读后续写微技能-动作链和动作面课件

Show,don’ttell读后续写之“动作链”和动作“面”读后续写作为记叙文，其核心只有一个，那就是“人”。因此一切的笔墨，都是为了塑造人物形象，使人物更加饱满。Howtomakeyourwritingvividandattractive?最为重要的描写有五类：环境、动作、心理、情绪、语言Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?题材题材Show,don’ttell1.动作链:一连串的动作√使用一连串动作让画面动起来方法一：构造“动作链”比如上车这个动作,Hegotintothecar.

【拦车】→【上车】→【告诉司机目的地】Hehailedataxi,gotintoitandtoldthedriverhisdestination.再比如2017年6月浙江卷读后续写中写到“用肉把狼引开”的情节.【拿出肉】→【瞄准狼】→【扔出去】He

tookoutthemeat,aimedatthewolfandthrewitstraighttothefierceanimal.形成动作链:冲向前蹲下来一把抱住Shedashedforward,kneltdownandgatheredhersonintoherarms.①“动作链”结构1:

主+谓1...,谓2...,and谓3....

1.看到失散多年的儿子，她将其一把抱住。可以把“抱”这个动作按时间拆分为：2.

他上台领奖并发言.按时间拆分为：Heglancedatthetrophy/cup,tookadeepbreathandsaid,“Thanks.”先看一眼奖杯，深吸一口气，说道：“谢谢！”。1.女孩停止了啜泣(sob)，从女人身边退了(step)回来，开始唱歌。__________________________________________________________________2.她登上(board)飞机，坐在座位上，寻找她的书。__________________________________________________________________3.那个女人从他手里抓起最后一块饼干，怒视(glareat)着他.__________________________________________________________________仿写练习1-主+谓1...,谓2...,and谓3....Thegirl

stoppedsobbing,steppedbackfromthewomanandbegan

tosing.She

boardedtheplane,satonherseatandthen

lookedforherbook.Thewoman

grabbedthelastbiscuitfromhishandandthen

glaredathim.Blamedbyhisteacherandlaughedatbyeveryone,hefeltratherupsetanddepressed.动作1动作21.受到老师的责备和大家的嘲笑，他感到相当的不安和沮丧。动作3②“动作链”结构2:

doing/done...(分词作状语),主+谓Thegirlbeganblowingherwhistle,

tryingtoattractotherpeople'sattention.动作1动作22.女孩开始吹她的口哨，尝试去吸引其他人的注意力。②“动作链”结构2:

doing/done...(分词作状语),主+谓②“动作链”结构2:

doing/done...(分词作状语),主语+谓语

3.排了三个小时的队后，他被告知票卖完了。Hequeuedfor3hours,andwastoldthattheticketsweresoldout.”Havingqueuedfor3hours,hewastoldthattheticketshadbeensoldout.动作1动作2Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?动作链:一连串的动作构成画面Skill1:描述一系列的动作。如果是同一个主语做了两个以上动作，可用:主+谓1,谓2and

(then)谓3，Skill2:当出现两个动作，而前后两个动作逻辑主语一致时，可用:非谓语,主+谓主+谓,非谓语非谓语:①动作有明显先后:Havingdonesth

②主动:doing

③被动done1.当我和妈妈一起装饰(decorate)房子时，我不小心摔坏了一个昂贵的花瓶(vase)。__________________________________________________________2.意识到我负担(afford)不起继续深造(furtherstudy)的事实，我不得不停止追逐(chase)我的梦想。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.在知道我的英语很好之后，他给了我一份打字的(typing)工作，答应(promise)教我计算机，并提供住宿(accommodation)。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Realizing

thatIcouldn'taffordtocontinuemyfurtherstudy,I

hadtostopchasingmydream.仿写练习2-doing/done...(分词作状语),主语+谓语Whendecorating

thehousewithmymother,Iaccidentallybroke

anexpensivevase.HavingknownthatmyEnglishwasverygood,hegave

meatypingjob,promised

toteachmecomputerandprovided

accommodation.Show,don’ttellHowtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?2.动作“面”（面部，肢体，语言心理）√感受情绪:喜怒形于色----Heishappy.Hissmilebroadenedfromeartoear.Heclappedhishandstogetherandjumpedupanddownwithjoy.Hegiggledandsquealedwithexcitement.facebodyvoice

