作文14 云南卷-五年（2017-2021）中考英语满分作文解读+素材积累

作文14云南卷2021年云南中考英语书面表达DoingHouseworkMakesMe__________提示：家务是生活中的一部分，我们作为一名家庭成员，应该学会分担家务。请以“DoingHouseworkMakesMe__________”为题，用英语写一篇短文，叙述一次你做家务的经历，并谈谈你的体会。要求：1.请先将题目补全后，再作答；2.语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁，词数不少于60个；3.文中不得使用真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计；4.请将短文写在答题卡上，写在本试题卷上无效。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________DoingHouseworkMakesMeHappyDoinghouseworkispartofourlife.It’snecessarytosharehouseworkwithotherfamilymembers.I’dliketotellyouaboutoneofmyexperiences.LastMother’sDayImadeaspecialdinnerformymom.Itdidn’tworkaswellasIthought.Ihurtmyfingerswhilecuttingcarrots,andIforgottoputsaltintothedishes.Whenmymomcamebackhome,shewashappytotastethem.Thenshehuggedmeandsaid,“Goodgirl!”Fromthisexperience,I’velearneddoinghouseworkcannotonlyhelpmegrowupbutalsobringhappinesstomyfamily.【详解】1.题目解读：本文是一篇话题作文，要求补全标题，叙述一次做家务的经历，谈谈体会。注意叙述的合理性。2.写作指导：本文采用第一人称书写，介绍经历时，用一般过去时。可分为三段，第一段大体介绍做家务的影响；第二段介绍做家务的经历，第三段介绍体会。注意上下文的衔接通顺，注意连词和从句的使用。2020年云南中考英语书面表达提示：在课余生活中,你通常做些什么？有什么收获？请以“MyAfter-schoolLife”为题,用英语写一篇短文,谈谈你的课余生活。要求：1.语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁,词数不少于60个；2.文中不得使用真实姓名、校名,否则以零分计；3.请将短文写在答题卡上,写在本试题卷上无效。MyAfter-schoolLife__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________MyAfter-schoolLifeThoughschoollifeisverybusy,mylifeafterschooliscolourfulandenjoyable.Firstofall,Ineedtofinishmyhomework,whichisthefirstthingIneedtodo.OnlywhenIfinishmyhomework,willIgotoplaywithmyfriendshappily.Playingbadmintonismyfavouritesportafterschool.Inmyopinion,sportcontributestomyhealthwhichisimportantindailylife.Iamsosatisfiedwithmyself,becauseInotonlystudyhard,butalsoenjoymyselfafterschool.Asastudent,Ineedtostudy.Atthesametime,Ineedtoenjoymychildhood.【详解】1.题干解读：该题目属于说明文写作。在写作时应根据内容提示讲述自己的课余生活及收获。2.例文点评：例文主要用第一人称进行写作，主要采用一般现在时态来写作。讲述自己的课余生活及收获叙述完整且条理清晰。3.高分亮点：短语：firstofall;needto;playwith;inmyopinion;contributesto;amsatisfiedwith;atthesametime。句型：though引导的让步状语从句；Onlywhen…willI…部分倒装结构；which引导的定语从句；because引导的原因状语从句；notonly…butalso…的结构。2019年云南中考英语书面表达AWeekendtoRemember提示：请以“AWeekendtoRemember”为题，用英语写一篇短文，叙述一个令你难忘的周末以及你的感悟。要求：1.语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁，词数不少于60个；2.