2023届高考英语读后续写课件

ContinuationwritingWriting

Setting背景Plots情节Emotions情感Plotsclimax

高潮Theme主题3StepsofwritingReading“Bye,Mom!Don’tforgettomakemypie!”shouted12-year-oldJakeafterkissinghismother,Susan,goodbye.Hewasanxiouslywaitingforthebus.Momentslater,thebuspulledover,andJakehoppedin,assumingitwasjustgoingtobeanordinaryridetoschool.“Luckily,Momgaveme$6.OtherwiseI’dhavetowalkallthewaytoschool,”hethought.Thebuscametoastop,pickingupChristel,a56-year-oldwomanfromthenextstop.Shewassmellyandlookeddirty.Somepassengersfrownedather,butshewasleastbotheredaboutthem.Momentslater,shetrembledthroughthecrowdtowardanemptyseatnexttoJake.“Ticket,please?!”theconductorsaidloudly,staringather.Christel’sfaceslowlystartedtogored.“Onesecond,I’mlookingformypurse,”shereplied.“I...uh...Idon’thavemoney.Iforgottobringmypurse,”Christelstammered(结结巴巴地说),embarrassed.“Lady,thisisnotacharityridethatpicksupbeggarsforfree.I’mstoppingthebusrightnow.Getout!”yelledtheconductorasthecrowdofpassengersturnedtowardChristelallatonce.Jakewitnessedeverythingandwasdisappointedathowtheconductortreatedthepoorwoman.Thenherememberedhestillhadsomechange.“Hereisyour$3...Giveheraticket,”hesaidtotheconductor,throwingthemoneyintohishand.“Thankyou,sweetheart.Iamforevergratefultoyou!Whatisyourname,dear?”saidChristel.“I’mJake.That’sokay.IjustdidwhatIshoulddo,”repliedJake,takingChristel’swordsofgratitudecasually.TheytalkedaboutJake’sschoollife.“Iwanttobecomeabaseballplayer,butmyschooldoesnothavesuchfacilities.Idon’twanttotroublemymom.She’salreadyworkinghardintherestaurant.Myfatherpassedawayinanaccidenttwoyearsago,”revealedJake.（解释了家庭情况，实现不了梦想的原因）“Alright,Grandma!We’vearrivedatmyschool.I’llleavenow.Bye-bye!”ChristelwastouchedbyJake’swarmheart.Shestaredasecondtimeathisschool,watchinghimdisappearinsidethegate.SettingTime----Place----Characters:ReadingSettingTime----morningPlace----onthebusCharacters:(maincharacters)Jack----a12-yearsoldboywhohasabaseballplayerdream.(maincharacters)Christel----a56-year-oldladywhowassmellyandlookeddirty.mom,conductor,passengers,principalReadingMainplotofthetext----本文以人物为线索展开。12岁的杰克上学迟到了，他坐上公交车赶赴学校。途中来了一位衣着肮脏且忘带钱包的56岁的克里斯特尔太太。正当售票员要把付不起车费的克里斯特尔太太赶下公交车时，杰克站出来为克里斯特尔太太买了车票。二人在乘车途中进行了真诚的交谈，从谈话中克里斯特尔太太了解到杰克梦想成为棒球运动员，杰克的妈妈在一家饭店打工，父亲两年前因为意外去世。克里斯特尔被杰克温暖的心感动了。在杰克下车进学校后，她又一次盯着他的学校，看着他消失在大门里。在原文中学习到的表达：

1.动作类：shout大声说（有意识地高声喊叫，常用于提出警告，发出命令，唤起注意等。）pullover路边停车hopin跳上assume以为

pickupsb接某人上车frownatsb.对某人皱眉tremble颤抖

stareatsb.盯着某人看stammer结结巴巴地说yell大叫

。（多指求援、鼓励时的呼叫，也可指因外界因素刺激而发出的尖利声音）turntowardsb.转向某人。witness目击，见证，观察。

takesb’swordsofgratitudecasually漫不经心地接受某人的感激之词。

reveal揭示，透露

情感表达：

anxiously焦急地

sb’sfacestartedtogpred脸开始变红

embarrassed尴尬的

bedisappointedat对......失望

begratefultosb.感激某人

文中多处使用现在分词非谓语表达1.Momentslater,thebuspulledover,andJakehoppedin,assumingitwasjustgoingtobeanordinaryridetoschool.2.“Hereisyour$3...Giveheraticket,”hesaidtotheconductor,throwingthemoneyintohishand.3.“I’mJake.That’sokay.IjustdidwhatIshoulddo,”repliedJake,takingChristel’swordsofgratitudecasually.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡得相应位置做答。ThenextdayChristelpaidasurprising

visittotheschoolinherexpensivecar.___________________________________________________________________________________________Jakedidn’trealizeabiggersurprisewaswaitingforhimoutsidetheprincipal’soffice.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ThinkingClues----首句线索Para1:ThenextdayChristelpaidasurprisingvisittotheschoolinherexpensivecar.

