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浙江1月：人与自我（与队友互助完成任务）浙江6月：人与社会（参加社区服务）新高考读后续写语篇类型以记叙文为主，叙议结合为辅。语篇材料通常具有正能量且通俗易懂，故事线索逻辑性较强。新高考主题均选自人与自我、人与社会、人与自然。内容包括个人成长类、逆境脱困类；善举助人类、社会亲情友爱类、人与动物类、趣事回忆类等等。主要考查动作描写，环境描写，语言描写和情感描写。读后续写是高中英语一个重要的组成部分,其中情绪描写是所有描写手法中占比例最大的一项。考查要点与应对策略环境描写是指对人物所处的具体的社会环境和自然环境的描写。环境描写是必不可少的。通过对环境的描写，能够向读者交代故事的背景，衬托人物，渲染气氛，从而推动情节发展。此外，作者可以通过环境描写向读者间接表达故事中主人公的内心情感变化。‌高考英语读后续写是一种综合性较强的题型，‌既考查了考生的语言基础知识，‌又考查了其综合运用语言的能力、‌创造力和想象力。‌因此，‌考生需要在备考过程中注重多方面能力的提升和训练。‌高考英语读后续写作为一种新题型，‌其考查特点主要体现在以下几个方面：‌1.综合语言运用能力：‌读后续写要求考生在阅读理解的基础上，‌将所获取的信息进行整合，‌并通过写作表达出来。‌这既考查了考生的阅读理解能力，‌也考查了其语言表达能力，‌包括词汇、‌语法和句式的运用。‌2.创造性与想象力：‌读后续写通常提供一篇不完整的故事，‌要求考生根据已有情节进行合理想象，‌续写故事的高潮或结局。‌这要求考生具备一定的创造性和想象力，‌能够构思出既符合逻辑又新颖有趣的故事情节。‌3.逻辑性与连贯性：‌续写的内容需要与原文情境融洽，‌保持人物性格、‌故事情节的一致性，‌同时上下文之间要衔接自然、‌连贯。‌这要求考生具备较强的逻辑思维能力，‌能够准确把握原文的脉络和走向。‌4.文化意识与价值观：‌读后续写所提供的语篇材料一般是具有正能量且故事性较强的文章，‌主题往往涉及人与自我、‌人与社会、‌人与自然等。‌考生在续写过程中需要体现积极的世界观和价值观取向，‌这有助于培养其文化意识和正确的价值取向。‌5.评分标准与要求：‌读后续写的评分标准通常从内容、‌词汇、‌语法和语篇结构三个方面进行考虑，‌具体包括续写内容的质量、‌完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度；‌所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、‌恰当性和多样性；‌上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性等。‌同时，‌还会关注词数、‌拼写和标点符号等细节问题。‌‌为了做好读后续写题，‌考生需要在平时注重积累语料库，‌增强语篇分析能力，‌加强思维训练和自主创造能力的培养。‌同时，‌还需要多读范文，‌积累有效的语言素材，‌提升语言表达的质量。读后续写三原则：原文一致原则内容要前后衔接，上下连贯，语言表达风格一致。2.曲折性原则故事情节应跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。3.正能量原则故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好,和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法等等。‌读后续写环境描写常用的表达环境描写常见词汇自然环境：meadow(草地),forest(森林),mountain(山脉),river(河流),lake(湖泊),ocean(海洋),cliff(悬崖),cave(洞穴),waterfall(瀑布),desert(沙漠),jungle(丛林)天气：sunny(晴朗的),cloudy(多云的),rainy(下雨的),stormy(暴风雨的),windy(有风的),snowy(下雪的),foggy(有雾的)时间：dawn(黎明),sunrise(日出),daytime(白天),sunset(日落),dusk(黄昏),night(夜晚)光线：sunlight(阳光),moonlight(月光),shadow(阴影),ray(光线),gleam(闪光),glow(微光),shimmer(闪烁)温度：warm(温暖的),hot(热的),cold(冷的),cool(凉爽的),freezing(冰冻的),chill(寒冷的)气氛：serene(宁静的),tranquil(平静的),peaceful(和平的),calm(安静的),quiet(安静的),noisy(嘈杂的),bustling(繁忙的),lively(活泼的),vibrant(充满生机的),chaotic(混乱的)话题句式：1.Thewind/breeze,softandsweet,clickedthroughtreebranches.微风轻拂，柔和又清新，拨动着树枝。2.Agustofwindblewandpartedthedroopingbranchesofthewillow.一阵狂风吹来，拨开了柳树低垂的枝条。3.Theleavesrustledinthewind.树叶在风中沙沙作响。4.Asweetandsoftbreezewaftedthroughmyhair.轻柔的和风吹过我的头发。5.Thewindcriedwildlylikeamonster.狂风像野兽般嚎叫。6.Agustofwindshipsthedustalongtheroad.一阵狂风吹来，卷起路边的尘土。7.Theicywindstartedhowling,cuttingmyfacelikeasharpknife.刺骨的寒风开始咆哮，像一把锋利的刀子割在我的脸上。（二）雷雨1.Theraincamepouringdown,andthewindsbeatagainstthehouse.大雨倾盆而至，狂风拍打着房屋。2.Thedropsofrainarehuge.Soon,theroadwasfilledwithpuddlesfromtherain.大颗大颗的雨滴落下。很快，路上就满是水坑。3.Thunderbeginstogrumbleinthedistance.远处开始响起轰隆隆的雷声。4.Theboltoflightningstabsthesky.一道闪电划过天空。5.Suddenly,anearthshakingclapofthunderroaredfromthestormoutside.突然间，震耳欲聋的雷声从外面咆哮而来。6.Thelightsflickeredonceanddied,coveringeverythinginablanketofblackness.Thundercontinuedtoshaketheskyandlightningilluminatedthestoreforseconds.