文中不得使用真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计；3.请将短文写在答题卡上，写在本试题卷上无效。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________AWeekendtoRememberItwasabrightandsunnyweekend.Iwentfishingwithmyfather.Westartedfishingassoonaswearrivedataclearlake.Halfanhourpassed,butwegotnofish.Ibecameimpatientandwantedtogiveup.“Justwaitpatiently,son.Nothingintheworldiseasytoget.”Myfatherencouragedme.Isatpatientlytofishwithmyfather.Finally,Igotabeautifulbigfish.Asenseandhappinesscametome.I'llrememberthisweekendforeverbecauseIhavelearntthatbeingpatientissoimportant.【详解】这篇短文使用了不少的固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少，如brightandsunny、gofishing、assoonas、arriveat、halfanhourpassed、wanttodo、giveup、intheworld、beeasytoget等。而并列结构Halfanhourpassed,butwegotnofish./Ibecameimpatientandwantedtogiveup.和Westartedfishingassoonaswearrivedataclearlake./I'llrememberthisweekendforeverbecauseIhavelearntthatbeingpatientissoimportant.等复杂从句结构的运用，丰富了短文内容，使表达多样化，是本文的亮点。在学习中注意总结牢记一些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章表达更有逻辑性，也更富有条理。【点睛】书面表达题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥的作文。它要求将所规定的材料内容经整理后展开思维，考查运用所学英语知识准确表达意思的能力。所以，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自己熟悉的单词、短语和句式，尽可能使用高级词汇和较复杂的句式结构以便得到较高的分数。2018年云南中考英语书面表达DoingSomethingNiceto...提示:每个人都向往美好的生活,美好的生活需要我们真诚的付出和给予。请以“DoingSomethingNiceto...”为题,写一篇英语短文,谈谈你曾经或将要为他人、社会等做的一件美好的事情。要求：1.请先将题目补全后再做答；2.语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁,词数不少于60个；3.文中不得使用真实姓名、校名,否则以零分计；4.请将短文写在答题卡上,写在本试题卷上无效。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________DoingsomethingnicetomyfriendAtruefriendreachesforyourhandandtouchesyourheart!Jerryismygoodfriend.He'sverythin.Lastwinter,hegotill.Hehadtogotohospitalonceaweek.Hetooklotsofmedicine.Ihopedhewouldbeasstrongasme.Soeveryweekend,Iaskedhimtopracticeplayingbasketballwithme.Itaughthimhowtoplayit.Nowheismuchstrongerandhealthier.Ifeelveryhappytohavedonesomethingnicetomyfriend.【解析】本文内容应包含表格中所提供的所有信息。灵活运用各种句式，采用不同的表达方式将各个要点完整地表述出来，注意主次分明，详略得当。语言力求准确，简洁。最后必须认真查验是否有漏写，有无拼写错误及标点误用等。点睛：这篇短文使用了大量的固定短语，为文章增色不少，如gotohospital；onceaweek；lotsof；asas等；So；Now；Ifeelveryhappyto等的运用，使文章的表达更有逻辑性，更富有条理；同时语言流畅，内容完整，是一篇不错的范文。2017年云南中考英语书面表达A Special Day

