lesson 5Writing - Describe a person

,CommunicationWorkshop,基础写作训练,话题写作之一：Describingaperson,Speaking:Discussingaphoto,Nowwriteadescriptionofapersonyoulike.Followthestagebelow.,Decidewhoyouaregoingtowriteaboutsomeoneinyourfamily,afriendorafamousperson.,Stage1,Writesomenotesintheformofadiagram.,Stage2,Writinghelp1(usefulvocabulary),page90.,Writefourparagraphs.,Stage3,Checkyourwritingformistakes.,Stage4,Writinghelp1(layout,linking).,Writinghelp1(checking).,Howtodescribebuildandheight?,GeorgeBush,JackBush,DavidBush,hasamediumbuild.,isheavy.,isthin.,Hehasshort,blondehair.,Whatdoeshelooklike?,Shorthair,straighthair,blackhair,Longhair,Curlyhair,Blondehair,Readthepassageonpage17andmatchtheseheadingswiththefourparagraphsandthenunderlinetheadjectivesthatdescribegrandmaPara.1Para.2Para.3Para4,Background,Description,Relationships,Familylife,Task-basedwriting:,假如你是班长,根据下列提示写一篇人物介绍,向即将到来的一个美国代表团介绍你的化学老师Hanson.要点如下:1.这位老师名叫Hanson,50岁左右,又矮又瘦,戴着一副深度近视眼镜;2.对学生要求严格,认真备课,认真批改作业3.教学方法不同于别人,课上得很生动.鼓励学生思考,培养学生自学能力.4.常和学生一起进行体育活动,和蔼可亲,深受学生的爱戴和尊重.,要求:1.要有标题.2.介绍必须包括所给要点,但不要逐条译成英语.3.词数110左右.,Assessment:(评价),Ourchemistryteacher-HansonHansonisourchemistryteacher.Heisabout50yearsold.Heisshortandthinwithapairofdeepglassesonhisnose.Heisstrictwithusinourstudy.Hepreparesforhislessonswell.Hecorrectsourhomeworkverycarefully.Histeachingstyleisquitedifferentfromtheothers.Healwaysmakeshisclassinterestingandlively.,Heoftenencouragesusthinkinghardanddevelopingourabilitytostudyonourown.Heoftenhelpsandcaresforus.Heisverykindtous.Inhissparetime,hehassportswithus.Weallloveandrespecthim.,*Letscorrectsomemistakes:,*Hansonisourchemistryteacher.Heisabout50yearsold.*Heisstrictwithusinourstudy.Heprepareshislessonswell.Hecorrectsourhomeworkverycarefully.*Heoftenhelpsandcaresforus.Heisverykindtous.,Hanson,whoisabout50yearsold,isourchemistryteacher.,Heisnotonlystrictwithusinourstudyandprepareshislessonswell,butalsocorrectsourhomeworkverycarefully.,Heissokindtousthatheoftenhelpsandcaresforus.,Howtodescribeaperson开头thebeginning对该人物进行简要地介绍（如身份，职业等）主体themainbody可以按照时间的顺序或在事件中的主次地位进行描述结尾conclusion对此人的评价或感想。,好文章的标准,1.全面性:要点全面.Comprehensiveness.2.正确性:语法正确并符合英语的表达习惯。Accuracy.3.多样性:词汇短语丰富，结构多样，句型复杂。Variety.4.连贯性:恰当使用承上启下的词语和连接词，使全文流畅连贯，浑然一体。Logic.,StepsforWritingEnglishEssays,1、审题到位：内容（要点）体裁，人称、时态,2、要点成句:(1)正确符合英语语法和英语表达习惯。,(2)优美丰富的词汇，丰富而高级的结构句式.,3.联句成文：巧用过渡语和连接词.,4.检查修改:语法,拼写,字母大小写,标点符号.,注意：,(1)开头的交代句与结尾的总结句,增强呼应.,(2)牢记常识性套话的习惯表达.,(3)谚语，成语,四个步骤,2.Appearance外表Mediumheight,fat,good-looking我的语文老师是个漂亮女人,身材矮小，她长着两只大眼睛，带着一副眼镜。,MyChineseteacher，_，hastwobigeyesandwearsapairofglasses.,MyChineseteacher，_,hastwobigeyesandwearsapairofglasses.,MyChineseteacherisabeautiful,shortwoman_,巧用同位语,巧用定语从句,巧用with介词短语做后置定语,abeautiful,shortwoman,whoisabeautiful,shortwoman,withtwobigeyesandapairofglasses.,3.character性格Absent-minded,bad-tempered,warm-hearted,patientMr.Lin,我们的数学老师,为人和蔼，而且负责又有耐心。(一句多译),a.MrLin,_,iskind,responsibleandpatient.,b.MrLin,_,iskind,patientandresponsible.,c.MrLin,ourMathsteacher，is_kindtous,_responsibleandpatient.,d.MrLin,ourMathsteacher,isakindperson_.,ourMathsteacher,whoisourMathsteacher,notonly,butalso,withgreatpatienceandresponsibility,4.