Unit 8 Once Upon a Time.（话题写作指导）（教师版）

Unit8OnceUponaTime.(话题写作指导）【话题分析】讲故事本单元的话题是“讲故事”，与此相关的写作任务是能正确运用一般过去时讲述简单的故事。写作时常用onceuponatime开头，要注意动词过去式的变化。常用句型：Here's...by...Onceuponatime/Longago,therewas/liveda/an...Myfavouritestoryis...Ilikethestorybecause...【写作实例】“龟兔赛跑”是我们从小就耳熟能详的故事，请你根据以下提示写一个70词左右的小故事。提示词语：race赛跑wakeup醒来fallasleep入睡tortoise乌龟rabbit兔子thefinishingline终点线_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【思路点拨】【教材典句】Onceuponatime,anemperorlikedclothesverymuch.(SA,2a)Peoplepraisedtheclothesatfirst.(SA,2b)Butonlycleverpeoplecanseethem.(SA,2a)【经典范文】Onceuponatime,therelivedatortoiseandarabbitintheforest.Oneday,theydecidedtohavearace.Lotsofanimalscametowatch.Atfirst,therabbitwasmuchfasterthanthetortoise.Therabbitthoughtthetortoisewastooslow,andshecouldwineasily.Soshedecidedtohaveabreak.Then,shefellasleep.Thetortoisewasslower,buthedidn'tstop.Whentherabbitwokeup,sheranveryfastbutitwastoolate.Shedidn'tgettothefinishinglinebeforethetortoise.【亮点点评】①用onceuponatime开头讲述故事。②讲述故事时恰当运用了atfirst和then,使文章连续性更强。③恰当使用but连接句子,说明乌龟虽然慢但不放弃。【同步检测】1．假如你校校刊正在举办英语故事征文比赛。请你根据下面的提示,以”Theuglyduckling”为题,用英语写一篇80词左右的英语短文参加比赛。提示:1.丑小鸭被兄弟姐妹嘲笑,农场里的其他动物也不愿和他做朋友;2.他离开家,差点死于饥饿（hunger）和寒冷（cold）;3.春天来了,他遇到了一群天鹅（swan）,并且意识到自己也是一只美丽的天鹅;4.故事给我们的启示。_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】TheuglyducklingOnceuponatime,therewasanuglyduckling.Becausehewasdifferentfromhissistersandbrothers,noonelikedhimonthefarm.Hissistersandbrothersoftenlaughedathimandotheranimalsdidn’twanttomakefriendswithhim.Helefthomeandbecamehomeless.Henearlydiedofhungerandcoldinwinter.Whenspringarrived,hemetlotsofswans.Hetriedtojointhemandfinallyrealizedhebecameabeautifulswan.Fromthestory,welearnthatweshouldbelieveinourselvesandnevergiveup.【详解】[总体分析]①题材：本文是一篇记叙文。讲述的是丑小鸭的故事；②时态：时态为“一般过去时”③提示：写作信息点已经给出，并且根据时间线进行，注意不可以缺失信息点，故事给我们的启示放在文章最后，注意从正面积极意义点题。[写作步骤]第一步，开门见山，点出文章主人公——丑小鸭，根据题目要求写出丑小鸭遇到的各种困难；第二步，写出丑小鸭这个故事的精神内涵——不放弃，相信自己，不因外界的评价而迷失自我……第三步，通读全文，注意文中时态为一般过去时，注意时间状语从句，宾语从句等固定句式的使用，修改文中有错误的地方。[亮点词汇]①bedifferentfrom与……不同；②diedfohungerandcold死于饥饿和寒冷；③believeinourselvesandnevergiveup相信自己，永不放弃；[高分句型]①Whenspringarrived,hemetlotsofswans.（when引导的时间状语从句）②Hetriedtojointhemandfinallyrealizedhebecameabeautifulswan.（宾语从句）2．神话故事（fairystory）作为中国传统文化的一部分,对于青少年了解民族文化及历史具有一定意义。假设EnglishDaily网站中的Culture版块请你以“AStoryIKnow”为题，介绍一则神话故事及故事给你带来的影响和启发。要求：1,条理清晰，内容完整，语句通顺，书写工整；2.文中请勿提及你的真实姓名和学校；3.不少于80词。参考词汇：legend（n.传说）；national（adj.民族的）AStoryIKnow__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】 AStoryIKnowTherearemanytraditionalstoriesinChina.Myfavoritestoryis“Chang’eFlyingtotheMoon”.Longlongago,HouYigotaspecialmedicinefromagoddessasarewardafterheshotdownninesuns.PengMengwantedtogetitwhenHouYiwasnothome.TostopPengMeng,Chang’ehadtotakeitandsheflewuptothemoon.HouYimissedhersomuchthathebecamereallysadeverynight.Onenight,hefoundthatthemoonwassobrightandroundthathesawhiswifethere.Hequicklylaidoutherfavoritefruitsanddessertsinthegarden.Ireallylovethisancientmythologybecauseitshowsourstrongdesireforfamilyreunionandlove.