2014高一英语人物描写作文讲评

1、错误纠正：1. Helen Keller was born in America in 1880.2. When she was 19 months, she couldnt be able to see and hear because of illness.3. At the age of 7, she met Miss Sullivan, her great teacher and with her help she learnt to read, write and talk.4. She graduated from with excellent grades/high honors

2、5. She devoted her energy to serving the blind and the deaf-mute around the world.润色连句成文：Born in 1880, Helen Keller is a well-known American woman writer with disabilities. At the ageof 19 months, Helen Keller suffered from illness, which caused her to become deaf and mute. Fortunately, she met Miss

3、 Sullivan, a kind-hearted teacher, who managed to help Helen learn to read, write and talk. Under the guidance of Miss Sullivan, Helen went to study at Radcliff College and graduated from it with honors at the age of 24. What deserves our respect is that she devoted all herlifetime to working for th

4、e blind and the deaf-mute all over the world.好句欣赏：刘艺婷Helen Keller was a great writer who was born in 1880 in USA. Unfortunately, sheshe graduated from Radcliffe college with her outstanding grades.欧泳仪After graduating, she devoted her energyto serving the deaf-mute in the world.刘珺洁She tried her best

5、to help the deaf and the mute in the world, which isthe reason why people remember and love her.林晓彤Whenshewasa19-month-old baby, she became deaf and mute because of her illness.and she was ableto read, write and talk bystudying with the helpof Miss Sullivan.陈铭霜she is one of the greates persons in th

6、eworld.基础写作专题- 人物简介陈嘉欣What made people think highly of Helen is that shedevoted her energy to serving the deaf-mute.潘婉若Unfortunately, attacked by a terrible disease, Keller lost her visual sense, sense of hearing and speaking abilities when she was 19 months old.Devoted to serving the blind and the

7、deaf-mute all over the world, Keller is considered one of thegreatest women in the world.梅隽苑 At the age of 19 months, a terrible disease attacked her so that she not only became deaf-mute but also lost the ability of communicating.Through her effort, Helen graduated form Radcliffe College with excel

8、lent grades at the age of 24.Helen Keller devoted her life and energy to serving the deaf-mute, which made her became a great person without doubt.黄嘉曦When she was nineteen months old, shefell ill and lost the capacity of seeing, hearing and speaking.She devoted her whole life to serving the blind an

9、dthe deaf-mute all over the world, which is considered as a huge contribution to the human beings.何婉慈As a result of hard work for many years, she finally graduated form Radcliff College with excellent grades.Despite going through a tough life, she devoted all her energy to offering service for thebl

10、ind and the deaf-mute all over the world, which deeply impressed tens of thousands of people.罗靖悦As is known to all, Helen devoted her energy and life to the blind and the deaf-mute from all over the world, for which I was completely moved.欧阳卉莹What moved us is that she devoted all of her restlife to

11、serving the deaf-mute all around the world.古钰铜What is considered as a miracle is that she graduated from Radcliff College with high grades.人物介绍1. 介绍概况：定语从句、同位语结构、分词结构、使文章简洁。如 ：(1)Abraham Lincoln, the son of a poor family (一个贫苦家庭的儿子), was born in Kentucky on February 12, 1809. 同位语 (2)Sun Showier,a wo

12、rld champion indiving (一位跳水的世界冠军 ), isa boy of 14 from Guangdong. 同位语 (3) Born in South Africa in 1918, Nelson Mandela was a black leader who fought for the rights, equality and freedom of blackpeople.（分词作状语，定语从句）训练： He was bornon August 21, 1986. Hewas a world champion in diving.1：用定语从句美化句子：He was

13、a world champion in diving who was born on August 21, 1986 .2：用分词作状语美化句子：Born on August 21, 1986 , he was a world champion in diving.3：用同位语美化句子：Usain Bolt，a world champion in diving, was born on August 21, 1986.Usain Bolt was born on August 21, 1986 in Jamaica. He is 1.96 meterstall and he is hard-w

14、orking, full of love and determined.Born on August 21, 1986 in Jamaica, he is 1.96 meters tall and he is hard-working, full of love and determined.2. 描写外貌：巧用 with 短语。如：My history teacher is a beautiful woman, with long hair and bigeyes。(她长着两只大眼睛，留着长发).3. 生平事迹：尽量用复合句、并列句、非谓语动词短语和倒装等高级语句。如：(1) Last bu

15、t not least , you can make more foreign friends who can chat online /on the Internet in English and help you learn English well.(2) In his life, he got many honours, one of which is the 2010 CCTVMoving China Award (其中包括获得“ 2010 感动中国年度人物”的称号 ). 定语从句 (3)Only by studying hard can you gain success倒.装句式

16、4. 评价：尽量运用短语。如：famous/well-known at home andabroad 国内外著名的make great/rapid progress in 在 取得很大 /快速进步overcome many difficulties/go through hardship克服困难speak highly of高度赞扬 be honoured as 被授予 win (won) a gold /silver/ bronzemedal获得金 /银/ 铜牌make great contributions to为 作出巨大贡献Lei Feng set an good example to us (给我们树立了一个良好的榜样 ),so all the pe