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1、Welcome to Mr. Gaos ClassWelcome to Mr. Xiongs Welcome to Mr. Xiongs Class!Class!2008.3.14 书面表达系列讲练书面表达系列讲练 之之 赢取高分策略赢取高分策略 巍山一中巍山一中 熊发鑫熊发鑫 要求考生根据所给情景，用英要求考生根据所给情景，用英语写一篇语写一篇100个单词左右的短文个单词左右的短文 情景包括目的、对象、时间、地情景包括目的、对象、时间、地点、内容等；提供情景的形式有点、内容等；提供情景的形式有图画、图表、提纲等。图画、图表、提纲等。 本部分满分本部分满分25-30分，所需时分，所需时间约为间

2、约为30分钟。分钟。1、先根据文章的内容和语言初、先根据文章的内容和语言初步步确定档次确定档次,研究研究评分标准评分标准。第五档第五档. 2530分分第四档第四档. 2025分分第三档第三档. 1520分分第二档第二档1015分分第一档第一档 510分分 差差 05分分内 容语 言准确率 1语法 2拼写 3用词 4标点主 题无遗漏 （9分）通顺流畅 （9分）无错或一个错误 （9分）明确 （3分）个别遗漏 （7分）较通顺流畅（7分）2-4个错误 （7分）较明确 （2分）两处以上遗漏 （4分）不够流畅 （4分）5个以上错误 （3-4分）不明确或文不对题 （0分） 评分标准：语言地道，语言地道，规范

3、规范覆盖所有内覆盖所有内容要点容要点2、主要内容：、主要内容： 内容要点；内容要点； 词汇和语法的数量和准确性；词汇和语法的数量和准确性； 上下文的连贯；上下文的连贯； 语言的得体性语言的得体性应用了较多应用了较多的语法结构的语法结构和词汇和词汇有效地使有效地使用了语句用了语句间的连接间的连接成分成分3、拼写和标点拼写和标点是语言是语言准确性的一个方面，准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考际的影响程度予以考虑。虑。4、词数、词数少于少于80和和多于多于120的，从总分中减去的，从总分中减去2分。分。5、如、如书写较差书写较差，以至影，以至影响交际，将分数降低

4、一响交际，将分数降低一个档次。个档次。词汇词汇,句型句型 （高级）和（高级）和语法多样化（较复杂）语法多样化（较复杂） 1.覆盖了所有的覆盖了所有的要点要点 2. 应用了较多的语法结构应用了较多的语法结构和词汇和词汇 3. 有效地使用了语句间的有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑连接成分，使全文结构紧凑要要点点全全连连接接词词书面表达如何写？书面表达如何写？五个步骤1、审题、审题文字信息文字信息图画信息图画信息题材、人称、时态、要点题材、人称、时态、要点2、以词及点：用一两个单词或短语写出每句、以词及点：用一两个单词或短语写出每句 话的细节要点。话的细节要点。3、联词成句：用联词成句的

5、方法将上述要点、联词成句：用联词成句的方法将上述要点 的词语扩展成句子。的词语扩展成句子。4 联句成文：联句成文：注意：注意：主语和谓语主语和谓语背景（适当增加时间、地点条件等）背景（适当增加时间、地点条件等）逻辑关系逻辑关系开头与结尾开头与结尾语篇衔接语篇衔接5、检查修改，规范抄写、检查修改，规范抄写给阅卷人以好的第一直观印象给阅卷人以好的第一直观印象整体三部分整体三部分1.Heading点题；一两个句子；概括性；暗示性2. Body 中心记述部分；层次分明3. Ending 小结；呼应主题 技技 巧巧1. 使用较高级的词汇使用较高级的词汇3. 使用恰当的连接词使用恰当的连接词词汇反映你知识