灯光闪烁了一下，又消失了，让一切都被笼罩在黑暗里。雷声持续不断，似乎天空都在颤抖，闪电照亮了商店几秒钟。（三）雪花1.Itwasstillcoldandfrigidwiththesnowconstantlyblowingandwhippingontoourfaces.天气极其寒冷，雪花不停飘落，打在我们的脸上。2.Onesnowyday,thewindsgrewstrongerandthesnowturnedintoablindingsnowstorm.在一个雪天，风越来越强，大雪变成了白茫茫一片的暴风雪。3.Thefrozensnowcrunchunderourfeet.结了冰的雪花在我们脚下嘎吱嘎吱响。4.Thefeatherysnowflakesdancedinthenightair,makingabeautifulpicture.鹅毛般的雪花在夜空中飞舞，成了一幅美丽的图画。（四）天空1.Theskyisovercast,darkenedwithgloomyclouds.天空乌云密布。2.Theskywasacurdledgrayburdenedwithlumpsofclouds.天空是昏暗的灰色，浓云密布。3.Theskystoodfarandblue.天空蔚蓝高远。4.Thecoloroftheskywaschanging,firstlightgray,thendarkgray,andfinallydarkanddense.天空的颜色开始变化，从浅灰色到深灰色，最后一片漆黑。（五）阳光、月光、星光1.Theskywasdottedwithsparklingstars,shininglikediamonds.天空中点缀着璀璨的繁星，像钻石般闪耀。2.Clustersofstarsdecoratedthevastskylikesparklingjewels.繁星像闪闪发光的珠宝一样点缀着广阔的天空。3.Spectacularpinkshadesmarkedthewesternskyline.Theskydarkenedand,onebyone,thestarsshonewithasoftlight.绚丽的粉红色的暮色标记着西边的天际线。天空暗下来了，星星一颗接一颗地发出柔和的光。4.Starswinkedatmeinadarkeningsky.夜空中的星星向我眨眼。5.Thesunwasbeginningtoset,glitteringred.太阳开始西落，闪烁着红色的斜晖。6.Aglimmeroflightspilledintothecorridor.一丝微光泄入了走廊。（六）水流、河流、海洋1.Thewaterwasdeepblueandsunlightglitteredonitslookingglassclearsurface.溪水湛蓝，阳光在玻璃一样透明的水面闪闪发光。2.Thefaintsoundofwaterwastumblingthroughthevalley.潺潺的水声在山谷里回响。3.Alittlewayoffwasasmallbrook,rushingandsparklingalongbetweengreenbanks.离此不远处，有一条小溪，在绿色的河岸间奔腾闪耀。4.Thebeachwasbathedintheamberlikesunshine.沙滩沐浴在琥珀般的阳光中。5.Thegurgleofthestreamsoothedme.汩汩的溪水声让我平静下来。6.Theexpanseofbluewaterstretchedineverydirectiontothehorizon,frothywaveslappingatasandbeach.蓝色的海水向四面八方延伸到地平线，白色泡沫状的海浪拍打着沙滩。7.Theshipwouldlietheremirroredinaperfectlyunmovingglossysea.船会停靠在那里，映衬在一片波澜不兴的、光彩夺目的海水中。阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。TheicywindhowledacrosstheemptystreetanditwasanunusuallyquietdayintheemergencyroomontheNewYear.Itwasquiet,exceptforthenurseswhowerestandingaroundthenurses'stationplainingabouthavingtoworkovertheNewYear,forpeopleweresupposedtobespendingtimewiththeirfamiliesandexchanginggiftsandwishes.Iwastheguidingnursethatdayandhadjustdonethecleanupinthewaitingroom.Sincetherewerenopatientswaitingtobeseenatthetime,Ireturnedtothenurses'stationforacupofhotcoffeethatsomeonehadbroughtinfortheNewYear.Justthen,acolleaguecamebackandtoldmeIhadfivepatientswaitingtobeevaluated.Iwassurprised,“Five,howdidIgetfive?Iwasjustoutthereandnoonewasinthewaitingroom.”“Well,therearefivesignedin.”SoIwentstraightoutandcalledthefirstname.Fivebodiesshowedupatmyguidingdesk,apaleshortwomanandfoursmallchildreninuntidyclothing.“Areyouallsick?”Iaskedsuspiciously.“Yes,”shesaidweaklyandloweredherhead.