读后续写人与自我家庭类课件高考英语一轮复习作文专项

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自我1.双膝跪地 2.匆匆下楼3.屏住呼吸 4.站起身5.瞥了某人一眼 6.相视一笑7.拥抱某人 8.站着/坐着一动不动fall/sink/droptoone’skneesfalltothegroundonone’skneesrace/rush/teardownthestairsholdone’sbreathrisetoone’sfeetshoot/throw/castaglanceatsbexchangesmileshugsb/givesbahug/throwone’sarmsaroundsb/foldsbinone’sarmsstand/sitstillReview人物的动作描写：1.放声大哭 2.吃惊地瞪大眼睛3.（吓得）心提到了嗓子眼4.强忍住泪水burstintotearsbewide-eyedwithshock/withone’seyeswideopeninshockone’sheartisinone’smouth/haveone’sheartinone’smouthhold/fightbackone’stearsReview人物的情绪描写【拓展】tearsroll/run/stream/flowdownsb’scheeks潸然泪下tearswellupinsb’seyes泪如泉涌sb’sheartis/waspounding.某人的心砰砰直跳。sb’sbrainisblank.

某人的头脑一片空白。Awaveoffearsweptoverme.一阵恐惧传遍我的全身。Review人物的情绪描写Step1readaboutthepassagepart1reading重难点梳理：解决重难点词汇、句式，真正读懂文章。Pumpkin(南瓜)carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.WevisitalocalfarmeveryOctober.Inthepumpkinfield,Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin.Mydadhasarulethatwehavetocarryourpumpkinsbackhome,andastheeldestchildIhaveanadvantage—Icarriedan85-pounderbacklastyear.part1reading［输出词块］找出；找到［合成词］-pounder：重……磅的东西Para1介绍万圣节的家庭传统Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14-year-oldbrother,Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualevent.I’munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.part1readingWith

复合结构，表示伴随［动作描写］把头硬塞进南瓜里［输出词块］完全合理Para2讲述今年的比赛过程Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost,Ibentoverandpressedmyheadagainsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIwentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,mynosebrieflypreventedentry.FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit,likeacork(软木塞)forcedintoabottle.Iwasabletostraightenupwiththehugepumpkinrestingonmyshoulders.part1reading［动作描写］弯下腰［动作描写］把头靠在洞口［动作描写］卡住［动作描写］直起身来Para3讲述“我”为了证明自己的南瓜最大，把头硬塞进南瓜的过程Myexcitementwasshort-lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I’mgoingtosetitdown,now,”Isaid,andwithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight,Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewheretorest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.WhenIpulledhard,mynosegotintheway.IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican’tgetitout!”Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.part1readingPara4头被卡住拔不出来［合成词］adj

短暂的［动作描写］支撑它的重量［动作描写］把头取出来［动作描写］使劲拔［动作描写］用力地抵住［动作描写］把头转来转去独立主格结构Step2梳理情节part1reading圈出关键信息找出情节线索分析人物情感变化把握文章主旨圈出关键信息（5W+1H）where/whenathomeadayinOctoberbeforeHalloweenwhoI,dad,mom,threebrothers(includingJason),sisterwhatMyheadwasstuckinsideapumpkin,andIwastryingtopullitout.why/howWeforgottoweighourpumpkins.Toprovemypumpkinwasbigger,Iforcedmyheadinsideit.Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin...Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint…Step2梳理情节Thesearetheclue1我和兄弟姐妹们比赛找最大的南瓜,却忘了在去瓤前称重。我想证明自己的南瓜最大。IthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematterFinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoitStep2梳理情节Thesearetheclue2我认为把头伸进南瓜里能解决问题。经过一番努力，我成功把头塞进了南瓜。“Ican’tgetitout!”Step2梳理情节Thesearetheclue3当我想把头拔出来时，却发现头卡住了。Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14-year-oldbrother,Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualevent.I’munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost,Ibentoverandpressedmyheadagainsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIwentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,mynosebrieflypreventedentry.Step2梳理情节I：competitiveMyexcitementwasshort-lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I’mgoingtosetitdown,now,”Isaid,andwithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight,Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewheretorest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.WhenIpulledhard,mynosegotintheway.IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican’tgetitout!”Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.Step2梳理情节I：excitement→panicPart2

Writingpart1readingPara1：Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.

阅读续写两段开头，你能得到什么信息？Para2：ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.细读首句

“我”的内心十分焦急、恐慌

家人把“我”头卡南瓜的过程录了下来，并传到了网上构思情节把握续写原则：Conflict—Solution（找出问题或冲突，构思解决办法）

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Response（根据人物言行，推断其他人的反应）Negative

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（结合情感线索，突出人物的情感变化）Para1：Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.

Para2：ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.ConflictSolutionWithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight,Ibentbackoverthetable…（Para4）Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualevent.（Para2）

“Ican’tgetitout!”Ishouted.（Para4）WhatdidJasondonext?→tokeeptrying？→toaskforhelp？→……Momfilmedmysillybehaviorandposteditonline.HowdidIgetouteventually?→cutthepumpkininhalf构思情节伏笔1：伏笔2：伏笔3：……女孩伤心极了，再也抑制不住悲伤，眼泪顺着脸颊流了下来。

Thegirlwassoheartbrokenthatshecouldnolongerholdbackhersorrow,hertearsrunning/streaming/flowingdownhercheeks.参考句式：Hewaslyingonthegrass,hishandscrossedunderhishead.他躺在草地上，双手交叉枕在头下。独立结构作状语独立结构作状语so...that写作素材2.经过几次尝试，他们终于成功地将南瓜从我的头上拽下来，露出了我凌乱的头发和满脸的惊恐。Islippedontheglassyfloorandbrokemyarm.句式升级：现在分词作状语Islippedontheglassyfloor,breakingmyarm.【示例】2.经过几次尝试，他们终于成功地将南瓜从我的头上拽下来，露出了我凌乱的头发和满脸的惊恐。Afterseveralattempts,theyfinallysucceededinpullingthepumpkinoffmyhead,revealingmymessyhairandhorrifiedexpression.现在分词作状语succeedindoingsth成功做某事3.我尴尬地看了他俩一眼，他们对视了一下，大笑起来。Ishotaglanceatbothofthemembarrassedly,whoexchangedlooksandburstintolaughter.参考句式：非限制性定语从句主旨升华Downdeepinmyheart,itwasthehappiesttimeIhadeverhad.在我内心深处，那是我曾有过的最快乐的时光。Ifeltluckytobeapartofthismischievousyetlovingfamily.我很幸运能成为这个喜欢恶作剧但充满爱的家庭的一员。Thingswillworkout.船到桥头自然直。

Lookbeforeyouleap.三思而后行。Liveandlearn./

Afallintothepit,againinyourwit.吃一堑，长一智。Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.Feelingmorepanic,Iburstintotears.Fortunately,hearingmecrying,Dadrushedtohelpedmelaymyheadonthetab