6、贮存量的词汇反映你知识贮存量的多少，也是衡量英语水平多少，也是衡量英语水平的一个重要标志。的一个重要标志。运用得当的句子结构可以运用得当的句子结构可以给文章增色不少，从而使给文章增色不少，从而使整篇文章因此而生辉整篇文章因此而生辉 。使用恰当连接词，对写一使用恰当连接词，对写一篇有篇有“英语味英语味”的文章很的文章很重要，能使文章上下衔接重要，能使文章上下衔接自然、紧凑。自然、紧凑。2. 使用较丰富的句式使用较丰富的句式1. Because the weather was good, our journey was comfortable.2.We all think he is a grea

7、t man.3.Suddenly I thought out a good idea.4.The students there neednt pay for their books. 5. As a result the plan was a failure.The plan turned out to be a failure.Thanks to the good weather, our journey was comfortable.一、怎样使用较高级的词汇一、怎样使用较高级的词汇We all think highly of him .A good idea occurred to me

8、. / A good idea suddenly struck me.Books are free for the students there.6. When she heard he had died, she went pale with sorrow.7. She went to Austria in order to study music. 8. When he spoke, he felt more and more excited.9.In our school, there are twenty-six classrooms.10.You can find my house

9、easily. She went to Austria for the purpose of studying music.At the news of his death, she went pale with sorrow.The more he spoke, the more excited he felt.Our school is made up of twentysix classrooms.Youll have no trouble finding my house. 丰富的句式：丰富的句式：( (常用到的句型结构）常用到的句型结构） 利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思， 能增加文章

10、的文采。1. 感叹句 e.g. How happy I was when I received your letter! What a kind boy he is! How disappointed he was !2. 强调句 e.g. It was this young boy that helped the old granny. I do hope you can come if possible.3、 倒装句 e.g. Only in this way can you solve this problem. There comes the police car. Hardly ha

11、d they got to the station when they met the young man.4、 省略句 e.g. They read while walking or riding on a bus. Come to me if necessary.5、 with短语 e.g. I saw a young lady walking slowly in the street with a handbag in her hand.6、 定语从句 e.g. In my opinion, cyber cafes should be a place where we can find

12、much useful information. Lets come to the main teaching building, at the back of which stands the school library.7、 各种名词性从句 e.g. Thats what I should do. We should do a favour to whoever needs help at present.8、 各种状语从句 e.g. Time passed quickly before we knew it. The moment we reached the farm, we got

13、 down to harvesting. So long as we work harder at our lessons, well catch up sooner or later. Do call me before hand so that I can meet you at the airport. They had to wait because the rain was getting more and more heavily. 1 When he arrives, please give me an e-mail.（使用V-ing形式）.2. To his surprise,

14、 the little girl knows so many things.（使用名词性从句）3. Though Im weak, Ill make the effort. (使用倒装句)4. He did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper.(使用强调句型) 5. I passed the physics exam because of your help.(用虚拟语气）On his arriving, please give me an e-mail.What surprises hi

15、m is that the little girl knows so many things.Practice 怎样使用较丰富的句式怎样使用较丰富的句式Weak as I am, Ill make the effort. It was not until he had read the news in the newspaper that he knew what had happened. I couldnt have passed the physics exam but for your help. 6. She walked out of the lab and many studen

16、ts followed her. (使用过去分词)7. They sang and laughed as they went back to school.( 使用V-ing形式)8.I wont believe what he says. （使用状语从句） 9.If you study hard, you will make rapid progress. （用并列句）10He had no sooner come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad. (使用倒装句)No sooner had he come back from Beijing

17、 than he was sent abroad.Followed by many students, she walked out of the lab.Singing and laughing, they went back to school.No matter what he says, I wont believe. Study hard and youll make rapid progress.高考大纲中常用的高考大纲中常用的连接词连接词1. 表示递进表示递进;在同一话题上补充内容在同一话题上补充内容 另外，还有：what is more; besides; also; more

18、over; in addition2. 表示转折关系表示转折关系 但是， 然而， 相反：but; however; yet; instead; on the other hand; on the contrary.3. 表示因果关系表示因果关系 因为，因此，所以: since; as; because (of ); so; thus; therefore; as a result; 4. 表示条件关系表示条件关系 如果，只要: if ;on condition ( that ); as long as 除非: unless 否则: or else 5. 表示时间关系表示时间关系 当 的时候 :

