高中三年级全学期英语《读后续写语言1》教学课件

年级：高中一年级学科：英语课题：读后续写--语言（一）

(2016年10月浙江卷)OneweekendinJuly,

Jane

andherhusband,

Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbya

lake

intheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom.“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”and

walked

away.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehad

climbed

toahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落）somewhere

atadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundto

astream.

Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janehearda

helicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffher

yellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.standardsfullscore25，7levels评分档次描

述（22-25分）

①logicplots②detaileddescription,variedsentencepatterns③properconnectionsOnepossibleversion:Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

Jane

hadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight.Shefeltalittlesad,andfearful.Shethoughtabout

Tom.“Hemusthavecalledforthosehelicopters.Maybehewasinoneofthemandwillcomebackagain!Ihavetoguidehimtomorrow.”ShefellasleepanddreamedofseeingTom.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.

Sheatesomeberriesandthenwalkedalongthe

stream.Shehopedtofindasuitableplacetoguidethehelicopter.Shesawarockinanopenarea

atadistance.Sherushedtotherock,climbedontoitandwaited.

Thehelicopterappearedagain.Itdidn’tmissJaneanditlandedslowly.TomjumpedoffthehelicopterandrantowardsJane.Shecriedloudly.

Howmanyscoreswillyougive?Problems:1.Therearealmostnodetaileddescriptionsofemotion,action,appearance,environment;2.Therearealmostnovariedsentencepatterns;3.Therearealmostnoeffectiveconnectors.LearningobjectivesBytheendofthisperiod,we’llbeableto:1.enrichthedetailsbyaddingdescriptionsofemotion;2.enrichthedetailsoftheface,eyes,head,feetbyaddingdescriptionsofactions.HowmightJanefeelatthebeginning,thebuild-up,theclimaxandtheend?sadfearfulhopelesshopefulexcitedhappyShewassad.Shewasfearful.Shewashopeless....Show,don'ttell.一、情感好词：喜乐①Thesmileonherfaceshonelikea