特长爱好LikesordislikesBedelightedindoing,begoodat,longforsthlongtodo在他的业余时间里她大都听音乐读小说.,b.Inhersparetimeshe_muchtime_tomusicand_novels.,a.Sheenjoyslisteningtomusicandreadingnovelsalotinhersparetime.,spends,listening,reading,5.Education教育状况,在清华大学主修自然科学，四年后毕业，她继续深造学习并取得博士学位。,_,hegraduatedfromQingHuaUniversityandafter4years,hewentabroadforfurtherstudiesandreceivedadoctorsdegree.,灵活运用多种结构,如非谓语动词,使文章精炼,MajoringinnatureScience,beinterestedin,bekeenon.begoodat,befondof,beinto.beaddictedto.becrazyaboutenjoydoing.haveagiftforbetiredof.loseinterestedin,6.Health健康状况,住了六周的院,现在她看上去很虚弱.,_inhospitalforsixweeks,nowshelooksveryweak.,Havingbeen,7.详细特色SomethingindetailHewasstrictwitheverybodyandineverythinghedid.Oneday,wewerehavingclasseswhenHewasveryforgetful.Oncehecameacrossanoldfriendofhisinthestreetand.Hehadastrangewayofmakinghisclasseslivelyandinteresting.Istillremembermyfirstdayasachemistrystudent.,.Bigeventsinhisorherlifetime生平大事2004年8月27日，雅典奥运会男子110米栏决赛上，刘翔以12秒91夺得了金牌，创造了亚洲人在短道项目上的奇迹和神话！,多种结构增强句子表现力,OnAugust27,2004intheAthensOlympicGamesman110-meterhurdlesLiuXiangfinallywonthegoldmedalby12seconds91,whichwastheAsianmiracleandmyth!,OnAugust27,2004intheAthensOlympicGamesman110-meterhurdlesLiuXiangfinallywonthegoldmedalby12seconds91,_,miracleandmyth!,creatingtheAsian,makeabigdecision.makeuponesmindtodosth.devotehislifetimetodoingsth.giveuponeslifeforsb/sth.doresearchabout/into.encouragesbtodosth,9.Evaluation(评价）,1）丛飞为我们树立了好榜样，人人都高度评价并尊敬他。2）袁隆平为农业作出了重大贡献。,注意运用一些动词、形容词等短语、词组;适当运用关联词语,CongFeisetusagoodexample,soallthepeoplespokehighlyofhimandallrespectedhim.,YuanLongpinghasmadegreatcontributionstoagriculture,thinkhighlyofhimandallrespecthim;berecognized/consideredasmakegreatcontributionsto;Winaprizeincompetition.Setanewworldrecordof.Becomeamemberof.Winagoldmedalwillalwaysberememberedas;,Summary:怎样让你的文章更有亮点?一.审题得当:不遗漏要点,文体,人称,时态正确。二.句式表达灵活多变,长短句兼而有之,但不卖弄.三.巧用非谓语动词，介词短语，词组以增强文章的表现力。四.适当运用过渡语使句子更美，上下文更加协调连贯。,请根据以下资料说明，使用5个规范句子写一篇介绍刘翔的文章，具体内容如下：,姓名:刘翔出生地:上海生日:1983.7.13性别：男项目：田径身高：188cm体重：74Kg教练：孙海平,2004年8月27日雅典奥运会男子110米栏决赛中以12秒91获得冠军，使他成为世界瞩目的焦点。在2008年北京奥运会8月18日上午11点举行的男子110米栏预赛中，刘翔由于脚伤伤势复发，遗憾的在首轮就退出了比赛。再一次让刘翔成为世人关注的焦点。,参考词汇：雅典Athens男子110米栏man110-meterhurdles预赛preliminarycontests田径Trackandfieldrecrudescence,LiuXiang,male,borninShanghaionJuly13,1983,is188-centimetertallandweighs84kg./HisProjectisTrackandfieldandhiscoachisSunHaiping./OnAugust27,2004intheAthensOlympicGamesman110-meterhurdleshefinallywonthegoldmedalby12seconds91,whichmadehimattractworldwideattention./Unfortunately,LiuXiangregretfullywithdrewfromthecompetitioninthefirstrunasaresultofthefootinjuryrecrudescencein11:00ammale110-meterhurdlespreliminarycontestsonAugust18in2008BeijingOlympicGames，makinghimthefocalpointoftheworldoncemore./Whatapity!,陈红是你的同班同学,为了提高英语水平,她想和一位说英语的国家的高中生交朋友。请按下列内容，以李平的名义给美国和朋友(MarySmith)写一封信，把陈红的情况介绍给她，并征求她的意见。要点：陈红，女，16岁，北京二中高二（二班）学生；智商、情商都很高，学习努力，是班上成绩最好、思维敏捷的学生，理科和英语都很好，在2006年英语竞赛中获一等奖；尊敬老师，团结同学，乐于助人；喜欢体育运动，是校排球队队员，爱好集邮，愿意与朋友交换邮票。,DearMarySmith,Howareyou?Iwouldliketointroducemyclassmate,ChenHon