读后续写应试技巧一座山两条鱼课件高三英语二轮复习

一座山，两条鱼

--continuationwriting亲情类：Adam偷玩具车1.Readthestory2.Predictthestory3.Writethestory目录Warmingup

Yellow&RedFrogWatchavideoabouttwolarvas[ˈlɑːvə]（幼虫）andanswerquestions.Q1:What’simportantforastoryQ2:What’simportantforwritingastory(/continuationwriting)characterplottheme（葛文山，2022）LeadinQ1:What’simportantforastoryQ2:What’simportantforwritingastory(/continuationwriting)（衡很亨，2023）characterplotthemecharacterportraitplotdesignthemeexposition1Readthestory阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。OncetherewasalittleboycalledAdamwhocamefromarichfamily.Hewasayoungstudentatprimaryschoolandwasveryclever.Healwaysgainedgoodmarksinhisexams.Adamgoteverythinghewanted,suchastoycars,airplanemodels,watergunsandsoon.Hisparentsboughthimwhateverhewanted.Onedayhewentouttoastorewithhismotherandinthetoysectionhefoundaverycooltoycar.Hewassurprisedtoseethatkindoftoycar,soherantohismotherandtoldhereverythingaboutit.Adamtookhismothertothetoysectiontoshowhowitworked.However,hismotherrefusedtobuyitforhimbecausehealreadyhadalotoftoycars.Adamwassadandwonderedwhyhismotherdidnotbuyitforhim.Twoweekslater,Adamandhismotherwenttothesamestoreagain.Adamthoughtthathismotherwouldbuyitforhimthistime,soheaskedhismotherforthetoycaragain.Hismotherignoredhimbecauseshewaslookingforsomethingelse.ButAdamreallywantedthetoycar.So,whilehismotherwasbusylookingforsomeotheritems,hetookthetoycarandputitinsidehisbackpack.ThesalesmansawAdamstealingthetoycarandtriedtostophim.Adamtriedtorunbutthesalesmancaughthim.Adamstartedtocry.Hismotherheardhisvoiceandrantohim.Shewasshockedtoseethesalesmanholdingherson.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按照如下格式在相应位置作答。“Whathappened”sheaskedwithconcern.________________________________________________________________________________________________Aftertheygothome,Adamwenttohisroomandregrettedhavingdonethat.________________________________________________________________________________________________1.阅读全文，确定背景(Readforsetting)Ayoungandcleverboy(Adam),Adam’smother，thesalesmanoneday;twoweekslater（过去时）inthestorehomeAdamlivedinarichfamilyandgainedgoodmarksinexams.Adamgoteverythinghewanted.time(When)place(Where)character（Who）

background(What)setting2.画故事山，构情节线和情感线(Readforplotsandemotions)risingactionfallingactionendingplotsbeginningemotionsclimaxMom

whathappened.Adam’smom_______tobuythetoycar.Twoweekslater,hismother______himagain.Adamwenttohisroomand

havingdonethat.Adam

thetoycar,triedto

butthesalesman

him.Adam:sadAdam:desperateAdam:scaredandcriedMom:concernedAdam:regrettedrefusedignoredstolenruncaughtaskedregretted2Predictthestory3.根据故事山，预测情节和主题(Predicttheplotsandtheme)risingactionfallingactionendingplotsbeginningMom

askedwhathappened.Adam’smomrefusedtobuythetoycar.Twoweekslater,hismotherignoredhimagain.Adamstolenthetoycar,triedtorunbutthesalesmancaughthim.Adamwenttohisroomandregrettedhavingdonethat.emotionsclimax衔接句Adam:regrettedAdam:sadAdam:desperateAdam:scaredandcriedMom:concerned主题句Paragraph1:“Whathappened”sheaskedwithconcern.Paragraph2:Aftertheygothome,Adamwenttohisroomandregrettedhavingdonethat.衔接句1.Whoanswered2.Beforetheygothome,whatdidtheydo1.Whathappenedintheroom2.WhyAdamregrettedandhowtoshow3.WhatwillAdamdonexttime3.根据故事山，预测情节和主题(Predicttheplotsandtheme)主题句回应前文/点出主题·偷东西是绝对错误的。It’sabsolutelywrongtostealthings.·反思并承认错误，吸取教训。Reflectandadmitthemistake.Learnfromthelesson.·该怎么做？--结合家庭实际，判断是需要还是想要？树立正确的金钱观。Wecan’tbuyanythingwewant,instead,weshouldbuysomethingwereallyneed.3.根据故事山，预测情节和主题(Predicttheplotsandtheme)口诀：两段首句定一框，二框二首正能量衔接句主题句Aftertheygothome,Adamwenttohisroomandregrettedhavingdonethat.“Whathappened”sheaskedwithconcern.Step1:MaincontentsofPara2andpositiveending.Step2:MaincontentsofPara1.售货员回答事情经过，归还玩具。回家路上，母亲与儿子交流。“Let’sgohomeandseehowmanytoycarsyouhavealreadyowned”.回家后，儿子主动承认错误，向母亲道歉，并从中得到教训。母亲原谅儿子。4.DraftforwritingSalesmanexplainedreturnedthetoyMomaskedwhyMomwasangryMomscoldedAdamreplied“Whathappened”sheaskedwithconcern.Para1衔接句wantedthetoycardesperatelyindetailsquicklywhyhedidthatAdamloweredhishead,inshameonthewaybackhome,seriously一个角色的所言、所行、所感、所想会引起其他角色的一系列反应。ActionResponse主题句AdamreflectedMomforgivedAdamlearnedAdamapologizedMomeducatedAdam’sthoughtAftertheygothome,Adamwenttohisroomandregrettedhavingdonethat.Para2nottostealbuythings:whetherneeditorwantitthinkwhydidtoldnottodoagainforstealingitisnotright一个角色的所言、所行、所感、所想会引起其他角色的一系列反应。4.DraftforwritingActionResponse3Writethestory评分标准参考Tipsforwriting口诀：人物时态和事件，语言特色不要变Tip1:58细节添加法Tip2:Toshow,nottotell.(王初明“写长法”)Tip3:语言协同：创造性的模仿（原文风格）Tip1forwriting口诀：人物时态和事件，语言特色不要变58细节添加法Tip2forwritingToshowin3aspects:①Bodylanguage②Facialexpression③Voice​Toshow,nottotell.(王初明“写长法”)Telling:Hefeltashamed.他很羞愧。Showing:bodylanguage+facialexpression肢体语言+面部表情Hearingwhattheysaid,hewassoashamedthathedroppedhiseyesandstaredathisfeet,withhisfaceturningred.听到他们的话，他羞愧的低下头，盯着脚，脸红起来了。Tip2forwritingToshow,nottotell.(王初明“写长法”)Tip3forwriting语言协同：创造性的模仿（原文风格）原文:·However,hismotherrefusedtobuyitforhimbecausehealreadyhadalotoftoycars.·Hismotherignoredhimbecauseshewaslookingforsomethingelse.写作:·Adamrepliedthatjustbecausehewantedthetoycardesperately.·HismotherforgavehimandtoldAdamnottodothatagainbecauseitisnotrighttostealanything.小试身手请你将自己的习作写在题目的横线上。Paragraph1:“Whathappened”sheaskedwithconcern.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Aftertheygothome,Adamwenttohisroomandregrettedhavingdonethat.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________参考范文Paragraph1:“Whathappened”sheaskedwithconcern.ThenthesalesmantoldAdam’smotherindetailsaboutwhatthelittleboyhaddone.Adam’smotherwasveryangrywith