新高考英语作文训练12 讲义

读后续写阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。ShehadbeenshoppingwithherMominWal-Mart.Shemusthavebeen6yearsold,whohadthisbeautifulbrownhairedimageofinnocence.Honestlyspeaking,outside,itwaspouringsoheavily.Weallstoodthereundertheawning（雨篷）andjustinsidethedooroftheWal-Mart.Weallwaited,somepatiently.othersannoyed,becausenaturemesseduptheirhurriedday.Iamalwaysveryinterestedinrainfall.Asaresult,Igotlostinthesoundandsightoftheheavenswhichcouldwashawaythedirtanddustoftheworld.IrecalledmychildhoodwhichwasaboutmymemorywhenIusedtorunandsplash（溅水）.It’sagreatrelieffrommyday’sworries.Hervoicewassosweetthatitbrokethesituationinwhicheveryoneseemedtobeasleep.“Mom,let’srunthroughtherain.”shesaid.“Whatdidyousay?”Momasked.“Let'srunthroughtherain!”Sherepeated.“No,honey.Wewillwaituntilitslowsdownabit.Yousee,itispouring.”Momreplied.Thisyoungchildwaitedaboutanotherminuteandrepeated:“Mom,let'srunthroughtherain.”“We’llgetwetthroughifwedo.What’smore,Iamworriedthatyoumightcatchacold.”Momsaid.“No,wewon’t,Mom.Thatisnotwhatyousaidthismorning.”theyounggirlsaidasshepulledatherMom’sarmhard.“Thismorning?WhendidIsaywecouldrunthroughtherainandnotgetwet?”“Don’tyouremember?WhenyouweretalkingtoDaddyabouthiscancer,yousaid.Ifwecangetthroughthis,wecangetthroughanything!”Theentirecrowdstoppeddeadsilent.Iswearyoucouldn’thearanythingbuttherain.Weallstoodsilently.Noonecameorleftinthenextfewminutes.Mompausedandwasthinkingforamomentaboutwhatshewouldsay.注意：1．续写词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在以下位置作答。Nowsomewouldlaughitoffandscoldherforbeingsilly.Weallstoodwatching,smilingandlaughingastheyrushedpastthecars.续写思路原文大意在超市购物后准备回家的母女俩和很多顾客在雨篷下等待雨停，然而小女孩却说“让我们在雨里跑吧，如果我们能闯过这一关，那我们就能闯过任何难关！”她的妈妈同意了女孩的建议，在雨中跑过。叙事意图在雨篷下等雨的人们也将从雨中跑过，坦然面对一切难关。续写部分根据续写部分第二段关键词rushedpastthecars可知第一段应叙述女孩的妈妈同意了女孩的建议，结合原文中大量的对话描写，可对妈妈所说的话进行描写。根据续写部分第二段首句可知，第二段应叙述人们也淋着雨跑到自己的车上，可以加入适当的议论。续写思路母亲同意孩子的话→跑到雨中→人们跟着跑向车子→感悟范文Nowsomewouldlaughitoffandscoldherforbeingsilly.Somemightevenignorewhatwassaid.Butthiswasamomentworthapprovalinayoungchild'slife.Atimewheninnocenttrustcanbeprotectedsothatitwillbloomintofaith.“Honey,youareabsolutelyright.Let'srunthroughtherain.Ifwegetwet,maybewejustneedwashing.”Momsaid.Thenofftheyran.Weallstoodwatching,smilingandlaughingastheyrushedpastthecars.Theyheldtheirshoppingbagsovertheirheadsjustincasetheygotwetthrough.Buttheywerefollowedbyafewwhoscreamedandlaughedlikechildrenallthewaytotheircars.Andyes,Idid.Iran.Igotwet.Ineededwashing.Circumstancesorpeoplecantakeawayyourmaterialpossessions.Theycantakeawayyourmoney,andtheycantakeawayyourhealth.Butnoonecanevertakeawayyourpreciousmemories.So,don'tforgettotaketimeandtaketheopportunitiestomakememorieseveryday!［满分借鉴点］满分靓词 ①alltheway一路上；一直 ②takeaway带走满分句式Atimewheninnocenttrustcanbeprotectedsothatitwillbloomintofaith.（宾语从句+被动句+状语从句，说明天真的信任的作用）原文词汇积累 ①messup陷入困境；搞糟 ②getthrough渡过劝慰信假定你是李华，你的美国朋友Amy不幸染上传染病，在医院接受隔离治疗。