专题02 情感与情绪-备战2025年上海中考英语书面表达满分攻略（解析版）

（一）（2021年杨浦区一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthegivensituation.(根据以下情境写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)法国“蜘蛛人”阿兰.罗伯特的经历告诉我们，战胜恐惧也可以是一种勇敢。你对勇敢的理解是如何的呢？请以“ThetimeIwasbrave(那次我很勇敢)”为题，根据自身的经历谈谈你对勇敢的理解。（注意：1.短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名等个人信息，否则不予评分。2.照抄阅读的语篇不得分。）ThetimeIwasbrave____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文：ThetimeIwasbraveInourdailylife,wehavevariousfearspreventingusfrommovingforward.Andovercomingthefearshelpsusbecomemoreconfident.Iusedtobeafraidofspeakinginpublic.Ineverdaredtostepupandspeakinfrontofacrowd.Then,inGrade9,aspeechcontestwasheldinmyschool.Withmyteacher'sencouragement,Ienteredforitandmadefullpreparationsforit.Luckily,Ifinisheditsmoothly.Tomysurprise,Iwonthesecondprize.ThistimeIwasbrave.NowIhavebecomemoreandmoreconfidentinexpressingmyselfinpublic.Don'tletthefeartakeyou.Juststepforwardandyouwillfindyoucandoit!【解析】【分析】【详解】1.题干解读：该题目属于记叙文写作。但写作时要根据汉语提示，首先叙述自身的经历，然后根据经历谈谈对勇敢的理解。2.写作指导：本文应该用第一人称来叙述自身的经历；时态采用一般过去时叙述过去的经历，用一般现在时和现在完成时来叙述自己的成长和对勇敢的理解。描述经历时，力求语言准确，叙事完整，行文连贯，保证条理清晰。（二）（2021年虹口一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic"Happinessdoesn'talwaysdisappearduringdifficulttimes"(以"在困难时期，幸福感不一定会消失"为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格).小到个人，大到团队、城市、国家，都会有困难时期，但即便是困难时期，人们还是能感受生活中的小喜悦，感受幸福温馨的片刻，请结合自己或他人的经历，说说困难时期的幸福感。(注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予计分)Happinessdoesn'talwaysdisappearduringdifficulttimes____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文Happinessdoesn'talwaysdisappearduringdifficulttimesEveryonemayhavedifficulttimes.Evenindifficulttimes,peoplecanstillfeelthesmalljoysinlife.Oneday,itwasraininghardwhenIwasonmywayhomefromschool.Ididn’ttakeanumbrella,soIwaswet.Suddenly,astrangercametowardme.Hepassedmeanumbrellaandsaidhecoulddrivemehome.Ididn’tknowhimbutIwasverythankfulhehelpedme.Althoughtheweatherwascold,Ifeltverywarminmyheart.【解析】【分析】【详解】题干解读：这篇作文要求学生们以“Happinessdoesn'talwaysdisappearduringdifficulttimes在困难时期，幸福感不一定会消失”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文。题目中并没有规定具体的写作内容，学生们应发挥想象力，结合自己的实际生活，写一篇切题的文章。这是一个难点，学生所选取的生活中的事例应合情合理。写作指导：审题可知，这篇短文应以一般过去时态、第一人称为主来叙述，注意谓语动词的正确形式。写作时应注意英语句式结构和表达习惯，写完整的句子，以简单句结构为基础，穿插并列句、复合句、非谓语结构等复杂句式，提升作文档次。同时注意上下文的衔接，使文意连贯、表达流畅。（三）（2021年浦东新区一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“Mychoice”.（请以“我的选择”为题，写一篇不少于60字的短文。）人生即是选择。你在生活中一定做过无数次选择，或许是明智的，亦或许是错误的；或许是难忘的，亦或许是遗憾的……请结合你以往的一次选择，谈谈它对你的影响或你的感悟。（注意：短文中不得出现任何真实人名、校名其它相关信息，否则不予评分。）Mychoice____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文:MybestchoiceEveryonehastomakedifferentchoicesinthelife.Fiveyearsago,Ialsomademychoice.WhenIplayedwithmylittlebrother,Ibrokemymother’sfavouritevase.Iknewshewouldbeangry.Iwantedtolieatfirst.ButsoonIchangedmyidea.Itoldmymotherthetruth.Tomysurprise,mymotherpraisedmeinstead.Honestyisvaluable.Ifitisourmistake,weshouldacceptitandthenwecancorrectit.Thus,wecanmakeprogressinourlife.【解析】【分析】【详解】1.题干解读：该题目属于夹叙夹议的文章写作，要通过自己的一段经历，谈谈自己所做的选择对自己的影响或获得的感悟。写作指导：本文应该用第一人称来叙述自己的一段经历，说明自己做了如何的选择，时态用一般过去时；最后要谈自己的感悟，可以用一般现在时。注意叙述时的完整性，并保证条理清晰。（四）（2020年宝山一模）writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“Athank-youletterto”.（以“给……的一封感谢信”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文。信件格式已给，标点符号不占格。）