19、 when ; while 在之后: after 在之前: before 直到: until 一就 : as soon as 后来， 然后: later; afterwards 不久: soon 近来: lately; recently 自从 :since 从那时起: from then on6. 表示特定的顺序关系表示特定的顺序关系 首先， 最主要的: above all 其次: secondly 然后: then; next 最后: finally; in the end7. 换一种方法表述换一种方法表述 换句话说: in other words; that is to say; 8. 进

20、行举例说明进行举例说明 例如，比如: for instance; for example; like; such as9. 用于陈述事实用于陈述事实 实际上: in fact; actually; as a matter of fact 跟你说实话 : to tell you the truth10. 对一个话题进行总结对一个话题进行总结 总而言之，总的来说: on the whole; in short; all in all; in general; in a word11. 其它常用到的副词其它常用到的副词 Therefore ; otherwise ; finally ; furthe

21、rmore ;Thus ; namely ; although ; afterwards ; personally; On one side of the road there is a new classroom building.On the other side,where the playground used to be now stands another new buildingour library. (NMET1999 范文)As far as I know, everyone is happy about this new arrangement of things.(NM

22、ET2001 范文)Whats more, I can go to bed earlier. (NMET2001 范文)三、怎样使用恰当的连接词三、怎样使用恰当的连接词PracticePractice 1 1 请在下列句子中（间）填上恰当的关联词或意思有联系的短语。1. Xiao Ming was walking in the street _ he heard someone cry for help.2. He advised that I hire a car _ I could travel around in the west .3. It was not long _ the po

23、lice came .4. _he heard the cry for help, he jumped into the water to save the girl.whenin order thatbeforeAs soon as 5. Do you agree with my arrangement ? _ , do write to me soon.6. We can go downtown and do some shopping. _, we can pay a visit to some places of interest.7. I shared the cost of the

24、 gas with my friends ._, I saved $80.8. Eating sugar is bad for our teeth. _ , it may make us fat.If not/soIn additionAs a resultWhats worse 联合国教科文组织某考察团正联合国教科文组织某考察团正在我国某乡村参观考察。假定你是在我国某乡村参观考察。假定你是接待人员接待人员,请根据下列提示以发言稿请根据下列提示以发言稿的形式简要介绍这个村的情况：的形式简要介绍这个村的情况： 1)大小：近大小：近100户人家，约户人家，约500口人。口人。 2)变化：过去很穷，

25、变化：过去很穷，78年后变年后变化很大。人们生活比以前好多了。化很大。人们生活比以前好多了。现已旧貌换新颜。现已旧貌换新颜。 3)教育：原来的学校很小，现教育：原来的学校很小，现已经过改建。新建的教学楼有已经过改建。新建的教学楼有4层，层，是村里最美的建筑物。村所有学龄是村里最美的建筑物。村所有学龄儿童在此免费就读。儿童在此免费就读。 注意：注意：1）要点齐全，前后连贯。）要点齐全，前后连贯。2）词数：）词数：100- -120之间。之间。Practice 书面表达：书面表达：Ladies and gentlemen, Welcome to our school.This village is

26、 very small. It has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. It has changed a lot since 1978. People here are richer than before. Now it is taking on a new look. The school here was very small. Now it has been rebuilt. The newly built teaching building has 4 storeys . It is

27、 the most beautiful building in the village. All the school-age children can study here. They enjoy free education in it. Thank you.Ladies and gentlemen, Welcome to our school ! Ladies and gentlemen, Welcome to our school! This village is very small. It has nearly 100 families and about 500 people.

