陕西省西安市高考英语二轮复习 书面表达观摩（4）.doc

书面表达观摩（4）【2014高考英语广东省梅州市质检试卷】基础写作 (共1小题，满分15分)以下是网上走红的 “低碳哥”的基本情况.时 间: 2011年。人物介绍: “低碳哥”, 用行动宣讲环保概念的年轻人,主张少用能源,减少二氧化碳的排放。主要做法: 1. 捡起废纸,用空白一面写字； 2. 不开灯看电视,还把电视亮度调到最低(minimum)； 3. 上班骑自行车,不开车等。人们的看法: 做秀,不现实。你的看法: 我完全支持他的想法和行为，尽管他的行为未能对全球气候变暖造成很大的影响，但他至少可以享受健康的生活。【写作内容】根据以上“低碳哥”的基本情况写一篇介绍,内容包括:1、 “低碳哥”的简要介绍及走红的时间;2、 他的主要做法及人们的看法3、你的看法【写作要求】只能使用5个句子表达全部内容。【评分标准】句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。参考词汇: 低碳哥low-carbon brother 二氧化碳 carbon dioxide【参考范文】possible version:a young man called low-carbon brother became a hit one on the internet in 2011, who suggests living a low carbon life, which means using less energy in our daily life so that we can help reduce carbon dioxide in the air. for example, he always picks up some waste paper on the street and uses the blank side to write something and while he is watching tv, he always turns down the brightness to the minimum and turns off the light. besides, he goes to work by bike instead of driving. some people think that what he is doing is just a show and impractical. but as far as i am concerned, i strongly support his idea and his behavior because although what he is doing has no huge effect on global warming, he at least can enjoy a healthy life.基础写作评分说明基础写作主要考查考生的语言结构的应用能力：能够应用正确、规范的语言表达特定的内容。本试题要求考生根据所提供的信息，使用5个句子表达写作内容所提供的全部内容。在评分时，应注意以下几个方面：1按照评分标准，实行分析法评分：按语言、内容和连贯三项标准分别给分；2在语言方面，重点评判句子的语法结构是否正确、用词是否规范；考生是否使用了合适的句型结构；3在内容方面，重点评判考生是否表达所提供的全部信息；如果考生在表达完整的内容时，适当添加一些内容，不扣分；4在连贯方面，重点评判5个句子是否构成一篇连贯的短文。三、基础写作评分标准:语 言7-8具有很好的语言运用能力；语法和句子结构准确性高，词汇方面使用较好，只有少许错误。5-6具有较好的语言运用能力；语法和句子结构准确性较好，有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。3-4语言运用能力一般；语法和句子结构基本准确，语法结构或词汇方面的错误不影响理解。1-2语言运用能力较差；语法和句子结构基本不够准确，语法结构或词汇方面的错误较多，而且影响了对句子意义的理解。0语言运用能力很差；语法、句子结构、词汇错误很多，句子意义无法理解。备注每多或少写一个句子，扣1分。内 容5包括了所有信息内容。4包括了大部分信息内容。3包括了基本信息内容。2包括了小部分信息内容。1包括了少许信息内容。0没有包括所提供的信息内容。连 贯2内容连贯，而且结构紧凑。1.5内容连贯性比较好，而且结构比较紧凑。1内容连贯性较差，而且结构不够紧凑。0内容缺乏连贯性，而且结构松散。备注文不对题，给0分。【广东省茂名市一模】基础写作 (共1小题，满分15分)写作内容今年十一黄金周期间，我国首次对高速公路行驶的小汽车实行免费政策。对此，群众议论纷纷，褒贬不一。以下是相关信息，请你写一篇英文介绍。利刺激消费，有利于第三产业发展, 例如旅游行业；亲友驾车相聚拉近人与人的距离。弊大家都挤向高速公路，车流量猛增，从而增加拥堵；事故发生率比以往提高你的看法 *刺激 stimulate 写作要求只能用5个句子表达全部内容。评分标准句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章连贯。【参考范文】基础写作 (共1小题，满分15分) during this national day holidays, free passage was given to cars on the highway for the first time ever, which caused a heated discussion nationwide. on the bright side, some believe that it is good to stimulate consumption and boost the third industry, such as tourism. to some extent, this policy also brings people closer, for those who were reluctant to visit their friends are totally seduced and willing to reunite by car. however, with cars flocking to the highways, others are concerned that the traffic flow will increase tremendously, resulting in worse traffic jam and higher accident rate than ever before. personally, free passage is what the public have been longing for, but more following measures should be taken, for example, some contingency plans should be made to deal with the potential problems and more clear road signs are needed to give drivers precise guidance.【2013界广东省茂名市一模】读写任务 （共1小题，满分25分）阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。 nowadays, the term sense of happiness has been repeatedly mentioned in various medias. during the national day holidays, cctv did a nation-wide survey by asking random passers-by the question are you happy now? what exactly is happiness in your eyes? the survey aroused a heated discussion across the country and people from all walks of life expressed their opinions. i would say im pretty happy at present because my dear daughter has graduated from college and found herself a decent job. said a woman in her fifties with a big smile on her face. though it seemed that most people said they were happy, different voices were still heard and should not be ignored. there was a migrant worker(农民工) whose answer to the question was widely spread online. when asked if he was happy, he said my family name is zeng, showing his determination to refuse the interview as well as his annoyance to mention happiness. the brand-new chinese nobel prize winner mo yan answered i dont know in an interview when he was asked the same question: are you happy? 