读后续写模版精讲 《爆米花救穷人 2020年山东》课件高三上学期英语一轮复习

读后续写2020.6山东（新高考）:爆米花救助穷人11分钟确立中立+情节2万能情境表达公式34核对与纠正目录CONTENTS1分钟快速阅读2020山东试题再现历年高考英语读后续写真题分析1.TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity．Astheeconomywasindecline，somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs．Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet．Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges．2.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman．Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor．Sheknewtheyhadproblems，andtheyneededallkindsofhelp．Whenshehadtime，shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem．3.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore．Therewasamansickinbed，hiswife，whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork，andtheirlittleboy．Thelittleboy﹣hisnamewasBernard﹣hadinterestedherverymuch．4."Iwishyoucouldseehim，"shesaidtoherownchildren，John，Harry，andClara．"Heissuchahelptohismother．Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney，butIdon'tseewhathecando．"5.Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom，thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard．"Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney，"saidClara．"Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch．"6."SodoI，"saidHarry．"Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem．"7.Forsomemoments，Johnsaidnothing，but，suddenly，hesprangtohisfeetandcried，"Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）．"8.Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention．WhenJohnhadanidea，itwassuretobeagoodone．"Itellyouwhatwecando，"saidJohn．"YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus？Well，wecanmakepopcorn（爆米花），andputitintopaperbags，andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit．"

WhenMrs．MeredithheardofJohn'sidea，shethoughtitwasagoodone，too._____________________

Witheverythingready，Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.__________________________________11分钟快读阅读忽略无效细节230秒定中心：个人成长关系帮助救助困难330秒7词定情节大纲：转折式直线发展式1分钟快读读的快读得准历年英语读后续写精讲01Para.1:

WhenMrs．MeredithheardofJohn'sidea，shethoughtitwasagoodone，too.当Meredith太太听到了John的主意，她也觉得非常棒。Para.2:Witheverythingready，Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.一切准备就绪，Bernard开始了自己的新生意。获知：John想出主意，得到Meredith太太的支持，帮助Bernard开始生意。疑问：Bernard有什么困难？新生意是什么？人物关系？（如何帮助？生意进展如何？）

段首句分析1.TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity．Astheeconomywasindecline，somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs．Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet．Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges．2.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman．Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor．Sheknewtheyhadproblems，andtheyneededallkindsofhelp．Whenshehadtime，shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem．3.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore．Therewasamansickinbed，hiswife，whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork，andtheirlittleboy．Thelittleboy﹣hisnamewasBernard﹣hadinterestedherverymuch．4."Iwishyoucouldseehim，"shesaidtoherownchildren，John，Harry，andClara．"Heissuchahelptohismother．Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney，butIdon'tseewhathecando．"5.Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom，thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard．"Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney，"saidClara．"Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch．"6."SodoI，"saidHarry．"Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem．"7.Forsomemoments，Johnsaidnothing，but，suddenly，hesprangtohisfeetandcried，"Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）．"8.Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention．WhenJohnhadanidea，itwassuretobeagoodone．"Itellyouwhatwecando，"saidJohn．"YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus？Well，wecanmakepopcorn（爆米花），andputitintopaperbags，andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit．"

WhenMrs．MeredithheardofJohn'sidea，shethoughtitwasagoodone，too._____________________

Witheverythingready，Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.__________________________________1段主题句：段尾句邻里互助友爱。1段主题句：段首句Meredith太太乐于助人34主题句：Meredith太太讲述穷人孩子Bernard的故事5678主题句：

共同想办法帮助1分钟快读忽略无效细节的关键心中有中心，目标明确，心无旁骛！！！好主意是什么？新生意是什么？人物关系1分钟确立中心7词定情节大纲历年英语读后续写0230秒确定中心个人成长/人与人的关系/帮助/解决困难双主题合并：帮助孩子的成长故事类型历年高考英语读后续写真题分析矛盾转折式3个词：矛盾

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转变直线上升式

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第一段顺利发展WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.

当meredith太太听说john的主意，她也觉得这是个很棒的主意。行动：准备Theywenttothesupermarkettobuymaterials.

