02选择性Unit2Onwardsandupwards(读后续写之情绪描写)

Unit2Onwardsandupwards单元写作深度指导读后续写（人物情绪描写）三年考情（20222024）命题趋势2024：新高考I卷&II卷：人与社会（打车费）

浙江1月：人与自我（校园话题）2023

新高考I卷&II卷：人与自我（老师帮助作者培养写作兴趣）浙江1月：人与自然（我与蜂鸟的故事）

2022新高考I卷&II卷；人与自我（鼓励残疾学生参加越野赛跑）

浙江1月：人与自我（与队友互助完成任务）浙江6月：人与社会（参加社区服务）新高考读后续写语篇类型以记叙文为主，叙议结合为辅。语篇材料通常具有正能量且通俗易懂，故事线索逻辑性较强。新高考主题均选自人与自我、人与社会、人与自然。内容包括个人成长类、逆境脱困类；善举助人类、社会亲情友爱类、人与动物类、趣事回忆类等等。主要考查动作描写，环境描写，语言描写和情绪描写。读后续写是高中英语一个重要的组成部分,其中情绪描写是所有描写手法中占比例最大的一项。考查要点与应对策略‌高考英语读后续写是一种综合性较强的题型，‌既考查了考生的语言基础知识，‌又考查了其综合运用语言的能力、‌创造力和想象力。‌因此，‌考生需要在备考过程中注重多方面能力的提升和训练。‌高考英语读后续写作为一种新题型，‌其考查特点主要体现在以下几个方面：‌1.综合语言运用能力：‌读后续写要求考生在阅读理解的基础上，‌将所获取的信息进行整合，‌并通过写作表达出来。‌这既考查了考生的阅读理解能力，‌也考查了其语言表达能力，‌包括词汇、‌语法和句式的运用。‌2.创造性与想象力：‌读后续写通常提供一篇不完整的故事，‌要求考生根据已有情节进行合理想象，‌续写故事的高潮或结局。‌这要求考生具备一定的创造性和想象力，‌能够构思出既符合逻辑又新颖有趣的故事情节。‌3.逻辑性与连贯性：‌续写的内容需要与原文情境融洽，‌保持人物性格、‌故事情节的一致性，‌同时上下文之间要衔接自然、‌连贯。‌这要求考生具备较强的逻辑思维能力，‌能够准确把握原文的脉络和走向。‌4.文化意识与价值观：‌读后续写所提供的语篇材料一般是具有正能量且故事性较强的文章，‌主题往往涉及人与自我、‌人与社会、‌人与自然等。‌考生在续写过程中需要体现积极的世界观和价值观取向，‌这有助于培养其文化意识和正确的价值取向。‌5.评分标准与要求：‌读后续写的评分标准通常从内容、‌词汇、‌语法和语篇结构三个方面进行考虑，‌具体包括续写内容的质量、‌完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度；‌所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、‌恰当性和多样性；‌上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性等。‌同时，‌还会关注词数、‌拼写和标点符号等细节问题。‌‌为了做好读后续写题，‌考生需要在平时注重积累语料库，‌增强语篇分析能力，‌加强思维训练和自主创造能力的培养。‌同时，‌还需要多读范文，‌积累有效的语言素材，‌提升语言表达的质量。读后续写三原则：原文一致原则内容要前后衔接，上下连贯，语言表达风格一致。2.曲折性原则故事情节应跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。3.正能量原则故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好,和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法等等。‌读后续写情绪描写常用的表达情绪描写常见词汇情绪初级形容词高级形容词名词焦虑的anxioustenseanxiety/tension伤心的sadfrustrated/sorrowfulsadness/frustration/sorrow劳累的tiredexhaustedtiredness/exhaustion生气的angry/annoyedfuriousanger/annoyance/fury高兴的glad/delightecstaticgladness/delight/ecstasy惊讶的surprisedastonishedsurprise/astonishment激动的excitedthrilledExcitement/thrill话题句式：当看到孙悟空来救他时，他极为兴奋。WhenseeingthatMonkeycametorescuehim,hewasoverwhelmedwiththrill.2.我们都认为他的快乐要爆发出来了。Weallthoughthealmostburstwithecstasy.3.他沉浸在焦虑中，忍不住哭了。Hewasimmersedintension,andcouldn’thelpcrying.感到焦虑紧张，孙悟空去到天宫Tenseandnervous,Monkeywenttotheheaven.既惊讶又感动,Mr.Alder相信我说的话。Astonishedandtouched,Mr.AlderbelievedwhatIsaid.Whatannoyedmewasthathedidn’tanswermyquestion.使我生气的是他没有回答我的问题。尽管他很害怕和伤心,Hector还是告诉了老师发生了什么。Scaredandsorrowfulashewas,Hectorstilltoldtheteacherwhathadhappened.8.当我听到这个好消息的那一刻，我感到一种强烈的喜悦感。AstrongsenseofecstasytookholdofmewhenIheardthegoodnews.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右。2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Father’sappearingwaslikeasaviortothetwochildren.Undertheguidanceoftheirfather,theytookpositiveactionsandstartedalloveragain.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncookingporridge.Fatherhelpedthemadjustthefire,whichwasthekeytosuccess.Itwasallrightthistime.Deliciousbreakfastwasready.Howhappytheywere!Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Whentheirmothersawthedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn’texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,“HappyMother’sDay!”Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.【解析】【导语】本文以母亲节为线索展开，讲述了双胞胎Jenna和Jeff为了献给母亲一份美味的早餐，自己动手，做起饭餐来，但是不幸的是，他们连连失败的故事。【详解】1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“当双胞胎失望地环顾四周时，他们的父亲出现了。”可知，第一段可描写他们的父亲指导帮助他们准备早餐。

