高中英语续写讲评课件

读后续写注意：这八步并不是固定的，可以不按这个顺序，也可以省略一些环节。readexplorewritecharactersplot…thelogicthemecharactersplottheme…Threestepsofcontinuationwriting

MyfamilyimmigratedtoCanadawhenIwasaboutoneyearold.Inthoseearlyyears,wedidnothavemuchmoney.Ourhomewasasimplerentedapartment,whichwasratherpoorlyfurnished.Therecertainlywasnotenoughmoneyforexpensiveoutings.Asaresult,ourweekendswerefilledwithsimplepleasuresthatwecoulddoforfree,likepicnics,bikerides,andmyfavorite—tripstothelibrary.Thankstothelibrary’schildren’ssection,Ifellinlovewithstories—sillyones,movingones,andeveneducationalones.Iwouldhavemyparentsreadthebooksthatweborrowedoverandoveragainuntilweneededtoreturnthem,orIwouldpagethroughthemmyself,imaginingthestoriesinmyhead,eventhoughIwastooyoungtoreadthewords.

WhenIwasaboutfiveyearsoldandfinallystartedtoreadonmyown,Ihadacuriousthought:Iknewwecouldgetbooksfromthelibraryorbuytheminstoresifwehadthemoney,butwheredidbookscomefrom?Iaskedmymotherthisquestion,towhichsherepliedthatthestoriesIlovedwerecreatedintheimaginationsofpeoplecalled“writers”.Thesepeoplethenwrotethemdownsotheycouldbesharedwithothers.

Fourdecadeslater,Istillrememberthatmoment.ItwasasthoughIhadbeenstruckbylightning.Thenandthere,Iknewmypurposeinthisworld.Iwouldbeoneofthosewriters.Iwouldcreatestoriesandsharethemwiththeworld.续写线索老师表扬回报写动物、玩具典型的人和事获奖作家

Para1Para2Para3Para4Para5Ourweekendswerefilledwithsimplepleasures,suchaspicnics,bikeridesandtripstolibrary.Myparentsreadbooksforme.Ihadaquestion:wheredidthebookscomefrom?Mymothertoldmethat“writer”createdbooks.Fourdecadeslater,Iwouldbeawriterandsharemybookswiththeworld.Themainideasofeachparagraph审题失误1：部分学生读懂了作者喜欢读书，但不清楚目标是成为一名作家.审题失误2：没有弄清楚作者的人设：我的人设：爱读书，喜欢去图书馆借书看（Weborrowedoverandoveragainuntilweneededtoreturnthem）好奇（Butwheredidbookscomefrom？）目标明确（Iwouldbeoneofthosewriters）父母的人设：生活简单快乐（Ourweekendswerefilledwithsimplepleasures），妈妈善于沟通（SherepliedthatthestoriesIlovedwerecreatedintheimaginationsofpeoplecalled“writers”.）Whosestoryisit?Whatdowewant?theauthor

成为一名作家（Iwouldbeoneofthosewriters.Iwouldcreatestoriesandsharethemwiththeworld.）Whatpreventus?1.2.

小时候不会读让父母读（Iwouldhavemypatentsreadthebooks，Iwastooyoungtoreadthewords.)没有足够钱进行昂贵的游玩(Therecertainlywasnotenoughmoneyforexpensiveoutings.)进行一些免费的娱乐（Asaresult,ourweekendswerefilledwithsimplepleasuresthatwecoulddoforfree)在脑海中想象（Imagingthestoriesinmyhead）Whatbehindthestory?1.2Setgoals,andthenrefinethetargetforeverysteptotheaction.Practicemakesperfect.Howdowefeel?IParentsOurweekendswerefilledwithsimplepleasuresIfellinlovewithstories.Imagingthestoriesinmyhead,Ihadacuriousthought.

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主题升华Paragraph1:Asayoungchild,Ibeganwritingbymakingupstoriesaboutanimalsormytoys.

Paragraph2Afterafewyearsofconstantwritingpractice,myhardworkeventuallypaidoff.

Asayoungchild,Ibeganwritingbymakingupstoriesaboutanimalsormytoys.WhenIgrewalittleolder,Ifilledcountlessnotebookswithwordsandpictures.Ioftensharemystorywithmyfamily.Everyonecanfindpleasureinthestory.Atthattime,itbecameahabitinmylife.

AsIgrewintoadult,Ifellinlovewithwriting,whichbecamemywholeworld.Paragraph1:

Afterafewyearsofconstantwritingpractice,myhardworkeventuallypaidoff.

Whatmattersmostisthatmywritingskillshaveimprovedgreatly.Fromthis,moreandmorepeoplelikemystory,whichisagreatencouragementtome.Whenlookingbackonthestory,Ifeelthatifyoufindsomethingyoulovetodo,pleasekeepitup.Paragraph2:结尾写法句式:1、对比强调：Itisnot...thatcount/matter.It’s2、倒装句，引出结尾句：Never

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