在日常的生活与学习中有许多人曾经帮助或鼓励过我们，令我们时常心存感激。请选择一个对象写一封感谢信，并结合你们之间的真实经历谈一谈你为何要感谢他/她，说一说你当时的感受以及此时此刻想对他/她说的话。（注意：短文中不得出现任何真实人名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分。）Thefollowingisforreferenceonly.（以下表达仅供参考）havedifficultyin…encouragemeto…Itwas…ofyouto…____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文DearMrsWang,Nowordcandescribemythankstoyou,myEnglishteacher.WhenIfirstcameintothemiddleschool,IwaspooratmyEnglish.Oneday,youaskedmetogotoyourofficeafterschool.Youlistenedtomyproblempatientlyandencouragedmetokeepstudyinghard.WemadeaplanformyEnglishstudy.Afterthat,youstartedtohelpmefromtimetotime.Finally,ImadegreatprogressinEnglish.Ithankyouverymuchforallthehelpyouhasgivenme.【解析】【详解】1.题干解读：本书属于记叙文，通过真实存在的一件事谈谈你为何要感谢她。描述过去曾经发生的事情时，用一般过去时。并灵活使用所学的单词、短语以及句型使文章出彩。2.例文点评：这是一篇优秀的作文，很好的完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习惯，准确运用时态、主谓一致，特别使用一些亮点词句，增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连贯。3.高分亮点：单词短语：asksbtodo,encouragesbtodosth,keepdoing,makeaplanfor,starttodo,fromtimetotime以及makegreatprogress。高分句型：WhenIfirstcameintothemiddleschool,IwaspooratmyEnglish中when引导的时间状语从句。【点睛】首先认真审题，看清题目中的要求和要点；然后根据提示内容，列出写作要点及每个要点中可能要用到的表达，例如asksbtodo,encouragesbtodosth,keepdoing,makeaplanfor,starttodo,fromtimetotime以及makegreatprogress等；然后紧扣要点，动笔写作，在写作过程中，要注意句与句、段与段之间的过渡，必要时可适当运用表示转折、因果、并列、比较等关系的连词，使文章过渡平稳，自然流畅；最后，要仔细检查有无单词拼写错误、标点符号误用等，还要检查语法结构是否合理，有无重复、啰嗦的语言，大小写是否正确，词数是否符合要求等。（2021年长宁区二模）Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“Keeppatientwhenfacingdifficulties”(请以“面对困难保持耐心”为题，写一篇不少于60词的短文，标点符号不占格。）阅读文章（C）篇告诉我们日常生活中不能缺乏耐心，还提出用2种方式来帮助我们克服这样的缺点，在我们的生活和学习中遇到的各种困难也很容易使人失去耐心，请你以一个具体的例子谈谈怎样面对困难保持耐心。（注意：文中不得摘录试卷阅读原文，不得出现任何姓名、校名以及其他相关信息，否则不予评分）Keeppatientwhenfacingdifficulties____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________KeeppatientwhenfacingdifficultiesIstillrememberthefirsttimeIrodebicyclewhenIwasseven.Mysisterpushedthebicycletohelpme.Fewminuteslater,sheletitgo,andIfellintheground.Sheaskedmetotryonemoretime,whileIwasextremelyimpatientafterfailingseveraltimes.Thewayshetolddidn’tsuitmequitewell.AtlastItookadeepbreath,andtriedmybesttohavethefinaltime.Unbelievable,Isucceed.WhenIamintroublenow,Ialwaystellmyself“keeppatientanddon’tgiveup.”Maybejusttryanothertime,everyonewilltastethefruitsofvictory.（六）（2019年长宁区一模）Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“Thattime,Ireallyfeltworried”(请以“那一次，我真的感到很担心”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)在你的学习和生活中，你一定解决过一度令你感到担心的事情，请你描述担心的事情是什么，为什么担心以及最后又如何解决的。（注意：文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其相关信息，否则不予评分）Thattime,Ireallyfeltworried____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Eachofushaveworriedaboutsomething,andatthattime,wethoughtwecouldn’tovercomeit.However,itturnsoutthatwecanfigureitoutanyway.TherewasaspeechcontestinmyclasswhenIwasinGrade8andIreallyfeltworriedasIhadnoideahowtospeaknaturallyinfrontofallmyclassmates.Ihadpractisedalotbutwhentheverymomentwascoming,IwasstillsonervousthatIcannotstopshaking.Iwasworriedaboutforgettingwords,actingstrange,andworst,beinglaughedatbyothers.ItoldmybestfriendsaboutmyworriesandallIgotwas“Sowhat?”Thesetwowordsgavemecourageandmademecalmdown.Sowhat?ItwasnottheendoftheworldandevenifIfailedthistime,Icouldstillgetanotherchance.ThenItookadeepbreathandwasreadytogivemyspeech.Theresult,asyoumighthaveguessed,wasthatIfinishedmyspeechlike,perfectly.Andfromthenon,Iunderstoodthathowimportantitisthatoneshouldbeconfidentandbrave.