【详解】[总体分析]①题材：本文是一篇话题作文；②时态：时态为“一般现在时”，讲述故事用“一般过去时”；③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏信息提示的内容，适当增加细节，并且突出写作的要点。[写作步骤]第一步，表明写作意图。直接说明要介绍什么故事；第二步，具体阐述写作内容。重点介绍故事的内容；第三步，书写结语。介绍故事给你带来的影响和启发。[亮点词汇]①special特别的②reward报酬③mythology神话④familyreunion家庭团聚[高分句型]①Longlongago,HouYigotaspecialmedicinefromagoddessasarewardafterheshotdownninesuns.(时间状语从句)②HouYimissedhersomuchthathebecamereallysadeverynight.(结果状语从句)3、下面是一个名叫《神笔马良》的神话故事，故事后半部分已给出。请根据下面提供的故事前半部分的四个信息，写一篇英语短文，将故事补充完整。1.从前，有个叫马良的孩子，他从小喜欢画画(drawpictures)。可是家里穷困，他买不起笔(brush)。2.于是，他拿起树枝，在山上、在河边、家里画画。从不间断，很快他就画得非常好。3.一天晚上，一个白发神仙老人出现(appear)在他面前，送给他一支金光灿灿的神笔(goldenbrush)。他马上用笔画了一只鸟，鸟竟活了过来(becomealive)飞走了(flyaway)。他又画了一条鱼，鱼也活了起来，在水里欢快地游。4.马良很激动，决定帮助村子里穷苦善良的人们。当他们需要什么，马良就高兴地给他们画什么。消息传到(cometo)皇帝那里，他人把马良抓了去。命令马良给他画株摇钱树，否则就要杀掉马良。马良画了一株又高又大的摇钱树在大海中央一个小岛上，他也画了一条大船，等皇帝带人上了大船后。马良不停地画风，风把船吹翻了皇帝也死了。马良后来到底去了什么地方，人们不得而知。作文要求：1.不能照抄原文：不得在作文中出现学校的真实名称和学生的真实姓名。2.语句连贯，词数80个左右。作文的开头和故事的后半部分已经给出，不计入总词数、也不必抄写在答题卡上。3.书写规范，整洁。Onceuponatime,therewasasmallboycalledMaLiang.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thenewscametotheempire.Hecaughthimandorderedhimtodrawatreethatcouldproducemoney.Orhewouldkillhim,MaLiangdrewashipandthetreeinanislandinthemiddleofthesea.Whentheempireandhismengotontheship,hedrewthestrongwind.Itblewtheshipstronglyandtheshipsank.Theempiredied.MaLiangescapedandnobodyknewwherehewas.【答案】Onceuponatime,therewasasmallboycalledMaLiang.Helikeddrawing.Hedrewpictureswithsticksbecausehehadnomoneytobuyabrush.Hedrewpicturesonthemountains,bytheriverandathome.Soon,Hedrewverywell.Oneday,anoldmanappearedandgavehimagoldenbrushandsaidtohim,“Onlydrawpicturesforpoorpeople.”Aftersayingthat,theoldmandisappeared.MaLiangdrewabirdwiththebrushandthenitbecamealiveandflewaway.Heknewthatthegoldenbrushwasamagicone.Hefeltveryexcited.Sohewentbacktothevillageanddecidedtodrawforpoorpeople.Whentheyneededsomething,hewouldhappilydrawsomethingforthem.Thenewscametotheempire.Hecaughthimandorderedhimtodrawatreethatcouldproducemoney,orhewouldkillhim.MaLiangdrewashipandthetreeinanislandinthemiddleofthesea.Whentheempireandhismengotontheship,hedrewthestrongwind.Itblewtheshipstronglyandtheshipsank.Theempiredied.MaLiangescapedandnobodyknewwherehewas.【详解】1.题干解读：文章属于材料作文，主要是描写神话故事《神笔马良》，内容可以根据题目中给出的提示进行描述。写作时要运用正确的英语表达，要选用恰当的词汇和短语。2.写作指导：文章主要用一般过去时，人称用第三人称展开详细介绍。描述马良得到神笔之前以及得到神笔之后都做了什么的故事。写作时语言要简单易懂，文章结构要完整，多使用简单词语描述，意思要通俗易懂。4．童话故事深受孩子们的喜爱。你读过哪些童话故事？请把你印象最深的一部写下来，和大家一起分享，80词左右。要求：1.What’sthenameofit?2.What’sthestoryabout?3.Whydoyoulikeit?