“Okay,”Ireplied,unconvinced,“Who'sfirst?”Onebyonetheysatdown,andIaskedtheusualbeginningquestions.Whenitcametothedescriptionsoftheirsymptoms,thingsgotalittlevague.Twoofthechildrenhadheadaches,buttheheadachesweren'tacpaniedbythenormalbodylanguageofholdingtheheadortryingtokeepitstill.Twochildrenhadearaches,butonlyonecouldtellmewhichearwasaffected.Themotherplainedofacough,butseemedtoworktoproduceit.Somethingwaswrongwiththepicture.Ourhospitalpolicy,however,wasnottoturnawayanypatient,sowewouldseethem.WhenIexplainedtothemotherthatitmightbealittlewhilebeforeadoctorsawher,becausetherewereseveralmorecriticalpatients,sheresponded,“Takeyourtime.It'swarmhereandthereisanatmosphereoftheNewYearforthattreewiththeNewYeargifts.”注意：续写词数应为150左右。Paragraph1:Thensheturnedand,withasmile,settledherkidsinthewaitingroom. Paragraph2:Mycolleagues,plainingaboutworkingovertheNewYear,showedsympathyforthehomelessfamily. [故事梳理]这篇文章是以第一人称的视角讲述新年期间当护士们正在抱怨新年节日期间仍要上班时，医院来了5位病人的故事。一位母亲带着四个孩子在新年之际无家可归，护士们都对此深表同情并且想要给他们带来更多温暖。WhereWhenWhoWhatWhy[语言分析]通过观察我们发现文章的开头和结尾处都有环境描写。例如：1.TheicywindhowledacrosstheemptystreetanditwasanunusuallyquietdayintheemergencyroomontheNewYear.（Para.1）冰冷的风呼啸着穿过空荡荡的街道，新年这天，急诊室异常安静。先观察这一部分环境描写里的形容词icy、empty、quiet和动词howl，虽然没有一个是描写心理的，但是我们很容易感受到人物此处伤感的情绪，这为后文奠定了感情基调：正值新年假期却不能休息，还要继续上班，护士们对此有诸多抱怨。2.Takeyourtime.It'swarmhereandthereisanatmosphereoftheNewYearforthattreewiththeNewYeargifts.（Para.9)慢慢来。这里很暖和，并且还有新年的气氛，因为那儿有一棵挂满新年礼物的树。 这一段环境描写出现在那位母亲说的话里。句中的形容词warm和anatmosphereoftheNewYear的意象很容易让我们感受到人物此时的心理状态是幸福、温暖的。这也和开头处的环境描写形成对比：同样在医院里，要上班的护士们感受到的是冷风呼啸，而这位无家可归的母亲感受到的却是幸福、温暖。一、单句翻译（情感描写）1.郁郁葱葱的森林一望无际，生机勃勃。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.一阵轻柔的微风吹拂着村民的脸颊，带来了一个凉爽夜晚的承诺。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.炎热的太阳炙烤着贫瘠的景象，使空气显得浓重而闷热。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________落日投下了长长的阴影，穿过庭院，形成了一幅光与影的复杂图案。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.月光透过茂密的树冠，给森林地面投下了一种神秘的的光芒。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.随着夜幕降临，整个村庄被一片柔和的紫色所笼罩，增添了神秘的气氛。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________二、读后续写MyBestTeachingExperienceTylerwasonlyinmyseniorclassforasemester.Hehadbeensuspended(使停学)manytimesinpreviousyearsbecauseofhisangerissues.Whenheenteredmyclass,Ithoughttheworst.Tylersatinthebackrow.EverytimeItalkedtotheclass,Iwouldaskstudentsquestions,callingthembyname.Unfortunately,everytimeIcalledonTyler,hewouldrespondwithajoke.Ifhegotananswerwrong,hewouldbeeangry.Aboutamonthintotheyear,IwasstilltryingtoconnectwithTyler.Icanusuallygetstudentsinvolvedinclassdiscussionsoratleasthavethemsitquietlyandattentively(专心地).Bycontrast,Tylerwasoftenloudandsometimesrude.Hehadbeeninsomuchtroubleovertheyears.Heexpectedhisteacherstoknowabouthispast;abouthowmanytimeshehadbeensenttotheofficeorsuspendedfromschool.Ihadfoundthatthesesortsofreferrals(移交)werenotveryeffectiveandthatstudentswouldreturnfromtheofficebehavingworsethanbefore.Oneday,TylerwastalkingovermewhileIwasteaching.Istoppedmylessonandsaid,“Tyler,whydon’tyoujoininourdiscussioninsteadofhavingoneofyourown?”Withthat,hegotupfromhischair,pusheditoverandyelledsomething.Ican’trememberwhathesaidotherthanthatheincludedsomeimpolitewords.IsentTylerstraighttotheoffice,andhereceivedaweek’ssuspension.Tothispoint,thiswasoneofmyworstteachingexperiences.Tyler’sangerwasalmosttoomuchforme.TheweekTylerwassuspendedfromschoolwasawonderfultime,andwegotalotacplishedasaclass.However,thesuspensionweekwouldsoonetoanend,andIwasfearfulofhisreturn.