北京市高考英语二轮复习专题精讲 第19讲 书面表达一（新题）赏析1(1).doc

第19讲 书面表达一2012新题赏析题一：下面六幅图画描述了你和同学们2月8日去学校附近的湖上滑冰的情况。请根据图画内容用英语写一篇日记。注意：1. 日记必须包括所有图画的内容，可适当增加细节，使短文连贯。2. 词数100左右。题二：下列图画是今年国庆节放假期间，你外出途中发生的事情，请据此写一篇日记，记叙事情发生的经过。注意：1. 短文包括图画所表现的主要内容，可以适当增减细节，使文章连贯、完整；2. 词数120-150。题三：开放作文（15分）请根据下面提示，写一篇短文。词数不少于50。in your english class, you are asked to describe the following picture and explain to your classmates how you understand it.题四：开放作文（15分）请根据下面提示，写一篇短文。词数不少于50。in your english class, your teacher shows you the following picture. youre asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.参考词汇：cactus 仙人掌（可数名词）题五：假定你是李华，将于今年七月从新星外语学校毕业.你从报纸上得知b & b公司要招聘一名英文秘书，你很感兴趣。请给该公司写一封求职信，包括下列要点:1. 年龄： 2. 学习情况及英语水平： 3. 兴趣和特长；4. 性格特点.注意： 1. 词数100左右； 2. 可适当增加细节，以使行为连贯； 3. 开头语和结束语己为你写好.dear sir /madam,i learned from the newspaper that your company needs an english secretary._ _i am looking forward to your reply. yours sincerely, li lei题六：假设你是李雷，是北京一中的一名学生, 想要参加北京大厦的招聘工作，请你根据下列内容给公司经理写一份申请。1. 1991年5月1日生于北京；2. 今年7月高中毕业，学习英语6年；3. 对英语感兴趣，尤其擅长口语和写作；4. 熟练掌握电脑操作技术，会编程，打字每分钟100。注意：1. 词数：100字左右； 2. 可适当加入细节，以使行文连贯； 3. 信的开头和结尾已为你写好（不计入总词数）。 4. 参考词汇：编程make programsdear manager,i am a student from beijing no. 1 high school. _i am looking forward to your reply. yours sincerely, li lei题七：假如你叫李明，学习成绩优异，家境贫困，无力承担你进入大学学习的费用。但你却有幸成为某慈善机构的资助对象。现在，你已被一所重点大学录取，请你给该慈善机构的负责人王女士写一封感谢信。信的内容包括：1. 目前的生活和学习情况；2. 大学毕业后的人生方向；3. 表达感激之情。注意：1. 信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数； 2. 应包括以上要点，可适当发挥；3. 词数：100词左右。dear ms wang,im li ming. two years ago, i received your letter and schooling fees. _ yours sincerely,li ming题八：阅读下面一则广告，按照要求完成写作任务。eil international english summer campvolunteer wantedeil was founded in britain in 1936 with the fundamental aim of international understanding“learn to live together by living together”.requirements: over 16;good knowledge of english; outgoing; working well with children between 712activities; language study, outdoor recreation and travelcampers; students from different countriescamp site; mount wuyi, fujiantime:july 26august 9application deadline;july 15,2008if interested,please email to 【写作内容】假设你是李华，这则广告引起了你的兴趣，请用英文写一封自荐信。要点如下：1. 对夏令营主题的理解；2. 根据招聘要求自我介绍；3. 参加夏令营的目的。注意：1. 信的开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数；2. 词数100左右。dear sir,im li hua from fujian.i am looking forward to your early reply. sincerely yours,li hua题九：假设你是李华，是北京师范大学的学生， 明年夏天即将毕业。请你用英语写一篇短文，介绍一下自己的基本情况。要点如下：1. 年龄23；2. 喜欢上网，爱学习，对英语最感兴趣，口语非常流利。3. 性格开朗，自信，喜欢与人交往，有较强的组织能力和团队协作精神；4. 喜欢教师这个职业，希望能成为一名人民教师，实现自己的梦想。注意：词数100左右；参考词汇：专业major 题十：巴拉克奥巴马是美国历史上第一位黑人总统，也是美国历史上最年轻的总统之一，请根据下表所提供的内容，用英语写一篇短文对其进行简要介绍。姓名巴拉克奥巴马 (barack obama)出生时间1961年8月4日出生地点夏威夷檀香山 (honolulu, hawaii)家庭情况父亲是肯尼亚黑人，母亲是美国白人。儿时梦想当总统教育背景1988年考入哈佛大学法学院 (harvard law school)，1991年获得博士学位。职业及政治生涯毕业后曾当律师、大学讲师，后来一直从政。2008年11月4日，在大选中击败约翰麦凯恩 (john mccain)，成为美国历史上首位黑人总统。成功意义注意：内容须包含以上要点，100词左右。 第19讲 书面表达一2012新题赏析 题一：february8th, sunday fineit was cold today. my classmates and i went skating on the lake. as soon as we got there, we began to skate happily.while enjoying myself, i suddenly noticed something unusual.the moment i warned xiao ming to take care,the ice broke and he slipped into the water.i was too frightened to know what to do. i anxiously ran to school to call my teacher for help. hearing my cry, mr.zhang rushed over, telling us to phone 120 to call for doctors, and jumped into the lake to save xiao ming, who was struggling in the cold water. at last, he was saved and no sooner had doctors arrived than he was sent to hospital. it was not long before xiao ming”s parents came.they expressed their thanks to mr.zhang.what a respectable teacher he is!点评：本文叙述完整，包括了图中所有的内容，语言生动流畅，正确地使用了一般过去时。此外，本文使用了多种句型，这提高的文章的档次和增强了表达效果。如：as soon as we got there, we began to skate happily.