进展：制作爆米花Theybegantomakepopcorn.结果：成功Theymadealotofpopcorn.（衔接）TheytookthepopcorntoBernard’s.Paragraph2Paragraph2：

第二段顺利发展Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.一切准备就绪，bernard开始了自己的新生意行动：开始卖爆米花Hewentdoortodoortosellpopcorn.进展：生意状况Hesoldallthepopcorn.结果：表达感激中心：bernard学会独立表达感激邻里和谐爱

John长大懂事历年高考英语读后续写真题分析易跑题陷阱：如何做爆米花？如何卖爆米花？历年高考英语读后续写真题分析03万能模版拓细节经过了四套真题的讲解，相信大家已经对常用模版比较熟悉了，这里复习一下：1情绪心理模版2语言对话模版承接语言模版3动作模版：两动作连用三动作连用（后面动词改成非谓语）4简单叙事模版5混合元素模版：二混合三混合（语言动作心理情绪）6中心模版：强调模版转折模版7常用衔接模块8皇冠情绪模块9短句子的拓展（本句话内）10单一句子变成复合句式经验总结：1中心>情节>句型>短语>单词

（中心吻合情节合理通顺句子流畅=17分）

（中心吻合情节合理通顺句子句式充分=19–21）2中心不模糊3情节不跑题情节大纲简单通顺

（简单的大纲能帮助我们不跑题更容易套用模版补充细节）4无句型不写作句型的变化（不熟悉的时候可以把情节大纲和常用句型模版写到稿纸上）5想着情节配句型边写边考虑句子的长度和饱满度）从这次课开始，我们正式进入情节的构思指导环节。先解决情节问题，再帮助进行句型模版的套用。句型模版是英文的基础和水平。情节构思是中文记叙文的写作水平。因为我们的续写只有150词，10–12句，且文章情节简单，重复性强，因此写好续写不是难题。好，马上开动历年高考英语读后续写真题分析一陌生情境如何构思（直播精讲）陌生无思路情境1:怎么为做爆米花做准备？思路举例：陌生复杂情境日常化，概述化繁为简怎么准备？去超市购置需要的东西Sotheyheadedto

thelocalsupermarket

togethertomakeprepareationsforthecookingpopcorn，and/wheretheyboughtabagofcornand

somespecialbagsforpopcorn.（动作模版：双动词或者三动词）陌生无思路情境2：怎么做爆米花？在某人帮助下/克服重重困难，终于做成怎么做成：很不容易做成，做完装袋WiththehelpofMrMeredith,Johneventuallysucceededinmakingdecilicouspopcornandputthemintospecialbags.在meredith太太的帮助下，John终于做好了美味的爆米花，并且装进了特别的袋子里叙事模版：succeedin/failin/manageto/makegreateffortsto/makegreatprogress等等withthehelpof历年高考英语读后续写真题分析二时间空间内容跨度大的情节如何处理？如何避免流水账？（去邻居家—告诉对方，对方反应）情境：跨越距离，跨越时间，推动故事快速发展模版：串联情节模版到了那里告知了一切gotoBernard’shome,tellhimeverythingWiththepopcorn,theywenttoBernard’shomeandtoldeverythingtohim.高手表达升级：英语中超高频的with结构withsth“带着东西”“带着表情”with复合结构witheverythingready/withhisheadlowed/withhiseyesfixedonsthwentandtold可以转换成went,tellingdoing可以做伴随或者结果状语因此很好用历年高考英语读后续写真题分析帮助情节如何使用句型？感激感动帮助后的感激感动模版(常用：拥抱givesbahug;感谢expressgratitudetosb;tearswelledupinhereyes感动surprisedandmoved,witha…lookonhisface)Surprisedandmoved,Bernardandhisparentsexpressedtheirgratitudetothetimelyhelpofferedbytheirthoughtfulneighbors.惊讶又感动，Bernard和他的父母表达了对热心邻居的深深感激。短句子本身的延长：定语从句或者后置定语丰富名词历年高考英语读后续写真题分析陌生情节？陌生情节：卖爆米花的过程情节思路一：取起始点和结束点。He

tookthepopcornaround

totheneighbourhoodandknockedatthedoorsoftheneighbours.Tohisastonishment,hispopcornwasquicklysoldoutinonlytwohours.他带着爆米花去到每一家，敲开了邻居的门。让他惊讶的是，他的爆米花竟然仅仅两个小时就卖光了。情节思路二：聚焦写对话交流+交流结果（缺的情节用简单句+and处理）Heknockedattheneighbors’doors,explainingthathewouldliketosellpopcornsandmakesomemoneyforhisfamily.Tohisastonishment,allhisneighborssupportedhimandhispopcornwasquicklysoldoutinonlytwohours.他敲开了邻居的门，解释说自