diamond.②Asimileofunderstandingflashedacrosshis

face.③Arippleofexcitementranthrough

them.④Laughterlingeredaroundthe

room.⑤Hiseyestwinkledwith

pleasure.⑥Awildjoytookholdof

her.⑦Unforgettablewerehereyesthatshonelikediamonds

andlipsheldinasteady

smile.⑧Iwaswildwith

joy.⑨Iwaspleasedbeyond

description.⑩Sheworeashiningsmileonher

face.⑪

Hersmilelitupthewholeroom.⑫

Sheshedtearsofjoy.⑬

Hereyesweresparklinglikediamonds.⑭

Shewasoverflowingwithhappiness.⑮

Herflushedfacewasshiningwithexcitement.⑯

Joywelledupinsideher.⑰

Iwasfloatingonair.⑱

Amusementgleamedinhiseyes.愤怒：①Iwasseizedby

anger.②Hewasfumingwith

rage.③Hisangerboiled

over.④Hecouldhardly/scarcelycontainhis

rage.⑤Hewasbreathingfireand

fury.⑥Hisvoicetrembledwith

anger.⑦Hegavemealookofburning

anger.⑧Heglaredatmewithburning

eyes.⑨Heflaredupatthe

word.⑩Hisfacecloudedwith

anger.悲伤烦恼①Hestoodsilently,tearsrollingdownhis

cheeks.②IfeellikeIamfloatinginanoceanof

sadness.③Herhandswereshaking.Shewasonthevergeof

tears.④Hearingthenews,sodesperatewashethathedrownedsadnessin

wine.⑤Sheburstintotearsandranoutofthe

room.⑥Shesobbed,hidingherfaceinher

hands.⑦Itriedtofightbacktears./Myeyeswerefilledwith

tears.⑧

Afrown（皱眉）now

stood

on

his

face.⑨Theysattherewithglumlooksontheir

faces.⑩Thenewscastacloudofgloomoverhis

face.⑪

Hebrimmedoverwithsorrowwhen...⑫

Theywereimmersedinsorrow.⑬

Thesedayshewasinlowspirits.害怕：①Heturnedtome,withhiseyesfullof

horror.②Fearslowlycreepsupon

her.③Shewasstruckwithhorror

when...④Shewaschokedby

fear.⑤Herfaceturnedpaleandstoodthere

tongue-tied.⑥Afloodoffearwelledupinhim./Fearfloodedover

him.⑦Her

heart

beatso

violently

that

she

feltnearly

suffocated（窒息）.⑧Sheshookallover,feelinglikesittingonpinsand

needles.感动：①Toucheddeeply/immensely,

we…②Tearsfillinghereyes,sheofferedherheartfelt

gratitude.③Withtearsstreamingdownherface,

sheburstout...WhatmightJanedoatthebeginning,thebuild-up,theclimaxandtheend?throwbackone'sheadandroarwithlaughter仰起头大笑bobone'shead点头thrashone'sheadfromsidetoside头摇的像拨浪鼓一样drop/lowerone'sheadinsorrow/inprayer低头悲伤/祈祷craneone‘sneck伸长脖子actionsabouttheheadone'sfacepalewithfear/fright脸唰白one'sfacetwistwithanger/pain由于生气/疼痛脸变形one'sface/voiceharden脸阴沉下来，声音变得严厉起来pinktingeone'sface脸红colorrush/flood/risetoone'scheeks脸红actionsaboutthefacestare/gazeat...blankly/indisbelief/horror/surprise茫然/由于不相信/恐惧/惊讶而盯着glanceat=take/shoot/cast/flash/flickaglanceat撇一眼exchange/tradeaglanceat互相撇一眼dartaterrified/impatientlook/glanceat撇一眼actionsabouttheeyeblowone'snose拧鼻子wipeone'snoseonthesleeve用衣袖擦鼻子wrinkleone'snose(indisbelief/atthesmell)由于厌恶/闻到气味）皱起鼻子actionsaboutthenosewringone'shands焦虑紧张等绞扭双手throwupone'shands(inhorror/dismay/disgust)惊恐/沮丧/反感扬起双手hugone'sknees/legs=drawone'sknees/legsintoone'schest因为害怕委屈无聊等抱住自己的膝盖/腿flutter/waveone'shands挥舞双手twine/hookone'sarmsarounone'sneck把手勾住某人脖子one'shandsdigdeepintothepocket把手插进裤兜shrugandspreadone'shands耸肩摊手表示不知道actionsaboutthehandhurry/hasten/rush/dash/dart/storm/scoot/sprint/gallopinto/outof快速走scuttle/scurry/skitter小碎步疾走sailpast飘过hurtleto猛冲，飞驰strideacross大踏步走scamper蹦蹦跳跳走lungeat猛扑（尤为袭击）actionsaboutthefeetbumblealong笨手笨脚跌跌撞撞的走stagger/totter/stumblearound蹒跚摇摇晃晃的走shuffleforward拖着脚步走scuffone'sfeet因疲惫懒散等拖着脚走dragoneselfto费力的走creep/crawlalong爬着走tiptoe踮着脚尖走hobble/limpoutof一瘸一拐的走trudge/plod/trampacross因疲劳负重吃力的走actionsaboutthefeetBasedonthechangesofdifferentemotions,whatdetailsofthebodycanbeadded?sadfearfulhopelesshopefulexcitedhappydrop/lowerone'sheadinsorrowwipeone'snoseonthesleeveone'sfacepalewithfeargazeat...inhorrorcraneone'sneckthrowone'shandsindismayhugone'skneesflutterone'shandsRewritethepassagewiththechangesofemotionanddetailsofdifferentpartsofthebodyParagraph1:

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

Jane

hadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight.Sheloweredherheadinsorrowandtearsrolleddownonhercheeks.Evensomenoisesmadeherfacepale.

Slowlyfearcreptuponher,andshehuggedherkneesunderatree.Shethoughtabout

Tom.“Hemusthavecalledforthosehelicopters.Maybehewasinoneofthemandwouldcomeback