_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】WhenIwasalittlechild，myparentsoftentoldmemanyfunnystories.Amongalltheinterestingstories，Ilikedfairytalesmost.OnewasTheThreeLittlePigs.Therewerethreelittlepigsinthestory.Theybuilttheirownhouses.Thefirstonebuiltastrawhouse.Thesecondonebuiltahousemadeofwood.Thethirdonebuiltahousewithbricks.Thenawolfcame.Hedestroyedthefirstpig'shouseandthesecondpig'shouseeasily.Buthecouldn'tdestroythethirdpig'shousebecauseitwasverystrong.Itteachesustoworkhard.Therearealsomanycolorfulpicturesinthebook.Doyouwanttoreadit?【详解】童话故事深受孩子们的喜爱。你读过哪些童话故事？请把你印象最深的一部写下来，和大家一起分享，80词左右。时态为一般过去态和现在时态，注意时态和时间状语的搭配。动笔前可以按照材料内容列出简单提纲，写出关键单词。写作中注意语义通顺，符合逻辑关系。上下文之间可以适当使用连接词。【点睛】这篇短文使用了一些固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少。学习中注意总结,牢记一些固定句式及短语,如：hefirstonebuiltastrawhouse.Thesecondonebuiltahousemadeofwood.Thethirdonebuiltahousewithbricks.写作时就可以适当引用,使文章的表达更有逻辑性,更富有条理。5．请根据下面的故事梗概，发挥想象力，以“Twolittlepigs”为题写一则小故事。时间：从前地点：森林里人物：幸福的猪妈妈和两只小猪情节：两只小猪长大了，猪妈妈决定让他们走出森林，到城市里看一看……提示词：growup长大要求：60个词左右。开头句已给出，不计入总词数。TwolittlepigsOnceuponatime,thereweretwolittlepigs__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Sotheyreturnedtotheforestandenjoyedtheirlife.【答案】TwolittlepigsOnceuponatime,thereweretwolittlepigs.Onewasblackandtheotherwaswhite.Theylivedhappilywiththeirmotherintheforest.Whentheygrewup,theirmotherdecidedtoletthemgooutoftheforestandlookaroundthecity.Andthentheylefthomewithsomefood.Whentheyarrivedinthecity,theynoticedpeopleinthecitywerenotreallyhappy.Sotheyreturnedtotheforestandenjoyedtheirlife.【详解】[总体分析]①题材：本文是一篇材料作文；②时态：时态为“一般过去时”；③提示：写作要点已给出，要求根据提示内容进行写作，适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。[写作步骤]根据故事梗概，结合文章的开头和结尾，写符合情景的小故事。[亮点词汇]①intheforest在森林里②decidetodosth决定做某事③lookaround环顾四周④arrivein到达[高分句型]①Whentheygrewup,theirmotherdecidedtoletthemgooutoftheforestandlookaroundthecity.（when引导的时间状语从句）②Whentheyarrivedinthecity,theynoticedpeopleinthecitywerenotreallyhappy.（when引导的时间状语从句。【真题链接】1．（22-23七年级下·山东潍坊·期末）同学们，守株待兔是我们非常熟悉的古代寓言故事。请你试着用英语写下来，寄给《21世纪英语》杂志社，传播中国故事，让世界上更多的人了解中国文化。dofarmworkranout...bumpastumppickupwait要求：1.根据提示写句子，可适当发挥，使故事流畅；2.不要出现考生本人信息；3.不少于70词。参考词汇：树桩stump，农作物cropsOnceuponatime,therewasafarmer.Everyday.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________.【答案】Onceuponatimetherewasafarmer.Everydaytheycouldonlyhaveenoughfoodtoeatandenoughclothingtowear.Oneday,whenhewasdoingfarmworkinthefield,ascaredhareranout.Itbumpedastumpanddied.Hepickeditup.Thatday,heatehisfill.Fromthatdayon,henolongerwentinforfarmingagain.Frommorningtillnight,hestayedbythatstump,waitingformiraclestotakeplaceagain.【详解】[总体分析]①题材：本文是一篇看图作文；②时态：时态为“一般过去时”；③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意围绕题图和“信息提示”写出“守株待兔”这个寓言故事。