28、It used to be very poor. It has changed a lot since 1978 . People here are richer than before. Now it is taking on a new look. This village is a small one with/which has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. However, it has changed a lot since 1978 and has been developin

29、g very fast. People here live a much better life than before . 书面表达：书面表达：Now it is taking on a new look. In the past, the school here was very small . Now it has been rebuilt. The newly built teaching building has 4 storeys . It is the most beautiful building in the village. All the school-age child

30、ren can study here. They enjoy free education in it. Thank you. In the past, the school here was very small and most children couldnt afford to go to school. But now it has been rebuilt and which has 4 storeys is the most beautiful one in the village. All the school-age children can study here. What

31、s more, they enjoy free education. May you enjoy your stay herethe newly built teaching building/ May you have a pleasant time here! Thank you. Ladies and gentlemen, Welcome to our school ! This village is a small one with/which has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor.

32、However, it has changed a lot since 1978 and has been developing very fast. People here live a much better life than before . Now it is taking on a new look. In the past, the school here was very small and most children couldnt afford to go to school. But now it has been rebuilt and the newly built

33、teaching building which has 4 storeys is the most beautiful one in the village. All the school-age children can study here. Whats more, they enjoy free education. May you enjoy your stay here / May you have a pleasant time here! Thank you. 20012001年春季高考作文年春季高考作文给澳大利亚的朋友写一封信，谈谈减负给学生的学习和生活带来的变化。 I wil

34、l tell you the changes of my life. Before, we had many classes every day. I had to do a lot of homework after school. I went to bed at 11:30 in the evening. I had no time to play. I was very tired. Now I can visit museums. I can learn computer and drawing. In the evening, I can read books and newspa

35、pers and watch TV. I go to bed at 10:00 now.1717分分高考满分作文 Im very pleased to tell you the changes in my life since our homework has reduced. Before that, learning during the day was very simple. Having class and doing homework was the only thing we should do. In the evening, we also had a lot of home

36、work to do. We could not go to bed until 11:30. Nevertheless, since reducing the learning load, my life has become much more interesting. I often visit museums and computer rooms and draw pictures in my spare time. In the evening, I also have time to watch TV and read newspapers. I no longer stay up

37、 late; on the contrary, I go to bed at about 10 pm. In short, I am quite satisfied with my life now.书面表达常用语句书面表达常用语句1.1.书信书信 Thanks for your last letter. I am writing just to inform you In reply to your last letter, I am writing to explain the two questions as follows: 开 头 Looking forward to your re

38、ply/hearing from you! Thanks for your consideration. Do remember me to your parents! 结 尾2. 2. 叙事叙事 It is quite obvious/clear that ( 很显然) There is no doubt that (毫无疑问) Take as an example. (以为例） On one hand, on the other hand (一方面，另一方面) Only in this way shall we (只有这样我们才能) As far asis concerned, I pre

39、fer(就而言，我更) Measures/Action should be taken to(必须采取措施去) For the reasons given above, I feel that(鉴于以上原因，我觉得 What these people fail to consider is that(这些人没有想到的是.) Undoubtedly there is a long way to go before(毫无疑问要 还有很长的路要走） Therefore, I strongly recommend that (因此， 我强烈建议All the facts show that（所有的事实

40、显示) I like not only because but also because(我喜欢 不仅因为而且因为) I am writing to you to inquire about(我写信给你想询问) I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with/at(我给你 写信表示我对的不满） I apologize to you for(我为向你道歉） I am grateful to you for(我为向你表示感谢） Mr. Green, my best friend, is teaching Mr. Green, a favorite t

41、eacher from the USA, is teachingLetter writingA LetterNov 5, 2001Wuzheng Middle SchoolZhejiang P.R.C.JackTongxiang High SchoolDear Mary,BodyYours,Jack 亲人、家属：Yours lovingly ; Yours affectionately 朋友、平辈：Sincerely yours Yours sincerely 上级、长者：Yours respectfully Respectfully yours 单位、部门：Yours sincerely Yours faithfully 结束语Closing信封正面StampAirmail信封背面 June 5th , 2000 Dear Mr. Zhao, I am sorry that I am unable to attend school during the following week because of the Sports Meet. The school expects me to play an important part in it . And I will be back to class in a week . I hope you will excuse