请你用英语给她写一封劝慰信。要点包括：1．表示同情；2．给予安慰；3．表达祝愿。注意：1．写作词数应为80左右；2．请按如下格式在以下位置作答。好词①donothingbutdo只得做②cooperatewith与······合作③beinfectedwith感染上DearAmy,（表达自己听到消息的震惊）Itwasshockingtolearnyouwereinfectedwithaninfectiousdiseaseandarebeingtreatedinhospital.（给予安慰）However,itisunnecessarytoworryaboutthedisease,whichcanbecuredinashorttime.利用固定句式+非限制性定语从句，安慰对方AsfarasIknow,medicalexpertshavebeensenttoyourhospital,thusenablingmorepatientstoreceivetimelyandeffectivetreatment.被动句+分词作结果状语，继续表示安慰Anyway,youcandonothingbutcooperatewiththedoctorsandkeepapositiveattitude.Don’thesitatetocontactmeifyouneedanyhelp.（表示祝愿）Ihopeyouwillrecoversoon.Yours,LiHua背满分模板DearJames,（得知对方的烦恼，表达惋惜和关怀）I’msorrytolearnyouarehavingsuchatoughtimenow.However,it’sunnecessarytobeupset.Tohelpyoucontrolyourtemper,I’dliketoofferyousomesuggestions.（所能提供的帮助）Firstly,sharingyourfeelingswithyourfriendsisagoodchoicetocheeryourselfup.（陈述建议一）Anothersuggestionisthatyoutakephysicalexercise，whichcanliftyourspirits.（陈述建议二）Additionally,keepanoptimisticattitudetowardslifeandyouwillenjoythepleasurelifehasbroughttoyou.（最后一个建议或再次安慰对方）（表达愿望和祝福）Ihopemysuggestionswillbebeneficialtoyou.Mayyougetridofyourtroublessoon.Yours,LiHua假定你是李华，得知你班外教老师MrJames发生车祸，左腿受伤住院。请你根据以下要点给他写封信表示慰问。内容包括：1．给予安慰；2．虽不能打篮球，但可以弹奏乐器或看书；由MrLee代课；3．表示祝愿。注意：1．写作词数应为80左右；2．请按如下格式在以下位置作答。好词①inone’sabsence在某人不在时②indisguise伪装DearMrJames,① （得知你在车祸中左腿受伤真是震惊）andthatyouhadtobetreatedinhospital.Iknowyoumustbeverysadatthemoment,asyouwillhavetogiveupplayingbasketballandcan'tgiveuslessons.② ,misfortunemayproveablessingindisguise.③ ,therearemanymoreinterestingthingstododuringthistime,suchasplayinganinstrumentorreadingbooks.Asforourlessons,MrLeehasbeenaskedtoteachusinyourabsence.④ （希望你早日康复）.Yours,LiHua根据汉语提示用被动句或感叹句补全下面的劝慰信，并背诵成文。DearJamie,I’msorrytolearnyouhavedifficultyinyourChineselearning.Tobehonest,① （汉字和汉语文章从来不容易学）.However,youdon’thavetofeelupset.Firstly,itwouldbewisetoturntotheInternetforhelpwhen② （你面对问题）,whereyoucanlearnhowtoreadandwrite.Additionally,③ （建议你加入汉语俱乐部）topracticeoralChinesewithothers.Finally,learnsomerelevantcoursesonrelevantapps,and④ （你的理解力将得以提高）.Ifthereexistfurtherproblems,pleasedon’thesitatetocontactme.Yours,LiHua读后续写满分技巧12恰当神态描写 人物跃然纸上神态描写指对面部五官展开描写，可以表现人物的喜怒哀惧，描写时要用表示表情、神态的词语，如哭丧着脸、专注的神情、脸上的微笑等。如①通过描写人物的脸庞表示喜悦，如Hisfacebeamedandhisbrightsmilelituptheroom；②通过描写脸颊表示愤怒；③通过描写眼睛表示激动、愤怒、悲哀和恐惧等，如Hiseyeswereglitteringwithexcitement；④通过描写脸色表示激动、恐惧、悲哀等。通过恰当的神态描写，续写中的人物会更生动形象。阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。WhenIworkedasanurse,1wasondaydutywhilemyfriendswereonnightduty.Ononeshift,IrememberIsensedsomethingjustbeforegoingoffdutyat11am.Ihadbroughtthewardsister（护士长）hermorningtea,soIputdowntheteatray（托盘）.Thetrayshookandfellthroughthewindow.AtfirstIthoughtIhadaccidentallyknockeditover,butthenIfeltthewholebuildingshookandpatientsscreamed.