（七）（2019年奉贤区一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“Say‘’tomyself”(以“对自己说”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)(注意:短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分。)你一定对你周围的人说过:“谢谢”、“对不起”、“生日快乐”等许多话。你对自己说过的哪句话最让你记忆犹新?或者此刻你最想对自己说什么?请用你的笔尖倾吐你最真实的心声吧！____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【范文】Iwouldliketosay‘cheerup’tomyselfbecausetheentranceexaminationhasexertedsuchanunbearableburdenonmethatIsometimesfailtofeelthejoyfromstudyandseethebeautyinlife.Exams,forperspective,aresimplyaformofevaluation.Theprocessofgainingknowledgeisthemostimportant.Asaresult,thereisnoneedcryingoveranunsatisfactoryscoreaslongaswehavealreadymasteredtheknowledge.Besides,participatinginextracurricularactivitiesisequallynecessarysimplybecauseitenablesustodevelopinanall-roundway.Inconclusion,apositiveattitudetowardsstudymakesourlifecolorfulandmeaningful.（八）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“WhenIhavetroublewithmybestfriend”【以“我与好朋友闹矛盾后”为题，写一篇不少于60词的短文，标点符号不占格】提示：生活中好友间也会因各种原因闹些小矛盾，当你与朋友间产生不愉快后，你会如何处理此类问题呢?请就此话题谈谈你的做法以及这样做的理由，可结合自身经历进行阐述。(注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。)WhenIhavetroublewithmybestfriend____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________WhenIhavetroublewithmybestfriendSimilaraswearetoourfriends,wearedistinctandindependentindividuals.Sometimeswemaydifferinviewsandhavetroublewitheachother.However,itiscommunicationandunderstandingthatreallymatter.WhenIhavetroublewithmybestfriend,Iwon’twithdrawbutcontacthimtimely,figureoutwhathasgonewrongandworkoutaplantorebuildfriendship.Tosomedegree,Ioweapermanent,steadyanddynamicrelationshiptomutualunderstanding.AttentionshouldbepaidtosimilaritiesratherthanhoveringoverdifferencesifIamtocultivateourfriendship.Furthermore,asIhavechosenhimtobeanintimatefriend,Ishouldneverbeconqueredbyobstaclesthataremeanttotestmyheartandadvancerelationship.Toconclude,whatevertroubleIhavewithmyfriends,Iwillreservedifferences,seekcommonground.（九）每个人都会从不同的经历中获得不同的感受。哪一种感受经常伴随着你呢？请根据下面的图示写一篇短文。内容包括:（1）Howdoyouoftenfeel?（2）Whatmakesyouso...Why?（3）Doyouwanttomakeanychanges?How?要求:（1）内容完整,语意连贯,层次清晰,书写规范。（2）文中不得出现真实的姓名和校名。（3）短文开头已给出,不计入总词数。Ioftenfeel____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Ioftenfeelangry.I’mangrywithmyself.Ihopetodevelopsomehealthyhabitslikegettingupearlyortakingmoreexercise,butIstillspendmostofmytimestayingupplayingcomputergames.I’malsoangrywithmyfriendBill.HearguedwithmeseveraldaysagoandIdon’twanttotalktohimanymore.ButIreallywanttochangethesethings.MaybeIshouldbestrictwithmyselfandmaybeIshouldsaysorrytoBillfirst.Afterall,Idon’twanttolosemybestfriend.Ihopemylifecanbefilledwithpeaceandhappiness.【详解】1.题干解读：本题为材料作文，要求根据题目要点提示，写一篇关于自己情绪的作文。题目所给要点提示必须全部包括，切忌遗漏。2.写作指导：写作时人称应用第一人称，时态根据动作发展时段正确使用过去时、现在时或将来时。这是一篇提纲作文，题目要求围绕提示内容写作，命题既有限制又给予学生发挥的空间。在写作中要综合运用所学知识，适当运用连词、副词等进行过渡。（十）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“ApersonalhabitI’dliketochange”.（以“我想改变的一个个人习惯”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）（注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分。）Thefollowingpointsareonlyforreference:简述你想改变的这个个人习惯；说明你想改变这一习惯的理由及措施。ApersonalhabitI’dliketochange__________________________________________