续写要求：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。OnthedayofTyler’sreturn,Istoodatthedoorawaitinghim.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Asparkofsurpriseflashedacrosshisface.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Passage1（20232024高二下·江苏泰州·阶段练习）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Morethan20hoursearlier,myfriendEmmaandIhadstoodattheentrancetothecave.WelaughedandjokedasIclimbeddownthesteepmouthandshefollowed.Sixofushadgoneonthatcampingtrip,butafterafulldayofexploringcaves,theothershadgonebacktothecampsitetoeat.EmmaandIdecidedtoexploreonemorecave.Themudofthecavefloorwassoftandstickyaswesnakedourwaythroughthetunnel.Theairwasdampandheavy.Asthepassagetwistedthroughtheearth,itbecamesmaller.Then,suddenly,afteratightsqueeze,Icameintoalargerroom.“Onceyoumakeitpastthisnarrowspotyoucanalmoststand,”ItoldEmma,asIstretchedoutmyarmsandlegsandenjoyedthebigspace.“Alright,I’malmostth...”Emma’ssentencewascutshort.Iturnedaround.“Areyoualright?”Iasked.AllIcouldseewasherface,andhereyeswerefulloffear.“Idon’tthinkso,”shesaid.“I’mstuck.”EmmaandItriedeverythingwecouldtofreeher.Butitbecameapparentthatweneededhelp.Itookoutmycellphonetocallmyotherfourfriends,buttherewasnosignal.Icouldn’tgotoseekhelpbecauseEmmawasstuckbetweenmeandthecavemouth.Thatwaswhyweweresorelievedwhenweheardvoicesbehindus.Abeamoflightshotdownthetunnel.“What’sgoingonhere?”rangayoungman’svoice.“Weneedhelp,”Ishouted.“She’sstuck.”“I’vegottwobuddieswithme,”hesaid.“Theycangotofindaparkranger(公园管理员),butI’llstayhereandseeifIcanhelpfromthisside.”注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式作答。Thenextseveralhourswerelongandarduous(艰难的).________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Almostfivehoursafterwehadenteredthecave,therescueteamarrived.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Passage2OnSunday,Nicholas,ateenager,wentskiingwithhisfatheratSugarloafMountaininMaine.TheyhadawonderfuldayanddecidedtodrivehometoMassachusettsafterafinalrun.Theytookachairlifttothetopofthemountain,wheretheysplituptogodownindifferenttrails.Whenthefatherfinishedhisrun,heheadedtotheparkinglottowaitforhisson.However,Nicholasnevershowedup.ItturnedoutthatafiercesnowstormhadsweptintotheareaasNicholaswasonhiswaydown.Unabletoseefar,heaccidentallyturnedoffthepathandventureddownthewestsideofthemountain.Beforeheknewit,Nicholaswaslostandallalone.Hiswaybacktotheskitrailswasblocked.What'sworse,hedidn'thaveanyfoodorwaterwithhim,letalonehiscellphoneorothersupplies.Thesunbegantosinkandhewasgettingcolderbytheminute.Nicholashadnoideawherehewas.Hetriednottopanic.HethoughtaboutBearGrylls'survivalshowManvsWildthatheusedtowatchonTV.Intheshow,Gryllsisabandonedinawildareaandhastohelphimselfout.Itwastimetoputt