（地震发生）Irealizedthatanearthquakewashappening.Icaughtholdofanearbypatient,whowasterriblyfrightenedbyit.IpushedherunderthebedandheldthebedinplacewhileIgotunderitmyself.Ithenpulledablanketdownbetweenus.Assoonasitsealed,Idecidedtotryandgetthepatientsafelyoutside.Icarriedheroutandhelpedherdowntothegrassland,whereseveralotherpeoplehadnowgathered.Iknewthewardsisterwaswithanotherpatient,soIwentback insidethebuilding.WhenIreachedthewardsister,Ifoundherpatientcouldnotwalk.Wemadeaseatforherbylinkingourhandsandarms,and carriedheroutsidetogether.Wewentbackthroughthebuildingtochecknoonewasleftbehind.Almostallofthepatientshadbeenabletogetthemselvesoutofourward,asfarasIknew.Onceourwardwascleared,adoctorcalledforvolunteertogodowntootherwardswithhimtohelpmorepeople.AnothernurseandIwentdownthere.Thedoctorwentinaheadofus.Hefoundoneofthenursespartiallycoveredwithrubble（碎石）.Shewasstillalivesowebegantocleartherubbleaway.Suddenly,theaftershockstruck.Thedoctororderedustoleave.Thisbravemanintendedtostaywiththetrappednurseandriskhisownlife.Wemadeupourmindstosavethenursewithhimtogether.LaterintheafternoonIhadtimetolookaround,andsawthedestroyedbuilding. 注意：1．续写词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在以下位置作答。四步法完美续写第一步把握原文大意明主旨和两线原文大意作者值班时突然发生地震，帮助病人脱险后，发现还有一个护士被埋在碎石中。原文两情线情节线：值班时感觉大楼晃动→地震发生保全身边病人的安全→返回楼中又救出一个病人→发现一个护士埋在碎石中；情感线：shocked→calm→responsible→anxious。叙事意图震后如何救出埋在碎石下的护士。第二步据两首句信息确定续写方向1．两段首句定一框：①根据段首句关键信息“savethenursewithhim”可知，该段应描述如何施救和施救的结果；②尾句可提及幸存者的情感。2．二框二首正能量：①根据段首句关键信息“sawthedestroyedbuilding”可描述灾后周围建筑的状况、自己的情况、医生的安慰；②尾句应体现正能量：活着很幸运。第三步原续两情相悦合理添加细节两“情”相悦续写部分两情线的发展，应与原文两情线一致，以使“两情相悦”，情节线是：搬开乱石救出护士→安全走出倒塌的楼→看到废墟难过→医生的话。情感线的走向应是relieved→joyful→sad→happy。添加细节 ①情感细节：续写部分两段都应涉及作者的情感变化，施救中、施救后的情感变化，看到震后满目疮夷的心理动等；②环境细节：适当添加对震后废墟的细节描述，可推动故事发展。第四步沿原语言特点 完美连贯表达原文利用简单句、并列句和复合句叙述地震和震后救人经过，在续写部分应沿用该特点描写救护士和灾后人们的情感。Wemadeupourmindstosavethenursewithhimtogether.Wewerefacedwithfallingrubblefromtimetotime.Thetrappednursewasstillalive.Wefocusedoureffortsonremovingthebricksandtherubblethattrappedherbody.Onceshewasfree,thedoctorguidedusthroughtheremainssafely.Hekeptaperfectlycalmtonethroughout,whichsmoothedmemuch.Myheartleapedwithjoyaswesuccessfullywalkedoutofthebuilding.Allthesurvivors’eyeswerefilledwithtearsofgratitude.LaterintheafternoonIhadtimetolookaround,andsawthedestroyedbuilding.Mybeautifulworkplacenowlaybeyondrecognition.Theonlythingthatremainedwasbrokenwallsamidthedimdust.Ifeltaweightonmychestasthesadnessswelledinside.Thedoctorstoodbesidemeandsaidwithafaintsmile,“Weshouldbehappyforthosewhosurvivedtheearthquake.”Ismiledbackasthewinddancedaroundus,andIfeltluckytobealive.用被动句转换下面读后续写中的加黑体部分，或根据汉语提示用感叹句填空。Hethoughtforamomentandrealizedthattheyjustwouldnotfollowahuman.Hesaidtohimself,“HowcanIpossiblysavethem?Theonlywaywouldbeformetobecomelikethoseswans.IfonlyIcouldbecomelikeoneofthem.ThenIcouldsavethem① .TheywouldfollowmeandIwouldleadthemtosafety.”Herealizeditwasclea