②由第二段首句内容“这对双胞胎把早餐端到楼上，叫醒了他们的母亲。”可知，第二段可描写母亲收到孩子们的礼物早餐，非常感动。

2.续写线索：指导——积极——献礼——感动

3.词汇激活

行为类

①帮助：help/assist②完成：finish/plete

③拥抱：hug/embrace

情绪类

①高兴：happy/delighted

②感动：moved/touched

【点睛】

[高分句型1].Fatherhelpedthemadjustthefire,whichwasthekeytosuccess.(which引导的非限制性定语从句)

[高分句型2].Itwasnotonlythebreakfast,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.(固定短语notonly…but(also)和强调句型)一、单句翻译（情绪描写）1.当大卫终于下定决心继续赛跑时,我感到惊讶和激动。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.虽然他很生气，但他还是决定继续完成任务。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.让我们伤心的是他输了比赛。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________大卫信心满满的和充满决心的，继续奔跑，奋力冲向终点线。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________她的脸上的笑容像钻石一样闪闪发。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________他静静地站着，眼泪顺着面颊流了下来。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________AstonishmentandthrillseizedmewhenDavidfinallydecidedtocontinuetherace.Furiousashewas,hewasdeterminedtofinishedthetask.Whatfrustrateduswasthathelosttherace.Confidentanddetermined,Davidkeptonrunning,attemptingtoreachthefinishline.Thesmileonherfaceshonelikeadiamond.Hestoodsilently,tearsrollingdownhischeeks.二、读后续写阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇（2023·广东阳江·统考一模）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Onemorning,Ann’sneighborTracyfoundalostdogwanderingaroundthelocalelementaryschool.SheaskedAnnifshecouldkeepaneyeonthedogandsheplannedtofinditsowner.Annagreed,butshesaidthatshecouldwatchitonlyforthedaybecausesheneededtotakecareofherson.Atthetime,hersonThomaswas10yearsold,whowasrecoveringfromaheartoperation.Later,Tracytookphotosofthedog,printedoff400FOUNDfliers,puttheminmailboxesandbegantofindthedog’sowner.Meanwhile,Annboughtsomepetsupplies,warninghersonnottofallinlovewiththedog.However,hersonwasfilledwithexcitementasheknewthathismothergotadogbackhome.Heplannedtoprovidethedogwithsomefoodeveryday.Fourdayslater,Annandhersonwerestilllookingafterthedog,whomtheyhadstartedtocallRiley.Duringthefourdays,theytookcareofthedogcarefully,providedsomefood,tookashowerandplayedwithit,andtheyhadalreadybeethebestfriends.Theeveningofthefifthday,whenAnnarrivedhomefromwork,thedogthrewitselfagainstthedoorandbarkedmadlyather.Assoonassheopenedthedoor,Rileydashedintotheboys’roomwhereAnnfoundThomassufferingfromaheartattack.RileyranovertoThomas,butassoonasAnnbentovertohelphim,thedogwentsilent.Thedoctorsaidifithadn’tetogethismotherintime,Thomaswouldhavedied.Luckily,withthedoctor’shelp,Thomascouldgohometomorrowmorning.“Mum,canwekeepitifwecan’tfinditsowner?Evenwecanaskforpermissionifwefindtheowner,”Thomasaskedhismotherwhentheycamebackhome.“Well,sincenoonehascalledtoclaimit,wedecidetokeepit,”hismotherreplied.Hearingthat,Thomaswasexcited.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。However,thenextday,AnnwastoldamannamedPeterrecognizedhislostdog.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Peter’scarcameandThomasstoodsilentlybesidehiscar.