（含有as soon as引导的时间状语从句）；the moment i warned xiao ming to take care,the ice broke and he slipped into the water. （含有the moment引导的时间状语从句；hile enjoying myself, i suddenly noticed something unusual. （含有while引导的时间状语从句的省略句）；i was too frightened to know what to do.（too adj./adv.to do 句式）hearing my cry, mr.zhang rushed over, telling us to phone 120 to call for doctors, and jumped into the lake to save xiao ming, who was struggling in the cold water.（含有两个现分词作状语和一个who引导的定语从句）；it was not long before xiao ming”s parents came.（it be (not) +时间段+before从句的句式）；what a respectable teacher he is!（what引导的感叹句）题二：october 4,sunday sunny this morning, i was walking along the main street to the city park when i found heavy smoke pouring out of a building opposite the main road. obviously, it was on fire. i called the firefighters.several minutes later, the firefighters arrived and tried their best to control the fire. with their help, many people managed to get out of the building safe and sound. all of a sudden a foreign woman came in a hurry almost out of breath and shouted. but she couldnt make herself understood. i went to the woman and asked her what was happening. she told me that her daughter was still trapped in the fire. i told the firefighters about it at once. they immediately ran into the building. shortly afterwards, they rushed out with the little girl.the woman was very grateful to me and the firefighters for the help.点评：本文有如下的亮点：叙述完整，包括了所有的要点；语言简明生动，过渡自然，结构紧凑，行文流畅。本文使用了一些高级短语：on fire, safe and sound, all of a sudden, in a hurry,out of breath,be grateful to等；本文还使用了复合句和高级句型：i went to the woman and asked her what was happening （含有what的宾语从句）；she told me that her daughter was still trapped in the fire （含有that的宾语从句）；this morning, i was walking along the main street to the city park when i found heavy smoke pouring out of a building opposite the main road. (was/were doing+when+一般过去时: 某事正在进行，正在这时，发生了另一件事)题三：as is shown in the picture, a boy is shouting at his dad, who looks upset and doesnt know what to do with his son. their relationship seems difficult.the picture reminds me of one of the problems that many families with teenagers face. although it seems that the kid does not respect his dad, it is their communication that has gone wrong. a good relationship between a parent and a child requires much effort to make it strong. open and frank communications help to ensure parents and their children stay close together.so why dont the dad and his son sit together, face to face, calm down and talk through their problems? this way, i believe that they will gradually have a positive relationship and become the father and son that we all really admire. 点评：本文有如下的亮点：1. 本文结构合理、脉络清晰：作者首先描述图画中的内容，然后解释自己对这幅画的理解，把图片和生活结合起来，谈论图片的深层意义。2. 使用了高级词汇和短语，如shout at, remind sb. of sth., face, respect, communication ,go wrong ,ensure, face to face, calm down等。4. 使用了复合句，如as is shown in the picture（as引导的非限制性定语从句），who looks upset and doesnt know what to do with his son（who引导的非限制性定语从句）, although it seems that the kid does not respect his dad (although引导的让步状语从句)等。题四：looking at the picture, i can see two cactuses growing in a large area of desert. the mother cactus is holding an umbrella to protect the baby cactus from the baking sun. but against her good wish, the baby cactus is bending down and turning weak in the shade of the umbrella. this makes me think of what happens in our daily life. like the mother cactus in the picture, parents are making every effort to create a comfortable environment for their children. but unfortunately, they have forgotten one important fact. no one can grow up without experiencing pain and difficulties. too much protection from parents has a side effect on children. just like the baby cactus in the picture, how can it grow up healthily without sunlight?so parents, please throw the umbrella away. let children face whatever may lie ahead of them so that they will be able to grow naturally.