提示：在每个人的生活中，总会有些特别的日子．请根据所给题目"A Special Day"写一篇英语短文，记叙你特别的一天．

要求：语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁，词数不少于60个；

文中不能使用你的真实姓名和校名，否则以零分计．

请将短文写在答题卡上．写在本试题卷上无效．_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________                                                  

ASpecialDay

I hadaveryspecial day onJune11th，2012．（特别的一天）

Itwasasunnyday.Onthewaytoschool,myfrienddidsomethingrudetome.Itmademesad.What'sworse,Igota"C"inmyfavoritesubject【高分句型一】．Afterschool,Iwenthomeunhappily.Itwasdarkintheroom.Suddenlythelightswereon,andIheardthesong"Happybirthday"．Iwassurprisedtoseemanypeopleandabigcake."Oh,it'smybirthday."（难忘的事情和经历）Iwassoexcitedandhappy.Itwasmyfirsttimetohaveabirthdayparty【高分句型一】．（影响和感受）

I'llneverforgetthatday.（总结全文，点题）【分析】【高分句型一】

What'sworse,Igota"C"inmyfavoritesubject更糟糕的是，我最好的学科考了C．

what'sworse更糟糕的是

【高分句型一】

Itwasmyfirsttimetohaveabirthdayparty这是我第一次举办生日会．

动词不定式做后置定语，修饰time.【点评】注意使用一些句型和短语，使整篇文章意思连贯、流畅，方能成就一篇好的作文．中考英语写作满分标准1.结构要清晰阅卷老师们要在规定的时间内批阅上千份作文，而清晰的结构，会让阅卷老师一目了然，自然就会喜欢你的作文。最常见的结构便是”三段式“。第一段，要开门见山，直接拿出主题。给大家举个例子，比如，写我的妈妈，第一段直接就说Mymotherisaworker.Sheisbeautifulandsheisagoodmother.明确自己的观点。第二段，说明她为什么是一个好妈妈。1.Sheworkshard.2.Sheisverystrictwithme.3.ShealwaysencouragesmeandhelpmewhenIamintrouble.详细说出妈妈的优点。第三段，得出结论。大家可以发表自己的观点，也可以提出建议和希望。如，Ilovemymother.Ilovemyfamily！2.时态、语法要准确1.英语作文除了结构，时态这也是一篇作文是否得高分的关键。要明确文章的时态、同时人称要一致、数要一致、首尾要呼应。再根据内容要求，现确定事情是过去已经发生还是未来即将发生，比如记叙一件事要用一般过去时；写经常发生的事或对人物的描写，要用一般现在时；对于未来的憧憬要用一般将来时；过去的事情对现在造成的影响或过去延续到现在的状况都用现在完成时。一定不能乱用乱配。2.语法和拼写错误每个扣0.5分，重复错误一般不计。低级的语法错误不仅影响分数，更影响老师对你英语水平的总体评判。低级的语法错误包括男女不分，时态错误，语态错误，单数复数等等。3.短语运用要灵活写作文的时候，尽量使用有把握的词，避免不必要的失分。当然，定语从句、宾语从句等句型，在关键的时候用上一两个，会增添你文章的文采。在英语中存在很多简单又能表达很多意思的短语。这些短语的运用可以使作文更加原汁原味。还有对关联词的使用，如firstofall，secondly，finally，last，sothat，inorderthat，not...but，notonly...butalso等。还可以使用更高级的词，如inaword，allinall（表示总结的），but，yet，however（表示转折）等。阅卷老师很在意这些逻辑连接词，因为这些词体现了整个文章的思路。4.写全要点近年的各地中考英语提示性作文比较多，也就是说写作内容几乎都有要点提示，通常都是3～5个提示点。这种作文，同学们一定记住不要逐字翻译，但是提示点必须在文章中有所体现。文章写得再好，如果缺少了要点就会扣分的。所以要点也就是文章的第二段内容，同学们要把提示点写全，然后围绕提示点充分发挥，丰富自己所写的内容。5.书写要整洁作文的书写一定要保持规范整洁，同一篇文章书写规范整洁的和书写混乱的之间可以有2到3分的差距。给阅卷老师留下最深刻印象的就是你的书写，最简单的得分点就是我们的认真书写。工整漂亮的书写会给评卷老师留下美好的第一印象和愉快的心情，在扣分时自然会“手下留情”。中考写作万能句型【开头句】1.Ithink/AsfarasIknow/Inmyopinion/asfarasIamconcerned/frommypointofview我认为…Inmyopinion/Frommypointofview,weshouldknowmoreaboutgoodmanners.在我看来，我们应更懂礼貌。2.Itisclearthat/Clearly显而易见...Itisclear(that)thiscityneedsmoreschools,busesandhospitals.显然，这个城市需要更多学校、公车和医院。Clearly,peoplewholaughmorearehealthier!显然，笑得更多的人更健康！3.Asanoldsayinggoes...俗话说…Asanoldsayinggoes,“Goodhealthisworthmorethanwealth.”俗话说：“健康比财富更重要。”4.generallyspeaking一般来说；总的来说Generallyspeaking,Ithinklifeisbettertoday.总的来说，我认为如今的生活更好了。5.Thetopicof…isbecomingmoreandmorepopularrecently.最近…话题越来越流行Thetopicofshoppingonlineisbecomingmoreandmorepopularrecently.最近，网购的话题越来越火热。6.itisbelieved+(that)从句人们认为ItisbelievedthattheInternethasbothadvantagesanddisadvantages.人们认为互联网有利也有弊。7.itissaid(that)...据说…ItissaidthatabouthalfofthepeopleinChinasmoke.据说在中国大约有一半的人吸烟。【衔接句】1.though虽然；尽管Thoughweareyoung,wecanstilldosomethingtohelp.