[写作步骤]第一步，介绍故事的主人公；第二步，讲述故事发生的经过；第三步，讲述故事的结果。[亮点词汇]①pickup拾起②nolonger不再③takeplace发生[高分句型]①Frommorningtillnight,hestayedbythatstump,waitingformiraclestotakeplaceagain.（使用非谓语动词）②Onedayinlateautumn,whenhewasdoingfarmworkinthefield,ascaredhareranout.（使用when引导时间状语从句）2．（22-23七年级下·山东青岛·期末）你听过《狐狸和葡萄》的故事吗？请根据下面的图片和提示词，用五句话简明扼要地跟大家分享这个故事。要求：所写句子必须和图片内容相关。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Onehotsummer’sday,afoxwashungryandthirstywhenhesawsomegrapes.Thegrapeslookedsodeliciousthathewantedtoeatthemverymuch.Sohejumpedandjumped.Butthegrapeswerehigh,hecouldn’treachsome.Finally,hehadtogiveupandsaid“Iamsurethegrapesaresour.”【详解】[总体分析]①题材：本文是一篇看图作文；②时态：时态为“一般过去时”；③提示：考生根据图片上的内容描写，适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。[写作步骤]第一步，总述图片上的内容；第二步，具体介绍图片上狐狸的行为；第三步，介绍结果。[亮点词汇]①havetogiveup不得不放弃②besure确定[高分句型]①Thegrapeslookedsodeliciousthathewantedtoeatthemverymuch.（so...that引导的结果状语从句）3．（22-23七年级下·湖北·期末）从前，森林里住着狐狸妈妈和小狐狸。有一天小狐狸饿了，狐狸妈妈去给他找食物，后来发生了什么事呢?妈妈去了山里的一个村子，终于找到了食物。它拿着葡萄（grapes），赶快往家跑，快到家时，它听到了猎狗（huntingdog）的叫声，马上大声喊道:“孩子!快跑!”小狐狸听见妈妈的声音，它赶快跑进了山，结果狐狸妈妈被猎人（hunter）抓到杀死了。请你根据以上所给情节，写篇70词左右的英语小作文。【答案】Onceuponatime,therewasafoxandherbabyintheforest.Onedaythebabyfoxwasveryhungryandcried.Motherfoxdecidedtogetsomefoodforherbaby.Soshewenttoavillageinamountain.Shegotsomegrapesandhurriedtoherhouse.Whenshewasnearthehouse,suddenlysheheardthenoisesofthehuntingdog.Sherealisedthehunterwascomingtokillherson.Motherfoxshouted,“Mydearson,itisdangerous.Runaway.Bequick.”BabyfoxranawaybutMotherfoxwascaughtandkilledbythehunter.【详解】本文需要写一则英文小故事，情节已经给出，重点的单词也相应给了出来，要注意在描述过去的事情的时候正确使用过去时态，可以用到的短语搭配表达有：Onceuponatime曾经；decidedtodo决定去做；getsomefoodfor为…找一些食物；avillageinamountain大山里的一个小村庄；hurriedto匆忙去…；nearthehouse在房子附近；Runaway跑掉。总体来说写作难度不大，重点是正确把握时态的应用，语句连贯，这篇范文完成了要求的写作任务。4．（24-25八年级上·辽宁沈阳·期末）假定你是学生李辉，即将参加学校英语社团组织的以“古代中国智慧故事”为主题的征文活动。请你根据以下提示写一篇英语文章参加比赛。内容包括：1.司马光和小伙伴们玩耍；2.一个小伙伴掉进水缸（watertank）中；3.司马光砸破水缸救出小伙伴。注意：1.词数80～100；2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3.文中不能出现真实姓名及学校名称。SimaGuangbrokethewatertank________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】MynameisLiHui,andtodaywanttosharewithyouanancientChinesewisdomstoryaboutSimaGuang.Oneday,SimaGuangandhisfriendswereplayinghappilyinacourtyard.Suddenly,oneofhisfriendsfellintoalargewatertank.Theotherchildrenweresofrightenedthattheydidn’tknowwhattodonext.ButSimaGuangquicklylookedaroundandsawabigstonenearby.Hepickedupthestoneandhitthewatertankhard.Thetankbroke.Thewaterinitranoversoonandtheboywassavedatlast.Thisstoryteachesusthatindifficultsituations,weshouldstaycalmandthinkofcleversolutions.【详解】[总体分析]①题材：本文是一篇材料作文；②时态：时态以“一般过去时”为主；③提示：写作要点已给出，应注意不要遗漏“司马光砸缸”故事的介绍要点，可适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。[写作步骤]第一步，表明写作意图，点明主