Para2:Jakedidn’trealizeabiggersurprisewaswaitingforhimoutsidetheprincipal’soffice.见到校长了吗？说了什么？做了什么

对比之前的状态，其实她是非常富裕的。见到Jake了吗？说了什么？做了什么？去了哪里？几个惊喜？ThenextdayChristelpaidasurprisingvisittotheschoolinherexpensivecar.1.第一句话：找到Jack。第二句话：Jack心理感受（震惊，不敢相信）第三句话：Christel把Jack带去哪里？Jack的心理变化（困惑）第四句话，来到校长办公室，见到校长，夸Jack。Jakedidn’trealizeabiggersurprisewaswaitingforhimoutsidetheprincipal’soffice.

Chtistel引导Jack去看球场。Jake情感表现？（惊喜，狂喜，开怀大笑。行为表现，跑，跳，激动的落泪，拥抱。）Christer的行为表现，情感。怎么和Jack表达？WritingClimax是什么惊喜？根据事情的发展顺序和所给的首句，Climax1就是第一段见到Jack给予惊喜，Climax2第二段给出更大的惊喜.双方当时面对的周围环境描写，心理描写，随即采取相应的行为动作描写。来到学校——跟随来到校长办公室——讲述两人的邂逅——带着来到球场——看到改造后的球场——激动地奔跑——开心地笑了词汇激活

【行为类】①拜访：see/visit/payavisitto

②问候：greet/sendhisrespectsto/extendgreetingsto

③表达：express/show/describe【情绪类】①感到震惊的：

shocked/astonished/surprised

②开心地：happily/pleasantly1.inhighspirits2.inagoodmood3.canhardlyconcealexcitement4.amixtureofexcitementandhappiness5.beoverjoyedat6.bebesideoneselfwithjoy/bewildwithjoy

7.brightenone’sheart

心情愉快心情好几乎无法掩饰兴奋既兴奋又开心对......感到非常高兴欣喜若狂使某人心情愉快描写“喜乐”开心“我想给你一个惊喜!”她指向棒球场，眼里闪烁着光芒。“Iwantedtosurpriseyou!”shepointedatthenewballparkwithhereyes

gleaming.感激如果没有杰克的帮助,我就不会顺利回家。ButforJack'shelp,Iwouldn'tgohomesmoothly.获得高分的写作技巧Tip1:故事要围绕着主要人物展开。Tip2:详细刻画角色及其情感。Tip4:使用恰当的修饰词以使描写更加生动。Tip3:使用恰当的衔接词以使故事更有连贯性。Tip5:做到首尾呼应以使故事更加有条理。Tip6:确保第二段和第一段的衔接有逻辑。showtime

ThenextdayChristelpaidasurprisingvisittotheschoolinherexpensivecar.

Jakewasshockedtoseeheroutsidehisclassroom.“Icameheretoseeyou.Pleasefollowmetoyourprincipal’soffice,”saidChristel,confusingJake,whohadnoideahowhislifewouldchange.ChristelgreetedtheprincipalandtoldhimaboutherencounterwithJake,expressinggratitudeforJake’shelp.Christelturnedouttobeawealthyandsuccessfulwoman.“Youmustbereallyproudofyourstudent!”shetoldtheprincipal.Jakedidn’trealizeabiggersurprisewaswaitingforhimoutsidetheprincipal’soffice.“Jake,honey,doyoumindvisitingyourfield?”askedChristel.Jakedidasshetold,hurryingtotheschoolplayground.Christelhadhiredtop-classdesignerstochangethegroundintoabigballpark.Jakecouldn’tbelievehisowneyes,staringatthelatestequipmentforthenewballpark.Christelhelpedtohireanexperiencedbaseballcoachforthesch