读后续写乐高拼装假肢帮助残疾男孩课件高三英语一轮复习

WriteNancy读后续写：乐高拼装假肢帮助残疾男孩ContinuationWriting123用思维导图理清故事情节分析写作思路。学习主人公的个人爱心:虽自我残疾，但也能帮助别人。利用主谓推进式阅读，画出句子主谓的方式来寻找续写内容的切入点。objectives：LeadinTask1：自主学习检测翻译下列句子Beforeconstructingit,Ihadalreadydecidedagainsttraditionalprosthetics._______________________________________________________________2.Notbecausetheywereineffective,butbecauseplayingwithLegodidsignificantlyimprovemydexterity,helpingmeadapttomycondition.__________________________________________________________________________非谓语动词3.Yearslater,IdevelopedanotherprostheticarmthatIcalledtheMK-1,whichhadfingers…..________________________________________________________________4.Oneday,acouplewiththeireight-year-oldson,wholostbotharmsinanaccident.________________________________________________________________定语从句在建造它之前，我已经决定不使用传统的假肢不是因为它们无效，而是因为玩乐高确实显著提高了我的灵活性，帮助我适应我的状态。几年后，我开发了另一种名为Mk-I的假肢。。。。有一天，一对夫妇带着他的八岁儿子，他在一次事故中失去了双臂，在了解到我的作品后，他们来到我的身边自主学习检测翻译下列句子并背诵5.MyparentsandIhadlookedintogettingoneafewyearsearlier,onlytobediscouragedbythecostlyprice_______________________________________________________________结果状语6.IconcludedthatImightnotneedtobuyone.________________________________________________________________7.wewerewonderingifyoucouldpossiblyhelpbuildasetofprostheticsforourson.________________________________________________________________名词性从句我和我的父母几年前发现了一个，但是却因为昂贵的价格而感到气馁。我总结出我可能不需要买一个。我们想知道你是否可能帮我们儿子做一套假肢。ABCDEFEBFDAC?Task2Pleaseputthosepicturesinorder.Task2Ifyouareaskedtodividethesepicturesinto2parts,whatwillyoudowiththem?Notethatonepartisforreadingandtheotherpartisforwritinginthecontinuationwriting?123456Howtodividethesepicturesinto2parts??Howtodrink?Turningpoint转折点Reading(part1from___to___)aimstofindtheproblemWriting(part2from___to___)aimstosolvetheproblem1346123456ReadingandThinking深度解读语篇——抓故事线/情感线深度解读语篇Read浅层信息获取:5W1H深层文本解读理清情节和情感分析人物性格特点明确故事主题品味写作风格和语言Think结合所给两段首句原文呼应+正能量结局生动编写故事动作描写情感描写环境描写语言运用推测情节发展构思写作框架WriteSteps动作描写

情感描写浅层信息获取:5W1H“I，myparents,acouple,boy”Theboy’shome”NotspecifictimebuttimelineHowdidIimprovetheprostheticWhydidIgottheLego?IcreatedprostheticthoughpalyingwithLegoTask3Howtoread

用思维导图理清故事时空线、情节线——情节定为四部分，分别是主要情节的开头(beginning)、主要情节的发展阶段（development），主要情节的高潮（climax）和结局（ending），结局也就是我们的续写部分，情感线及主题。利用主谓推进式阅读，画出句子主谓的方式来理清开头、发展和高潮各故事情节大意。深层文本解读Task4Howtoread?时空线情节线情感线主

题语

言1.时间线

：__________________________2.空间线：__________________________Storymountain：BeginningDevelopmentClimaxSolutionEding“我”玩乐高心路历程1.原文心理描写：__________________________________________2.续写心理描写：__________________________________________whatisthetheme:_____________________1.原文语言特点：心理活动描写、非谓语动词、定语从句、名词性从句等2.续写语言模仿深层文本解读时空线1.时间线:

atfiveyearsold→1.空间线:时空线1.时间线:

atfiveyearsold→bytheageofnine→yearslater-Oneday1.空间线:

myhome→theboy’shome1.Beginning2.Development3.Climax(themainproblemorconflict)

StoryMountainPlot情节线4.Resolution5.Ending1.Beginning2.Development3.Climax(themainproblemorconflict)Ending(atimetosolvetheproblem/howthingsendup/whatisthetheme？)