写作内容1.以约30个词概括上文的主要内容。2.以约120个词就“幸福”的话题谈谈你的想法，内容包括： （1）目前你是否感到幸福及其原因；（2）请描述到现在为止让你觉得最幸福的一件事情；（3）谈谈你对幸福的理解。写作要求 1作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。 2作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。评分标准 概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。【参考范文】读写任务 （共1小题，满分25分） when asked by the cctv whether they were happy, most people gave a positive answer while some didnt. the nobel prize winner mo yan said he didnt know whether he was happy or not. at present, i am pretty happy because i am doing what i like and i like what i am doing. as a senior three student, i study hard every day and live it to the fullest. it feels good to study hard with my determined classmates to fulfill our dreams. when i recall the happy things which happened to me, the experience of my receiving the scholarship in middle school topped them all. it was a time when my family was going through the extreme financial difficulties. so i made up my mind to win the scholarship, hoping to lighten my parents financial burden. after making tons of painstaking efforts, i succeeded. at the ceremony, i could see my mom was the most poorly-dressed woman, yet with the brightest smile on her face. it was the happiest thing ever happening to me that i will treasure for the rest of my life. as far as i am concerned, happiness lies in the effort of making those we love smile. when we bring happiness to them, it gives happiness to ourselves. 【广东省汕头市质量测评试题】基础写作（满分is分）和睦的家庭有利于孩子的个性发展和家人的身心健康。请你根据表格中的信息，以how we can build up a harmonious family 为题用英语写一篇短文。写作内容题目how we can build up a harmonious family主要特征充满温暖、爱心和欢笑；相互关爱、尊重和理解主要益处生长在和睦家庭环境中的孩子会乐观向上 生活在和睦家庭中的父母会健康快乐父母该怎么做言行举止上做好表率；经常与孩子沟通交流我们该怎么做体谅父母的艰辛，减轻负担，主动做家务等写作要求(1 )只能使用5个句子表达全部内容。题目，文章开头与结尾已给出。(2 )句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。.表率：role model【参考范文】基础写作 how we can build up a harmonious familya harmonious family is essential to our personal development and our physical and mental health. a harmonious family is always full of warmth, love and laughter in which parents and children not only show concern for each other bu also respect and understand each other. if a child grows up in a harmonious family , he is more likely to be cheerful and optimistic. meanwhile, parents in a harmonious family are sure in live happily and more healthily. to create such a harmonious family parents should be rule models for their children in words and behavior and often communicate with them. as children of the family, we should show understanding for our parents hardship, and try in share their burdens by doing housework voluntarily and so on. if you do so, our home will always be harmonious.【广东省汕头市质量测评试题】读写任务（共1小题，满分25分）阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。two years ago, when i was an oversea student, i worked early mornings and late nights to pay for my school fees.one day, i was seriously ill with a very high fever. i had stayed at home for a few days, and i had run out of food. because i had been in this town just for a short time, i also had no friends nearby who could help. so i went out to get some food. i would have gone to the supermarket, but on this occasion, i went into a small store because it was closer.i picked up a few items. when i handed them to the shopkeeper, she said, “you are unwell.” “yes，” i nodded.she pointed at the salami and bread i was buying and offered, “i can make you a sandwich, so you dont have to do it yourself. so, she made the sandwich and asked me to wait a moment. she went in the back room and returned with a bowl of hot soup.“it will warm you up,” she said with a genuine smile.what really warmed me up was not the soup, but her kindness. it made me want to be as kind as the shopkeeper who had been kind to me.写作内容1.请你以约30个词概括上文的主要内容。2.请你以约120个词以“善举的影响”为话题谈谈你的想法，内容包括：(i )上文使你回忆起曾经有谁的爱心举动使你