点评：本文有如下的亮点：1. 本文结构合理、脉络清晰：作者首先描述图画中的内容，然后解释自己对这幅画的理解，把图片和生活结合起来，谈论图片的深层意义。2. 使用了非谓语动词，如looking at the picture，to create a comfortable environment for their children等。 3. 使用了高级词汇和短语，如protectfrom, bend down, in the shade of , think of, make every effort等。4. 使用了过渡词，如but, so等。5. 使用了复合句，如what引导的宾语从句、so that引导的状语从句等。题五：dear sir /madam,i learned from the newspaper that your company needs an english secretary. im really interested in this position and hope i can work for you.、im 18 years old and will be graduating from xinxing foreign languages school this july. im an excellent student, among the top 5 in my class of 50 students. im good at english, especially spoken english. i often use the computer and i type very fast. in my spare time, i read a lot . poems are my favorite. i enjoy music very much too. being an active young person, i like sports and outdoor activities. besides, i am easy to get along with and i like to make friends.im looking forward to your reply.sincerely yours,li hua 点评：1.要点齐全、语句流畅、语法正确。2.使用了复合句、并列句、现在分词作状语、精彩的词语和过渡词。 题六：dear manager,i am a student from beijing no. 1 high school. i was born on may 1st in 1991 and i will graduate in july this year. i have studied english hard for six years because i am really interested in it. i am especially good at spoken english and written english. operating the personal computer is also one of my advantages. i can not only make programs for it by myself but also do well in typing, for my typing speed is 100 words per minute. if i am accepted, i will cherish the opportunity and work hard to be a good employee. i am looking forward to your reply. yours sincerely, li lei点评：1. 叙述完整，包括了所有的要点；语言简明，过渡自然，结构紧凑，行文流畅。 2. 使用了复合句， 并列句等复杂句式和高级词语。题七：dear ms wang,im li ming. two years ago, i received your letter and schooling fees. im very grateful for your kindness and generosity.but for your help, i couldnt enjoy a wonderful college life in the beautiful campus right now. ive made a lot of friends here. moreover, i am studying hard so as to acquire an abundant knowledge of english, which is my major. in fact, im making progress each day. only in this way can i learn more and use what ive known to help those in need as well. besides, im determined to go back to my hometown after graduation and devote myself to building my hometown to make it more prosperous and beautiful.words seem to fail me when i try once more to express my thanks to you, and ill keep my promise and not let you down. yours sincerely,li ming点评：要点齐全、内容充实，具有感染力；使用了定语从句、状语从句、并列句、倒装句；使用的虚拟语气；使用了很多过渡词和高级的词语。题八：dear sir,im li hua from fujian. when i was reading the advertisement, the aim of this activity impressed me greatly. i think it instructive to learn to live together by living together. it is a good opportunity for the only child like me to learn to share and work together. therefore i recommend myself to you without hesitation.as a boy of 17, i am outgoing, good at english and have experience of working well with children aged from 7 to 12.i think it is a kind of win-win activity. for one thing, i can help take care of the children. for another thing, i can improve my english, make more friends, and enrich my life during the summer vacation.i am looking forward to your early reply.sincerely yours,li hua点评：要点齐全、语言简明；使用了宾语从句、省略句式；使用了很多过渡词和高级的词语。题九：i, a 23-yea-old student, studying in beijing normal university, will graduate next summer.i have wide and various interests, of which surfing the internet is my favorite. i think its fun to study my lessons. my major is english, and i have great interest in it. so im always doing well in english exams. besides, my oral english is quite fluent. whats more, as an outgoing and conf