StoryMountainPlot情节线找到问题或情节发展高潮：答应帮忙，遇到什么挑战？是否成功？我从小患有罕见疾病，缺少右臂我玩乐高加强我的灵巧，同时制作义肢我制作的义肢功能越来越完善一对夫妻请求我为他们失去双臂的儿子制作义肢。4.Resolution5.Ending情感线“我”玩乐高心路历程1.原文情感描写：__________________________________________2.续写情感描写：__________________________________________技巧：通过动作、语言、情景描写可以推理出心理活动“我”期初拼乐高的情况：“我”设计的第一个义肢功能:“我”设计的第二个义肢功能:“我”设计的最新的义肢功能:Althoughitwasdifficulttoputallthepiecestoghther…Igrew

interestedinLegoTechnic,whichallowedmetocreatemorecomplicatingthings...Ihadmademyfirstprostheticarm(义肢)….asimpleboxthatperfectlysuitedmyrightarm.Yearslater,IdevelopedanotherprostheticarmthatIcalledtheMK-1……thepurejoyofcreatingprostheticswithLegoTechnickeptmegoingon.Itfeaturedacontrolunitthatcouldsendandreceiveordersfromsensorsonthearmtothemotors,withcablesthatcontractlikemuscles.Optimistic乐观的joyful高兴的Fulfilled有成就感的续写段心理变化？原文心理描写续写段心理变化？情感线“我”玩乐高心路历程1.原文情感描写：__________________________________________2.续写情感描写：__________________________________________Paragraph1:Iknewitwouldbeachallenginganddemandingtask,butIrespondedwitha“yes”.Paragraph2:Irushedtotheboy’shomeandsecuredtheprostheticsontohim!uncertainpersistentexcitedproud主题时空线情节线情感线综合以上信息可概括文章大意:我从小患有波伦综合征，缺少右臂。我玩乐高加强我的灵巧，同时制作义肢。我制作的义肢功能越来越完善。一对夫妻请求我为他们失去双臂的儿子制作义肢。IsufferedfromPolandsyndromesincechildhood,lackingtherightarm.IplayedwithLEGOtoimprovemyflexibiltyandmadeprostheticsatthesametime.TheprostheticsImadeweremoreandmoreperfect.Acoupleaskedmetomakeprostheticsfortheirsonwholosthiswholearm!主题（Theme）：_________________________________________________________

身残志不残One’sbodyisdisabled,butnotmind个人爱心:虽自我残疾，但也能帮助别人WriteTask5推测情节发展——构思写作框架语言、动作、心理：

【五官、肢体】对续写开头语利用主谓推进式进行研读，以开头句主谓内容为基础以问问题（问问题从语言、动作【五官，肢体等】、心理或周围环境角度出发）的形式寻找续写内容的切入点。Readforcontinuationwriting(定续写内容)Readforcontinuationwriting(定续写内容)Iknewitwouldbeachallenginganddemandingtask,butIrespondedwitha

“yes”语言、动作、心理：

【五官、肢体】听到“yes”那个男孩的反应式什么？我如何做出承诺？我的困难是什么？我如何成功做出假肢？语言、动作、心理：

【五官、肢体】Irushedtotheboy’shomeandsecuredtheprostheticsonhim.假肢是否合适？男孩和他父母如何感谢我？主题：我的感受是什么？1.heboyraisedhishead，eyesshiningwithasparkofhope.2.“Trustme,

I

will

make

it.”3.EverytimeIwasstuckinadifficultstep,theboy'shopefuleyesflashedacrossmymind1.Holdingbreathandheartsbeatingwildly,weanxiouslyawaitedtheresult-theyworked2.“Thankyouverymuch”,theboyandHisparentsquicklyapproachedmetoexpresstheirimmensethanks.3.Feelasenseofaccomplishment;madeupmymindtodevotemyselftomakingalifelongimpactonthefieldofprostheticinnovation.（语言）（动作）（心理）（动作、心理）（语言）（心理）Writing：生动编写故事注意：三衔接、二过渡、一靓尾动作、心理、语言等细节描写模仿原文语言特点Task6：Writethefirstparagraphin6mins本段注意：两个衔接句、一过渡动作、心理、语言等细节描写模仿原文语言特点

Iknewitwouldbeachallenginganddemandingtask,butIrespondedwitha

“yes”.Theboyliftedhisheadwithhisoncelifelesseyesnowshiningwithasparkofhope.(衔接句1)“Trustme.Iwillmakeit.”,Ipromisehimwitharadiantsmile.NosoonerhadIsaidgoodbyetotheirfamilythanIsetouttodothetaskwithoutanydelay.(过渡句1)ThesubsequentdayswitnessedhowIwascommittedtodesigningdrawings,selectingtheLegopiecesandintegratingpracticalcomponentstocreateprosthetics.EverytimeIwasstuckinadifficultstep,theboy‘shopefuleyesflashedacrossmymind.Itseemedlikeacenturylaterwhentheboy-customizedprostheticstookshape.Thencamethebigday.（衔接句2）Paragraph1:Assighment：Polishyourwriting读后续写具体评分点（共25分；踩点得分）（一）内容第一段：要点1：失去双臂的男孩的反应。3分要点2：主人公为男孩量身定做义肢的过程。4分要点3：主人公完成义肢制作的表述。2分第二段：要点1：戴上义肢。3分要点2