虽然我们年轻，但我们还是可以做点事来帮忙的。2.eventhough/evenif即使；虽然Eventhoughtheyarebusy,theyarealwaysthinkingofme.即使很忙，他们也总会想着我。3.however但是；不过；然而Hewasfeelingbad.However,hewenttoschool.他感觉不舒服，但他还是去上学了。4.not(that)…but(that)…不是……而是……Lifeisnotacompetition,butatrip,stepbystep.生活不是竞赛，而是一场一步接着一步的旅行。5.Ononehand,…;ontheotherhand,…一方面，……；另一方面，……Ononehand,Iwanttogototheparty,butontheotherhandIoughttostudyfortheexam.一方面我想去参加宴会，但是另一方面我又得复习迎考。6.reasonfor(doing)sthOnegoodreasonforreadingisthatitisuseful.要读书的一个很好的理由就是它很有用。7.reason+(why/that)从句ThereasonthatIaskforleaveisthatIhurtmyleftfootintheP.E.classthisafternoon.我之所以请假是因为今天下午在体育课上伤了左脚。【结尾句】1.inshort/inaword/inconclusion/tosumup/allinall总之；简而言之;一句话Inaword，weshouldmakeourownhappinessbyourselves.总而言之，我们要自己来创造幸福。2.finally最后；最终Finally,thankyouallforyourhelp.最后，感谢你们所有人的帮助。3.Personally,Ibelievethat就我个人而言，我相信…Personally,Ibelievethatthebetterwetakecareoftheenvironment,themorebeautifultheworlditwillbe.4.Fromabove,wecanpredictthat...从以上情况，我们可以预测...中考英语作文万能句型必备句式一:Itis+adj.forsb.todosth.对某人来说做某事是怎样的1.写人物Itisluckyformetobemyparents’son/daughter.Itisluckyformetomakefriendswithhim/her.2.写学习ItisimportantforustolearnChinesewell.Itis…toimproveourlearningskills.Itis….tolistentoteacherscarefullyinclass.Itis…tosharewitheachother.3.写健康Itisnecessaryforeveryonetokeephealthy.Itis….toeatmorevegetablesandfruits.Itis…toexerciseeverydayandkeepagoodmood.（保持好心情）4.写计划Itisexcitingformetogosomewhereinteresting.ItisrelaxingtovisitBeijingwithmybestfriends.Itisnecessaryforustoknowsomethingaboutforeigncountry’scustomsandhistory.5.写环保Itisveryimportantforustoprotectourenvironment.Itis…tolivealow-carbonlife.（低碳生活）Itis….tokeepair/watercleanandfresh.Itisusefultoturnoffthelightwhenweleavearoom.6.写安全Itisveryimportantforustoprotectourselves.Itisdangeroustoswimalone./playwithfire.Itis….toeathealthilyandsafely.句式二:V-ingis+adj.(动名词做主语)以上句子均可变成此句型！句式三:notonly…butalso…不但……而且……1.写人物Myfatherisnotonlyagoodfatherbutalsoagoodfriend.Inotonlylikeplayingfootballbutalsolikereadingbooks.2.写学习Readingisnotonlygoodforourstudybutalsoforourgrowing.Studyingingroupsisnotonlyhelpfulbutalsogivesmechancestoimprovemyself.3.写健康Doingexerciseisnotonlyagoodwaytorelaxourselvesbutalsokeepsourbodiesingoodshapes.Havingbreakfastisnotonlyveryimportantbutalsoprovidesuswithenergyandpower.4.写计划Travelingcannotonlyopenupoureyesbutalsomakeusfeelhappyandrelaxed.Givingagiftcannotonlymakeherhappybutalsoshowyourlovetoher.5.写环保Takingataxiisnotonlyawasteofmoneybutalsomakesourenvironmentworse.Wecannotonlyplantmoretreesbutalsocallpeopletoprotectourenvironment.6.写安全Followingtrafficrulesisnotonlyveryimportantbutalsokeepsourselvessafe.Weshouldnotonlyobeytherulesbutalsotellotherstodoso.句式四:besupposedto+V.应该做某事…1.写人物Wearesupposedtoexpressourlovetoourmothersheartedly.Youaresupposedtocommunicatemorewithyourparentsandteachers.2.写学习Iamsupposedtostudyhardandmakeprogresseveryday.Wearesupposedtotakenotesinclass.Wearenotsupposedtoeatinclass.3.写健康Wearesupposedtoeatmorevegetablesanddrinkmorewater.Youarenotsupposedtoeatjunkfoodandstayuptoolate.4.写计划Iamsupposedtogosomewhereinterestingandrelaxmyself.Wearesupposedtomakegoodp