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ApossibleversionHowever,thenextday,AnnwastoldamannamedPeterrecognizedhislostdog.TracysaidPetercalledthenumberontheflier.AnntoldTracywhathadhappenedduringthesedaysandevenstartedcrying.Atthesametime,Annshowedgreatgratitudetothedog.AndTracytoldAnnthatPeterwoulddrivetoherhousetopickuphisdogthisafternoon.Later,AnntoldThomastheownerhadcalledtoclaimRiley,theyneededtoreturnittotheowner.Hearingthatnews,Thomasputhishandsoverhismouth.Hiseyeswerewideopenforhecouldn’tbelievewhathadhappened.However,hehadtofacethetruth.Peter’scarcameandThomasstoodsilentlybesidehiscar.AnntookRileyfromherhome.Seeingthat,Thomas’tearswererollingdownhischeeks.RileysatbesideThomas,sometimesranaroundhimandshouted:womwom,whichclearlyshowedthatRileydidn’twanttoleavehisfriend,Thomas.Atlast,ThomasaskedPeter,“CanwekeepRiley?”Knowingthispoint,Peterthoughtaboutitforamoment,andthensaid,“Maybemydogwassupposedtofindyou,maybeyoushouldkeepit.”Hearingthat,ThomasranaroundafterRiley,obviously,theywerefullofjoy.【写作提示】本文以狗为线索，讲述了一只迷路的小狗被Ann收留并救了Ann儿子一命的故事。【要点分析】1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“然而，第二天，安被告知一个名叫彼得的人认出了他丢失的狗。”可知，第一段可描述Peter看到传单上的狗并打询问。Ann对这只狗表达了感谢，Peter开车去接狗回家。Thomas知道这个消息后很难过，但也得面对现实。②由第二段首句内容“彼得的车来了，托马斯静静地站在他的车旁边。”可知，第二段可描述Thomas的难过，最后Peter看到狗也不愿意离开。最终让Thomas留下了狗。2.续写线索：认出狗——接狗回家——难过，不舍——留下狗——开心3.词汇激活行为类①流下：rolldown/streamdown②归还：return/giveback③充满：befullof/befilledwith/beoverwhelmedwith情绪类①感激：showgreatgratitudeto/expressappreciation②乐趣：joy/pleasure【高分句型1】Hearingthatnews,Thomasputhishandsoverhismouth.（运用了现在分词作状语）【高分句型2】RileysatbesideThomas,sometimesranaroundhimandshouted:womwom,whichclearlyshowedthatRileydidn’twanttoleavehisfriend,Thomas.(运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句）【2024·新课标Ⅰ卷·高考真题】阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。ImetGunteronacold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.IhadplannedtoflytoViennaandtakeabustoPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm,myflighthadbeendelayedbyanhourandahalf.ItoucheddowninViennajust30minutesbeforethedepartureofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlikecrazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.ThatwaswhenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing,buthesaidhehadn'theardofthebusstation.Ithoughtmypronunciationwastheproblem,soIexplainedagainmoreslowly,buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasabouttogiveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury,Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.Finally,withjusttwominutestosparewerolledintothebusstation.Thankfully,therewasalongqueue(队列)stillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus,turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface."Wemadeit,"hesaid.JustthenIrealisedthatIhadzerocashinmywallet.IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetrieditseveraltimes,butthecardmachinejustdidnotplayalong.AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthebusqueuethinningout.Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.There,attheentrance,wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,andpoppedmycardin,onlytoreadthemessage:"Outoforder.Sorry."注意：（1）续写词数应为150个左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________参考答案：1．参考范文Para1IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Helookedatmeindisbelief,askingmewhattodo.Flashinghimanotherapologeticsmile,Ibeggedhimforadelayedpayment.“IfImissthislastbustoPrague,I’llbelatefortheconferencewhichissoimportantthatIcan’taffordtomissit!”Iexplained.“MayIhaveyourphonenumber?IwillcallyouandreturnthemoneyIoweyou.IpromiseIwillkeepmywordoryoukeepmywatch!”Iadded,handinghimmywatchaswellasmybusinesscard.Gunteracceptedmybusinesscardbutreje