从面部/肢体和语言心理多个方面编织动作”面“.v.咯咯地笑v.长声尖叫感受情绪:喜怒形于色----Sheisangry.Hercheeks/eyesturnedredandhereyebrowsnarrowed.Sheraisedherclenchedfists.Sheclenchedherfistsandputthemonherhips.Shebegantogrowlatmethroughclenchedteeth.紧握双拳双手叉腰向…咆哮①Doing...,主+谓,doing...（三个主动动作同时进行，可以用此结构）1.他们站在空旷的路边，仰望着天空，感受着这份珍贵的平静。Standingbesidetheemptyroad,theylookedupintothesky,feelingthepreciouspeace.2.围在营火旁，他们吃着烧烤，享受这一令人难忘的时光。Gatheringaroundthecampfire,theyfeastedonBBQ,enjoyingtheunforgettablemoment.肢体面部心理肢体面部心理②Done...,主+谓,doing...1.被老师的话所鼓舞，Lucy举起了手，小声说，“我来。”Encouragedbytheteacher'swords,

Lucyraisedherhand,whispering,“I'lldoit.”2.被眼前的这一幕吓坏了，他一动不动，不知道该说什么。Terrifiedbythesceneinfrontofhim,hewasrootedtothespot,beingatalosswhattosay.肢体面部心理心理肢体心理③主+谓,doing...anddoing...1.他欣喜若狂，在雨中又唱又跳。Hewasoverwhelmedwithjoy,singinganddancingintherain.2.他激动地鼓掌，一边点头，一边微笑。Heclappedhishandswithexcitement,noddingandsmiling.心理肢体面部④(With)...doing/done...,主+谓,doing...贝贝坐在泳池边，双臂低垂，思考自己是白熊猫还是黑熊猫。(With)hisarmsdrooping,

BeiBeisatbesidethepool,wonderingwhetherhewaswhiteorblack.题材题材Show,don’ttellSkill:从面部/肢体和语言心理多个方面编织动作”面”1.Doing...,主+谓,doing...2.Done...,主+谓,doing...3.主+谓,doing...anddoing...4.(With)...doing/done...,主+谓,doing...Summary

Strikewhiletheironishot：

1.他们享受着美好的时光，聊着天，吃着东西，开着玩笑。Theywerehavingawonderfultime,talking,eatingandjoking.2.失望、无言(speechless)，Tim站在那里，不知道该怎么办。(Being)speechlessanddisappointed,Tim

stood

there,notknowingwhattodowithit.3.耷拉(droop)着脑袋，Lucy坐在河岸边，若有所思。Withherheaddrooping,Lucysat

attheriverbank,thinkingaboutsomething.4.发现自己的鸡又被偷了，老人攥紧(clench)双拳，一脸愤怒。Findingthathischickenhadbeenstolenagain,theoldman

clenchedhisfists,withhisfaceburningwithanger.1.

动作链Show,don’ttell

2.动作面Skill1:主语一致的主要动作≥2:主+谓1,谓2and

(then)谓3，Skill:从面部/肢体和语言心理多个方面编织动作面1.Doing...,主句,doing...2.Done...,主句,doing...3.主句,doing...anddoing...4.(With)...doing/done...,主句,doing...Summary

Skill2:当出现两个动作，而前后两个动作逻辑主语一致时，可用:非谓语,主+谓主+谓,非谓语非谓语:①主动且完成:Havingdonesth②主动:doing③被动done①表情感类的形容词，

主+谓…情感类的形容词在句中作状语，说明主语的情感状态，可以转化为feeling+adj,主+谓。有时可以放在句后：主+谓…,+表情感类的形容词。例如：1.我站在门口，完全震惊了。Istoodinthedoorway,absolutely______________.2.珍妮坐在那里，吓得说不出话来，惊呆了。Jennysatthere,________________(speech)andnumbwithshock.3.她垂下头，不知该如何回答。She__________________________,not_____________(不知)howtoreply.shocked/astonishedspeechlessloweredherheadknowing②方式副词（ly），主+谓方式副词在句中作状语，修饰谓语动词，一般放在宾语后，但有时根据需要可以放在句首，有时放在实义动词前，例如：1.

(轻轻地),shepickedupthefirstbaby,ranbackoutsideandlaiditonthesidewalk.2._______________(匆匆地),shefollowedthesoundtoastream.3._______________(专心地),welistenedtotheteacherinclass.4.________________(立刻),theforestwasimmersedintotaldarkness.5.Quite________________(粗鲁地),Aliceanswered,“HowshouldIknow?”Slightly/So