelastbagontohisshoulder,andflashedabrightsmile.Hertailbeganwaggingeversoslowly,thenfasterasshecaughtthesmell.、万物之灵一一人的声音i.表示人哭的象声词cry：哭,喊,未必有泪.cry：哭,喊,未必有泪.Shed：流泪.Blubber：嚎啕大哭.Pule：小孩的呜咽,抽泣.Weep：流泪,哭泣.Tears：泪水.Whisper：低语.Wail：大声痛哭,尖叫.Howl：大声哭.Sob：啜泣,抽噎..表示人笑的象声词gringrin：露齿而笑roar=haw-haw二ha-ha：哈哈大笑crow：婴儿的欢叫giggle：咯咯地笑，傻笑grin：露齿而笑roar=haw-haw二ha-ha：哈哈大笑crow：婴儿的欢叫giggle：咯咯地笑，傻笑grin：露齿而笑roar=haw-haw二ha-ha：哈哈大笑crow：婴儿的欢叫giggle：咯咯地笑，傻笑窃笑gurgle：咯咯地笑guffaw：哄笑，大笑snort：扑哧一笑burble：窃笑chuckle：抿嘴笑，暗自笑titter：窃笑，傻笑,嗤嗤地笑snigger=snicker：.表示人说话的象声词boom：瓮声瓮气,消沉有回响的声音.Roar：咆哮，狮子般地吼叫.Snort：发哼声Grunt：哼哼声，咕噜声.Squawk：粗而响的叫声,诉苦或抗议.Shriek：尖叫声Mutter：嘀嘀咕咕,含糊的低语声Murmur：喃喃说话声，隔壁的人语声Mumble：叽咕，咕哝Grumble：肚子咕咕的叫声，牢骚Whisper：低语,谣言Hum：哼曲子的声音，犹豫时的嗯嗯声.humandhaw：表示犹豫或支吾的嗯嗯呃呃声chatter：喋喋不休,震颤声babble：唠叨，咿呀学语gabble：急促不清的话声gibber和jabber：同上prattle：婴儿的11禺口禺学语声chat：聊天coo：喂（口禺细语

barkbark：叫骂，叫喊shrill：尖声bark：叫骂，叫喊shrill：尖声snarl：咆哮,bellow：怒吼声moanbark：叫骂，叫喊shrill：尖声ThewindwaswhistlingthroughthetreesandthehowlingofanimalsfromafarsentshiversupanddownJane'sspine.Iwasinspiredbythedoves'persistence.Whilehelpingthedoves,myhopeforfuturewaskindled.Enjoytheharmonyofhumanandnature.Birdstwitteringonthetree,butterfliesflutteringaround,andbeesbuzzing,Ifeltasenseofvigorandhopecamebacktome.Eyesglintingandlipscurvingintoabigsmile,theboywasjumpingwithjoypointingatthenestonthetreewithecstasy.Thechirpsofbirdsandthecheersofthekidwerejustthemedicinewhicheasedmypainsandunhappines